Authors Name: Erinn Marcum

Peer Evaluators Name: TaMerria Jones

Peer Workshop Procedures for Project Two (Informative Summary)
Instructions: Please allow approximately 30 minutes to thoroughly respond to each peer's essay. Respond
accordingly without focusing on grammar (focus on Higher Order Concerns only: see Higher Order Concerns
vs. Lower Order Concerns) Please respond to the following questions in the space provided. Use complete
sentences when responding to numbers 1-7.
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As you read each peer's essay, remember that the assignment here is to: write an informative summary
essay about Baldwins article, or an alternative article that covers a linguistic convention or linguistic genre.
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What does a thorough (detailed) response look like? An example is provided below:
Question #3: Is the thesis clear and effective? Explain your response.
Response: The thesis, Baldwins article provides lots of information about language, is vague and does not
provide the reader with a sense of the essays main idea. Consider clarifying your thesis by being specific. For
example, you could say: In If Black English Isn't a Language, Then Tell Me, What Is?, Baldwin asserts that
Black English is a legitimate language that is formed out of the historical, social and cultural experiences of
those who speak it.
Please Thoroughly Respond to the Following Questions (Use Complete Sentences)
1. Is the linguistic genre or linguistic convention clearly identified in the essay (for example, in Baldwins
essay, the linguistic genre is Black English)? Yes or No
Yes
2. Does the introduction of the essay catch your attention and make you want to read further? Explain your
response.
The introduction makes me want to read because I want to know more about what the song represents.

3. Is the thesis clear and effective? Explain your response.

The thesis does let me know about the subjects he will be talking and it is very clear.

4. Is the essay organized well (in chronological order)? Do the paragraphs move logically from one to the
next to support the overall thesis? Explain your response.
Yes. The essay is very organized and flows very well.

5. Does the writer present points, details, or support that seem irrelevant to the overall thesis? Explain your
response.
I think the author tried a little too hard with the Black English throughout the essay. Other than that the points,
details, and support in this essay are very good.

6. What is the strongest aspect of the essay? Why?

The strongest aspect was the body paragraphs. They all flowed so nicely and had very strong points in it.

7. What is the weakest aspect of the essay? How can it be improved?

The weakest aspect of the essay was the vocabulary. He needs to remember to do a spellcheck before turning
in the final draft.