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Introduction to Daily Paragraph Editing

Why Daily Paragraph Editing?


Daily Paragraph Editing is designed to help students master and retain grade-level skills in
language mechanics and expression through focused, daily practice. Instead of practicing
skills in a series of random, decontextualized exercises, Daily Paragraph Editing embeds
language skills in paragraphs that represent the types of text that students encounter in
their daily reading and writing activities across the curriculum. A weekly writing activity
allows students to apply the skills they have been practicing throughout the week in their
own short compositions.
Whats in Daily Paragraph Editing?
Daily Paragraph Editing contains lessons for 36 weeks, with a separate lesson for each day.
Each weeks lessons for Monday through Thursday consist of individual reproducible
paragraphs that contain errors in the following skills:
capitalization
punctuation
spelling
language usage, and more
Students daily lesson pages for Monday through Thursday include:
a label indicating the type
of writing modeled in the
weekly lesson
,
as needed, the
Watch For logo
a paragraph with
alerts students to
errors for students
more challenging
to correct; along
skills to address
with the other
in the paragraph
3 paragraphs for
the week, this
forms a complete
composition
daily and weekly
lesson identifiers
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Students correct the errors in each daily paragraph by marking directly on the page. A
reproducible sheet of Proofreading Marks (see page 10) helps familiarize students with
the standard form for marking corrections on written text. Full-page Editing Keys show
corrections for all errors in the daily paragraphs. Error Summaries help teachers identif
the targeted skills in each weeks lessons, and therefore help teachers plan to review or
introduce the specific skills needed by their students.
Teachers full.sized annotated Editing Key pages include:
.
the original
student text
with corrections
marked in red
(using the
proofreading
marks
presented on
page 10)
daily and weekly
lesson identifiers
When corrected and read together, the four paragraphs for one weeks lesson form
a cohesive composition that also serves as a writing model for students. The weekly
four-paragraph compositions cover a broad range of expository and narrative writing
forms from across the curriculum, including the following:
nonfiction texts on grade-level topics in social studies and science
biographies, book reviews, editorials, instructions, interviews, journal
entries, and letters
fables, fantasy and science fiction, historical fiction, personal narratives,
and realistic fiction
a label indicating the type
of writing modeled in the
weekly lesson
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a summary of the
errors in each
paragraph to use
in identifying
unfamiliar skills
to teach or review
with students prior
to assigning the
paragraph. Some
students may be
l
more successful
if you share the
Error Summary
with them before
they read and edit
the paragraph.
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Each Friday lesson consists of a writing prompt that directs students to write in response
to the weeks four-paragraph composition. This gives students the opportunity to apply the
skills they have practiced during the week in their own writing. Students gain experience
writing in a wide variety of forms, always with the support of familiar models.
Friday writing prompts include:
a prompt to write a composition in the same
form as modeled in the weekly lesson
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sentence, or choose one provided below. Dont forget to add exomples or
students
details obout the topic.
address
sample topic bid you know that kites have been used to do important jobs as well as
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sentences to
People have been making and using kites for over two thousand years. specific to the
support reluctant
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writing form
writers
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Write a paragraph that describes the work that was done by &regor Mendel. Tell
writing modeled
a weekly lesson about at least one important thing that was learned from his work. Begin with
in the weekly
of these topic sentences, or Write your own:
identifier
lesson
&ragor Mendels work has helped scientists understand how traits are
passed from parents to children.
gregor Mendels work with plants has also helped scientists understand
humans better.
Does it seem possible that studying plants could help us learn about people?
An Editing Checklist for students (see page 11) helps them revise their own writing or
critique their peers efforts. An Assessment Rubric (see page 9) is provided to help you
assess student writing.
A reproducible student Language Handbook (pages 168176) outlines the usage and
mechanics rules for students to follow in editing the daily paragraphs. The Handbook
includes examples to help familiarize students with how the conventions of language
and mechanics are applied in authentic writing.
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How to Use Daily Paragraph Editing
You may use Daily Paragraph Editing in several ways, depending on your instructional
objectives and your students needs. Over time, you will probably want to introduce
each of the presentation strategies outlined below so you can identify the approach
that works best for you and your students.
The four paragraphs that comprise each weeks editing lessons include a set of errors
that are repeated throughout all four paragraphs. We recommend that you provide
a folder for students to keep their Daily Paragraph Editing reference materials and
weekly lessons. It will work best to reproduce and distribute all four daily paragraphs
for a given week on Monday. That way, students can use the previous days lessons
for reference as the week progresses.
Directed Group Lessons
Daily Paragraph Editing activities will be most successful if you first introduce them
as a group activity. You might also have students edit individual copies of the days
lesson as you work through the paragraph with the group. Continue presenting the
Monday through Thursday lessons to the entire class until you are confident that
students are familiar with the editing process. Try any of the following methods to
direct group lessons:
Option I
1. Create and display an overhead transparency of the days paragraph.
2. Read the paragraph aloud just as it is written, including all the errors.
3. Read the paragraph a second time, using phrasing and intonation that
would be appropriate if all end punctuation were correct. (You may find it
helpful to read from the Editing Key.) Read all other errors as they appear
in the text.
4. Guide students in correcting all end punctuation and initial capitals in the
paragraph; mark corrections in erasable pen on the overhead transparency.
5. After the paragraph is correctly divided into sentences, review it one
sentence at a time. Have volunteers point out errors as you come to them,
and identify the necessary corrections. Encourage students to explain the
reason for each correction; explain or clarify any rules that are unfamiliar.
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Option 2
Follow Steps 14 on page 4, and then work with students to focus on one type of error
at a time, correcting all errors of the same type (i.e., capitalization, commas, subjectlverb
agreement, spelling, etc.) in the paragraph before moving on to another type. Refer to
the Error Summary in the Editing Key to help you identify the various types of errors.
Option 3
Use directed group lesson time to conduct a minilesson on one or more of the skills
emphasized in that days lesson. This is especially appropriate for new or unfamiliar
skills, or for skills that are especially challenging or confusing for students. After
introducing a specific skill, use the approach outlined in Option 2 to focus on that
skill in one or more of the weeks daily paragraphs. To provide additional practice,
refer to the Skills Scope & Sequence to find other paragraphs that include the same
target skill.
Individual Practice
Once students are familiar with the process for editing the daily paragraphs, they
may work on their own or with a partner to make corrections. Be sure students have
their Proofreading Marks (see page 10) available to help them mark their corrections.
Remind students to refer to the student Language Handbook as needed for guidance
in the rules of mechanics and usage. Some students may find it helpful to know at the
outset the number and types of errors they are seeking. Provide this information by
referring to the Error Summary on the annotated Editing Key pages. You may wish to
use a transparency on the overhead to check work with the group. Occasionally, you
may wish to assess students acquisition of skills by collecting and reviewing their
work before they check it.
Customizing Instruction
Some of the skills covered in Daily Paragraph Editing may not be part of the grade-
level expectancies in the language program you use. Some skills may even be taught
differently in your program from the way they are modeled in Daily Paragraph Editing.
In such cases, follow the approach used in your program. Simply revise the paragraph
text as needed by covering it with correction fluid or by writing in changes before you
reproduce copies for students.
Comma usage is an area where discrepancies are most likely to arise. Daily Paragraph
Editing uses the closed style, where commas are included after short introductory
phrases. Except for commas used in salutations, closings, dates, and between city
and state in letters, journals, or news articles, all commas that appear in the daily
paragraphs have been correctly placed according to the closed style. All other skills
related to the use of commas are practiced by requiring students to insert missing
commas, rather than moving or deleting extraneous commas.
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Occasionally, you or your students may make a correction that differs from that
shown in the Editing Key. The decision to use an exclamation mark instead of
a period, or a period instead of a semicolon, is often a subjective decision made
by individual writers. When discrepancies of this sort arise, capitalize on the
teachable moment to let students know that there are gray areas in English usage
and mechanics, and discuss how each of the possible correct choices can affect the
meaning or tone of the writing.
You may wish to have your students mark corrections on the daily paragraphs in a
manner that differs from the common proofreading marks on page 10. If so, model
the marking style you wish students to follow as you conduct group lessons on an
overhead, and point out any differences between the standard proofing marks and
those to be used by your students.
Using the Writing Prompts
Have students keep their daily paragraphs in a folder so they can review the weeks
four corrected paragraphs on Friday. Identify the type of writing modeled in the
four-paragraph composition and any of its special features (e.g., dialog in a fictional
narrative; salutation, closing, and paragraph style in a letter; opinion statements and
supporting arguments in an editorial; etc.).
Present the Friday writing prompt on an overhead transparency, write it on the
board, or distribute individual copies to students. Take a few minutes to brainstorm
ideas with the group and to focus on language skills that students will need to
address in their writing.
After students complete their writing, encourage them to use the Editing Checklist
(see page 11) to review or revise their work. You may also wish to have partners
review each others writing. To conduct a more formal assessment of students
writing, use the Assessment Rubric on page 9.
If you assign paragraph writing for homework, be sure students have the weeks four
corrected paragraphs available as a reference. You may wish to set aside some time
for volunteers to read their completed writing to the class, or display compositions
on a weekly writing bulletin board for students to enjoy
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Assessment Rubric for Evaluating Friday Paragraph Writing
The Friday writing prompts give students the opportunity to use the capitalization,
punctuation, and other usage and mechanics skills that have been practiced during the weeks
editing tasks. They also require students to write in a variety of different forms and genres.
In evaluating students Friday paragraphs, you may wish to focus exclusively on their mastery
of the aspects of mechanics and usage targeted that week. However, if you wish to conduct
a more global assessment of student writing, the following rubric offers broad guidelines for
evaluating the composition as a whole.
Characteristics of Student Writing
EXCELLENT GOOD FAIR WEAK
Writing is Writing is Writing is loosely Writing is unclear
Clarity and
exceptionally generally clear, focused on the and unfocused.
Focus
clear, focused, focused, and topic.
and interesting, interesting.
Main ideas are Main ideas are Main ideas are Main ideas are
Development
clear, specific, identifiable, but overly broad or unclear or not
of Main Ideas
and well- may be somewhat simplistic, expressed.
developed, general.
Organization is Organization is Organization is Organization is
clear (beginning, clear, but may attempted, but is not coherent.
Organization middle, and end) be predictable or often unclear.
and fits the topic formulaic.
and writing form.
Details are Details are Details may Details are absent
relevant, specific, relevant, but may be off-topic, or insufficient
Use of Details and well-placed. be overly general. predictable, to support main
or not specific ideas.
enough.
Vocabulary is Vocabulary is Vocabulary is Vocabulary is
exceptionally colorful and ordinary and may limited, general,
Vocabulary
rich, varied, and generally avoids rely on clichs, or vague.
well-chosen. clichs.
Demonstrates Demonstrates Errors in use of Limited ability
exceptionally control of conventions of to control
strong command conventions of mechanics and conventions of
Mechanics of conventions punctuation, usage distract, mechanics and
and Usage of punctuation, capitalization, but do not usage impairs
capitalization, spelling, and impede, the readability of the
spelling, and usage. reader. composition.
usage.
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Proofreading Marks
Use these marks to show corrections.
Mark Meaning Example
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to read.
0 Add a period. It was kites
E Make this a capital letter. First prize went to fliaria.
I Make this a lowercase letter. We saw a lack .at.
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. house
Fix the spelling. This is our
4 Add a comma. Goodnight 1Mom.
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Add an apostrophe. Tha Li bike.
Add quotation marks. ome he said.
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7
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the book.
Close the space. Foo ball is fun.
red
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Underline the words. We read Old Yeller.
4
Add a colon. Alex arrived at 00.
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Editing Checklist
Use this checklist to review and
revise your writing:
Q
Does each sentence begin
with a capital letter?
Do names of people and
I
places begin with a capital
letter?
Does each sentence end with
a period, a question mark, or
an exclamation point?
Q
Did I use apostrophes to
show possession (Anas desk)
and in contractions (isnt)?
Q
Did I choose the correct word
(to, too, two)?
Did I check for spelling
errors?
Q
Did I place commas where
they are needed?
Are my sentences clear and
complete?
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Editing Checklist
Use this checklist to review and
revise your writing:
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Did I check for spelling
errors?
Did I place commas where
they are needed?
Q
Are my sentences clear and
complete?
Q
Does each sentence begin
with a capital letter?
Do names of people and
places begin with a capital
letter?
Q
Does each sentence end with
a period, a question mark, or
an exclamation point?
Q
Did I use apostrophes to
show possession (Anas desk)
and in contractions (isnt)?
Q
Did I choose the correct word
(to, too, two)?
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EDITING KEY: Social Studies Article Daily Paragraph Editing
Preview the 4 daily lessons to ensure you review or introduce skills that may be unfamiliar to students.
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People the world over
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been flying kites
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for centuries
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fact, kites were invented over two
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thousand years ago! one ancient story tells of a
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chinese general his army was trying to overthrow a
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cruel emperor. the general made a kite he tied a
knot
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in the strin. Next, his soldiers flew it in the
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direction of the palace When the kite was over the
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palacthe general marked the string and reeled in
the kite 0
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the general measured the length between the
Error Sum ary
knot and the mark he made on the kite string.
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measurement
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emperors palace His soldiers spent days digging the
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tunnel. Finally, it was read His soldiers crept through
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the tunnel they came out inside the walls of the
0z defeated
palace The cruel emperor was with the help
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of a simple kite!
TUESDAY WEEK 1
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Name
KitesNot Just for Fun
People the world over has been flying kites
for centuries in fact, kites were invented over two
thousand years agol one ancient story tells of a
chinese general his army was trying to overthrow a
cruel emperor. the general made a kite he tied a
not in the string Next, his soldiers flew it in the
direction of the palace When the kite was over the
palace the general marked the string and reeled in
the kite
MONDAY
WEEK 1
the general measured the length between the
knot and the mark he made on the kite string.
he used this mesurement to plan a tunnel to the
emperors palace His soldiers spent days digging the
tunnel. Finally, it was ready His soldiers crept through
the tunnel they came out inside the walls of the
palace The cruel emperor was defeeted with the help
of a simple kite!
TUESDAY
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WEEK 1
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run-or Sentences
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run-on sentences
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have
Kites , also been used in modern warfare.
rror Summa
before airplanes were invented cameras were tied to
Capitalization LI
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Language Usage 1
kite they were sent high in the air to take pictures.
Punctuation:
enemy
1
This was a way of gathering information about
. ammo
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forces. sites have also been used to carry radio
spelling 2
eq,uipment up into the air this made it easier to send
receive
and signals. Kites were used in emergency
lifeboat kits to help lost boats signal to
searcherb
WEDNESDAY
WEEK 1
Even though kites have been used for
warfareA
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they are mainly used for fun. People fly kites at
Capitalization 3
Punctuation:
parks and beaches. Some places hold yearly kite-flying
Comma 5
contests or festivals. In both .hina and apaspecial
Other 1
holidays include kite-flying as part of the celebration.
kites can be large and expensive or simple and
affordable. You can easily make a kite by using sticks
papetapand string. So go fly a kite,J\
THURSDAY
WEEK 1
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Name
Kites has also been used in modern warfare.
before airplanes were invented cameras were tied to
CH 0
run-on sentences
kites they were sent high in the air to take pictures.
This was a way of gathering information about enemi
forces. kites have also been used to carry radio
ecuipment up into the air this made it easier to send
and recieve signals. Kites were used in emergency
lifeboat kits to help lost boats signal to searchers
WEDNESDAY
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Even though kites have been used for warfare
they are mainly used for fun. People fly kites at
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exclamation
contests or festivals. In both china and Japan special points
holidays include kite-flying as part of the celebration.
kites can be large and expensive or simple and
affordable. You can easily make a kite by using sticks
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paper tape and string. So go fly a kite
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How Traits Travel
Erro Summary
Capitalization
LI
bo you tFunk that plants could help sCientists
Punctuation:
learn about peop7 Although it may seem odd regor
Comma
LI
7A Period 2
mendel found that he could learn a lot about people
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by studying plants, actually, plants helped Mendel learn
Spelling 2
about heredit heredity is the way traits pass from
OE
parents to children In humans, eye color hair color
0 4 passed 4
skin color and height are all traits. They are past on
through
A
-, heredity.
MONDAY
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Gregor rneridel was born into a farming family
Error Summ ry
in 1823 he was a gifted student. His family could
Capitalization 8
E
Language Usage 2
not afford to pay for university studieInstead,
Punctuation:
mendel became a monk at the time, this was a good
Comma 1
Period
14
way for mendel to keep studying and learning. He also
began to teach science to high school students Mendel
loved
0
loved nature. He -love- to walk in the garden among the
plants. on one of these walks mendel saw an unusual
decided
A =
plant. he
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to study it.
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bo you think that plants could help scientists
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learn about people. Although it may seem odd gregor
meridel found that he could learn a lot about people
by studying plants. actually, plants helped Mendel learn
about heredity heredity is the way traits pass from
parents to children In humans, eye color hair color
T T
skin color and height are all traits. They are past on
threw heredity.
MONDAY
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Gregor mendel was born into a farming family
in 1823 he was a gifted student. His family could
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not afford to pay for university studies Instead,
mendel became a monk at the time, this was a good
way for mendel to keep studying and learning. He also
began to teach science to high school students Mendel
loved nature. He love to walk in the garden among the
plants, on one of these walks mendel saw an unusual
plant. he decide to study it.
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Mendel planted the unusual plant next to a
rror Summary
common type of plant. He wanted to see if plants
Capitalization 2
Language Usage 1
that grew in the same conditions would look alik 0 Punctuation:
when new plants grew mendel saw that they did not
Comma 1
Period 3
look alike. Each new plant looked like the parent
suing 1
came
plant that it -eeme- from. Mendel wondered about this
0
He wondered if new plants always looked like the
studies
parent plant Mendel planned more tudys.
0
WEDNESDAY
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grew
Mendel 9rwed- plants from two tall parent plants.
Error Summary
He gowe4 plants from two short parent plants. He
Capitalization 2
grew
Language Usage 3
also plants with one tall and one short parent.
Punctuation:
When both parent plants were alike the new plants
Comma 1
Period 2
looked like the parents. The plant that grew from
a tall and a short parent was tall mendel later
QE
learned that some traits are stronger than others
his discoveries helped us learn how human traits are
passed from parents to children.
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Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
Mendel planted the unusual plant next to a
common type of plant. He wanted to see if plants
commas
that grew in the same conditions would look alike
when new plants grew mendel saw that they did not
look alike. Each new plant looked like the parent
plant that it come from. Mendel wondered about this?
He wondered if new plants always looked like the
parent plants Mendel planned more studys.
WEDNESDAY
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Mendel growed plants from two tall parent plants.
He growed plants from two short parent plants. He
commas
also grow plants with one tall and one short parent.
When both parent plants were alike the new plants
looked like the parents. The plant that grew from
a tall and a short parent was tall mendel later
learned that some traits are stronger than others
his discoveries helped us learn how human traits are
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passed from parents to children.
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Uniforms Are Not the Answer
rror Summa
Capitalization 1
It seems that more arid more schools these
Punctuation:
days are choosing to have students wear
uniformb
Apostrophe 2
Penod 2
At first, school officials reasons seem to make a lot
Spelling 4
sense
believe
of Those who support school uniforms
0
that switching over to uniforms can help schools
solve many problems. jt would be wonderful if tough
problems could be solved with such easy answers.
too
Its #e- bad that is just not the case.
MONDAY
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Those who support uniforms say that they will
Error Summary

