A.

1. Paper 1 A Lesson at the Drag-strip Lasted a Life Time -Narrative

In the first paragraph in the sentence that states, One night at the drag strip, an incident

that unfolded changed my whole perspective and my outlook of life, I flipped that unfolded
and changed it to Unfolded that. I also noticed that throughout my paper I captilized the d in
drag strip when it did not need to be capitalized. I also realized that I have been spelling okay
wrong. In the last sentence of the second paragraph I used the word came rather than became
and said ... how much trouble I would be in never came to a concern to me. I cant believe I
didnt catch onto that the before. I also learned that I didnt need to put PM in my paper as to
what time of day it was because it was already obvious. I realized I didnt need the word go in
the first sentence of the third paragraph. In the last paragraph of page three, I got a little wordy
and I didnt need to use the word super in the seventh sentence. Also in this sentence, after the
words blond hair, I placed a semi-colon and added the words She wore. I also added a colon
on page three in the second paragraph. I accidentally spelled the word hysterically wrong. in the
first sentence of the second paragraph on page three. Throughout my paper there was a couple of
words that needed capitalization, corrected spelling, and a few words added in. I believe the rest
of my paper was great context and a weel written story; therefore, I re-wrote the rest of my paper.
2. Paper 2 A Form of Art with Benefits -Informative
In the first paragraph, my in-text citations from the end of sentence five was incorrect. I
changed (Merriam-Webster) to (Dance) since this sentence is the definition of dance. In
the second paragraph, first sentence, I changed their to his or her so that I could be more
specific as to who them were. On page four in the last paragraph, I stated They are usually at
the dance studio one day a week, where aws a competitive dancer...), when I needed to flip
where and as. I enjoyed this paper, even though I found it hard to not be personal with how

much I enjoy talking about dance. I learned a lot with this paper dealing with citations and in-text
citations. I also was happy with the rest of my paper and rewrote everything else.
3.Paper 3 More Care Partners are Needed-Persuasive
In this paper I needed to be more specific as to who I was referring to in different
sentences, instead as using you and their. I also learned that Care Partner needed to be
capitalized throughout my paper, along with title names of jobs. Even though I was excited
through this paper, I learned that I didnt need to put multiple explanation marks. In the first
paragraph of the second page I changed and to or because I am talking about all the tasks,
not just one or the other. In the last paragraph of the second page, I was using the same citation
after multiple sentences in a row when I should have just put it at the end of paragraph that I got
all of my information from. In the second paragraph on the third page, I capitalized residents
when there wasnt any reason to. In the last sentence of the third paragraph on the third page, I
used to many ands than necessary; therefore, I changed one and to to. I learned in the
second paragraph of the forth page that federal did no need to be capitalized. Also in the same
paragraph, I got wordy in the forth sentence and took out the words multiple ways. At the end
of the forth page I need to add more of a rebuttal or concession. So I added in With Nursing
Homes feeling this way, individuals should push for Medicare and Medicade in order to help the
residents, as well as our own selves in the future. In the first paragraph of the fifth page, I
needed to change is to are. In the second paragraph of the fifth page, I mistakenly wrote
their self and needed to change it to their selves. Also in the second paragraph of the fifth
page I needed to add an apostrophe to thats to make it thats which means that is. I believe
my paragraphs went well with my thesis, arguing for hiring more Care Partners and I happily
rewrote the rest of my paper.

B.

I have learned more about grammar this year than any other year.I have struggled with

grammar and spelling my whole life through school. At the beginning of the semester I felt like a
student in middle school and I didnt even know the difference between nouns, pronouns,
adjectives, and adverbs. I have learned a lot about grammar even though im still not that great
on spelling. I have also learned a lot about revising sentences for consistency, parallelism, and
variety. My teacher is my favorite teacher that I have ever had. Not only has she taught me about
English and grammar, but also about inspiration. She is an excellent teacher. My goal for my
next level of English if I have to take that class, I want to try and get even better with my spelling
and grammar. Since I live almost an hour away from school, if I have an early class I need to be
more precise on ensuring that my alarm clock is set for in the mornings.
C.

I loved the writing assignments and Journals. These assignments helped me express
myself and allow me to freely write about what ever I wanted. Even though I didnt
assignments in late, I liked the fact that you would accept assignments in late with no
penalty, aside from the Essays. I know that the Weebly profiles makes things easier for my
teacher, but I personally didnt like Weebly. I would rather Type up my papers and print
them off and turn them back in at the end of the semester instead of trying to post
everything on Weebly. I found myself, along with other classmates, struggle with the
Weebly Portfolio. Other than that, everything was great in English 111.

D.

My advice for the future English 111 students, is to turn their outlines and Essay drafs

into the online tutor, the online essay drop off, or to the tutoring center in the library. I have
found myself to be very successful with all my papers with help. I also found myself getting
better at Essays as the semester continued. I made a one hundred and one on my first essay, a one

hundred and two on my second essay, and a one hundred and three on my third Essay. Tutoring
will definitely help students out with each and every writing assignment.