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Kari Rangel
Sean M. George
ENG 1010D.03
22 November 2015

Factory Farming is Wrong and Needs to be Banned


I. Introduction of the problem or topic.
A. Imagine flying above a beautiful green grass, mapped out farm through a
small area in the state of Virginia. Its obvious its a farm because of the crops,
and the flat land where the animals can graze. Theres an abundance of trees, and
fence to map the acreage. A two-story white farmhouse is off to the side, and right
next to the house, a tall red barn with a brown roof. Now imagine the work it
takes to run a farm just like this one. The farmer most likely arises early to eat a
hearty breakfast, probably from his own harvest. Throughout the day the farmer
allows his animals to feed and graze and fertilize his land.
B. The image I just described is called Organic Farming, and even though this
is the type of farming has been the way to farm for centuries, it is not the norm,
and some argue its not the efficient route to feed the nations demand.
C. Introduce your claim or thesis with accompanying qualifiers that limit the
scope of your argument, narrowing the topic to a manageable length, and
states your position on the issue/topic. Vitamin A and D was discovered in the
1920s allowing farmers to add to their animal feed. Using vitamin A and D in
animal feed no longer required animals to adhere to sunlight and exercise. The
answer was to confine large amounts of animals in small spaces, feeding them
that would make them fat and ready for slaughter faster. This is called Factory
Farming, and farmers thought this would increase productivity, ultimately feeding
their community faster and more efficiently. However, its actually caused more
harm than good. In this essay I will show you that Factory Farming is wrong and
should be banned. I will point out three ways factory farming is wrong and
unethical; it causes death and disease throughout the environment and society
because of the added chemicals and toxins in the feed; the confinement of animals
is cruel and inhumane and is against what theyre naturally on earth to do; and
lastly, the workers who are employed in factory farming plants have resulted in
devastating situations that lead to deportation, disease and sickness.
II. Reason #1 (What makes this reason relevant? Is it a good reason?)
A. Topic Sentence Environment and Society
1. The majority of fast food chains, grocery stores, and restaurants
purchase their meat between four beef companies in the United States.
This means that the meat companies have the power in how the meat

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produced, from the farm to the table. The process of this production
has a lot of hidden problems; disease outbreaks, massive
contaminations and recalls throughout the United States.
2. What makes this reason effective? Food, water and land are the most
important things to us, other than shelter, and factory farming is
affecting our food and water supply along with the land we live on.
Even though big companies explain that factory farming is cheaper
and more efficient, its actually the opposite.
Transition to research
Research- Factory Farming is Not Cheap, Efficient, or Healthy by
1. Is this evidence sufficient? Between spring 2007 and spring 2009
alone there were twenty five recalls due to the virulent E. coli and
O157:H7 pathogen involving 44 million pounds of beef. When all cost
of research prevention, and market losses are added up, over the last
decade E. coli contamination has cost the beef industry and estimated
1.9 billion.
2. Is this evidence credible? When cows eat corn, E. coli forms, and then
mutates into the O157:H7 type of E. coli. Large factory faming is
producing at such a massive rate, going down the factory line to get
the final product delivered to its destination and theres no time to
efficiently sanitize the meat to prevent E. coli.
3. Is this evidence accurate? The production of corn is cheap, and easy.
Corn is harvested then reproduced and hiding in several foods. Foods
such as, sodas, cracker, breads, soups, condiments, baked goods, to
household cleaners and baby products and fast food. Processed and
fast food is so cheap because the main ingredient is factory farmed
corn and corn allows for food to have a long shelf life.
Draw conclusions/inferences
1. How does the research support this reason? Cheap food is attainable.
Americans lead busy lives, and complain they dont have enough
money to buy fruit and vegetables and the store so they buy from the
dollar menu at fast food chains. Almost half of Americans today have
diabetes, and corn should be blamed because its in so many affordable
foods.
2. And how does this reason support your thesis/claim? Barbara
Kowalcyk is the co-founder of Director of Food and Safety for
Foodborne Illness. Her son died from the O157:H7 E. coli virus while
on a family vacation in a matter of twelve days from eating a
hamburger. Kowalcyk has been on a mission to get Kevins Law to
pass in which would force companies that repeatedly have reports of
the O157:H7 virus in their meat to immediately shut down production.
Transition to next paragraph