. Capitalization 2
help make all students equa They also beheve that

Language Usage 2
students will focus on schoolwork instead of comparing Punctuation:
classmateclothes Uniform supporters feel that
Apostrophe 1
0
easier
9
Period 5
shopping for clothing will be
9 or student s and
Spelling 4
parents ik- some say that uniforms may even help
are
solve the gang problems that some schoolsfacing
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Name
Unif rms Are Not the Answer
It seems that more arid more schools these
days are choosing to have students wear uniforms
At first, school officials reasons seem to make a lot
of cents Those who support school uniforms beleive
that switching over to uniforms can help schools
solve many problems. it would be wonderful if tough
problems could be solved with such easy answers.
Its to bad that is just not the case.
MONDAY
WEEK 3
47CH
O
apostrophes
Those who support uniforms say that they will
help make all students eq,ual They also believes that
students will focus on schoolwork instead of comparing
there classmates clothes Uniform supporters feel that
shopping for clothing will be easyer. For students and
parents a like some say that uniforms may even help
solve the gang problems that some schools facing
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This kind of thinking just does make sense 0 E or Summ
Kids who join gangs will not change 9ust because
Capitalizafion 2
Punctuation:
they wear uniforms at school.
Lt
may seem easier to
Apostrophe 2
ecide wear
Comma 1
let the school dd what students -rc each day
,
Period 2
but is it really a good idea in the long
run?The
job
Other 2
of parents and teachers is to help children learn to
Spelling 2
make good choices. Dont kids deserve to practice I
making good choices every chance they ge7
WEDNESDAY WEEK 3
If we want kids to think for themselves when E or Summa
they grow up we need to let them make simple
Capitalization 1
A
are
Language Usage 2
decisions as soon as they ready. Choosing clothes
Punctuation: I
for school is an easy way to practice making good
Comma 1
Period 2
choices. Adults should help children learn. 94o make
s&ling 1
good decisions and to think for themselves. We
I
sure
I
should be that there are caring adults at I
child
home and at school to help guide every
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Name
This kind of thinking just doesnt make sense
Kids who join gangs wiW not change. Just because
they wear uniforms at school. it may seem easier to
let the school deside what students ware each day
but is it really a good idea in the long run. The job
of parents and teachers iS to help children learn to
make good choices. bont kids deserve to practice
making good choices every chance they get.
WEDNESDAY
WEEK 3
4TCH
O
apostrophes
If we want kids to think for themselves when
they grow up we need to let them make simple
decisions as soon as they is ready. Choosing clothes
for school is an easy way to practice making good
choices. Adults should help children learn. To make
good decisions and to think for themselves. We
should be shure that there are caring adults at
home and at school to help guide every children
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EDITING KEY: Letters
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Pen Pals
Erro Summary
Capitalization LI
dear Ana
A
Punctuation:
I was so happy to get your letter last week.
Apostrophe 3
Comma 3
Now that school has started again it seems like ages
2
4,
en
ago that we were at summer camp. m glad that were
Spelling 2
keeping our promise to stay in touchl
Fourth
grade has been fun so
far!
am still taking
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violin lessons and Im also playing on a basketball team
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too
after school, dad doesnt want me to get -*o- busy
because we get homework every day now
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What have you been reading these dayl we are
or Summary
reading island of the blue dolphins. So far, I really
Capitalization
q
Punctuation:
like it We are learning about the Native americans of
Comma 2
0
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california and my teacher makes it lots of fun. today
Penod 2
meal
E Other 1
we collected acorns to make acorn mccl
spelling 1
0
Please write soon and tell me all about what you
are doing.
your friend
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I was so happy to get your letter last week.
Now that school has started again it seems like ages
ago that we were at summer camp. Im glad that were
keeping our promise to stay in touch!
Forth grade has been fun so far I am still taking
violin lessons and Im also playing on a basketball team
after school. dad doesnt want me to get to busy
because we get homework every day now
MONDAY WEEK 4
What have you been reading these days we are
reading island of the blue dolphins. So far, i really
like it We are learning about the Native americans of
california and my teacher makes it lots of fun. today
we collected acorns to make acorn meel
Please write soon and tell me all about what you
are doing.
your friend
Mayra
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letter (closing)
book titles
Name
dear Ana
Pen Pals
letter
(salutation)
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EDiTING KEY: Ecttcrs Daily Paragraph Editing
dear nara
Error Summ ry
thanks for writing back to me so quickly! I love
Capitalization 7
Punctuation:
getting letters in the mail more than getting e-mai
L Apostrophe 2
do( know why but i think i1 more exciting to find a
Comma 3
real
E Period 3
envelope waiting for me.
Spelling 2
j
had a good day at school today
we
have been
studying
tudyng
fractlonsAand
today we had a fraction party.
My group had to divide two pizzas into equal parts
for the whole class We used sixteenths.
0
WEDNESDAY WEEK 4
I have been really busy with my music. have Error Sum a
been practicing a duet with my friend un. it starting
Capitalization 7
to
E Punctuation:
too sound really good. Ill bring the music to camp
Apostrophe 1
next summer and you and I can play it together
Comma 2
A 0 Penod 3
Weve been reading y the shores of Silver lake,
other 2
Werent you reading that over the summe ?i loveit
Spelling 2
again A 0
lease write agc soon
0
our friend
ana
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Name
dear mayra
thanks for writing back to me so quicklyl I love
getting letters in the mail more than getting e-mail I
dorit know why but i think its more exciting to find a
reel envelope waiting for me.
i had a good day at school today we have been
studyng fractions and today we had a fraction party.
My group had to divide two pizzas into eq,ual parts
for the whole class We used sixteenths.
WEDNESDAY WEEK 4
I have been really busy with my music. i have
been practicing a duet with my friend lin. Its starting
too sound really good. Ill bring the music to camp
next summer and you and I can play it together
Weve been reading By the shores of Silver lake.
Werent you reading that over the summer. I love it
please write agen soon
your friend
ana
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4rcH
letter
(salutation)
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letter (closing)
book titles
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Birthday Mail
Error Summary
Capitalization
114
dear daniel

A
Punctuation:
= =
you are invited to celebrate my 11th birthday
Comma 3
Period 6
with my family and me We will be camping overnight
0
Well
er
at bat cave camp in Smoky ridge state park.
Spelling 1
hike swim and fish at the park. We will leave at
10 from my house at 9231 cypress road on
saurday the 16th. your parents can pick you up at
610 pmat my house on sunday the 17th, or you can
call for a ride home after we get back
0
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WEEK 5
We will have a tenfood and cooking gear. Error Su mary
You will need to bring a sleeping bag a flashlight
Capitalization 2
4%
4%
Punctualion:
extra batteries hiking boots a cap insect repellent
Comma 10
sunscreen and all your clothing. If you have a fishing
Period 2
Spelling 1
pole, you might want to bring it along. Please call
0
555-3020 to let us know if you will be able to come
sure
I hope you can!
your
rienS
Nick
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Birthday Mail
4TCHO
dear daniel
names of places
you are invited to celebrate my 11th birthday
dates
with my family and me We will be camping overnight
. i time
at bat cave camp in Smoky ridge state park. Wel
hike swim and fish at the park. We will leave at
10.00 am from my house at 9231 cypress road on
saturday the 16th. your parents can pick you up at
6-00 pm at my house on sunday the 17th, or you can
call them for a ride home after we get back
MONDAY
WEEK 5
We will have a tent food and cooking gear.
You will need to bring a sleeping bag a flashlight
commas
extra batteries hiking boots a cap insect repellent
sunscreen and all your clothing. If you have a fishing
pole, you might want to bring it along? Please cafl
555-3020 to let us know if you will be able to come
I shure hope you can 1
your Friend
Nick
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bear daniel,
rrorSu mary
.thank
you so much for coming to my birthday
Capitalization 3

