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Thesis Sentence:
Fourth of July, demonstrates the unjust treatment of A.A, Audre Lorde effectively shifts from
naivety about racial discrimination to being victimized by the judgmental society and her
parents, as this new and crushing reality dawns on her she realize that society is corrupt by
putting limits on certain races rights <-follow order of Thesis format
Begin with a prep phrase Audre Lorde unapologetically demonstrates how irate she is in her
narrative piece, Fourth of July; she explicitly describes the trip to Washington, D.C. with her
family, and solemnly shows the unjust treatment of African Americans for those who are blind to
the judgmental reality, Lorde effectively shifts from being nave or blind towards racial
discrimination to being victimized by the judgmental society, which is corrupted by putting
restrictions on certain races rights and not allowing everyone to be looked as equals this is a
runon = model it after the one we wrote about Rinkside
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COMMENTARY:
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dilated and vulnerable eyes
symbolizes her naivety lorde says
exposed to the summer brightness
makes it seem as if she never saw
racism before- how do you know?
explain shows how her parents
overcompensation<this has nothing to
do wi your assertion Her whole life she
was is (stay in present tense) heavily
protected by impermeable walls, which
was that were put up by her parents,
who were are trying to keep her from
seeing the true reality that awaits her
describes her eyes as vulnerable
allows the reader to see that she has
not had much experience with racial
affairs directly connect to your TE
exposed- seeing a little bit of reality
for the first time lorde sees
discrimination but cannot comprehend
it huh? First time experiencing or seeing
reality never able to see racism D.C
is more open about colored people not
being equal okayconnect to the
device
The D.C. brightness keeps allows her to
see some of the from truly noticing
racial affairs makes her blind to reality
Vulnerable eyes creates a vivid
image of her innocence shows you
how nave she is
You need to discuss the device in more
depth
Lorde uses diction vulnerable and
dilated eyes to demonstrate how her
young self is naivety -(diction just
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2) ADJ: curious inquisitive
DEV: irony
TE: strange interjection coming from
my mother, who looked so much like
the people we were never supposed to
trust (7)
squinting up at the monuments to
freedom wondering why the light and
heat were both so much stronger in
Washington D.C. (12) squinting in
that silent agony that characterized
my childhood summers (9)
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3) ADJ: Frustrated
DEV: irony, metaphor
TE: I spent the afternoons squinting
because I was in that silent agony
that characterized all of my
childhood summers (9) My parents
did not approve of sunglasses, nor their
expense (11)
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you were supposed to put the thesis, assertion, and EVs sentences here!!!!
Thesis:
Throughout the narrative piece, Fourth of July, it explicitly describes the trip to Washington
D.C., discussing the judgmental reality to those who are blind to it, Audre Lorde efficiently shifts
from Innocent and nave or blind to racial discrimination to being victimize by parents and
noticing the judgmental society and her parents
Within Fourth Of July, discussing the unjust treatment of African Americans, Audre Lorde
dramatically shifts from innocent, nave and blind to racial discrimination to being victimize by
the new and crushing reality, judgmental society and her parents, articulating that the society
is corrupted by putting limits on certain races rights.
EV Sentence:
Lorde use irony to demonstrate that [Her] parents ironically [do] did not approve of
sunglasses (11) since they would make her blind to the truth, but, in reality, sunglasses are
used to shield your eyes from the brightness.
Assertion:
Although the overcompensation of her parents contributes towards Lordes nativity, it also
indicates how the brightness of D.C. robbed her of her years of youth she was robbed of her
years of youth.
EV Sentence:
Deliciously relieving to [her] scorched eyes, demonstrates how Lordes diction creates a
meaning that implies that her eyes is being tormented by a harsh memory
Commentary Sentences:
In the Fourth of July, Audre Lorde uses deliciously relieving to my scorched eyes (15) to
demonstrate how innocent and nave she is. The way she use the word eyes symbolizes her
vision and this is her way of telling the reader that she was blind to the actualities of the world.
Audre younger self was oblivious to the racial affairs around her, which makes the truth harder
for her to handle. In order to display this she use the word scorched, which allows her to
emphasize the agonizing pain she went through, her childhood being tarnished or torn from her.
Since the younger version of the adult Audre do not realize that America is an injustice, cruel,
deceiving, judgmental, and hypocritical place she do not know that her rights are being restricted
based off her skin complexion. Her parent plays a major role in this by putting up an
impermeable wall that is breached by racism, once they go to D.C. This allows the reader to
inference that her parents cannot use overcompensation to hide her from the truth. Audre is
forced realize how the world really is through a painful experience dealing with racial
discrimination. Audre realizes that the brightness in D.C. symbolized or represented the racism in
her society.