WP1

Paragraph

Main Point of Paragraph

Final, Revised Submission

#1
(Thesis
Statement)

Although various types of articles of the same genre address

similar topics through different structural organizations
(describing their claims and evidence in distinct methods), they
are formatted comparably similar to news articles, convey the
same purpose through educating their readers on the negative
influences of Facebook, and pertain to the same audienceparents and the younger generation.

#2

This paragraph describes the purpose of the genre, online news

articles, and the techniques 3 different articles of the same topic
used to persuade their audience. It references one article as an
example, elaborating on what method/evidence the author uses
to impact their audience, which was a diagram.

#3

This paragraph describes who the audience is (mostly

adolescents and teens). It elaborates on the rhetorical situation
and refers to one article to explain the different influences
Facebook has on individuals. It explains the tone, elaborating on
purpose of the formal and persuasive tone. It also explains the
authors modes of persuasion, such as pathos and logos.

#4

This paragraph elaborates on the formatting of each article (the

conventions). All three articles were overall arranged and
structured very similarly, with differing forms of evidence. It
additionally details the purpose of the title and the effect it has on
the audience. It briefly describes the exigence of the articles.

#5

This paragraph further explains the formatting of the articles,

focusing on specific content. It explains how the hooks of one of
the articles drew their audience in. Each author began their
argument different, with one of the articles referring to a study
conducted and another with a dramatic finding. This paragraph
evaluates the effectiveness of these beginnings.

#6

This paragraph elaborates on how in each article, the author

creates credibility and trust with their audience. It explains the
effectiveness of referring to various credible sources, such as
psychologists and scientists. It also explains how the author
additionally creates credibility through videos.

#7

This paragraph explains the organization of each paragraph.

Although all three sources were similar in formatting, they
differed in the organization of their content. It compares the
different ways they start off and end their articles and the various
types of evidence they used to convince their audience of the
same, essential problem: the negative effects of Facebook. Each
author differed in their data/ proof but had the same purpose.

#8

Finally, this paragraph explains the importance of studying genres

and why individuals should study genres. It elaborates on the
value of being aware of genres and how this can be applied to
everyday life.

Although WP2 was the most academically challenging, WP1 was the writing
assignment that needed the most revision. Initially, I had 6 paragraphs, but after
the revision process, my paper now has 8, because I expanded up and thoroughly
elaborated on many of the concepts that needed further evaluations. De Piero
commented that, to get this to the next level, he think[s] [I] need to shoot for more
depth. [He]d like [me] to get super-specific and provide [him] with more detailed
examples of [my] points. As I was going through the unrevised version of WP1, I
was also focusing on the articles themselves. I lacked referring to many of the
sources, so I was determined to add more direct textual evidence and analysis.
Another aspect I focused on when I compared my original reverse outline to my
revised version was the organizational structure. I focused on editing my paper to
create a smoother flow and systematized, well thought-out, and easy-to-understand
arrangement. Instead of jumping from one topic to the next then jumping back to
the same topic, I took it slow and explained each aspect thoroughly and
meticulously. The reverse outline helped me to re-see my work by allowing me to
acknowledge which parts of the rubric I added, analyzed, and comprehensively
supported with evidence.