Pre-sessional Block B Extended Essay Feedback

Pre-sessional Block B Extended Essay Feedback - Tutor: Doreen Tan Class: B1/7 Student name: Yuanyuan ZHOU
EE Draft Overall Comments:

Strong
A. Task fulfilment
1.Answers the question
2. Clarity of ideas
3. Development of ideas
B. Organisation
4. Overall organisation
5. Paragraph organisation: topic sentences,
cohesion, signposting
C. Use of sources
6. Can use in-text referencing (information
prominent/author prominent) to cite a variety
of sources
7. Can present references accurately in the
reference list
8. Can integrate sources to develop content
using paraphrasing and summarising
D. Use of Language
9. Can use a variety of sentences (simple,
compound, complex)
10. Can use grammar accurately
11. Can use a variety of vocabulary
12. Can use vocabulary accurately

Satisfactory

Needs work

Recommended actions to improve draft:

Content needs greater development overall. Some
unsupported/general claims to be revised.

There is a loose sense of overall organisation but you need

to think about your overall structure and paragraphing, topic
sentence and cohesion within paragraphs.
Some good support selected.
However, limited use of integrated support (support should
be used with a clear purpose).
Reference list needs correct organisation.
In-text citations to be checked using Harvard.

See comments in text for details. You need to find further

examples of those errors which are noted and which recur.

E. Academic style
Please do not use sub-headings. Many informal elements
remain and should be replaced by appropriate style.
13. Can use appropriate academic style (eg

hedging, noun phrases, objective approach)

Needs Work: considerable progress will need to be made in order to meet the target; Satisfactory: on target to reach 6.5; Strong: has achieved the target

EE Final Version Overall Comments:

Final submission: