30 November 2015

Dr. Leslie Bruce

Department of English, Comparative Literature, and Linguistics
California State University, Fullerton
Fullerton, CA 92834-9480

Dear Dr. Bruce,

The purpose of this letter is to give examples of my use of student learning
outcomes (SLOs) that are categorized in the course syllabus. [Be aware of the
tone of the paper, you dont need to be excessively flowery with your word
choice. Since this just to persuade words that strike at the heart of the argument
are more effective than fluff words and sentence structure]. [Discuss how you are
going to organize your paper so it is clear to the reader your logic in document
choice and argumentative style.]
The document I am using to illustrate how that I have taken account of my
weaknesses in writing and learned ways in gradually increasing my
comprehension, following instructions, and applying the SLOs into my writing as
an undergraduate.[no need repetitive] Through out this course, I have learned to
integrate appropriate citations in my writing. For example, my revised editorial
paper; there are cited sources supporting my thesis about Sao Paolos water
drought. In addition, there are also side illustrations with informative captions
that support my papers argument. Good

Another example of my mastery of the SLOs would be within my rhetorical

triangles and how I was able to use that as a guide in designing my paper and
being able to find a purpose and communicate with my audience using clear
thoughts and points, which addressed the rhetorical situation. For example, the
other exercises in-class that had been given to us to analyze various authors
writing and articles addressing the issues on the drought.
One of the major benefactors for my writing was the collaboration
objective in having us compare each others ideas in groups and having each
other critique our papers in order to improve our writing further, this helped me
enhance my use of diction, organization in my papers, using different designs
and using illustrations in my papers, and being able to have constant feedback
from my group members because I am always willing to learn and continue to
improve myself as a student, being open even to the most firm criticism, because
there is always room for improvement.
Throughout this class I have recognized many weaknesses in my writing
and comprehension, however, I was able to take initiative in asking for assistance
and feedback from my group members and reading the instructions carefully in
order apply the SLOs into my writing.
My portfolio reflects my progression within the class from the beginning of
class to the end of the semester and will continue to improve my writing skills
using the SLO method.

~With Regards, [Be aware of formality vs Informality]

Johnathan Ramirez

Well written, a few errors but overall I think it gives a valid argument.
I would set up how you will present your argument in the first paragraph and that
will give your argument strength.
Be aware of tone (connotation) and the formal vs informal (denotation).

c/b Chase Goldsmith