Economy Juan Felipe Snchez

Economy is money and for me economy is the study of money. Economy is important for managing the monetary resources in a country. People who
know about economy are very essential in a society with a good elaborated structure for managing money. Economy helps people to have a good
quality of life, with economy all the people in a country can have reasonable paycheck.
Money for me is the amount of credit a person deserves for doing his job. Not all the people have a lot of money so they know about economy to make
their amount of money more abundant. Everybody wants to have lots of things, but they need money to buy them, people apply their knowledge of
economy under that situations and they earn money in things like the stock market, amazon, eBay, etc.
In Colombia the economy is bad, everybody in the country doesn't like how the government manages the money. People here in Colombia doesn't know
of understand economy because they don't know how to manage the money. The people who manage the country spent a lot of money in things that
are useless and they try to not spent money in useful things. For example the SITP buses; people doesn't use them and that means that the major
should invest the money in other things like fixing the holes at the streets. But the major is not the only one that does that, the president spend money in
the gold extraction but the costs of extraction are more expensive than the money earned.
Examples like this show why economy is so important. People must know about economy because not knowing about economy affects the quality of life
of that person and others. I think that education is the best way to form a good country, with the help of education people in future generations will know
about economy and that will make the management of money much better.
Knowing about economy is also very important because in the actuality money moves countrie, money moves countries because all (everyone) are
looking for progress and they can't have it without money.
Economy is essential because it teaches people how to use money and money is the fuel for every action in the daily life.

You have made a good start here, but its very much your opinion, with no supporting facts. You should save your opinion for the beginning and the end
of your essay.
You have a few mistakes with word form and choice (mayor/ major dont/doesnt,) prepositions, spelling and one part I couldnt quite understand what
you mean to say.

Area
Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant,
fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary

Lexical Resource

low
barely responds to the
task
does not express a
position
may attempt to
present one or two
ideas
but there is no
development
has very little control
of organizational
features
uses an extremely

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with very natural and

sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips
Grammatical
Range and
Accuracy
Formatting

Paragraphs
Capitalization and
punctuation.

uses a wide range of structures with

full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor
errors occur only as slips
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.
Essay has a title, name, and class.
Other formatting guidelines are
followed.
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Student uses both competently and
fluidly.

limited range
of vocabulary;
essentially no
control of word
formation and/or
spelling
cannot use sentence
forms except in
memorized phrases
Student fails to use
formatting

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10

10

Student fails to use

any form.

Student fails to use

any.
doesnt use sentence
structure

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