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Comparing: Hamlet & Odyssey

[we will work on the thesis in class]
Thesis
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OUTLINE
1. CALL TO ADVENTURE
TOPIC SENTENCE/MAIN IDEA:

EVIDENCE:
Odyssey: pg. 50,51,52, book 1. That is when Calypso
gets an order from Zeus.
Calypso: If Zeus commands it, let him be gone! But I
have no ship to give him; all I can do is point his
way and advise him how to find his home again. The
rest is out of my hands.
Hamlet: pg. 20,21, Act 1. The time when Hamlet finds
out that the night guards have seen his father's soul.
Hamlet: I wish Id been there.
Horatio: It would have amazed you very much.
Hamlet: Most likely Most likely
Hamlet: Ill stand watch with you tonight! Maybe it
will walk again.

Hamlet: If it assumes the shape of my noble father,

Ill speak to it--even if hell itself gapes open and
commands my silence.
Hamlet: Please, if youve kept this a secret so far,
keep it still. Whatever happens tonight, don't speak
so far, keep it still. Whatever happens tonight, dont
speak of it, and Ill return the favor.
Horatio: So farewell! Ill visit you on the platform
between eleven and twelve.
Guards: Well do our duty sir.

ANALYSIS

2. Internal/ External
TOPIC SENTENCE/MAIN IDEA:

EVIDENCE
Odyssey//External conflict: pg. 89-150. Book 7-12.
That is when Odysseus goes to a mysterious island
where there is a kingdom. That kingdom had heard for
Odysseus being missing and asked him for his story.
From page 89 to 150 Odysseus is telling his story.
That is when the most External conflict is going on.
Alcinoos: Stop, stop. It seems this song brings grief
to our guest. Tell me now, friend, and hold nothing
back: What is your name? Where do you come from? Why
do you weep at these songs of Troy? Did you lose

comrades here?
Odysseus: Alcinoos, it pains me to tell my story. But
it seems you must pry into it, intensify my grief.
Where shall I start, for the account of my troubles is
long. I suppose I should begin by telling you my name.
Odysseus: I am Odysseus, Laertes son. The whole world
knows of my stratagems, and my fame has risen to the
heavens. My home is under the clear skies of Ithaca.
Now, I will tell you of the misfortunes that Zeus has
sent me during my long voyage home from Troy.
Hamlet//Internal conflict: pg. 74,75,76. Act 2. That
is after the king and queen finding out that Hamlet is
mad and tell him. Now Hamlet is thinking of his
fathers death and how he should kill his uncle.
Hamlet:
Hamlet: Now I am alone.
Hamlet: Oh what a rogue and peasant slave am I!
Hamlet: Look how this player here could force his soul
with fake feelings, in a work of fiction!
Hamlet: He grew pale, shed real tears, became
overwhelmed, his voice breaking with feeling and his
whole being, even, meeting the needs of his act--and
all for nothing. For Hecuba!
Hamlet: Whats Hecuba to him or he to Hecuba, that he
should weep for her?
Hamlet: What would he do, had he the motive and cue
for passion that I have?
Hamlet: He would drown the stage with tears, cleave
the audiences ear with horrid speech, make mad the
guilty and appall the free, confound the ignorant, and
indeed amaze everyones eyes and ears.
Hamlet: Yet I, a dull and muddy- spirited fool, mope
like a dreamer without making plans for revenge. I can
say nothing--nothing at all for a king who was cheated
of life.
Hamlet: Who out there will call me villain and break
my head across?
Hamlet: Tear my beard off and blow it in my face?
Hamlet: Tweak my nose?

Hamlet: Call me the worst liar from the depth of his

lungs?
Hamlet: Who will do this for me? Ha!
Hamlet: I would take it, because I am pigeon- livered
and weak. Otherwise, I would have already fattened all
of Denmarks vultures with the guts of that miserable
king.
Hamlet: Bloody, lustful villain! Remorseless,
treacherous, lecherous, kindless villain! O vengeance!
Why, what an ass I am!
Hamlet: Arent I brave-- The son of a dear murdered
father, urged by heaven and hell to seek revenge,
sitting here and cursing in the streets like whore.
Hamlet: Damn it! Think, think!
Hamlet: Ive heard tales of guilty men who have been
so struck by the plays they are watching that they
spontaneously confess their sins.
Hamlet: Ill have these players play something like
the murder of my father tomorrow. Ill observe my
uncles looks. If he goes pale, Ill know what to do.
Hamlet: The spirit I have seen may be the devil, who
has the power to assume a pleasing shape. Perhaps he
takes advantage of my weakness to abuse and damn me.
But this will prove his claims!
Hamlet: The plays the thing wherein Ill catch the
conscience of the king!