Punctuation:
camp-out. I had a great time with Mik- Ton and you. Apostrophe 3
great
Comma 2
The headlamp you gave me was a gif 0s the
Period 1
perfect thing to use for exploring caves. I really like
other 1
having both my hands free when m walking in a dark
Spelling 1
cave, and a light on my head is the perfect solution.
so much better than a regular flashlight. Thanks)\
WEDNESDAY
WEEK 5
My ,Wom took my film to be developed today,
Error Sum a
and the pictures from our camping trip should be
Capitalization 6
Punctuation:
ready next wee 0lmnot sure if the pictures we Apostrophe 1
Comma 1
took in the cave will turn out. It might have been
too
Period 3
-- dar
I
cant wait to see the pictures of that fish
Spelling 2
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two
we caught. we are getting -fe- copies so that you can
have some pictures for your albu
0
your frien
ick
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Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
bear daniel,
thank you so much for coming to my birthday
camp-out. I had a great time with Mike Tony and you.
commas
The headlamp you gave me was a grate gift its the
perfect thing to use for exploring caves. I really like
having both my hands free when Im walking in a dark
cave, and a light on my head is the perfect solution.
Its so much better than a regular flashlight. Thanks
WEDNESDAY
WEEK 5
My Mom took my film to be developed today,
and the pictures from our camping trip should be
ready next week im not sure if the pictures we
took in the cave will turn out. It might have been
to dark i cant wait to see the pictures of that fish
we caught. we are getting to copies so that you can
have some pictures for your album
your friend
nick
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The Letter
Error Summary
Capitalization 2
through 4
autumn morninand I
Language Usage 1
shuffled *iirew- the leaves on the sidewalk. The letter
Punctuation:
his Apostrophe 2
carrier waved as he drove off to h next
stoi Comma 5
waved back and then I paused in front of the row
Period 2
Other 1
of mailboxes. I took a deep breath,\exhaled slowl
SlIing 1
and opened our box. Would this be the day that the
letter awaited so anxiously would finally come?I
A
wasn sure
j
could take even one more day of waiting
= 0
MONDAY
WEEK 6
It had been weeks since I sent my application
Error Summary
V . . . Capitalization 3
off to space camp Id spent anxious difficult hours
4
Language Usage 1
writing the essay that accompanied the application. Punctuation:
science
written
A str h 1
my teacher Mrs uchida had me a
p0 op e
4 E 4
Comma 7
wonderful letter of recommendation and my Xom Period 2
had filled out all the required information for my
5mg 1
scholarship request. Everything was complete so all
4
I could do was wishhopeand wait for a letter
of reply.
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REALISTIC FICTION: The Letter
Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
The Letter
It was a crisp cool autumn morning and I
shuffled threw the leaves on the sidewalk. The letter
carrier waved as he drove off to her next stop I
waved back and then I paused in front of the row
of mailboxes. I took a deep breath exhaled slowly
and opened our box. Would this be the day that the
letter Id awaited so anxiously would finally come I
wasnt sure I could take even one more day of waiting
MONDAY
WEEK 6
It had been weeks since I sent my application
off to space camp Id spent anxious difficult hours
writing the essay that accompanied the application.
my sceince teacher Mrs uchida had wrote me a
wonderful letter of recommendation and my Mom
had filled out all the required information for my
scholarship
rectuest.
Everything was complete so all
I could do was wish hope and wait for a letter
of reply.
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EDITING KEY: Realistic Fiction
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I slowly pulled open the door of the mciilbo 0
ErrorSummary
Capitalization 3
.g stack of mail was piled inside the box. Rat the
Punctuation:
first piece was addressed to Resident and was jUSt Comma
LI
the weekly grocery ad announcing the current price
Penod 2
of chicke halloween cand and seasonal fruits. below
that was a letter addressed to my mom. It was
from the phone compan so it was probably a bill.
There was one letter lef I could hardly stand
0
to look!
WEDNESDAY
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I took a sb deep breath and pulled out a cr15
Error Summary
Capitalization 2
new envelope. It was addressed to me. Ye .t was
Language Usage 1
from space
camb
bid the letter have good news for Punctuation:
m or was I about to have a terrible disappointmenf 9
Aposfrophe 2
kids A
Comma 5
I knew that plenty of other would be getting
Penod 2
letters like this on m sure they wanted to go
0th 1
0 Spelling 1
to space camp just as much asj did. In one more
knew
momen I -ri# d have my answer.
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REALISTIC FICTION: The Letter
Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
I slowly pulled open the door of the mailbox
a stack of mail was piled inside the box. Rats the
first piece was addressed to Resident and was JUSt
the weekly grocery ad announcing the current price
of chicken halloween candy and seasonal fruits. below
that was a letter addressed to my mom. It was
from the phone company so it was probably a bill.
There was one letter left I could hardly stand
to lookl
WEDNESDAY
WEEK 6
4TCH
O
commas
I took a slow deep breath and pulled out a crisp
new envelope. It was addressed to me. Yes It was
from space camp bid the letter have good news for
me or was I about to have a terrible disappointment.
I knew that plenty of other kid would be getting
letters like this one Im sure they wanted to go
to space camp just as much as I did. In one more
moment I new Id have my answer.
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EDITING KEY: Historical Fiction
Daily Paragraph Editing
Preview the 4 daily lessons to ensure you review or introduce skills that may be unfamiliar to students.
A New Life in Old California
Error u mary
Capitalization 6
It has been more than five years since We left
Language Usage 3
our home in New pai Lt seemed like we had -H--
Punctuation:
= 0=
spent Comma 1
there forever. After all, I had pidd- all eight
Period 3
there seems
years of my life i+&.. That time and place so
Spelling 1
distant no 0Sometimes it feels like our new home in
Salinas, Alto california, is worlds away from new Spain
=
= = 0
jJ
was such a tirindifficult journey between our old
home and our new one that we might as well be in
another world!
MONDAY
WEEK 7
Sailing ships seldom bring supplies to Id
Error Summ ry
grown
Capitalization
q
phfornia. Almost everything we have must be grcn
=
Punctualion:
or made with our own hands ur home is a simple Comma 3
0=
one made of adobe. we have far fewer comforts
Period 2
Spelling 1
than we did in new pain. We all must work hard to
finish the work at must be done every day. Only
my youngest brothe edrwho was born here in lta
California does not have a job to d.
0
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Name
A New Life in Old California
It has been more than five years since we left
our home in New spain it seemed like we had live
there forever. After all, I had spended all eight
years of my life their. That time and place seem so
distant now Sometimes it feels like our new home in
Salinas, Alta california, is worlds away from new Spain
it was such a tiring difficult journey between our old
home and our new one that we might as well be in
another world 1
MONDAY
WEEK 7
Sailing ships seldom bring supplies to old
california. Almost everything we have must be groan
or made with our own hands our home is a simple
one made of adobe. we have far fewer comforts
than we did in new spain. We all must work hard to
finish the work That must be done every day. Only
my youngest brother pedro who was born here in alta
California does not have a job to do
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my job is to care for the
cattii
lead the cows Error ummary
out to the pasture 9arly in the momma in the late
Capitalization 7
Punctuation:
afternoon I herd them back into the barn. Besides
Comma 5
/\
helping me milk Marta spends the day caring for
Penod 5
4
pedro. In the early evening pedro likes to sit in the
- 4=
kitchen while mama pats out tortillas for our dinner
0
He likes to help pat the grainy salty cornmeal into
4
flat round shapes that mama cooks on the griddle
4
= 0
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This week, it is Papa turn to guard the mission 0 rror u m ry
stealing
bandits have been t! 9cattle and horses in this
Capitahzation 6
Punctuation:
area The settlers are all taking turns standing
Apostrophe 1
Ocy
guard
guard? Papa says that
j
am old enough to ;r the
Comma 2
0
Period 5
cattle at home. Next year, when im
lI 4APaPa
says he
sIIing 3
will take me with him to the mission. Perhaps I will
see lovabljolly Father beltran again he will be happy
know
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my job is to care for the cattle I lead the cows
out to the pasture. Early in the morning in the late
afternoon I herd them back into the barn. Besides
helping me milk Marta spends the day caring for
pedro. In the early evening pedro likes to sit in the
kitchen while mama pats out tortillas for our dinner?
He likes to help pat the grainy salty cornmeal into
flat round shapes that mama cooks on the griddle
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This week, it is Papas turn to guard the mission
bandits have been steeling cattle and horses in this
area The settlers are all taking turns standing
guard? Papa says that i am old enough to gard the
cattle at home. Next year, when im
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will take me with him to the mission. Perhaps I will
see ovable jolly Father beltran again he will be happy
to no that I still enjoy reading and writing
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Lewis & Clark
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it is today, as it rcccht only from the Atlantic
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Ocean to the mississippi river. In 1803, the
bought
government of the united states byd a large area
of land from france. This land was known as the
louisiana Territory. It stretched from the mississippi
river to the rocky Mountains. Many native americans
lived ther
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Lewis c Clark
The United states of america was a young
nation in the early 1800s. It was much smaller than
it is today, as it reacht only from the Atlantic
Ocean to the mississippi river. In 1803, the
government of the united states buyed a large area
of land from france. This land was known as the
louisiana Territory. It stretched from the mississippi
river to the rocky Mountains. Many native americans
lived there
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Thomas jefferson was the president who bought
the louisiana territory. He had many questions about
this new land What kinds of plants animals and people
could be found on these lands. President Jefferson
wundered what the land west of the rocky mountains
was like he knew some of it was mexicos land but he
couldnt help wondering if there was a route by river
that would lead to the pacific Ocean
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President Jefferson decided to have a group of Error Summary
explorers cross the new land. He wanted them to
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draw maps study plants and animals and learn about
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explorers cross the new kind. He wanted them to
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charge of the explorers and Capt. lewis chose william
Clark to help him lead the group. it took months to
prepare for the journie. on may
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1804 lewis and
clark set out with more than 30 explorers.
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The explorers spent the winter of 1804 in the
area now known as north dakota. There they meet
names of people
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native american wife both of them joined the
expedition Sacagawea helped to find food and make
frends with other natives By november of 1805 the
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The Everglades
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the acific ocean to the citlantic ocean with lots
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of land in between Each region of the country
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uniq,ue. A special feature of the southeast is a
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wet grassy area in florida this area is called the
Everglades. The Everglades has been described as
a river of gras Thats because currents of fresh
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special habitats
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the pacific ocean to the atlantic ocean with lots
of land in between Each region of the country are
unique? A special feature of the southeast is a
wet grassy area in florida this area is called the
Everglades. The Everglades has been described as
a river of grass Thats because currents of fresh
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is many different types of habitats in the Everglades
these include mangrove forests, cypress groves marine
estuaries and freshwater sloughs.
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everglades is people. People have tried to away
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water so they can build homes ther-They have also Apostrophe 1
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verglades. These changes have created many problems
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in the vergIades habitats. are trying to
find a way to make the .verglades healthy again so
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Each Everglades habitat needs to keep a delicate
balance to stay heithy. When things get out of
balance problems begin. For example, kemicals that
pollute the everglades can kill algae algae are a simple
life-form at the bottom of the food chain. If the
algae disappear the animals that eat algae has no food
this can cause plants and animals in the food chain to
became out of balance
WEDNESDAY
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Today, the bigest cause of problems in the
everglades is people. People have tried to drone away
water so they can build homes there They have also
tried to change the direction that water flows in the
everglades. These changes have created many problems
in the everglades habitats. Sientists are trying to
find a way to make the everglades healthy again so
this uniq,ue ecosystem will be preserved
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Arrowheads in Space
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to do with the International Space Station?american
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astronaut jphn Herrington took these items with him
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when he . the space shuttle endeavour into outer
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space in iiovember
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Oklahoma 9o cipe Canaverafiorida, to see herringto
historic launch.
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Arrowheads in Space
What do eagel feathers and arrowheads have
to do with the International Space Station american
astronaut john Herrington took these items with him
when he ride the space shuttle endeavour into outer
space in november 2002. The leader of the chickasaw
Nation and 200 of its 5,000 members traveled from
Oklahoma. To cape Canaveral florida, to see herringtons
historic launch.
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John herrington is one-eighth chickasaw through
his great-grandmother on his mothers side. Herringtons
mother make sure to register John as a member
of the chickasaw tribe. When talking about his
native american heritage herrington has said I take
tremendous pride in who I am and where I come
from. The chickasaw nation is also very prowd of the
first american indian in outer space.
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of eq,uipment that cost $390 million was also on board
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crew
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space station ee- hooked up the equipment to the
orbiting station during a series of spacewalks. Spare
parts were also shuttled to the space station by
herrington and the Endeavour crew.
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Herringtons family moved 14 times within
oklahoma colorado wyoming and texas during his school
years that made studyng difficult. Herrington first
enrolled in college to become a forest ranger but he
flunked out. Later, he returned to college and study
math and engineering After that, herrington entered
the u.s. Navy and became a test pilot in lqq6, he
joined NASA to train as an astronaut
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herrington carryed to the space station a special piece
of equipment that cost $3O million was also on board
the Endeavour. Herringtori and other members of the
space station crue hooked up the equipment to the
orbiting station during a series of spacewaiks. Spare
parts were also shuttled to the space station by
herrington and the Endeavour crew.
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A Monumental Tribute
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In 1q23, Doane robinson had a big idea. He
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wanted
-we# to carve a huge sculpture into the granite
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rock of south dakota, his home state. He wanted
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to honor people who helped to make the united
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states a great natio He wanted to honor native
leaders
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leader. He also wanted to honor american explorers
like lewis and Clar
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In 1q24,
robinson
hired Gutzon borIuna
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sculptor to create the enormous carvin. together,
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proposed that the carving show the countrie-s- most
famous presidents. Robinson agreed that more people
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robinson hired Gutzon borglum a
sculptor to create the enormous carving together,
borgium and robinson chose mount Rushmore as
the place for the monument mount rushmore is in
south dakota and it have tall granite cliffs. Borgium
proposed that the carving show the countries most
famous presidents. Robinson agreed that more people
would probably come to see famous presidents
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In
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boane robinson had a big idea. He
want to carve a huge sculpture into the granite
rock of south dakota, his home state. He wanted
to honor people who helped to make the united
states a great nation He wanted to honor native
american leeders such as Chief crazy horse a Sioux
leader. He also wanted to honor american explorers
like lewis and Clark
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completed by 1l27. For 14 years, workers continued
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to blast drill and hammer away at the rock
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Beak began to work on a memorial to honor the
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Sioux Nation this sculpture would show chief crazy
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sioux lands from the u.s. Army. Work on the crazy
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horse memorial is still-gion today. When itis
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compJeteit will be the worlds largest sculpture.
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Plans and models for the project had been
completed by 1927. For 14 years, workers continued
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to blast drill and hammer away at the rock the
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faces of george washington thomas Jefferson theodore
roosevelt and abraham lincoln all began to take shape.
On october 31 1941 the mount rushmore National
Memorial was completed. Seven years later, work on
another rock sculpture began
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In 1948, A sioux leader, chief henry standing
sear began to work on a memorial to honor the
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Sioux Nation this sculpture would show chief crazy
names of people
horse a leeder and warrior who protected the
sioux lands from the u.s. Army. Work on the crazy
horse memorial is still gone on today. When it is
completed it will be the worlds largest sculpture.
The crazy Horse Memorial will be 87 foot talH
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My Tree House
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have just the perfect place to go and be by myself.
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homeAbut
it feels like Im in
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another world when I go there. Its through the gate
in the back fence across the empty lot and right at
the edge of the field. Thats where my tree grows
and thats where I can climb up into the branches and
into a world of my very own.
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let me through the backyard while he looked
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inside. The boy who was moving out of the house
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opened the back gate. in silence, he led me
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found
looked down. 9o be sure I had the first foothold.
I was right be md him
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My Tree House
When I need a q,uite place to sit and think i
have just the perfect place to go and be by myself.
Its not far from my home but it feels like Im in
another world when I go there. Its through the gate
in the back fence across the empty lot and right at
the edge of the field. Thats where my tree grows
and thats where I can climb up into the branches and
into a world of my very own.
MONDAY
The first day we came to see this house my bad
let me warnder through the backyard while he looked
inside. The boy who was moving out of the house
come out into the yard. Without saying a word he
opened the back gate. in silence, he led me accross
the empty lot to a tree. As he started to climb he
looked down. To be sure i had find the first foothold.
I was right be hind him
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against the blue sk i love to take a book and
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Maybe it was because the boy showed me the
tree house without saying a word may be it was
because i felt he had shared a special seacret with
me. Im not sure. lye never said a word about the
tree house to anyone but dad probably knows about
it. Hes seen me disapear out the back gate countless
times. you can even see a corner of the tree house.
from our drivewaye
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special place for me. Its a place for me to be a lone.
I love to lie on my back and stare up at the green
leafs against the blue sky i love to take a book and
get lost for hours in a world of adventure. May be
what i love best of all is that this special place is
mine and I dont have to share it with anybody else
its a place all my owne.
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Gold!
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In
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there were about 20,000 living
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in California. Just four years later that number grow.
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to over 200,000. Why did so many people come to
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rush began in
18149
when a man named ames
marshall found a gold nugget in the american River
exciting
He could not keep this news to himself. In
about six weeks almost every man in california was
panning for gold.
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when
word of ames marshalls discovery reached
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the newspapers working men across the united states
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loaded
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quickly cdd- up their wagons or boarded ships and
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kept
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headed to California. treams of striking it rich keeped-
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the men hopeful during the harsh difficult journey.
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hy were these men called forty-niners?They got
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that nickname because they headed for the gold
country in the year
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Gold!
In 1848, there were about 20,000 peepil living
in California. Just four years later that number grow
to over 200,000. Why did so many people come to
california. they came for the Gold Rush! The Gold
rush began in 1849 when a man named James
marshall found a gold nugget in the american River
He could not keep this ekciting news to himself. In
about six weeks almost every man in california was
panning for gold.
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the newspapers working men across the united states
q,uickly loded up their wagons or boarded ships and
headed to California. breams of striking it rich keeped
the men hopeful during the harsh difficult Journey.
why were these men called forty-niners They got
that nickname because they headed for the gold
country in the year
18149
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To begin mining for
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land that had not yet been claimed. Most miners
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claimed land along rivers and streams Although much Punctuation:
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stop the eage greedy gold miners from claiming it
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for themselves Once a miner made a claim he began
to pan for gol. 0What is panning for gold. t is a
simple method for separating gold from sand.
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By the late 1850s most of the surface gold
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work on ranches or in store miners actually
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To begin mining for gold men had to find some
land that had not yet been claimed. Most miners
claimed land along rivers and streams Although much
of this land belong to native americans that did not
stop the eager greedy gold miners from claiming it
for themselves Once a miner made a claim he began
to pan for gold What is panning for gold It is a
simple method for separating gold from sand.
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By the late 1850s most of the surface gold
in the rivers and streems was gone. some of the
forty-niners went to work for large mining companies.
others give up mining for gold and they looked for
work on ranches or in stores Few miners actually
struck it rich. The gold Rush was over as cuickly as
it began but it had a lasting effect on the growth of
california. bo you think it was a positive effect
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Electric Energy
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You come home one evening in flovember. The
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until you find the switch. You flip the switch and the
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room fills with bright light. Mom walks over and flips
another switch Hot air from an electric heater begins
warm
to wQrne the room. Have you ever wondered what life
would be like without electricity?
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Before people had electric energy at home
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they had to use candles or lanterns to light up the
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were
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stoves or fireplaces. fire was also used for cooking.
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Electric Energy
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You come home one evening in november. The
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house are dark and cold mom unlocks the front door
and you hurry inside. You fumble in the darknes.
until you find the switch. You flip the switch and the
room fills with bright light. Mom walks over and flips
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another switch Hot air from an electric heater begins
to warme the room. Have you ever wondered what life
would be like without electricity.
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they had to use candles or lanterns to light up the
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darkness. Houses was heated by burning wood inn
stoves or fireplaces. fire was also used for cooking.
Stoves were heated by burning wood coal or gas
How do we cook today. Many stoves use heat from
electric energy high-speed microwave ovens also use
electric energy.
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energy
Where does electric -encrgio- come fro ? How
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does power get to the electric outlets at your house?
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uses
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jt all starts at a power plant. The power plant Punctuation:
energy to make electricit Some power plants use
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energy from flowing water to make electricity and
other 2
some use energy from steam. This energy is used
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machine
to make a machine spin. The spinning machine uses
an
wires and magnets to create electric current.
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current
The electric made at the power plant
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flows through large wires these are called transmission
Capitalization 3
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line 0The transmission lines carry the electric current
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to energy substation. From there, the electric
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current flows through distribution lines. Have you -sce-
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these linehey held up by poles. These lines carry
electricity to your house that is how you get power
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Name
Where does electric energie come from. How
does power get to the electric outlets at your house
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it all starts at a power plant. The power plant use
energy to make electricity Some power plants use
energy from flowing water to make electricity and
some use energy from steam. This energy is used
to make a machine spin? The spinning mashine uses
wires and magnets to create a electric current.
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The electric curent made at the power plant
flows through large wires these are called transmission
question marks
lines The transmission lines carry the electric current
to a energy substation? From there, the electric
current flows through distribution lines. Have you see
these lines they is held up by poles. These lines carry
electricity to your house that is how you get power
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when you flip a light switch.
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A Woman of Science
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Marie curie was born in warsaw oland, in 1867.
Language Usage 3
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As a young girl marie -l-ke- science and she was an
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excellent studen When Marie was older she wanted .
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to study science and math at a college in warsaw.
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At that time however women -was- not allowed to
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study
study at Polish colleges so marie continued to tude
and read textbooks on her own. She also studied
women
with other wmn at a secret school.
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When marie curie was 2she went to ari
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france to attend college she went to the Sorbonne
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a very well-known university. Curie didnt have as much Apostrophe 1
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science tr as many of the other students. She
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but soon she was the best
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student in her class. curie graduated with a science
degree in 18q3. By the next year she had completed
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A Woman of Science
Marie curie was born in warsaw poland, in 1867.
As a young girl marie like science and she was an
excellent student When Marie was older she wanted
to study science and math at a college in warsaw.
At that time however women was not allowed to
study at Polish colleges so marie continued to studie
and read textbooks on her own. She also studied
with other woman at a secret school.
When marie curie was
2L4
she went to paris
france to attend college she went to the Sorbonne
a very well-known university. Curie didnt have as much
science traning as many of the other students. She
had to work very hard but soon she was the best
student in her class, curie graduated with a science
degree in 1813. By the next year she had completed
a second degree in math.
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about the element uranium an element is a pure
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substance that cannot be broken down any further.
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began
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off a type of energ Marie curie studying
this energy She called it radioactivity she wanted to
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find out how uranium was able to create radioactivity.
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spent
marie curie pondod the rest of her life
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studying radioactivity. She discovered that uranium
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Language Usage 1
gives off radioactivity through its
atombc.urie
work
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helped scientists learn more about atoms Even more
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importantly, curie discovered two new elements and
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they both were radioactive. By the end of her life
in
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curie had become the first woman to
receive a nobel Prize for her work.
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In 186, curie learn of recent discoveries made
about the element uranium an element is a pure
substance that cannot be broken down any further.
Another sientist had discovered that uranium gave
off a type of energy Marie curie begun studying
this energy She called it radioactivity she wanted to
find out how uranium was able to create radioactivity?
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marie curie spended the rest of her life
studying radioactivity. She discovered that uranium
gives off radioactivity through its atoms curies work
helped scientists learn more about atoms? Even more
importantly, curie discovered two new elements and
they both were radioactive. By the end of her life
in
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marie curie had become the first woman to
receive a nobel Prize for her work.
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Terrific Teeth
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Capitalizalion 2
Can you imagine having special tools to cut up
Punctuation:
the foods that you eat? oud need something sharp to
Apostrophe 1
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cut off a slice of
hardAcrisp
carrot. something pointy
Period 1
would help you pierce a firn>crunchy apple. Yo
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probably need something else7to help you work your
delicious steak
way through a juicy piece of take Actually,
you probably have a complete set of tools to do these
tools
jobs. The -t-t4e- are your teeth
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Grown-ups usually have a full set of 32 adult
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teeth. A full set for children is only 20 teet most
Capitalization 3
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children lose their primary teeth between ages 6 and
Punctuation:
different
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11. There are several diffreii1 types of teeth. in the
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center of your moutyou have 4 thin teeth on the
spelling 1
top and 4 on the bottom. You use them to cut into
hard crunchy foods that you bite. These teeth are
teeth
called incisors babies often get these first
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Terrific Teeth
Can you imagine having special tools to cut up all
the foods that you eat youd need something sharp to
cut off a slice of hard crisp carrot, something pointy
would help you pierce a firm crunchy apple. Youd
probably need something else. to help you work your
way through a delisious juicy piece of stake. Actually,
you probably have a complete set of tools to do these
jobs. The tules are your teeth
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Grown-ups usually have a full set of 32 adult
teeth. A full set for children is only 20 teeth most
children lose their primary teeth between ages 6 and
11. There are several diffrent types of teeth. in the
center of your mouth you have 4 thin teeth on the
top and 4 on the bottom. You use them to cut into
hard crunchy foods that you bite. These teeth are
called incisors babies often get these tooth first
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There are 4 pointy teeth next to the incisors.
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boffom
there are 2 on top and 2 on the -be+et 10 These
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pointy teeth are used for tearing food. They are
ii Period 5
called canine teeth, oryeteeth. The rest of the
Quotation Mark 1
wider
teeth are . and flatter. They are used to crush
Spelling 2
and grind foo. these teeth are called molars. Molars
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work hard to make it easier for us to digest our foo.
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Teeth
-Tcci+t do an important job in our bodiethey
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break
help us . our food down into smaller pieces. this
Capitalization 3
easier
Language Usage 1
makes it for the digestive system to do its
Punctuation:
job. important to take care of our teeth 9y
Apostrophe 2
Comma 2
meals
brushing and flossing after . If we do brush/\
Period 3
food and germs left on our teeth can begin to cause
Other 1
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decay. becay can weaken and destroy stronhealthY
teeth. So be sure to brush and floss 9every d
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There are 4 pointy teeth next to the incisors.
They is on the left and right sides of your mouth
there are 2 on top and 2 on the botom These sharp
pointy teeth are used for tearing food? They are
called canine teeth, or eyeteeth. The rest of the
teeth, are widder and flatter. They are used to crush
and grind food these teeth are called molars. Molars
work hard to make it easier for us to digest our food
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in q,uotes
Tooths do an important job in our bodies they
help us brake our food down into smaller pieces. this
makes it easyer for the digestive system to do its
job. Its important to take care of our teeth. By
brushing and flossing after meels. If we dont brush
food and germs left on our teeth can begin to cause
decay. becay can weaken and destroy strong healthy
teeth. 5o be sure to brush and floss, every day.
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The Amazing Internet
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Spring is coming and -you re- family is
PUnCtUatiOn:
planning an outing to a local theme park. As you
Apostrophe 1
Comma 2
finalize your planthere are some details to chec
Period 2
V
weather
You want to find out about next weeks - -- _our
Other 1
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parents need to get directions to the amusement
parand your brother wants to see how many roller
coasters there are. Where can you go to find out
everything in one place?just look on the Internet 1
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taken
g few years ag it would probably have took
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more time and effort to find all this information.
Capitalization
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found
Language Usage 2
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studied
5
in the newspaper. Your parents might have tudyed
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a map to find the best route to the ark and your
brother would have telephoned the park. today, people
can find this information on the Internet from a
computer at home work school or the public library.
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The Amazing Internet
Spring brake is coming and youre family is
planning an outing to a local theme park. As you
finalize your plans there are some details to check
You want to find out about next weeks wether your
parents need to get directions to the amusement
park and your brother wants to see how many roller
coasters there are. Where can you go to find out
everything in one place just look on the Internet!
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a few years ago it would probably have took
more time and effort to find all this information.
You might have find a long-range weather forecast
in the newspaper. Your parents might have studyed
a map to find the best route to the Park and your
brother would have telephoned the park. today, people
can find this information on the internet from a
computer at home work school or the public library.
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The work that led to the creation of the
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began were
!nternet
in the 160 5.Most computers
Language Usage 2
used by the government universities and businesses. Punctuation:
The u.s. government was looking fora way to link
Apostrophe 1
its
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:. computers together so that information could be
Period 2
easily shared.
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the first four computers had
been linked together in a network. Information flowed
between them 9over telephone
lineb
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buy
in the 18Os, people began to -bye computers to
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use at hom more computer networks were created
Capitalization 5
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began
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and the early Internet - - to grow. In order to
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use the internet users had to -Z- in complex codes.
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lqcjl,
the World Wide Web was created
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easier
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people could connect to the jnternet on their home
begun
computers. A new era in information had -bg+n.
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Name
The work that led to the creation of the
internet begun in the 1960s. Most computers was
used by the government universities and businesses.
The u.s. government was looking for a way to link
its computers together so that information could be
easily shared. by lq6q, the first four computers had
been linked together in a network. Information flowed
between them. over telephone lines
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in the lq8Os, people began to bye computers to
use at home more computer networks were created
and the early Internet begun to grow. In order to
use the internet users had to tipe in complex codes.
Finally, in 11, the World Wide Web was created?
That made it easyer to use the internet. By 19q5,
people could connect to the internet on their home
computers. A new era in information had begin.
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Indiana Sundays
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As a child, I adored summer sunday afternoons.
Punctuation:
At precisely twelve oclock the huge church bells
Apostrophe 3
Comma 7
rang out from the towe, and the gian heavy doors
er 1
swung open. Quick as a flash my cousins andj
burst out into the brigh hot afternoon. Wed pile
into each othe s cars in a wild disorderly fashion.
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Grandma and grandpas farmhouse was our destinatio
and eating lunch was our first mission. Yum!
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Our noontime meal was large loud and long. Once
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we were completely stuffed we slammed our way out
Capitalization
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Punctuation:
grandmas back door. That is when the fun began. we
Apostrophe 2
chased barn cats stomped in cow pies and threw
Comma 7
Period 1
each other into haystacks. We explored every nook
and cranny of randpas wecithere rickety bar we
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tossed one another into wheelbarrows and raced across
the earthen hay-covered barn floor.
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Indiana Sundays
As a child, I adored summer sunday afternoons.
At precisely twelve oclock the huge church bells
rang out from the tower and the giant heavy doors
swung open. Quick as a flash my cousins and i
burst out into the bright hot afternoon. Wed pile
into each others cars in a wild disorderly fashion.
Grandma and grandpas farmhouse was our destination
and eating lunch was our first mission. Yum
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Our noontime meal was large loud and long. Once
we were completely stuffed we slammed our way out
grandmas back door. That is when the fun began. we
chased barn cats stomped in cow pies and threw
each other into haystacks. We explored every nook
and cranny of grandpas weathered rickety barn we
tossed one another into wheelbarrows and raced across
the earthen hay-covered barn floor.
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Another favorite place to play was the
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no matter how many times wed been down there it
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always seemed like there was more to discover. Wow,f
Apostrophe 1
There were flowers from grandm garden9drying in
Comma 2
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the cramped quarters behind the enormous,, massive
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furnacbshelves
were lined with the vegetables that
randma began canning as soon as her garden yielded
its usual bumper crop in late sprin.
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As soon as night
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wed leave the dardrafty rror Summary
basement for the yard. Catching fireflies was a
Capitalization
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Punctuation:
favorite outdoor activit 0chasing each other through
Comma 3
the yard playing nighttime tag was also popular. We
Period 1
Spelling 1
knew it was time to go when randpa began his
nightly ritual of turning out the various lanterns
around the farm. Under the pitch-black sky wed
ASunday
sadly say good-bye to one more indiana undao.
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Another favorite place to play was the basement
no matter how many times wed been down there it
always seemed like there was more to discover. Wow
There were flowers from grandmas garden. drying in
the cramped quarters behind the enormous massive
furnace Shelves were lined with the vegetables that
grandma began canning as soon as her garden yielded
its usual bumper crop in late spring
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As soon as night fell wed leave the dark drafty
basement for the yard. Catching fireflies was a
favorite outdoor activity chasing each other through
the yard playing nighttime tag was also popular. We
knew it was time to go when grandpa began his
nightly ritual of turning out the various lanterns
around the farm. Under the pitch-black sky wed
sadly say good-bye to one more Indiana sundae.
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The View from bown Here
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I was only three years old but
I
still remember
Language Usage 3
felt
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how it all looked to me. My parents had I.AI U5
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to the museum with them. They had been planning
Spelling 1
this outing for day and it was a special occasion. I
remember that om wore a blue dress and my -ather
suit
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had on a -t1. My sister and -t wore matching
dresses and we had on our patent leather shoes
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There must have been a special exhibit at the
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museu !t
was very cr and my sister and ie
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from one room to another. Was it exhibit of
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paintings or of sculpture?! cannot remember hat I
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do remember is growing restless as I after my
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The View from bown Here
I was only three years old but I still remember
how I feeled on that day so long ago i can still see
how it all looked to me. My parents had take us
to the museum with them. They had been planning
this outing for days and it was a special occasion. I
remember that mom wore a blue dress and my Father
had on a sute. My sister and me wore matching
dresses and we had on our patent leather shoes
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There must have been a special exhibit at the
museum it was very crouded and my sister and me
bumped into strangers as we trailed after our parents.
from one room to another. Was it a exhibit of
paintings or of sculpture I cannot remember what I
do remember is growing restless as I taggd after my
parents in that crowded stuffy place. Ugh
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exclamation
points
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was alone,
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father or sister anywhere. Panic came over me i5 I
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wondere
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wndcr which way they had onI felt relieved when
Comma 3
I saw my fathers familiar shoes with the pattern of
Period 2
swirling dots 9across the toe. I rushed over to stand
Spelling 2
shoes
next to those . I took hold of the large warm
hand that hung down near my shoulder.
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surprise
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embarrassment as I looked
up/
t the man standing
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in those familiar shoes. It was not my
rather
at all.
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burst
Oh, Who was this total strange ?i bttr.i#&d- into
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A
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tears and started to run. Suddenly,
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was swept up
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into my mothers arms in a comforting hug. When
heard came
Spelling 2
she 4erd- the commotioshe eee- to my rescue.
the
concerned stranger looked at me. Then he smiled.
o did
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Name
Im riot sure when I realized that I was alone.
When I looked around I could not see my Mother
father or sister any where. Panic came over me as I
wonder which way they had gone I felt relieved when
I saw my fathers familiar shoes with the pattern of
swirling dots. across the toe. I rushed over to stand
next to those shoose. I took hold of the large warm
hand that hung down near my shoulder.
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My relief q,uickly turned to serprise and then
embarrassment as I looked up. At the man standing
in those familiar shoes. It was not my Father at all.
Oh, no Who was this total stranger. I bursted into
tears arid started to run. Suddenly, i was swept up
into my mothers arms in a comforting hug. When
she herd the commotion she come to my rescue. the
concerned stranger looked at me. Then he smiled.
so did i
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EDITING KEY: Book Review
Daily Paragraph Editing
Preview the 4 daily lessons to ensure you review or introduce skills that may be unfamiliar to students.
An American Classic
rror Summary
Capitalization 18
Little house on the prairie is the second book in
Punctuation:
the autobiographical series by beloved american author
Apostrophe 1
Comma 5
laura ingalls wilder. The first booLittle house in
er 1
the big woods is the story of laura childhood in the
Spelling 2
wisconsin woods. Laura was seven years old when her
family
traveled
moved from wisconsin to kansas. she
in a covered wagon with ma pa older sister mary and
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baby arrie.
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The early part of the book describes everyday
Error Summary
life during the fami1c trip. We see how a took a
Capitalization 2
break
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from driving the wagon to stop and hunt for
Apostrophe 1
food. Ma cooked the meals and she even did the
Comma 2
A Period 1
familys laundr 6Laura and mary enjoyed all the new
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sights and sounds of the prairie and Ma had fun
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watching them chase prairie hens and their chicks.
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An American Classic
Little house on the prairie is the second book in
the autobiographical series by beloved american author
laura ingalls wilder. The first book Little house in
the big woods is the story of Iauras childhood in the
wisconsin woods. Laura was seven years old when her
familee moved from wisconsin to kansas. she traviled
in a covered wagon with ma pa older sister mary and
baby Carrie.
MONDAY
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The early part of the book describes everyday
life during the families trip. We see how pa took a
brake from driving the wagon to stop and hunt for
food. Ma cooked the meals and she even did the
familys laundry Laura and mary enjoyed all the new
sights and sounds of the prairie and Ma had fun
watching them chase prairie hens and their chicks.
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The family finally reached a place on the prairie
E ro S m IV
Capitalization 1
where they decided to settle
the
next part of the
Punctuation:
book describes all the stages of building a log house Apostrophe 1
building
C 2
and its furnishings and it also describes bding a
omma
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stable. Laura described the familys daily lif,\and
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she explained the chores done by each member of
the family. Readers will see the difference 9between
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modern-day and pioneer life.
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By the end of Little house on the Drairie the
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american government had decided that settlers could
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not remain in the area of kansas known as Indian
Comma 2
territory. Once again, the ingalls family packed up
Period 2
Other 2
their covered wagon 9nd moved on. Readers can join
the family as they move to a new home and new
adventures in minnesota just read 0 e B ks o
0
Plum Creek the next book in the series.
;\
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The family finally reached a place on the prairie
where they decided to settle the next part of the
book describes all the stages of building a log house
and its furnishings and it also describes bilding a
stable. Laura described the familys daily life and
she explained the chores done by each member of
the family? Readers will see the difference. between
modern-day and pioneer life.
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commas
By the end of Little house on the prairie the
american government had decided that settlers could
not remain in the area of kansas known as Indian
territory. Once again, the ingalls family packed up
their covered wagon. And moved on. Readers can join
the family as they move to a new home and new
adventures in minnesota just read On the Banks of
Plum Creek the next book in the series.
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special words
in quotes
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EDITING KEY: Fantasy Daily Paragraph Editing
Preview the 4 daily lessons to ensure you review or introduce skills that may be unfamiliar to students.
Bored in Space
Error Sum a
passed Capitalization 5
Four years had pct since we blasted off Worim.
Punctuation:
All the planets in our star system were so crowded
Apostrophe 3
Comma 2
that we couldnt find a place to land we wanted to
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stay on
WorimAbut
it was too dangerous.
uotafion Mark 2
Spelling 1
the worms have eaten everything that was
green and most things that are, mom said. we
could be next
,
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ie got to find a new planet where we can
settlesaid dad.
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onboard
I had read all the books that we had
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our craft and our communication system did offer
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much entertainment. There was so much litter
Apostrophe 1
cluttering deep space that we could barely pick up
Comma 3
Period 2
the important space traffic messages.
!
was getting
uotation ark 2
pretty tired of the same old
duS
boring routine
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every day!
here must be something you can do in the
science lab RobinYmom finally suggested one day
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Bored in Space
Four years had past since we blasted off Worim.
All the planets in our star system were so crowded
that we couldnt find a place to land we wanted to
stay on Worim but it was too dangerous.
the worms have eaten everything that was
green and most things that arent, mom said. we
could be next
Weve got to find a new planet where we can
settle. said dad.
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dialog
I had read all the books that we had onbored
our craft and our communication system didnt offer
much entertainment. There was so much litter
cluttering deep space that we could barely pick up
the important space traffic messages? i was getting
pretty tired of the same old dull boring routine
every day
There must be something you can do in the
science lab Robin, mom finally suggested one day
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Well mom what did you have in mm I asked
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as we entered the lab togethe
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remember good old Grow-Bot? Mom asked.
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She pointed toward a metal for it was partly
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piece
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covered by a of cloth. Other 2
momAdo
you think i could forget my computer
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tuto. I replied as 1 uncovered the machine that
j
knew
practically by hear 0
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You know Robin youve learned so much about
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computers IateiyYMom remarke.emember how you
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helped ad reprogram the autopilot function last
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month

