Re: Assignment 1 Commented Draft

by Alex Dunzweiler - Sunday, 9 February 2014, 5:17 PM

Your description of the location was very good. You do need a header that indicates you are talking about
the rules and conventions, but that is a simple fix. Dont forget to include the interviewee as a character.
Music is also an item you could list as an artifact.

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Re: Assignment 1 Commented Draft
by Nathan Brown - Sunday, 9 February 2014, 5:41 PM

Your draft was a very good rough draft. There are a couple of things you need to clarify by adding
headers, and also add a couple of characters, since you listed them in your paper. You did a very good
job at describing your location. Also, to go above and beyond add pictures and other little things here and
there!

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Re: Assignment 1 Commented Draft
by Yunlong Liu - Sunday, 9 February 2014, 9:05 PM

I think you did a good job on your first assignment. You write many details and explanations in your
location and figure world about your observation. This paper is well-organized, so it is eady for us to read
and give comments. The only propblem your papar have is missing some some contents in your artifacts
and discourse communities parts. Once you fix it, your papar will be perfect.