Peer Review: Discourse Community Ethnography ENG 1101 Readers Name: Kathryn Mathews Reader's Email: kmathe14@uncc.

edu Writers Name: Husain Alqallaf Paper Title: Alrodwan Youth

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*Readers: Keep a copy of this document for your Portfolio* Read through the paper at least once without making any notes or marks. Get a clear idea of the paper as a whole. Then, read it again and use the margins of the paper to make specific comments about the text. Underline at least two passages (groups of sentences) that you feel are well written. Mark grammar mistakes and confusing or difficult passages with a wavy line. Then, answer the following questions: 1. How has the writer organized his/her ideas and topics? Do the paragraphs work together? Do you have any suggestions to improve the papers structure? He starts out by explaining what the Alrodwan Youth is, then he tells us the four different sections of the group and the members. The paragraphs work together pretty well. It flows very well, but might need to add a transition sentence near the end of the paper, but overall it was very well done.

2. What is the primary topic of this paper? Has the author effectively studied a discourse community/community of practice? The topic of his paper is the Alrodwan Youth. Yes, he has done a very good job explaining the leaders and different members of the group. I have a pretty good idea of what it is and the different language of the group. It seems like he has studied this language pretty effectively.

3. What do you think are the writers strengths? What can the writer improve or work on? His knowledge of this topic allows his to explain it very well. You can tell that he knows a lot about this topic. He also is very descriptive, which allows the reader to have a better understanding of the topic.

Peer Review: Discourse Community Ethnography ENG 1101

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4. What assertions or opinions does the writer include? Does the writer sufficiently support these claims? He said, One of the best ideas that Sayes Muhammad developed and organized He did a pretty good job supporting it.

5. Does the writer express him/herself using the impersonal, academic voice? What suggestions do you have for improvement? He does express himself with impersonal and academic voice through most of his paper. There are a couple of opinions throughout the paper, but other than that it is all good. I would suggest re-wording the sentences with the opinions in the, so it is in more of an academic voice.

6. Does the author adhere to MLA formatting guidelines within the paper and in the Works Cited? In the work cited page, he has cited everything correctly. I would just suggest to add the in text citation in the paragraph where he interviewed him, even though it does say in the interview with.