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really
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Mo do you rly think I could reprogram
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Grow-Bot. I aske.
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might as well tr obi pom said cheerfully.
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Well mom what did you have in mind I asked
as we entered the lab together
Robin remember good old Grow-Bot? Mom asked.
She pointed toward a metal form it was partly
covered by a peace of cloth.
mom do you think I could forget my computer
tutor I replied as I uncovered the machine that I
practically new by heart
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spelling
You know Robin youve learned so much about
computers lately, Mom remarked remember how you
helped dad reprogram the autopilot function last
month
Mom do you reely think I could reprogram
Grow-Bot? I asked
You might as well try robin mom said cheerfully.
You know mom I said, I think this could turn
out to be fun
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EDITING KEY: Editorial
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Schools Should Lead by Example
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believe
Capitalization 3
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- -; - schools should lead the way in caring
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for our environmen or example, many children eat a
Punctuation:
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school lunchvery da and school kitchens all over
Period
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our nation make these lunches. Unfortunately, most
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school lunches are packaged in materials made from
nonrenewable resource Plastic packages aluminum foil
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and plastic silverware all use nonrenewable resources.
creates
This also -ee&e- waste in our landfill
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Schools should use - made from recycled
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and renewable material here are many new types
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of food packages made of recyclable material 0For
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instance, if schools used cardboard packaging for
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lunches they could recycle thousands of packages
every da Also, think of all the paper that schools
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every school across the nation rcyc1e- pape
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Schools Should Lead by Example
I beleave schools should lead the way in caring
for our environment for example, many children eat a
school lunch. Every day and school kitchens all over
our nation make these lunches. Unfortunately, most
school lunches are packaged in materials made from
nonrenewable resources Plastic packages aluminum foil
and plastic silverware all use nonrenewable resources.
This also create waste in our landfills
MONDAY
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commas
Schools should use product made from recycled
and renewable materials there are many new types
of food packages made of recyclable materials For
instance, if schools used cardboard packaging for
lunches they could recycle thousands of packages
every day Also, think of all the paper that schools
use if every school across the nation recycle paper
countless trees could be saved
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schools should make sure that every classroom
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has several recycle bins so paper plastic aluminum and
Capitalization 2
tu.e
Language Usage 3
glass can all be recycled, many - - already recycle
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at home. bo schools think that should set a
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good example and practice recycling, toe.? Another
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on monday, students could plant
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takes 17 trees to make one ton of paper planting
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would help replace this renewable resource. On
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garbage da the goal would be to see if students
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schools should make sure that every classroom
has several recycle bins so paper plastic aluminum and
glass can all be recycled, many student already recycle
at home. bont schools think that he should set a
good example and practice recycling, too. Another
way that schools can set a good example is to have
a environmental awareness program. They can plan a
whole week of activities for students
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on monday, students could plant trees Since it
takes 17 trees to make one ton of paper planting
would help replace this renewable resource. On
tuesday, schools could challenge students to a zero
garbage day the goal would be to see if students
can use recyclable and reusable materials to avoid
creating waiste products. schools should leed by
example and motivate students to care for our planet
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Blackbeard the Pirate
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nobody knows just when edward teach became
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known=
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-know- as Blackbeard the Pirate we do know
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that edward teach joined Captain benjamin Hornigolds
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crew in 1716. It is unclear - - - teach knew that
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capt hornigold planned to raid ships in the caribbean
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Sea. However, teach helped hornigold capture a french
ship in the Caribbean in 1717

