1 English 1302-01 Tariq Alghannam C.

Smeller October 18, 2013 Composition II

Call Of Duty

Bullets are flying all over the place. I am trying immensely hard not to get killed because I have to fight against my enemy. Blood and dead bodiesy are all wthat I can see around me. The buildings infrastructure is destroyed. Have you ever heard about or played Call of Duty? Call of Duty is the newest first person shooter game that has already broken numerous national-wide records since its went public. As a matter of fact, more than $650 million in sales within five days in of its release. Eric Hirshberg, who is the the CEO of Activision, states that it was The biggest five-day launch in entertainment history across the media. The intention of this game is to feel identical for a player to feel identical to how they are would in an actual combat situation. Approaching on closer, if we were ask why people play video games, the simple answer would be: Games are fun! Children are the target market range of video game users. Sometimes, parents opted video for encourages their children to play video games to achieve so quit time around the house. At this moment, a child can be quiet and remain on in one place, very concentrately playing during hours without a parents supervision. However, video games alone are not going to teach children for good behavior. The consequences of playing some kind of non-educational video games are, such as Call of duty, can cause

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2 counterproductive effect. Having said that, enormous portion of players are children and teenagers. Thus, parents have to a full obligation to look after their kids. In the world variety of video games exist. For example, action, strategy, racing and first person shooter are just a few examples. That have been noted, the causes and effects from video games that will be observed.
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The first fundamental effect of violence in video games is how that violence translates in to the real world. Kids may start to believe that the world is a hostile environment that will cause them harm, to be able to launch horrible actions toward others. However, playing violent games may stimulate aggressiveness, which may cause being careless regarding their colleagues and family members; simultaneously, children are going to learn how to be more aggressive through a conflict or an argument. Violent video games teach children to externalize their anxiety. Instead of calming themselves or expressing their concern or pain to others, they externalize anxiety and may act aggressively toward others in the same way that they have been taught to act aggressively when playing violent video games.(David). To illustrate that, whenever the child runs across a conflict he or she is going to utilize what he or she has learned from the experienced of video games. Not only that, but also, sometimes if a kids ends up by any chance seeing a real gun and they could take it start shooting. The possibility, sadly has come true: An 8-year-old Louisiana boy intentionally shot and killed his elderly caregiver after playing a violent video game, authorities say. (Lauren Russell). A recent content analysis by the research organization, Children Now, shows that a majority of

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3 video games include violence and about half of the violent incidents would result in serious injuries or death in the "real" world. Not only that, but also, sleep loss is both cause and effect on that as well.
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Another interesting fact is that playing video games is threatens childrens health through by disturbing sleep time. According to Simon Kyle, Playing video-games may disrupt sleep through a variety of routes from increasing emotional and physiological arousal due to stimulating content, through to increased light exposure close to bedtime. By saying that, reality of gamer play takes long time to fall asleep when play games before bad bed time. As a result of less resting time, children may present before the childhood symptoms of as being a slow learner and thinker. For the same reason, there are also wellness issues causes caused by sleep disorder such as, heart disease, high blood pressure, stroke, and diabetes. As I have noted, it is extremely important to track how many hours should children should sleep in order to grow safely.
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Another environmental effect of video games is to spend too much time playing games that will hurt and have a counterproductive effect on children. More and more kids are playing video and computer games especially ultra-violent ones that are top sellers. Research shows that children are also spending increasing amounts of time playing them: an average of 13 hours per week for boys and five hours for girls .
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4 (Dr.Phil) Can spending a lot of hours of video games hurt a child? A developmental psychologist, Douglas Gentile, states, that Yes. Excessive video-game playing can have a negative effect on a young child for several reasons. The first reason of that is children who play long hours of video games will miss a lot of activities; specifically to their development in their early lifetime. For instance, physical, social and intellectual are the developments that they will miss. Secondly, they will be isolating themselves from their parents and friends. As a consequence of playing long hours of video games is

unsociability. Sandy Hook gunman Adam Lanza was 'obsessed' with weapons and violent video games such as Call of Duty, it has been claimed. The walls of his room, where he spent all his time, were covered with posters of guns and tanks, according to a plumber who worked at the killer's home in Newtown, Connecticut.(Hatley-Parkinson). This is in example of spending too much time in video game, which will change the person habit.
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These examples show that everything in excess unbalances the human being wellness. So the lesson from that is we should find a balance in everything in life, not less or more. However, kids can play video games but it has to be timed and under supervision by the parents to prevent the negatives effect from that; equally important, its immensely significant for children to have activities that they enjoy to do it and gain the benefit from it. Unquestionably, any activities can be beneficial if played safely.
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1- Russell, Lauren, Josh Levs, and Mike Pearson. "Police: 8-year-old Shoots, Kills Elderly Caregiver after Playing Video Game." (26 Aug. 2013): n. pag. Web. 16 Oct. 2013. 2- "How Many People Play Video Games?" LoveToKnow. N.p., n.d. Web. 15 Oct. 2013. 3- Dr. Phil. "Children and Violent Video Games." Dr. Phil.com - Advice - Children and Violent Video Games. N.p., 11 Jan. 2011. Web. 15 Oct. 2013. 4- Walsh, David. "What Do Violent Video Games Teach Children?" Education.com. N.p., 2006. Web. 14 Oct. 2013. 5- "Did Violent Video Game Call of Duty Spark Gun-crazed Loner's Killing Spree? Adam Lanza 'spent Hours with Game Just like Anders Breivik'" Mail Online. N.p., 15 Dec. 2012. Web. 16 Oct. 2013.
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6 6- Bulik, Beth. "Activision Suits Up for Media 'Warfare'"

Adage.com/article/media/activision-suits-media-warfare/230142/. N.p., 3 Oct. 2011. Web. 19 Oct. 2013. 7- Rushing, Mary E, M.D. Daniel J, and Sheehan M.D. "Video Game Induced Knuckle Pad." Academic Search Complete, 5 Sept. 2006. Web. 19 Oct. 2013.