ANALYSIS

3. CRISIS

TOPIC SENTENCE/MAIN IDEA:

EVIDENCE
Odyssey: pg. 142,143,144,145,146,147. Book 11. That is
when his men betray him and eat Helioss cattle, after
all the times Odysseus warned them.
Odysseus: They were mutinous, and I saw that fate had
us by the leash. Before I would let them land, I made
them swear that they would eat only the provisions
Circe had given us and never touch Helioss cattle.
And then Odysseus falls asleep and finds his men
eating Helioss cattle. They sailed away as quickly as
possible, but Circe was right.
Odysseus: In a moment, squalls hit us from the west,
so powerful that the mast snapped and crashed down in
the stern, killing the helmsman instantly. Then in the
same breath, Zeus let loose his lightning bolt
Hamlet: pg. 46,47,48. Act 2. When Ophelia complains
that Hamlet has finally gone mad after her father's
advice of ignoring Hamlet on pg. 28,29,30.
Polonius: When a mans desire burns, hell swear
anything.
Polonius: But that blaze gives off more light than
heat!
Polonius: His fire will go out even as he speaks his
promises. Dont mistake that for love.
Polonius: Make yourself scarce; do not go to him
whenever he calls. Remember, Hamlet is young--and free
to wander in places where you cannot go.
And then after a few pages Ophelia complains of Hamlet
becoming mad.
Ophelia: My lord as I was in my sewing chamber, Lord
Hamlet came in-- with his doublet all unbuttoned, his
stockings filthy, undone, and hanging around his
ankle
Ophelia: His face as pale as his shirt; his knees

knocking together And such a look on his face that it

seemed hed been sent from Hell to describe its
horrors. Thus he comes before me
Polonius: Mad for thy love?
Ophelia: My lord, I do not know-- but I fear that he
may be.

ANALYSIS

4. New life
TOPIC SENTENCE/MAIN IDEA:

EVIDENCE
Odyssey: pg. 165,166,167. Book 16. That is when
Odysseus *transformed into an old man to not be
recognized on pg. 155: Athena: Now, I will cast a
disguise on you that no one will see through, not even
your wife.* finally transforms into himself for his
son to find the real truth and tell him the idea how
to fight all the men that want to marry Penelope.
Athena: The time has come to reveal yourself to your
son and together plot your revenge.
Telemachus: S-sir, youve changed!! Your clothes, your
hair, your skin--- what god are you?
Odysseus: Im not a god. I am Odysseus, your father,
home at last.
Telemachus: You cant be! No mortal man can change
himself from a decrepit beggar to---

Odysseus: That is the doing of Athena, who used her

power to disguise me. Come now, do not argue, for I
swear to you that I am the only Odysseus who will ever
return to you.
Telemachus: .....
Telemachus: Father?!
Odysseus: My son... my son.
Telemachus: Father, how--Odysseus: No questions yet. I must make a plan to slay
the vermin who infest my palace. Tell me, how many are
there?
Telemachus: Too many, Father. Oh, I have wished this
for so long, but it is madness to talk of killing them
all--- just the two of us against over a hundred!
Telemachus: There are fifty-two from Dulichion alone,
plus their six servants, twenty-four from Same, twenty
from Zacynthus, and the twelve best lords from Ithaca
itself, as well as their heralds and serving men.
If we pit ourselves against all these, I fear our
revenge will come back on our own heads. We need
allies, men-at-arms to help us.
Odysseus: Tell me, then: will Athena and Zeus do, to
stand beside us?
Telemachus: !--- but will they help us?
Odysseus: Yes. Trust me.
Hamlet: pg. 179,180,181. Act 5. When Hamlet finds out
that Ophelia is dead and he learns how to look like he
is not sad about Ophelia's death when he really is
sad.
Laertes: Hold off for a while, til Ive caught her
in my arms once more.
Laertes: *Hop*
Laertes: Now pile the dirt on the living and the dead
alike, til youve made a mountain higher than Mount
Pelion or Mount Olympus.
Hamlet: Who is the one whose grief is so excessive,
whose words of sorrow cast a spell over the planets,
making them stand still as if theyve been wounded by
what they hear?

Hamlet: It is I, Hamlet the Dane!

Hamlet: *Hop*
Laertes: The devil take your soul!
Claudius: Pull them apart.
Gertrude: Hamlet! Hamlet!
Hamlet: I loved Ophelia.
Laertes: The love of forty thousand brothers couldnt
equal mine. What would you do for her?
Claudius: Oh, hes mad, Laertes!
Gertrude: For the love of God, be patient with him!
Hamlet: Damn it, show me what you would do for her!
Will you weep? Fight? Fast? Would you drink vinegar,
eat a crocodile? Ill do all that.
Hamlet: Did you come here to whine? To outdo me by
leaping into her grave? To be buried alive with her?
Hamlet: So will I.

ANALYSIS

5.

Character Transformation

TOPIC SENTENCE/MAIN IDEA:

EVIDENCE

Odyssey: pg. 207,208,209,210,211,212,213. Book 12.

That is when Odysseus shows to all the men which are
fighting for Penelope his strength. When he does the
accomplishment that none of the men had been able to
do he shows himself to the men and kills them.
Odysseus: Good princes, I must beg your leave to ask
a favor.
Odysseus: Seeing all this has given me a keen desire
to test my strength against the great bow of Odysseus,
to see if I still have any muscle left in these old
arms.
Prince: What gall! Quiet beggar, or well drag you out
of here.
Penelope: Dont be rude to our guest, Antinoos. Im
sure he doesn't imagine that he can claim my hand if
he wins, so you neednt worry about that.
Prince: Its not that , Lady but if he did it, wed be
the laughingstock of the islands.
Penelope: Let him have a try. If he should make the
shot , Ill give him a fine shirt, cloak and sandals,
and send him on his way in comfort.
Telemachus: Mother, please go up to your room. Leave
this matter to me.
Prince: What are you doing swineherd? Put down that
bow, or youll regret it!
Telemachus: Go ahead, Eumaeus. Give him the bow.
Prince: Look! Hes a connoisseur of bows!
Odysseus: *Tap, tap*
Eumaeus: Lock the women in their quarters now. Let no
one out.
Odysseus: *Creak*
Odysseus: *Shick*
Odysseus: *Twiinnnggggggg BAKOOOM*
Odysseus: *Thwick*
Odysseus: *Thock!*
Odysseus: It seems I still have some strength left in
these limbs.
Odysseus: Now, Apollo guide my next shot.
Hamlet: pg. 193-202. Act 5. That is when Hamlet gets

over his mad stage and gets into a fencing fight.

Hamlet: Come, sir.
Laertes: Come, my lord.
Hamlet: That was one hit!
Laertes: No it wasnt.
Hamlet: The verdict?
Verdict: A hit, a definite hit.
Laertes: Well, lets go on.
Claudius: Give me the drink.
Claudius: Hamlet, this pearl is yours.
Claudius: Give him the cup.
Hamlet: Ill play this round first. Set it down
awhile.
Hamlet: Come.
Hamlet: Another hit. What do you say?
Laertes: You touched me, I do confess it.
Claudius: My son will win.
Gertrude: Hes flabby and out of breath.
Gertrude: Here, Hamlet, take my handkerchief and wipe
your forehead.
Gertrude: The queen drinks to your fortune, Hamlet.
Hamlet: Thank you, madam.
Claudius: Gertrude, do not drink.
Gertrude: I will, my lord. I beg you to pardon me.
Claudius: That was the poisoned cup. Its too late.
Hamlet: I dare not drink now. Soon.
Gertrude: Come, let me wipe your face.
Laertes: My lord, Ill get him now.
Claudius: I doubt it.
Laertes: And yet I almost feel guilty.
Prepare for the third hit, Laertes. Don't toy with
me!

ANALYSIS

Middle School Expository & Persuasive Writing Rubric

Exemplary

CRITICAL
THINKING
Focus/
Argument/
Thesis
CRITICAL
THINKING
Evidence
/Support/
Details
CLARITY
Organization

Language and Style

Conventions

Emerging

Beginning

2
Partially introduces a
clearly stated original
idea, focus, argument,
or thesis.

1 |INC
No evidence of an
introduction for a focus
or central point to the
paper.

3
Develops the topic
with specific, relevant
evidence, examples,
and details.

2
Partially develops the
topic with some
evidence, examples,
and details.

1 INC
Fails to develop the
topic: little or no
evidence, examples,
and details.

4
Clear, coherent, and
logical progression of
ideas, plus transitions to
link the major sections,
and an effective
conclusion.

3
Coherent progression of
ideas with transitions to
link the sections, and a
supported conclusion.

2
Rough progression of
ideas. There are few or
no transitions and no/
unsupported conclusion.

1 INC
No progression of ideas.
There are no transitions
and no related
conclusion.

4
Sentences demonstrate
strong, effective
communication through
precise language appropriate
to task, purpose and
audience.

3
Sentences demonstrate
effective
communication through
language that is
appropriate to the task,
purpose and audience.

2
Sentences partially
demonstrate effective
communication.

1 INC
Sentences fail to
demonstrate effective
communication.

4
Clearly introduces a
thought-provoking,
complex, original idea,
focus, argument, or thesis.

4
Thoroughly develops the
topic with extensive,
specific, relevant evidence
& details.

4
No significant errors in:
spelling
usage
punctuation
capitalization

Proficient

3
Clearly introduces an
original idea, focus,
argument, or thesis.

3
Few significant errors
in:
spelling
usage
punctuation
capitalization

2
Significant errors
in:
spelling
usage
punctuation
capitalization

1 INC
Many significant
errors in:
spelling
usage
punctuation
capitalization

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