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Cap horriigold gave the captured french ship to
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edward Teach. The shi name was to Queen
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annes Revenge and she soon was feared as a dreaded
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pirate ship. Edward leach
also changed his namThe
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pirate aptain of ueen Annes Reven e was now called
Period 3
blackbeard. When he took his fierce colorful nam
Other 1
Blackbeard also changed the way he
lookecb
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Blackbeard the Pirate
nobody knows just when edward teach became
as Blackbeard the Pirate we do know though
edward teach joined Captain benjamin Hornigolds
in 1716. It is unclear weather teach knew that
hornigold planned to raid ships in the caribbean
However, teach helped hornigold capture a french
in the Caribbean in 1717
Capt hornigold gave the captured french ship to
edward Teach. The ships name was change to Queen
annes Reven e and she soon was feared as a dreaded
pirate ship. Edward teach also changed his name The
pirate Captain of Queen Annes Revenge was now called
blackbeard. When he took his fierce colorful name
Blackbeard also changed the way he looked
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names of ships
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that
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names of places
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Blackbeard let his beard grow out to a frizz
E or S m cry
bushy tangle he wove braids into his beard and he
Capitalization 2
tied
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even #ye4- them with ribbons. He stuck fuses from
Comma 5
cannons under his pirate hat. These fuses were made
Penod 3
water
Spelling 3
of string soaked in mixed with gunpowde 5
When blackbeard lit the fuses they sizzled and
smoked
A
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their ghostly light and
fouL
gassy smell
scared his victims
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In the summer of 1718 blackbeard sank ueen
rro S m a
Ann 9reveng, off the coast of North caroliri.
Capitalization 8
=
raids
Punctuation:
However, he still had other ships to use in
Apostrophe 1
along the coast. eople decided that this terror must
Comma 3
Other 1
stoso Lieutenant
.obert
Maynard organized a secret
Spelling 2
mission to capture lackbeard. The
fierceA bearded
death
4
pirate battled to the -de#h- and was beheaded by the
victorious Lt. aynard.
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Name
Blackbeard let his beard grow out to a frizzy
bushy tangle he wove braids into his beard and he
even tyed them with ribbons. He stuck fuses from
cannons under his pirate hat. These fuses were made
of string soaked in watter mixed with gunpowder
When blackbeard lit the fuses they sizzled and
smoaked and their ghostly light and foul gassy smell
scared his victims
WEDNESDAY
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In the summer of 1718 bkickbeard sank queen
Annes revenge off the coast of North carolina.
However, he still had other ships to use in rades
along the coast. people decided that this terror must
stop so Lieutenant robert Maynard organized a secret
mission to capture blackbeard. The fierce bearded
pirate battled to the deth and was beheaded by the
victorious Lt. maynard.
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names of ships
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EDITING KEY: Biography
Daily Paragraph Filling
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A Gifted Girl
nor Summary
an
Capitalization 16
Ballerina aria aIlchief was born on jndian
Language Usage 2
reservation in oklahoma in 1q25. Her athe>i family
Punctuation:
Apostrophe 2
was from the Osage trib- 0her
$others ancestors
Comma 3
were from cotland and Ireland.
The sage once
Period 2
buffalo and gathered food in the area that is now
arkansas, kansas missouri and oklahoma. After taking
= A = governmenf
most of their land the U.S. , ,. moved the
2sage to a reservation in
2klahomb
MONDAY
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After oil was found on the sage
reservation in
or Sum ary
wealthy
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the late 1800s the tribe became very . Marias
P
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A
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father Alex
talichief
always had a very comfortable Punctuation:
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life because of this. He #bd- he did not need to
p0 op e
a
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go to college or have e- career. marias mother Ruth
Period 1
tallchiewanted her children to learn as much as
spelling 1
possible. So maria and arjorie her younger siste
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A Gifted Girl
Ballerina maria talichief was born on a Indian
reservation in oklahoma in 1q25. Her Fathers family
was from the Osage tribe her Mothers ancestors
were from scotland and ireland. The osage once hunt
buffalo and gathered food in the area that is now
arkansas, kansas missouri and oklahoma. After taking
most of their land the U.S. goverment moved the
osage to a reservation in oklahoma
MONDAY WEEK 24
commas
names of people
names of places
After oil was found on the osage reservation in
the late 1800s the tribe became very welthy. Marias
father Alex tallchief always had a very comfortable
life because of this. He feeled he did not need to
go to college or have an career. marias mother Ruth
tallchief wanted her children to learn as much as
possible. So maria and marjorie her younger sister
began music and dance lessons at around age three
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even when they q,uite young %oth maria and
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her sister showed great promise in music and dance.
Capitalization
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decided
Language Usage 1
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believed =
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Comma 2
nelealifornia. She -b4efved- that her daughters
Period 1
would have a better chance to develop their talents
SIling 2
n hollywood. The family made the move when maria
was entering second grade
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0
he started studying with a famous russian
ballerina
Capitalization
14
= studied
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Bronislava Nijinska. She kudyed- with madame nijinska
Comma 2
for five years until finishing high school. She was
Period 1
perform
Spelling 2
then invited to with a professional ballet
company. This was the start of her brilliansuccessfuI
career as a prima ballerina, or ballet star.
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even when they was q,uite young Both maria and
her sister showed great promise in music and dance.
Their mother desided the family should move to los
angeles california. She beleived that her daughters
would have a better chance to develop their talents
In hollywood. The family made the move when maria
was entering second grade
WEDNESDAY
WEEK 24
4rcH
commas
Maria began to focus on dance more than music
she started studying with a famous russian ballerina
Bronislava Nijinska. She studyed with madame nijinska
for five years until finishing high school. She was
then invited to preform with a professional ballet
company. This was the start of her brilliant successful
career as a prima ballerina, or ballet star.
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[DITING KEY: Book Review Daily Paragraph Editing
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C. J. Clark Has Another Hit
Error Summary
Capitalization 8
it looks like author C00 lark has another big
Language Usage 1
hit! Her latest book
:
Saah Roth and the Wisdom
Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1
Crystal. This is the third book in the series published
Comma 1
by Creative book ress. Sarah Roth and the Wisdom
Period 2
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Other 2
Cr stal has the same ten-year-old heroine from
two
Spelling 1
clarks first books. If you enjoyed Clarks other
adventure taleyoull love Sarah Roth and the
wisdom crystal.
MONDAY WEEK 25
Like the other books in the seriesarah roth
Error Su mary
and the wisdom crystal is a magical adventure. Once
Capitalization 8
Emixes
Language Usage 1
again, the author modern science with fantasy 0
Punctuation:
she also introduces some unusual exciting characters.
Apostrophe 1
= Comma 3
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Period 3
she studies rocks in the New exico desert. The tale
actually takes place during Sarah summer vacation in
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C. J. Clark Has Another Hit
it looks like author C
j
clark has another big
hit! Her latest book are Sarah Roth and the Wisdom
Crystal. This is the third book in the series published
by Creative book press. Sarah Roth and the Wisdom
Crystal has the same ten-year-old heroine from
clarks first to books. If you enjoyed Clarks other
adventure tales youll love Sarah Roth and the
wisdom crystal.
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book titles
abbreviations
Like the other books in the series sarah roth
and the wisdom crystal is a magical adventure. Once
again, the author mix modern science with fantasy
she also introduces some unusual exciting characters.
Sarahs Aunt, Professor Eudora Vista is a scientist
she studies rocks in the New mexico desert. The tale
actually takes place during Sarahs summer vacation in
New Mexico
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Another interesting colorful character is
eleven-year-old Red Bird Roybal. The wisdom crystal
in the books title belongs to him his grandfather a
wise Pueblo elder gave it to him. sarah and her Aunt
meet red bird on one of their rock-gathering trips.
When prof Vista tries to learn more about Red Birds
rare crystal they travel to another dimension where
an amazing adventure begins
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And The Wisdom Crystal into a movie. Chances are it
would be just as week as the movie version of Sarah
Roth and the Star Seeker. That book did not work
well in the film version? Readers will be better off
just imagining the scenes in book three all of
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eager imaginations.
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EDITING KEY: News Article
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Atlantic Oil Spill Threatens
E orSumm ry
Capitalization 7
Spanish Coast
Language Usage 1
La Corufia, spain november 19 2002
Punctuation:
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The Prestige, a damaged oil tanker that was
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leaking .
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spairiA
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and sank this morning. The tanker ran into trouble
week
last wxk9 uring stormy seas off northwestern spain
the Prestiqe was carrying 77,000 tons of heavy fuel
oil about 5,000 tons have already leaked out in
an
area
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known as the Coast of beath.
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Spanish Coast
names of ships
La Corua, spain
november 19 2002
The Presti e, a damaged oil tanker that was
leeking fuel oil off the coast of spain split in two
and sank this morning. The tanker ran into trouble
last weak. buring stormy seas off northwestern spain
the Prestige was carrying 77,000 tons of heavy fuel
oil about 5,000 tons have already leaked out in a area
known as the Coast of beath.
MONDAY
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The spanish government took immediate action
to protect the coastal area Floating barriers were
set up in a effort to save the rich fishing grounds.
And delicate marine ecosystems that are at risk.
The world community has been q,uick to respond
to Spains call for help clean-up experts from the
Netherlands is working on the disaster? special
tugboats were needed to toe the ship away from
the shoreline
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the restie had been towed about 70 miles
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out to - before it
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sank today in atlantic waters that are over 2 miles
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deep. The ship still has some 72,000 tons of fuel
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oiln its tanks. If the fuel leaks it could create
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the largest oil spill ever. The World Wildlife Fund
2
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environmental that oil from the
Presti e would create a spill twice as large as
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Expert 2hope that the cold waters of the
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thicken
atlantic will cause the heavy fuel oil to thkkr oil
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has never before been removed from tanks that
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su k Comma 1
have so deep in the sea. Special gear and
created
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salvage methods may have to be crct to remove
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the fuel from the tanks as experts search for
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solutionthey fear that the many rare coral and fish
mi hi
species in this habitat never recover from the
effects of a spill
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the prestige had been towed about 70 miles
out to see before it shuddered split in two and
sank today in atlantic waters that are over 2 miles
deep. The ship still has some 72,000 tons of fuel
oil. In its tanks. If the fuel leaks it could create
the largest oil spill ever. The World Wildlife Fund
a environmental group warned that oil from the
Prestige would create a spill twice as large as
Alaskas 1989 disaster
Experts hope that the cold waters of the
atlantic will cause the heavy fuel oil to thikkeri oil
has never before been removed from tanks that
have sink so deep in the sea. Special gear and
salvage methods may have to be create to remove
the fuel from the tanks? as experts search for
solutions they fear that the many rare coral and fish
species in this habitat mite never recover from the
effects of a spill
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Earth on the Move
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humans here
for as long as -httman- have lived -koer. sometimes,
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accepted beliefs before they can - = new idea
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example, many people in the late 1400s believed
that Earth was flat Some people were not convinced
that Earth was round 9until ships made it safely all
the way around the world.
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studied
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world saw something interesting, they
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ust like puzzle pei-cs. In the early 18OOan
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explorer found rocks in south Qmerica that looked
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like rocks in africa. scientists have find several other
similarities between the two
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Earth on the Move
People have been making discoverys about Earth
for as long as human have lived hear. sometimes,
People have to let go of their old-fashioned widely
accepted beliefs before they can except new ideas
for example, many people in the late V400s believed
that Earth was flat Some people were not convinced
that Earth was round. until ships made it safely all
the way around the world.
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world saw something interesting, they notice that the
shapes of some of the continents seemed to match.
It looked like they were shaped to fit together,
Just like puzzle peices. In the early 1800s an
explorer found rocks in south america that looked
like rocks in africa. scientists have find several other
similarities between the two continents
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noticed something interesting. egener
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mountain ranges of south merica and Africi 0he fit
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the two continents together as if they were puzzle
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pieces. He saw that the mountain ranges lined up
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elieved
wegener that these continents had once
been one continuous solid mass of land that had
broken
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When wegener died in 1q30 scientists did not
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differently shaped masse in the 160s, scientists
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had new information that proved wegeners ideas
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In the early 1900s a man named alfred wegener
noticed something interesting. wegener studyed the
mountain ranges of south america and Africa he fit
the two continents together as if they were puzzle
pieces. He saw that the mountain ranges lined up
wegener believe that these continents had once
been one continuous solid mass of land that had
broke apart
WEDNESDAY
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When wegener died in 1930 scientists did not
yet accept his ideas. They did not believe that
Earths continents had ever been joined in unfamiliar
differently shaped masses in the 1960s, scientists
had new information that proved wegeners ideas
were correct. They learned that Earth is made up
of huge masses of rock called plates. when the plates
move the continents on top of the plates move, too
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A Journey Begins
I didnt want to let gbut mr.
moved me away from Mother. There
he said. Ill be leaving you behind if
hurry. He picked me up and set me
next to aul my brother.
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a little bit of !reland
to have with
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Bridget, she said her tears.
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journey
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spare. The potatae- crop had rottedAso
all the wheat
we raised went to pay the tax collector
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moved me away from Mother. There now bridget,
he said. Ill be leaving you behind if you dont
hurry. He picked me up and set me in the wagon
next to paul my brother.
Mother took off her shawl and wrapped me in it.
a little bit of ireland to have with you on the ship

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Bridget, she said thru her tears.
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Take good care of them mary finney, mother
called out.
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Like my own, molly don t you worry, mary
replied. Ill take them to your brother as soon as
we reach boston
Our bags of rough scratchy burlap were filled
with food for the long journie. it was all mother could
spare. The potatoe crop had rotted so all the wheat
we raised went to pay the tax collector
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Uncle james, others brother sailed to america
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two years ago. He sent mother some money r us
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to join hi but there wasnt enough for all of us Apostrophe 2
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to go to Qmerlca. When mary rnothers frien was
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leaving to join her husband in boston, mother
decided it would be better for us there. She
promised she would come late meanwhile, uncle
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James would care for us.
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It was a tirin bumpy journey to the ship that
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would take us to america. As the wagon bounced
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along the
roacSl
turned to look at my brother.
Comma
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Paul, who was only eight years old, had started to
Quotation Mark 1
cry. I reached out my hand and clasped hi and he
moved even closer to me. Were together, I said
softly in his ear.Well help each other. Well be just
fine. beep in my heart

knew then that we would be.
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Uncle James, mothers brother sailed to america
two years ago. He sent mother some money for us
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to join him but there wasn t enough for all of us
names of people
to go to america. When mary mothers friend was
leaving to Join her husband in boston, mother
decided it would be better for us there. She
promised she would come later meanwhile, uncle
James would care for us.
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It was a tiring bumpy journey to the ship that
would take us to america. As the wagon bounced
commas
along the road I turned to look at my brother.
Paul, who was only eight years old, had started to
cry. I reached out my hand and clasped his and he
moved even closer to me. Were together, I said
softly in his ear. Well help each other. Well be Just
fine. beep in my heart I knew then that we would be.
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This Inventor Is All
Thumbs!
E or Sum ry
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Last year, ten-year-old georgia
rawford
set
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inventor
a record she became the youngest ctcr to sell
Comma 1
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a product on a network television show. After a
Other 1
five-minute ad about her product ran on the
Spelling 1
ShoD-at-Home show sales of her product brought in
$2O,OOin this interview, business youth editor
!van
green interviews ms. crawford (known to family and
friends as Gigi) about her success in business.
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Ivan Green (IG): Ms
rawford
could you tell Business E or Su mary
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Georgia Crawford (GC): Yes mr Green but please
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4
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call me Gigi. minnesota gets very cold during the
Other 2
winte 5no matter what Id dy\i couldnt keep my
hands warm and dry. Snow was always getting inside
my gloves or mittens and Id end up with wet
4
freezing hands.
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This Inventor Is All Thumbs!
Last year, ten-year-old georgia crawford set
a record she became the youngest inventer to sell
a product on a network television show. After a
five-minute ad about her product ran on the
Shop-at-Home show sales of her product brought in
$20,000 in this interview, business youth editor Ivan
green interviews ms. crawford (known to family and
friends as Gigi) about her success in business.
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magazines
titles of
TV shows
Ivan Green (IG): Ms crawford could you tell Business
Youth readers about the product that you invented
Georgia Crawford (GC): Yes mr Green but please
call me Gigi. minnesota gets very cold during the
winter no matter what Id do i couldnt keep my
hands warm and dry. Snow was always getting inside
my gloves or mittens and Id end up with wet
freezing hands.
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IG: So what did you do Gi ?
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GC: Well, I started pulling my long sleeves down9 Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1
ver my hands before I d put on my gloves or
Comma 2
mittens. That way, Id have a warm layer inside Period 2
seal
my gloves to out the wet and col. my mother
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was doing the wash one day and she noticed that
hole
4
I had made a whole near the cuffs of lots of my
sweaters and shirts.
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IG: Was it because of the way you were pulling on
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Apostrophe 1
GC: Yes, Mr. Gree i d been pulling my sleeves over
0
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my hands and holding them with my
thumbboon
Period 5
I wore holes through the sleeves! Thats when i
Spelling 1
realized that
j.
needed a long-sleeved sweater or
shirtWith special holes for the thumbs. Now, I
Theyre
sell shirts and sweaters with thumbhole
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Thumbkin No more wej cold hands!
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IG: So what did you do Gigi.
&C: Well, i started pulling my long sleeves down.
Over my hands before Id put on my gloves or
mittens. That way, Id have a warm layer inside
my gloves to seel out the wet and cold my mother
was doing the wash one day and she noticed that
I had made a whole near the cuffs of lots of my
sweaters and shirts.
IG: Was it because of the way you were pulling on
them gigi.
GC: Yes, Mr. Green id been pulling my sleeves over
my hands and holding them with my thumbs soon,
I wore holes through the sleeves! Thats when I
realized that i needed a long-sleeved sweater or
shirt. With special holes for the thumbs. Now, I
sell shirts and sweaters with thumbholes their called
Thumbkins No more wet cold hands!
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Chen Wans Vacation biary
E or S m ary
an
Capitalization 7
Monday, april 12: Spring break is going to be
Language Usage 2
excitindifferent experience this year. ba
Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1
business partner is coming to towand he is going
Comma
LI
to bring danny his son. They live in montana. banny
Period 3
has
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uotation arl 1
never been to california. bad told me,hen
Wan Im counting on you to show danny the city
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I have been busy making plans for our days toethe
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wednesday
opril91L4:
I didr get a chance to write
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danny. today will be busy, . hats why m writing
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this morning before our day begins. Yesterday, we
Apostrophe
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buildings
Comma 3
spent most of our time in Chinatow The
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amaze.
Quotation Mark 1
and the chinese writing everywhere -emaze .anny.

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Chen Wans Vacation biary
Monday, april 12: Spring break is going to be a
exciting different experience this year. bads
business partner is coming to town and he is going
to bring danny his son. They live in montana. bonny
have never been to california. bad told me, Chen
Wan Im counting on you to show danny the city
while mr Connors and I have our business meetings
i have been busy making plans for our days together
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wednesday april, 14: I didnt get a chance to write
an entry yesterday. Because i was busy all day with
danny. today will be busy, to. thats why Im writing
this morning before our day begins. Yesterday, we
spent most of our time in Chinatown The bildings
and the chinese writing everywhere amaze danny.
He said, Wow I cant believe you can read these
signs Chen Wan
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thursdaApril 15: Yesterday, danny and
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Golden ate ark. We had a time at the
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Language Usage 2
PlaygrourldAand
we even rode the merry-go-round a
Punctuation:
an
Apostrophe 1
few times. In the late afternoon we went to see
exhibit at the asian art museum dann favorit
Comma 7
es
Period 1
= = = CE
were the beautiful delicate hand-carved ivory figures.
Quotation Mark 1
A
4
other 1
Read the chinese characters Chen
Spelling 1
He kept sayin
4
WanYit sure me feel important to know c.hinese!
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WEDNESDAY
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Saturday, april 17: bad and I took danny and his E or Summa
father to the airport this morning, bad said he
Capitalization 8
Language Usage 2
and Mr. connors were able to do everything they
Punctuation:
hoped
_______
Apostrophe 1
had hoping to this week. At the airport,
MbConnors
Comma 3
are
said Chen Wan banny says you the best san
Period 2
4 4
rancisco tour guide a visitor could hope to haveY
Quotation Mark 1
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I think I turned red when I heard that but i felt

v
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thursday April 15: Yesterday, danny and i went to
Golden gate park. We had a grate time at the
4TCH 0
dialo
playground and we even rode the merry-go-round a
exckimation
few times. In the late afternoon we went to see a points
exhibit at the asian art museum dannys favorites
were the beautiful delicate hand-carved ivory figures.
He kept saying Read the chinese characters Chen
Wan. it sure make me feel important to know chinese
WEDNESDAY
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Saturday, april 17: Dad and I took danny and his
father to the airport this morning. Dad said he
dialo
and Mr. connors were able to do everything they
commas
had hoping to this week. At the airport, Mr Connors
said Chen Wan Danny says you is the best san
francisco tour guide a visitor could hope to have.
I think I turned red when I heard that but i felt
happy that I had helped dad. Im also happy to
have a new freirid
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An Oregon Trail biary
Error Summary
planning
Capitalization 7
Monday, april 13\ 1852: fter months of and
Language Usage 2
waitin the day is almost here! the wagons are
Punctuation:
loaded
Comma 5
almost 4ede%and our journey to oregon will finally
Period 2
begin

bg this week. Today, I helped mother pack all


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the things we will need9for cooking on the trail.
wooden
Everything fIts in a hea sturdy box that
Father buil Ihe front of the box folds down
on hinges and 4e turns into a shelf where
mother can work.
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I are
friday April11852: Amy and -e going to sleep
Error ummary
in the wagon tonigh we will leave before daylight.
Capitalizalion 6
finished
Language Usage 3
mother and father have almost packing
Punctuation:
the wagon. jam going to bring this journal with
Comma 6
=
Penod 3
meA
but
lather
says I may choose only one toy to
SIIing 2
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decide
bring. It is not really difficult to -de+d because
0
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my rag
dolk
is my most special toy.

her
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An Oregon Trail biary
Monday, april 11 1852: after months of planing and
waiting the day is almost here! the wagons are
almost loded and our journey to oregon will finally
began this week. Today, I helped mother pack all
the things we will need. for cooking on the trail.
Everything fits in a heavy sturdy woodiri box that
Father built the front of the box folds down
on hinges and he turns into a shelf where
mother can work.
MONDAY
friday April, 15 1852: Amy and me is going to sleep
in the wagon tonight we will leave before daylight.
mother and father have almost finnished packing
the wagon. I am going to bring this journal with
me but father says I may choose only one toy to
bring? It is not really difficult to deside because
Amanda my rag doll is my most special toy.
Grandmother made him for me
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mondci may 2 1852: We are camped on the banks of
Error Su ma
A biggest have
Capitalization 8
the missouri river. It is the biget river I ever
= tomorrow
Language Usage 2
seen! we will cross it . First, all the wagons
Punctuation:
= their
that arrived before us must take -+4r turns. I was
Apostrophe 2
Comma
14
afraid of the crossing when i first saw the river but
Pen 1
now that ye watched other wagons float across on
spelling 3
the ferryboats 9I think we will make it just fine. im
=
glad that we will not cross in -e stormy weathe
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grown
.tuesda
may 1852: I have not tired of
Error Summ ry
looking at this prairie, no matter where I look there
Capitalization 8
Language Usage 1
are flowers blooming among the wil waving grass.
Punctuation:
we
Comma 5
Amy and i picked a bunch for mother when #4.ey-
stopped
= Spelling 2
--topod for our midday meal. I will press some of
the bright-yellow goldenrod here between the pages
of this journal, this will save a little bit of the
bright sunny prairie along with my memories of the
oregon trail.
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monday may 2 1852: We are camped on the banks of
the missouri river. It is the bigest river I has ever
seen! we will cross it tomorow. First, all the wagons
that arrived before us must take there turns. I was
afraid of the crossing when i first saw the river but
now that lye watched other wagons float across on
the ferryboats. I think we will make it just fine. im
glad that we will not cross in no stormy weather
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tuesday may 17 1852: I have not groan tired of
looking at this prairie, no matter where I look there
are flowers blooming among the wild waving grass.
Amy and i picked a bunch for mother when they
stoped for our midday meal. I will press some of
the bright-yellow goldenrod here between the pages
of this journal, this will save a little bit of the
bright sunny prairie along with my memories of the
oregon trail.
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Why Making Maple Syrup Is Hard Work
Erro S mmary
Capitalization 3
Not so very long aglife on earth was easy for
Language Usage 2
people sunlight warmed the land. The
forestsA
meadowsA
Punctuation:
were
Comma 6
and lakes home to countless animals Hunters
,eno
found plenty of game and the rivers offered a bounty
Spelling 1
A
heav
of fish. Berries hung Ton the bushes and the
were
cornfields grew tall. Even the trees full of sticky
sweet syrup. broken twig provided plenty of fresh
syrup right from the branch!
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Nanabozho was the mighty ruler of the seasons
Error Summary
Capitalization 1
and of nature. One day, he went for a walk to enjoy
Punctuation:
the sightsoundand smells of the world. when
he Apostrophe 1
came upon the peopl though he was surprised.
Comma 6
Penod 1
There was nobody to be seen anywherNanabozho
Quotation Mark 1
found no one fishing in the stream no hunters
fl9 3
through
wandering the
woodsA
and nobody weeding or
cornfield
hoeing in the . How oddA
he thought.
I,
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Name
Why Making Maple Syrup Is Hard Work
Not so very long ago life on earth was easy for
people sunlight warmed the land. The forests meadows
and lakes was home to countless animals Hunters
found plenty of game and the rivers offered a bounty
of fish. Berries hung hevy on the bushes and the
cornfields grew tall. Even the trees was full of sticky
sweet syrup. a broken twig provided plenty of fresh
syrup right from the branch!
MONDAY WEEK 32
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comincis
Nanabozho was the mighty ruler of the seasons
and of nature. One day, he went for a walk to enjoy
the sights sounds and smells of the world. when he
came upon the peoples vilage, though he was surprised.
There was nobody to be seen anywhere Nanabozho
found no one fishing in the stream no hunters
wandering threw the woods and nobody weeding or
hoeing in the cornfeild. How odd he thought.
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Perhaps they are gathering berrie thought
or Su ma
Capitalization 2
Nanabozho. As he walked toward the berry bushe
Language Usage 1
however, he saw a strange sight in the maple grov Punctuation:
He saw the people from the villag but they did not
Comma 6
Period LI
see hi hey were lying on their backs with their
uotation Mark 1
mouths open. They catching the droplets of
mois sweet syrup that dripped from the trees.
They did not want to get u. o hun fis or work
in the field
0
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Nanabozho thought to himself This cannot be.
or Summary
Capitalization 5
the people will become fat and lazy. They will not
ii Language Usage 2
want to work anymore. Soon, nanabozho had a pla
Punctuation:
took .
. Comma
LI
he a basket to the river. He filled the basket
Period 2
many time and then e emptied -l over the top
uotcition ark 1
of a maple tree. Soon, the trees had water
flavorless sap. Since then, people must work har.
o gather that thin sap and boil it down into
deliciou sweet syrup.
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Name
Perhaps they are gathering berries thought
Nanabozho. As he walked toward the berry bushes
however, he saw a strange sight in the maple grove
He saw the people from the village but they did not
see him they were lying on their backs with their
mouths open. They was catching the droplets of
moist sweet syrup that dripped from the trees.
They did not want to get up. To hunt fish or work
in the fields
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4TCH
O
commas
Nanabozho thought to himself This cannot be.
the people will become fat and lazy. They will not
want to work anymore. Soon, nanabozho had a plan
he take a basket to the river. He filled the basket
many times and then He emptied her over the top
of a maple tree. Soon, the trees had watery
flavorless sap. Since then, people must work hard.
To gather that thin sap and boil it down into
delicious sweet syrup.
47CH
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Hot Sauce Is Sizzling!
E or Summary
Capitalization
LI
MiamJAflorida
uly 12OO4
Language Usage 1
Have you hear.?Some fresh new voices are
Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1
making lots of noise these days in the world of musi
o
Comma
LI
call
the teenage brother and sister cal1 themselves Hot
Penod 3
Other 1
Sauce and everyone says their music is sizzling Its
0
no surprise that twins Eva and Alex Cruz feel at
home onstage 9 nd in the recording studio. Both of
their parents are performers.
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The new hit by hot sauce is a lively song called
rror Sum ary
Nice and Spicy. The tune shows off the musical
Capitalization 5
Punctuation:
talents of the duo according to the
twinsA
they have
Comma 5
spent many
tediousA
hard hours over the past year on
Penod 2
Other 1
lessonsA
practicand rehearsals. The hard work seems
Spelling 1
paid
to have pycd off. gjex sounds great on the guitar
=
and eva does some fine work on the keyboard This
0
duo has a long career ahead of them
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Hot Sauce Is Sizzling!
h%q7.
fO
Miami florida
July 1 2004
commas
Have you heard. Some fresh new voices are
making lots of noise these days in the world of music
the teenage brother and sister calls themselves Hot
Sauce and everyone says their music is sizzling? Its
no surprise that twins Eva and Alex Cruz feel at
home onstage. And in the recording studio. Both of
their parents are performers.
MONDAY
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The new hit by hot sauce is a lively song called
Nice and Spicy. The tune shows off the musical
commas
talents of the duo according to the twins they have
spent many tedious hard hours over the past year on
lessons practice and rehearsals. The hard work seems
to have payed off. alex sounds great on the guitar
and eva does some fine work on the keyboard This
duo has a long career ahead of them?
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According to the ruz familthe hard work
Error Summary
doesnt end once a recording becomes a hit. In fact,
Capitalization LI
different begins
Language Usage 1
thats when a totally d4.frn-t- kind of work Eva Punctuation:
GA
Alex and their parents will now spend several busy
Apostrophe 1
4
cities
Comma 6
actionpacked weeks touring big across the
Period 2
united states. There will be interviews concerts, talk
Quotation Mark 2

