‘Research Paper Peer Evaluation _ (Rough Draft) Writer: MICHAEL Fl. ZALES Et Reviewer: QUINN DUDECIC NOTE: A recommendation is that each student must have two people Review their rough draft and Review two other classmates. DIRECTIONS: Please read through the paper once then record your first impressions in a few sentences. 1, Please read through the paper once then record your first impressions here. \t4s WFomanow ON SIDE Er ects. DIRECTIONS: Please complete this section of the form after the 2nd time you read the paper. QUESTION/INTRODUCTION AND THESIS 1. The question is answerable and relevant. NES ; 2. The hypothesis seemstobe__ CLEA, CONSISE 4 Clear? Arguable? Interesting? Too broad or narrow? 3. The paper addresses these general points to support the hypothesis: A BENEFITS B. c 4. Does the introduction provide necessary information to make the topic relevant and engage the reader? NES PROWNES STATS. BACKGROUND 5. 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Does the paper meet the minimum length (7 pages)? Does it seem padded for length with information that might be irrelevant to the question/thesis? Explain.Running head; ADHD MEDICATION BENEFICIAL FOR CHILDREN Beneficial effects of ADHD medication for children under 18 Michael H. Zaleski Portland State University LibraryRunning head: ADHD MEDICATION BENEFICIAL FOR CHILDREN 2 Introduction: The purpose of this research assignment is to determine whether or not pharmaceutical medication is beneficial in the treatment of Attention deficit hyperactive disorder (ADHD) in children under 18. ADHD is a neurological disorder that is estimated to affect about 3 to 7 out of 100 school-age children in the United States (Webmd), ADHD left untreated can be detrimental to the mind of the sufferer. Medication is the most widely used form of treatment, most commonly: stimulants, or non-stimulants. As stated by Mental health weekly the Food and Drug Administration (FDA) examining changes in overall pediatric drug use from 2002-2010 found a 46 per-cent increase in attention-deficitvhyperactivity disorder (ADHD) medication use (pg.3). ‘Through copious amounts of research here’s how ADHD medication is beneficial for children under 18. Background information: ADHD is best defined by the American Academy of children & Adolescent psychiatry [A.A Psychiatry] as: .. A common childhood illness that can be treated, It is @ health condition involving biologically active substances in the brain, Studies show that ADHD may affect certain areas of the brain that allow us to solve problems, plan ahead, understand others’ actions, and control our impulses. (A.A psychiatry) The prevalence of ADHD is 5-8 percent of U.S. children and adolescents, and its impairments are likely to persist into adolescence and adulthood. A syndrome with strong neurobiological origins, ADHD has major importance for public health, given the markedRunning head: ADHD MEDICATION BENEFICIAL FOR CHILDREN 3 academic, social, familial, and accidental injury-related impairments with which it is associated. (Scheffler, Hinsaw, Modrek, Levine, 2007, pg. 1) Argument: On the one hand, some argue that prescription medication for ADHD is ludicrous, and has no benefits whatsoever besides “a risk for dependence and abuse over long term usage” (Finks, 2012, p.25), Parents’ views on pharmaceutical drugs are usually negative in the world, parents don’t want to give their children medication, for multiple reasons: make the child feel indifferent, side effects, and also cost. Although most parents wouldn't be too keen on giving my child a drug that is supposed to release more chemicals into the brain, especially since the symptoms in the uneducated eye seem to be that they're just bored and don’t want to listen rather than a legitimate neurological problem. On the other hand however, others argue that ADHD medication has many beneficial effeets, and many children and parents have satisfaction with they're prescribed ADHD medication, The European Child & Adolescent psychiatry did a study on children and parents” satisfaction with they're prescribed medication with children ages 6-17 with a confirmed diagnosis of ADHD were given the drug “Equasym XL” a stimulant. The children made 3 visits to the doctors over a 6 week period, and were questioned each visit about satisfaction, both child and parent... with overall satisfaction reaching 70%. Approximately 30% of parents were dissatisfied with the medication. (European Child & Adolescent psychiatry [ECAP], 2011, pg.305) According to this view, the stimulant “Equasym XL” left the patient and parent with an overall 70% satisfaction rate (ECAP, 201 1) for treating the symptoms of ADHD. So theRunning head: ADHD MEDICATION BENEFICIAL FOR CHILDREN 4 stimulant provided 70% of the patients with satisfaction which means the patient saw a difference positively with taking this drug, Though I concede that pharmaceutical drugs aren’t always the best approach for ADHD treatment, and regardless of how innocent or non-harming they seem they can be dangerous. | still maintain that ADHD medication is beneficial for children. For example, [ECAP] reported “patients with ADHD showed improvements in QoL. (quality of life) and satisfaction with medication during treatment with once-daily Equasym XL in this large observational study” (2011, pg. 262), In summary, then, the issue is whether ADHD medication is beneficial for children. The pros outweigh the cons, and seems to be the best option for children with ADHD. Without the medication the child will just suffer, with alternative solutions other than medication they just do not seem to provide enough effectiveness to subdue the disorder. ADHD medication whether it be stimulants, or non-stimulants in most cases just allows the child to focus. An article on a study they did about the effects of ADHD medication stated: ‘The findings from this study indicate that for children with ADHD, a significant increase in IQ scores is likely after receiving pharmacologic intervention... The finding that 1Q scores increase following treatment with stimulant medications has important implications for practitioners who conduct assessments for ADHD. These results suggest that intellectual measures given when children with ADHD are not taking medication may result in scores that underestimate the child's true ability (Gimpel et al., 2005, pe.4l0),Running head: ADHD MEDICATION BENEFICIAL FOR CHILDREN 4 Conclusion: Through studies, tests, and research it can be concluded that ADHD medication is beneficial and as well crucial, Ifa child is diagnosed with ADHD it seems unfair for that said child to not get the opportunity to test ADHD medication, and see if it improves his overall focus and behavior in class, home, public, ete. Not every child diagnosed with ADHD should try pharmaceuticals, given their religion, moral beliefs, and income/health insurance situation, But on the contrary children diagnosed with ADHD and have absolutely no reason not try medication, but are denied by their parents that treatment is just unfair. “They called it a disease, recommended visiting doctors for diagnosis and treatment, and advocated medication use as the ‘most thoroughly documented and effective intervention for their children” (Clarke, Lang, 2012, 2.407). This was an article analyzing many internet blog sites about mothers and what it’s like with a child with ADHD, and how to manage it. If there’s more mothers advocating for pharmaceutical use as the best treatment for ADHD, and their reporting few if any side effects. ‘This again makes it even clearer that ADHD is beneficial for children, and improves their lives in more positive ways than negative.Running head: ADHD MEDICATION BENEFICIAL FOR CHILDREN 6 References Clarke, J. N., & Lang, L. (2012). Mothers whose children have ADD/ADHD discuss their children's medication use: An investigation of blogs. Social Work in Health Care, 51(5), 402-416. doi:10.1080/00981389,2012.660567 Dryer, R., Kieman M., & Tyson, A. (2012). Parental and Professional Beliefs on the Treatment and Management of ADHD. Journal of Aitention Disorders, 16, 398-405. DOI: 10.1177/1087054710392540 Finks, K (2012). Attention Deficit Hyperactive Disorder: Symptoms and Treatment Using ‘Stimulant Medication. NASN School Nurse, 27, 24. DOL: 10.1177/1942602X11429013 Furman L. (2005). What is Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD)? 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