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Are the main points are arranged in least to most important order as they gradually build the
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Does the introduction describe the issue, its origin, cause(s), and history?
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Does the introduction define the area of disasreement?
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Are the body paragraphs convincing and do they contain fully-developed, logical, and
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Does the conclusion adequately amplifu the argument (restate the claim) and motivate the
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LOGOS- Is the argument logical and does it appeal to the mind using evidence, reasons, and
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ETHOS-Is the argument ethical, reasonable, controlled, and concerned?
PATHOS-Does the argument employ a moderate, emotional appeal that makes the reader care
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Does the essay
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Are refutations and/or concessions evident, and do they avoid all hints of disrespect and
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Does the writer incorporate templates from They Say, I Say?
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Are clear transitions evident? x
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fused sentences, andlor comma splices.
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Essay is free of
punctuation,
capitalization, spelling, and word choice errors.
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Essay has been edited for wordiness, by making
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use of subordination and coordination.
Essay uses correct format for MLA documentation (parenthetical citations) and works cited
page. x
Connection to audience and
purpose
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Writine evokes strong emotion in the reader.
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Does the thesis (proposition) have a neutral tone, does it establish direction, and does it clearly
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position?
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Which organizational method is used for this argument?
Is the orqanization clear and consistent?
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ALTERNATING
Are the main points ale arranged in least to most important order as they gradually build the
argument?
Does the introduction describe the issue. its oricin. cause(s), and history?
Does the introduction define the area of disagreement?
Are the body paragraphs convincing and do they contain fully-developed, logical, and
sienif-rcant detail?
Does the conclusion adequately amplify the argument (restate the claim) and motivate the
reader to act?
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NEEDS
IMTR.SYEMEAIT
LOGOS- Is the argument logical and does it appeal to the mind using evidence, reasons, and
examples as support?
ETHOS-Is the argument ethical, reasonable, controlled, and concerned?
PATHOS-Does the argument ernploy a moderate, emotional appeal that makes the reader care
about the subiect?
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IMPROVEMENT
Are solid, clear claims initially introduced and supported
What types of claims are made? (Circle all that apply.)
throughout the essay?
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