4
ii
Other 1
shows and fans everywhere Hot sauce will sing ice
Spelling 2
4
and SpiqYon the television show Yo T lent
WEDNESDAY
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If hot sauce continues to have big hits like ice E or Summary
/ nd Spicwe may be seeing them on TV again later
Capitalization 6
say
Language Usage 1
this year. Sources in the music world that =ot
Punctuation:
auce may win a music award for ice and
picy$YIf
Comma 1

Quotation Mark
14
so, count on seeing Eva and Alex Cruz on TV in the
other i
Young Music Awards program next season. In the
Spelling 2
keep
meantime, -keep- an eye on this hot duo because they
show no signs of cooling off anyJirne soon 1
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Daily Paragraph Editing
Name
According to the cruz famiy the hard work
doesnt end once a recording becomes a hit. In fact,
thats when a totally diferent kind of work begin Eva
Alex and their parents will now spend several busy
action-packed weeks touring big citys across the
united states. There will be interviews concerts, talk
shows and fans everywhere Hot sauce will sing Nice
and Spicy on the television show Young Talent.
WEDNESDAY
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4rCH
O
titles of songs
titles of
TV shows
If hot sauce continues to have big hits like Nice
And Spicy we may be seeing them on TV again later
this year. Sources in the music world says that hot
sauce may win a music award for Nice and spicy. If
so, count on seeing Eva and Alex Cruz on TV in the
Young Music Awards program next season. In the
meantime, keap an eye on this hot duo because they
show no signs of cooling off any time soon
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titles of songs
titles of
TV shows
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A Weather Journal
rror Summa
Capitalization 8
november 2004 1:30 3i.
Language Usage 1
Yesterday, ms chan handed out weather
Punctuation:
=
stud ing Comma 5
journals to each science team. we will be
Penod 6
the weather for a couple of weeks each team got
Spelling 1
0=
special tools for checking the weather. ms chan gave
EOE
us thermometer a rain gauge and a windsock we
4 4
will measure how hot or cold the air is with the
thermometer check the rainfall with the gauge and
4
4
find out the direction of the wind with the windsock
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1:45
november96
200L4
1L
pm
Error Su mary
= 4 science
00
C it I 6
Our
-
team is made up of nelson at paula
ap a iz on
E
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4
4
Language Usage 2
and me. yesterday, we set up our weather tools
Pundfion:
The thermometer is tacked to the back wall of the
Apostrophe 2
Comma 8
cafeteria and the rain gauge is in the ground at the
Period 6
4
looks
edge of the field It !cc like a tall cup attached to
1
0
Spelling 2
stick. Our windsock is on a pole and its in the
too
4
ground, . Our thermometer says
61bihere
is t any
rain fallinand the wind is blowing from the nortk
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A Weather Journal
november 5
20014
1:30
pm.
Yesterday, ms chan handed out weather
journals to each science team. we will be studyng
the weather for a couple of weeks each team got
special tools for checking the weather. ms chan gave
us an thermometer a rain gauge and a windsock we
will measure how hot or cold the air is with the
thermometer check the rainfall with the gauge arid
find out the direction of the wind with the windsock
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abbreviations
:
november, 6 2004 14:5 pm
Our sience team is made up of nelson pat paula
and me. yesterday, we set up our weather tools
The thermometer is tacked to the back wall of the
cafeteria and the rain gauge is in the ground at the
edge of the field It look like a tall cup attached to
an stick. Our windsock is on a pole and its in the
ground, to. Our thermometer says 61F there isnt any
rain falling and the wind is blowing from the north
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10:15
Nov. 7 2004 . a.m
Error mm ry
0
bark patches began to cover the sky at dusk
Capitalization
LI
Language Usage 1
last
nighbthen
it started to rain and continued all
Punctuation:
Apostrophe 1
night. This morning,
Mbchan
sent us out to check
Comma 3
our weather statioour rain gauge had 0.75 in. of
Period 6
water in it! Juan group only had 0.25
irbof
rain in
Other 1
an
their 9auebut they put it under awning. Our gauge
was completely uncoverethe
air is now 5Fand the
windsock is blowing in a northerly direction.
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2:30
Nov 8, 2004
Error Summary
0
00
It has been windy today but it hasnt been
Capitalization 5
4strai. ht
Punctuation:
raininour windsock is flying strait out. Were not
Apostrophe 3
sure if the wind is coming from the north. 9r the
Comma 1
Period 11
northeast. We are sure about how much rain is in
other 1
our rain gauge we had 1.25 in this afternoon. susans
Spelling 1
0=
cv
group had 1 in 0at 10:15 a.m. Juans group only had
0.75 in at 1:30 pm. Ms. chan wants us to figure out
0
0
why we all got different amounts I have some ideas.
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Nov. 7 2004 10.15 a.m
bark patches began to cover the sky at dusk
last night then it started to rain and continued all
night. This morning, Ms chan sent us out to check
our weather station our rain gauge had 0.75 in. of
water in it! Juans group only had 0.25 in of rain in
their gauge but they put it under a awning. Our gauge
was completely uncovered the air is now 5qF and the
windsock is blowing in a northerly direction.
WEDNESDAY
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O
abbreviations
colons in time
Nov 8, 2004 230 pm
It has been windy today but it hasnt been
raining our windsock is flying strait out. Were not
sure if the wind is coming from the north. Or the
northeast. We are sure about how much rain is in
our rain gauge we had 1.25 in this afternoon. susans
group had 1 in at 10:15 a.m. Juans group only had
0.75 in at 1:30
pm. Ms. chan wants us to figure out
why we all got different amounts I have some ideas.
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How to Make Napkin Rings
o Summ ry

than Capitalization 2
Nothing makes - holiday table more festive
Language Usage 1
special napkin rings they are simple to make and they
Punctuation:
Comma 8
odd so much to a holiday meal ou will need to have
Period 3
0=
cardboard tubes from paper
towel 5\PaPer
(wrapping
Spelling 2
papeself-stick papeor paper you have decorated),
giuescissora pen or penca ruler and any extra
4Stickers
decorations you want to include. are great
for this project
0
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First, use the ruler to make a mark at every
Error Su ma
each
inch on the paper towel tube. econd, cut along
Capitalization 2
Language Usage 1
mark to create cardboard rings. if you dont have a
Punctflon:
= repe t
ring for each of your guests -repe-t-e- t ese steps with
Apostrophe 2
Comma 1
another tube. Next, cut strips of paper that measure
Period 1
two
Other 1
and one-half inches wide and five and
oneAhalf
Spelling 3
inches long. Yo need one of these strips9for each
plan
of the rings you -p4en to make.
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Name
How to Make Napkin Rings
Nothing makes an holiday table more festive then
special napkin rings? they are simple to make arid they
add so much to a holiday meal you will need to have
cardboard tubes from paper towels paper (wrapping
paper self-stick paper or paper you have decorated),
glue scissors a pen or pencil a ruler and any extra
decorations you want to include. Stikkers are great
for this project
MONDAY
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4TCH
commas
First, use the ruler to make a mark at every
inch on the paper towel tube, second, cut along eatch
mark to create cardboard rings, if you dont have a
ring for each of your guests repete these steps with
another tube. Next, cut strips of paper that measure
to and one-half inches wide and five and one half
inches long. Voull need one of these strips, for each
of the rings you plans to make.
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Spread
glue on the outside of a cardboard ring.
Error Summa
center the ring on one end of a strip of paper
Capitalization
LI
roll
Punctuation:
and the paper around it? There should be
Penod
LI
thre q,uarters of an inch of paper left over 9Jn
Other 2
A
Spelling 3
each side of the ring. Make cuts in the paper on
each side of the tube, about on half inch apar Rub
glue
A
0
-gew inside the rin. then fold the strips of paper
OE
toward the inside of the ring.
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Now that your ring is covered with pape, you
rror Su a
may add ribbo glitter self-hardening clay or any
Capitalization 3
Language Usage 1
other decoration you wish. When the set of napkin
Punctuation:
finished
rings is use them for a special meal ust roll
Comma 6
0=
Period 3
a paper or cloth napki tuck it through a ring, and
Spelling 1
then
S
Jn the table alongside the plate. Keep the
ings in a box or bag so you can use them again for
other special occasions 0
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spred glue on the outside of a cardboard ring.
center the ring on one end of a strip of paper
and role the paper around it? There should be
three q,uarters of an inch of paper left over. On
each side of the ring. Make cuts in the paper on
each side of the tube, about one half inch apart Rub
glew inside the ring then fold the strips of paper
toward the inside of the ring.
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hyphens in
fractions
spelling
Now that your ring is covered with paper you
may add ribbon glitter self-hardening clay or any
other decoration you wish. When the set of napkin
rings is finish use them for a special meal just roll
a paper or cloth napkin tuck it through a ring, and
then sit it. On the table alongside the plate. Keep the
Rings in a box or bag so you can use them again for
other special occasions
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How to Make Stilts
Error Summary
V
Capitalization LI
Have you ever, tried to walk on stilt ,Its harder
Language Usage 1
than it Jocks but i Jots of fun. walking on stilts can
Punctuation:
4 Apostrophe 3
improve your balancits also a great way to be head
Comma 2
crow.
and shoulders above the
-: -: in a parade! In fact, in
Period
LI
Other 1
the early 1700s rench shepherds used stilts to keep
Spelling 1
an eye on their flocks. Stilts are easy to make. Ask
an
adult to help you find the materials listed belo
hen follow the direction
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You will need wood, a tape
measureAa
hamme
rror Su ma
a saw wood glue, and
nails
. To make the handles for
Capitalization 2
Punctuation:
your stilts you will need two 6-foot lengths of lumber
Comma 5
(1 in. thick by 2 in wide). or your stilts steps you
Period 5
0 = 4 Spelling 2
will need two 10-inch lengths of lumber (2 i 0thick by
4 in wide). Finally, you will need sandpaper to smooth
0
paint
the
handleb
_ou may wish to peyn-t-e- your stilts9wheri
they are finished.
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Name
How to Make Stilts
Have you ever tried to walk on stilts. Its harder
than it looks but its lots of fun. walking on stilts can
improve your balance its also a great way to be head
and shoulders above the croud in a paradel In fact, in
the early 1700s french shepherds used stilts to keep
an eye on their flocks. Stilts are easy to make? Ask
a adult to help you find the materials listed below
then follow the directions
MONDAY
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4TCH
O
run-on sentences
apostrophes
You will need wood, a tape measure a hammer
a saw wood glue, and nailes. To make the handles for
your stilts you will need two 6-foot lengths of lumber
(1 in. thick by 2 in wide). for your stilts steps you
will need two 10-inch lengths of lumber (2 in thick by
14
in wide). Finally, you will need sandpaper to smooth
the handles? you may wish to paynte your stilts. when
they are finished.
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To make the handle first ask your helper
Error Summa
ground
Capalization 2
to measure the distanc -rom the to the
Language Usage 1
top of your shoulders. Second, add 1 foot9to this
Punctuation:
measurement. Next, cut the two 6-foot lengths
Apostrophe 1
Finally
Comma 1
of lumber to this measurement. -Fiy, sand them
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carefully with the sandpap 0 ou want to make sure
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To make the handles first ask your helper
to measure the distance. From the grownd to the
top of your shoulders. Second, add 1 foot. to this
measurement. Next, cut the two 6-foot lengths
of lumber to this measurement. Finaly, sand them
carefully with the sandpaper you want to make sure
there are know splinters. Its hard enough to balance
on stilts without having to worried about slivers t
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To make the steps first spred wood glue on
one long side of each of the 10-inch lengths of
lumber. Second, attach the steps to the bottom of
the handles Next, use the hammer to drive for nails.
Through each handle and into the step. If you want
to make your stilts more colorfull wait until the glue
is completely dry and then paint them. Let the paint
dry now your ready to practice walking on your stilts!
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Write a paragraph that gives information about kites. Write your own topic
sentence, or choose one provided below. bont forget to add examples or
details about the topic.
bid you know that kites have been used to do important jobs as well as
for having fun?
People have been making and using kites for over two thousand years.
All over the world, people make and fly kites.
FRIDAY WEEK 1 Social Studies Article: KitesNot Just for Fun
Write a paragraph that describes the work that was done by Gregor Mendel. Tell
about at least one important thing that was learned from his work. Begin with one
of these topic sentences, or write your own:
Gregor Mendels work has helped scientists understand how traits are
passed from parents to children.
Gregor Meridels work with plants has also helped scientists understand
humans better.
boes it seem possible that studying plants could help us learn about people?
FRiDAY WEEK 2 Science Article: How Traits Travel
bo you think school uniforms are a good idea? Write a persuasive paragraph about
this issue. Be sure to clearly state whether you support this idea. Give at least three
reasons to support your position. End with a strong closing sentence.
FRIDAY - WEEK 3
Editorial: Uniforms Are Not the Answer
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Write a short letter to a real or imaginary friend. bescribe what you are doing in
school these days, or tell about something that is going on in your life.
FRiDAY - WEEK 4
Letters: Pen Pals
Imagine you are having a birthday party. Write an invitation to a friend. Be sure
to tell the date, time, and place of your party. Add any other details that you want
to include.
FRIDAY - WEEK 5
Letters: Birthday Mail
Write the last paragraph of this story, telling what the letter says and how the
writer feels about the news. Use the same voice as the narrator of the first
four paragraphs.
FRIDAY - WEEK 6
Realistic Fiction: The Letter
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Write another paragraph about life in Salinas, Alta California. Describe some of
the childrens other chores, like working in the garden, carding wool, herding sheep,
gathering eggs, or other tasks. Continue writing in the same voice as the author of
the other four paragraphs.
FRIDAY WEEK 7
Historical Fiction: A New Life in Old California
Write a paragraph that summarizes important information about Lewis and Clarks
exploration of the Louisiana Territory. Be sure to include information about when
the group made the trip, the reasons for the trip, who took part in the trip, and the
outcome of the journey.
FRIDAY - WEEK 8
Social Studies Article: Lewis & Clark
Write one or two paragraphs about the Everglades. Explain what makes this place
special. Describe the problems facing the Everglades today. Close with a strong
concluding statement. Begin with one of these topic sentences, or write your own;
A special ecosystem like the Everglades deserves to be protected.
Peoples actions can upset the delicate balance of a habitat.
One of Americas most unusual areas is the Everglades in Florida.
FRIDAY WEEK 9
Social Studies Article: The Everglades
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Write a paragraph to summarize the information about Herrington and his November
2002 mission to the International Space Station. Begin with one of these topic
sentences, or write your own:
Astronaut John Herrington took more than scientific equipment with him
on his trip to outer space.
Astronaut John Herrington is the first Native American to go into space.
The Chickasaw Nation gave a proud send-off to Native American astronaut
John Herrington.
FRIDAY WEEK 10
Science Article: Arrowheads in Space
bescribe the two huge memorials in South bakota. Be sure to tell who designed
them, what they represent, and when they were made. Begin with one of these topic
sentences, or write your own:
South bakota is home to two of the largest memorials in the world.
South bakotas granite cliffs are perfect for carving monuments.
Sometimes, big ideas can become big projects.
FRIDAY WEEK 11
Social Studies Article: A Monumental Tribute
Write one or two paragraphs that describe a place that is special to you. What does
it look like and sound like there? How do you feel when you are there? What makes
it such a special place?
FRIDAY WEEK 12
Personal Narrative: My Tree House
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The Gold Rush was an important time in Californias history. In one or two
paragraphs, write a summary that describes events related to the Gold Rush.
Remember to include details about the way miners panned for gold and claimed land.
Begin with one of the following topic sentences, or write one of your own:
The Gold Rush began in
18148
when a man named James Marshall found
a gold nugget.
Many forty-niners looked for their fortune in the American River.
In 18148, many people began their journey to California with dreams
of striking it rich.
FRIDAY - WEEK 13
Social Studies Article: Gold!
Write a paragraph that tells about where electrical energy comes from and how it
is used. Begin with one of these topic sentences, or write your own:
Most people are used to having electrical power available at the flip of
a switch.
Have you ever wondered where the electrical energy in your home
comes from?
Electrical energy can be made in different ways.
FRIDAY - WEEK 14
Science Article: Electric Energy
Write one or two paragraphs about the life and work of Marie Curie. Be sure to
include where and when she was born, and to describe some of the things that made
her an extraordinary person. Use one of these topic sentences to begin, or write
your own:
Marie Curie was an inspiring woman and scientist.
Marie Curie helped make some important discoveries in the world of science.
Marie Curie spent her life studying, learning, and discovering.
FRIDAY WEEK 15
Biography: A Woman of Science
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Write a paragraph that gives information about teeth and the work they do. Begin
with one of these topic sentences, or write your own:
Teeth have different shapes because they do different jobs.
Its important to take care of your teeth so they can do their job.
What is a tool that can cut, grind, and tear?
FRIDAY WEEK 16
Science Article: Terrific Teeth
Write a paragraph describing how new technology has changed the way people find
information. Be sure to give some examples. Begin with one of these topic sentences,
or write your own:
The Internet has become a one-stop source of information for
many people.
bo you know one place where you can find a weather report, buy
tickets to a baligame, or research a topic for school?
Computers have changed a lot in recent decades.
FRIDAY WEEK 17
Science Article: The Amazing Internet
Write a paragraph describing a day spent with your family, or tell about how
you spend a day on the weekend. Use your words to help paint a vivid picture for
your readers.
FRIDAY - WEEK 18
Personal Narrative: Indiana Sundays
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Write one or two paragraphs that tell about something that you did or that happened
to you. You can tell about something that happened recently, or when you were small.
Help the reader understand what happened and how you felt about it.
FRIDAY - WEEK 19
Personal Narrative: The View from Down Here
Use the information in the book review to write a summary of Little House on the
Prairie. Be sure to tell what type of book this is, where and when the story takes
place, and who wrote it. Include some information on what the book is about. You
might also give a recommendation.
FRIDAY - WEEK 20
Book Review: An American Classic
Write one or two paragraphs to continue this story. Tell what happens after Robin
starts working on Grow-Bot, the robotic tutor. Is the project a success? Is it a new,
interesting form of entertainment? Or do things get out of control and create a
disaster? What might happen? Include some dialog between speakers in the story.
Be sure to use capital letters, qpotation marks, and punctuation correctly when you
write dialog.
FRIDAY WEEK 21
Fantasy: Bored in Space
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Suggest other activities that schools could plan for the rest of an environmental
awareness week. Present convincing arguments for the activities you propose for
Wednesday, Thursday, and Friday. Give examples of environmental problems, and
explain how the ideas you suggest would contribute to solving them. Be sure to end
with a strong concluding statement.
FRIDAY - WEEK 22
Editorial: Schools Should Lead by Example
Write a paragraph that describes the pirate Blackbeard. Be sure to tell about the
way he looked and acted. Share some other interesting information about the pirate
and his life. Start with one of the following topic sentences, or write your own:
Blackbeard the Pirate knew just how to make himself look fearsome.
In the early 1700s, the sailor Edward Teach transformed himself into
Blackbeard the Pirate.
FRIDAY WEEK 23
Character Sketch: Blackbeard the Pirate
Write one or two paragraphs about the life of Maria Tallchief. Explain what made
her special. Give details and use examples to create a picture of this gifted ballerina.
Begin with one of these topic sentences, or write your own:
Maria Tallchief had a rich cultural heritage that made her uniq,,ue.
Maria Tallchief was gifted in music and dance from an early age.
Americas first world-class ballerina was born on an Indian reservation
in Oklahoma in 1925.
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Based on the information in the book review, describe Sarah Roth and the Wisdom
Crystal. Be sure to tell what type of book this is, who the main characters are, what
the setting is, and something about the plot. Also give some information on the
author. Finally, based on what you read in the book review, give your opinion about
whether you think this would be an interesting book to read.
FRIDAY - WEEK 25
Book Review: C.
J.
Clark Has Another Hit
Write a one-paragraph version of the news story about the Prestige oil spill. Be sure
to tell what happened, and when and where the events occurred. Choose one of these
headlines, or write your own:
Spanish Fishing Waters at Risk
Threat of Worlds Worst Oil Spill
Experts Seek Solution to SpiiJ
FRIDAY - WEEK 26 News Article: Atlantic Oil Spifi Threatens Spanish Coast
Write a paragraph that explains how peoples ideas about Earth have changed over
time. Be sure to give some examples. Begin with one of these topic sentences, or
write your own:
Peoples ideas about Earth have changed very slowly.
Scientists now know much more about Earth than in the past.
Is it hard to believe that some of Earths continents used to be
joined together?
FRiDAY WEEK 27
Sdence Article: Earth on the Move
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Write another paragraph for Bridgets story. Tell about what happens when the
ship finally arrives in Boston after six weeks at sea. Include some words spoken by
Bridget, Paul, Mary, or Uncle James. Be sure to use capital letters, q,uotation marks,
and punctuation correctly when you write dialog.
FRIDAY - WEEK 28
Historical Fiction: AJourney Begins
Write one or two more questions and answers for this interview. Ivan Green might
ask Gigi to describe how she felt after selling $20,000 worth of Thumbkins after
her ad ran on the Shop-at-Home show. He might ask her if she has had ideas for
other inventions, or about how she will use the money she earns. Or, make up a
q,uestion of your own to ask and answer.
FRiDAY - WEEK 29
Interview: This Inventor Is All Thumbs!
Write a journal entry for Friday, April 16. Write as if you are Cheri Wan, and
describe your activities with banny. You could describe your outing to the movies
on Thursday, or tell about something you did earlier in the day on Friday.
FRIDAY - WEEK 30
Journal Entries: Chen Wans Vacation Diary
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Write another journal entry about experiences on the Oregon Trail. You might want
to imagine the day the family saw Chimney Rock (a 325-foot-tall rock formation in
Nebraska) or crossed the Snake River in tdaho by ferry. Tell about sights and sounds
that the writer might have seen, such as wild animals, plants, or people.
FRIDAY WEEK 31
Journal Entries: An Oregon Trail Diary
This story was written to teach an important lesson. What do you think that lesson
is? Write a paragraph or two to explain your ideas. Be sure to support your ideas
with logic or examples.
FRIDAY WEEK 32 Fable: Why Making Maple Syrup Is Hard Work
Write a news story describing one of the concerts given by Hot Sauce during their
U.S. tour. Be sure to mention when and where the concert took place, as well as some
of the highlights of the show. You might want to give some information about the
performers, or comment on the weak points of the show.
FRIDAY WEEK 33
News Article: Hot Sauce Is Sizzling!
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Write another entry for the groups science journal for November th. It will be
an answer to Ms. Chans question to the class. Present an idea about why three
different science teams got three different measurements when they checked
their rain gauges. Use the same writing voice as the writer of the journal entries
for Nov. 5 through 8.
FRIDAY - WEEK 34
Journal Entries: A Weather Journal
Write step-by-step directions for using napkin rings. Be sure to explain how to
arrange the napkin in the ring and exactly where to place it on the table. Use words
to help signal the order of each step, such as first, next, and finally.
FRIDAY WEEK 35
Instructions: How to Make Napkin Rings
Write directions that tell how to make a pair of stilts. You may use numerals to
list the steps in order or use words like first, second, next, and finally to order
your directions.
FRIDAY WEEK 36
Instructions: How to Make Stilts
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Language Handbook
Basic Rules for
Writing and Editing
Contents
Capital Letters
169
Sentences
169
Greetings/Closings in Letters
169
Days, Months, Holidays
169
Names, Titles, and Abbreviations
169
Nationalities, Languages, Ethnic Groups 170
Special Places and Things
170
Titles
171
Punctuation Marks
171
End Punctuation
171
Period (in sentences and abbreviations) 171
Question Mark
172
Exclamation Point
172
Comma
172
Quotation Marks
174
Hyphen
174
Apostrophe
175
Plurals
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Capital Letters
A word that starts with a capital letter is special in some way.
Always use a capital letter to begin:
the first wordof a sentence
Today is the first day of school.
the first word of a quotation:
She said, Today is the first day of school.
.
.,. bear Grandma,
the salutation (greeting) and Thanks so much for the birthday gift!
closing in a letter:
Love,

