Grade: 8-A

by : Carlos Guzman date

march 15 2015
presented to : Gavin Hill
Economy
The economy means to be a very important fact on a society is a very important part
of society, the economy is basically is a science that study the creation of the riches
wealth?? and the production, distribution and consumption of the properties and
services, to satisfied the humans necessity. // The Economy can mean be a
synonyms of power, money, industries and companies, because those facts are vital
for a wealthy economy. The economy most of the time the economy determines if it
is a good and wealthy government, or country. The economy of a country can
depend of others. For example, if Colombia supplies food and medicine to
Venezuela and Colombia get goes bankruptcy it affects to Venezuela, because of the
trending?trading? system and the supplies.??? // The world is based on economy,
there are facts and aspects that help the world and the society to evolve, one of the
most important facts is the economy because it can cover the deductible expense ?
not sure what you mean here?, for society to evolve. The conclusion a I did is that
economy is a very important part for society and a very important part for the
governments, very single daily acts ?? could make economy grow us buying little or
big things, because a part of it go to the taxes and that makes economic wealthier
and better, for each single sale
that is my opinion of economy thanks
Ok Carlos, a good start, but it reads very similarly to another essay I have read??
Did you work with someone else to write this, or did you take information directly
from the internet? Research could be done in groups, but as I said, writing was to be
done on your own.
Some problems with sentence construction and getting your meaning across here.
As well as mistakes with word choice and conjugation.
Area
Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant,
fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary
with very natural and
sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips

Lexical Resource

Grammatical

uses a wide range of structures with

low
barely responds to the
task
does not express a
position
may attempt to
present one or two
ideas
but there is no
development
has very little control
of organizational
features
uses an extremely
limited range
of vocabulary;
essentially no
control of word
formation and/or
spelling
cannot use sentence

20-0

Grade
15

20-0

14

20-0

16

20-0

13

Range and
Accuracy
Formatting

Paragraphs

Capitalization and
punctuation.

full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor

errors occur only as slips
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.
Essay has a title, name, and class.
Other formatting guidelines are
followed.
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Student uses both competently and
fluidly.

forms except in
memorized phrases
Student fails to use
formatting

10

10

Student fails to use

any form.

Student fails to use

any.
doesnt use sentence
structure

100-0

Total
73