.
Sherry
the names of days, months,
.
and holidays:
. The fourth Thursday in November is Thanksgiving.
peoples first and last names
Mrs. Cruz and her son Felix were both seen by
their initials, and their titles:
br. 5. C. Lee.
.
Note: Many titles can be abbreviated. Use these
. .
abbreviations only when you also use the .persons name:
.
Mr. a man Capt. a captain
. Mrs. a married woman Lt. a lieutenant
Ms. a woman Pres. the president of a country
. . br. a doctor or an organization
a word that is used as a name:
I went with bad and Aunt Terry to visit Grandma.
.
Be Careful! Do not use a capital letter at the beginning
.. of a word when it is not used as someones name:
. . .
. I went with my dad and my aunt to visit my
. . . grandma.
: - .
. Hint: If you can replace the word with a name, it needs a
. - . capital letter:

I went with bad. * I went with Joe.


the word tht names .
yourself- - -
My family and I enjoy camping together.
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Capital Letters (continued)
the names of nationalities Mexican, Cuban, and Nicaraguan people all speak
and languages
Spanish
the name&f racial, ethni There were Asian, Native American, and African
or euJtural groups dancers at the festival
the- nrns of shp,
pianes,: The president flew on Air Force One to see the
...nd spaee vehieles:
..
USS Abraham Lincoln, a U.S. Navy aircraft
. . .
carrier.
Note You must also underline the name of a ship, plane,
or space vehicle the space shuttle Columbia
to begin the names of these spec-ial places and things
street names Palm Avenue, Cypress Street, Pine Boulevard
;
. c-itis, states, and
:.
Los Angeles, California, United States of America,
:
countries:
. Paris, France
. contins: . : Asia, Europe, South America
: lridforms and bodies.
. of wter: -.
Great Plains, San Francisco Bay, Great Salt Lake
.bui:ldings,.monments, the White House, the Statue of Liberty,

and p.ubiic plaees:


Yellowstone National Park

- .
The Gold Rush began in 1849.

, historic events:
.
:
-,: -
The Civil War ended in 1865.
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Punctuation Marks
Punctuation gives information that helps you understand a sentence.
End Punctuation
Every sentence must end with one of these three punctuation marks:
.
A period
(.) shows that a sentence is:
giving information:. .
I love to read short stories.
giving a mild comund:
. Choose a short story to read aloud.
:
.. .
. Note: A period is also used in:
. -
abbreviations of months and days:
Jan. (January), Feb. (February), Mon. (Monday), etc.
. .. . . .. -
abbreviations of measurements:
, .. . .
. ft. (foot/feet), in. (inchlinches)
. . . . . .
. lb./lbs. (pound/pounds), oz. (ounce/ounces)
. . . . . . time:
, .. 8:00 a.m., 4:30 p.m., etc.
titles qfbqkSjsOrieS;
poeths, and maga4nes:
The story The Friendly Fruit Bat appeared in
Ranger Rick magazine and in a science book called
Flying Mammals.
Be Careful! Do not use a capital letter at the beginning
of a small word in a title, such as a, an, at, for, in, and
the, unless it is the first word in the title.
Note: When you write a title, remember...
Some titles are underlined:
Book Titles: Frog and Toad
Magazine Titles: Ranger Rick
Movie Titles: Bambi
TV Shows: Sesame Street
Newspapers: The.Daily News
Some titles go inside quotation marks:
Story Titles: The Fox and the Crow
Chapter Titles: In Which Piglet Meets a Heffalump
Poem Titles: My Shadow
Song Titles:. Twinkle, Twinkle, Little Star
Titles of Articles: Ship Sinks in Bay
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Punctuation Marks (continued)
A question mark (?) shows that a sentence is:
asking a question: bid you choose a story to read?
An exclamation point (I) shows that a sentence is:
expressing strong
Wow! That story is really long!
feelings:
Comma
A comma
(,)
can help you know how to read things. Commas are often used in sentences.
Sometimes commas are used with words or phrases.
Some commas are used to keep things separate. Use a comma to separate:
the name of a city from t.h -
El Paso, Texas
name of a state:
the name of a Gity from the
- London, England
name of a countly:
the date from the year: October 12,
20014
the sliitaithn (greeting) from
.
bear Ms. 5,lver,
the body of a letter:
the c-losing in a letter from
. . Yours truly,
the signature:
two adjectives that tell about
Nico is a witty, smart boy.
the- arne ioun:
- Hint: To see if you need a comma between two
-
adjectives, use these two tests:
, 1 Switch the order of the adjectives. If the sentence still
.
makes sense, you must use a comma:
. YES: Nico is a witty, smart boy. .- Nico is a smart,
.. -.
. witty boy.
. -.
NO: Nico has dark brown hair. .- Nico has brown
. - - ... .. - . -
dark hair.
- --
2 Put the word and between the two adjectives. If the
- - -
- sentence still makes sense, you must use a comma:
- ..
YES: Nico is a witty smart boy. .0. Nico is a witty
: -- -. . .
- and smart boy.
.. - ....
NO: Nico has dark brown hair. o Nico has dark
- - -
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Some commas help you know where to pause when you read a sentence. Use a comma to
show a pause:
between three or more items
Nico wont eat beets, spinach, or shrimp. in a list or series:
after or before the name of After: Nico, I think that you need to eat more.
a person thatsomeone is
- Before: I think that you need to eat more, Nico.
talking to in a seritence
Both: I think, Nico, that you need to eat more.

. Mrs. Flores said, Its time to break the between the words spoken by
someone and the rest of the
pinata now!
sentence:
I know, answered Maya.
after an exc-lamation at the
b.eginning of a sentence:
Boy, thats a lot of candy!
after a short introduc-tory
phrase or clause that comes
After all that candy, nobody was hungry for cake.
before the main idea:
before and after a word or
The cake, however, was already out on the picnic words that interrupt the main
table.
idea of a sentence:
before and after a word or
phrase that names or giyes.
The cake, which had thick chocolate frosting,
more inforrntion about the
melted in the hot sun.
noun before it:
. Mrs. Lutz, our neighbor, gave Mom the recipe.
before the connecting word.
The frosting was melted, but the cake was great.
in a compound sentence:
Note: A simple sentence always includes a subject and a
. yrk,
and it expresses a complete thought. A compound
. S sentence joins two simple sentences together, so each of
:
the two parts of a compound sentence has its own subject
and
yth. The two parts of a compound sentence are
.
joined by a comma and a conjunction. The conjunctions
.
and, but, for, nor, or, so, and yet are all used to
. .. .. ..
join two simple sentences into one compound sentence.
. .- - In a compound sentence, always place the comma before
. .
the connecting conjunction:
-
Maya candy, but too full to eat cake.
S I
.
Nico ate candy, and also gj a piece of cake.
-
Nico is thin, yet
h
eats lots of sweets.
. I. -
Maya chubby, So watches what she eats.
I. . .
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Punctuation Marks (continued)
Quotation Marks
Use quotation marks
( ):
..keforeand
after words that
This was the best birthday party ever! Maya said.
arespoken by someqne:
Note: Punctuation that follows the speakers words goes
. inside the quotation marks:
May I have a pinata at my birthday party? Martin
asked.
Mr. Flores replied, You bet!
Be Careful! When the words that tell who, is speaking
come before the quotation, put the comma outside the
quotation marks. When the words that tell who is
speaking come after the quotation, put the comma
inside the quotation marks:
Before: Mrs. Flores asked, bo you want a chocolate
cake, too?
After: I sure do, said Martin.
arund:word
that are being
The word pifiata is written with a special letter.
discussed:
aound s}n wr.dssed
We all had to chill out after the party.
in an unusuakway
Hyphen
Use a hyphen
( ):
between nuthbrs in a Onehalf of the candies had walnuts, and
fraction: .
oneq,uarter had almonds.
to join two words that Work
Its not easy to find lowfat candy and sugarfree
together to make an adjective
soda
before a noun:
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Apostrophe
An apostrophe ()helps show who owns something. You add an apostrophe after the name
of an owner.
When there is just one
owner, addan apostrophe:.;
cat + s cats The catS dish was empty.
first and then add an S
When there
is.orari1e.
cats + cats All the catS cages at the
:owner?
addnS first and
..
shelter were nice and big.
then add an aosFrohe:
:
-
,; Be Careful! When the name of more than one owner
..
,
- does not end with an S, add an apostrophe first and
:.
thenaddanS:
children + s . childrens
The childrenS cat was in the last cage
.,.., -
-. people 5 - peoples
. -
.
-,
Other peoples pets were making lots of noise.
Use an apostrophe when
I am Im do + not dont
oii put wo wrds together.
+ are youre does + not doesnt
tomake one word. This is . ,
called a contracion. In a
he + is he s are not
z
aren t
contraeion the aposrophe:: it + is its
could + not t.couldnt
takes the 1ace of the mising-
we would wed have + not havent
. reteiorietrs: - ,
- they + will theyll would + not wouldnt
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Plurals
A noun names a person, place, or thing. A plural noun names more
than one person, place, or thing.
Add anS tomakernost
. girl b girl + S girls
nouns plura1 river river + S riverS
lunch lunch + es . lunches
if the noun ends hi ch, s, dress , dress + es ,. dresses
sh,
01!
X, add es brush brush es . brushes
.. ;..
fox.fox+es.foxes
If he noun eids in
Y;
ehange. fly fli + es flies
they to I and add es . story., stori + es stories
..: .. Note: If the noun ends in a vowel plus y, just add S:
bay*bay+s-.bays

key * key + s keys


I boy*boy+s-boy5
Be Careful! Some plural nouns do not have an S at all:
:*
child children foot feet
.
:
man men tooth teeth
woman women goose b geese
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