III. Reason #2 (Is this reason relevant? Is it a good reason?)


A. Topic Sentence Confined Animals

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What makes this reason relevant? Chickens have beaks and claws to
forage in the ground for worms and insects. Cows are herbivores and
deserve to graze green grass in pasture. Goats, pigs, and horses
fertilize the land as they roam and graze making it possible the next
season to be ready for the animals to pasture again. Its how nature
works, and it works well.
2. What makes this reason effective? Factory farming are confining
animals, and keeping them from their natural life routine. The big meat
producing companies want to sell a product that is bigger and faster.
The only way to do that is to add chemicals and antibiotics to the feed,
which is corn, not grass. Chickens are so confined; their beaks and
claws are cut off to prevent them from picking and clawing each other.
Transition to research
Research The Treatment of Animals in Factory Farms is a Serious
Moral Wrong by Peter Singer
1. Is this evidence sufficient? Chickens, reared in sheds that hold 20,000
birds, now are bred to grow so fast that most of them develop leg
problems because of their immature bones cannot bear the weight of
their bodies. Chickens and hens will never see the light of day
because big companies such as Tyson and Purdue, require closed
window chicken farming. It allows for the chicken to be ready to
slaughter in 49 days, rather than 76. Society, restaurants and fast food
chains desire white meat over the dark meat, so companies like Tyson
designed the chicken to develop larges breast. These chickens can take
a step or two, but then plop down because they are too heavy to
continue.
2. Is this evidence credible? Singer goes on to say sometimes their legs
collapse under them, causing them to starve to death because they
cannot reach their food.
3. Is this evidence accurate? Some people think that factory farming is
necessary to feed the growing population of our planet. The truth,
however, is the opposite. No matter how efficient intensive pork, beef,
chicken, egg, and milk production becomes, in the narrow sense of
producing more meat, eggs, or milk for each pound of grain we feed
the animals, raising animals on grains remains wasteful.
Draw conclusions/inferences
1. How does the research support this reason? Big corporations like
Tyson, and Smithfield continue to depopulate the family farms. These
corporations sell cheap food, but the animals, rural family farms, and
the environment are paying the high cost.
2. And how does this reason support your thesis/claim?
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IV. Reason #3 (Is this reason relevant? Is it a good reason?)


A. Topic Sentence Factory Farming Workers The workers in the meat
packing plants are processing meat at a ridiculous pace; some, 200 hogs

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an hour. Feces, urine, and blood are constantly in contact with the
workers fingers are being infected and their fingernails are separating
from their fingers.
1. What makes this reason relevant? From Food Inc. Michael Pollan
explains; Teddy Roosevelt took on the beef trust, and labor unions
slowly organized meat packing workers and it turned into on the best
industrial jobs in the United States. By the 1950s, to be a meat
packing worker was like an auto worker. It was a good wage, good
benefits, pention, and then what happened? The meat packing
companies got bigger in order to serve the needs of the fast food
industry.
2. What makes this reason effective? The fast food industry is IBPs
biggest customer, so IBP started following the fast food industries way
of producing; factory line type producing. IBP started to cut wages,
pention, and sped up the factory line which caused problems that
ultimately left employees sick or deported.
B. Transition to research-In a small economically depressed town of Tar Heel
North Carolina lies the pork factory meat producing company of Smithfield
Pork. The employees they first recruited started out with the poor white and
blacks among the community. Not long after those employees were struck
with sickness from working in the plant, they had to recruit from Dentsville
South Carolina, all the way to Clinton, North Carolina. Soon after they
exhausted their 100 mile radius to recruit employees they needed to look
elsewhere. A million and a half Mexican corn farmers soon found themselves
out of work because they cannot compete with the United States cheap cost of
corn. With the help of the Government, Smithfield began bussing in Mexican
illegal immigrants to work in the meat packing plant. Up until recently, the
anti-immigrant movement forces the government and Smithfield to comply
and slowly arrests and deports no more than fifteen Smithfield workers each
day, so it doesnt affect the production line.
C. The hardest part to understand in this, is that the government is turning a blind
eye on the Smithfield officials, and only targeting the illegal immigrants
Smithfield recruited.
D. Research FOOD INC.
1. Is this evidence sufficient? They have the same mentality towards the
workers as they do towards the hogs. The hog, they dont really have
to worry about their comfort, because theyre temporary and will be
killed, and they have the same view towards the workers. Theyre not
worried about the longevity of the worker, because to them, everything
has an end.
2. Is this evidence credible? Bottom line, the United States fast food
industry is the problem. The reason these factory farms exist is
because of the fast food chains, and their desire to feed large quantities
of food to the nation.

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E. Is this evidence accurate? Draw conclusions/inferences
1. How does the research support this reason?
2. And how does this reason support your thesis/claim?
F. Transition to next paragraph
V. Objections and Rebuttals
A. Topic Sentence --In contrast to all the research proving that factory farming is
wrong, there are people who disagree.
B. Objection #1 Ronald Bailey tells us, Synthetic fertilizers now supply
forty percent of all the nitrogen used by crop plants. Without this artificially
produced fertilizer, farmers would simply not be able to grow the crops
necessary to feed the worlds population in his essay Organic Agriculture
cannot feed the world.
C. Rebuttal to Objection #1 There wouldnt be a need for artificially produced
fertilizer to fertilize the thousands and thousands of land for crops if there was no
need for a major production to feed animals that are ultimately used for the fast
food industry in the United States. We, the consumer is in charge of changing this
movement. We vote every time we purchase from the store or buy a burger from
McDonalds.
D. Objection #2 In Katerina Athanasiou essay, Most Factory Farms is
Healthy and Responsible Animal Practices she explains, public view of
animal treatment is caused by anthropomorphism, or the allocation of
human qualities to animals. For example, animal images infiltrate popular
culture through the personification of animals in books and cartoons. From
these sources, the public generates the notion that animals have needs that
parallel those of humans.
E. Rebuttal to Objection #2 There is a fine line between slaughtering animals to
consume that harbors responsibility and the slaughter of animals that are sick with
disease in how they are raised and by the feed that they eat.
F. Draw conclusions/inferences
G. Transition to next paragraph
VI. Conclusion
A. Refer to your introduction --Fast food industries, and we, the consumers can
stop this by voting in what we buy. We are an obese nation because what we
choose to buy is loaded with ingredients that are rich in chemicals and toxins
including fillers such as corn and soy that have been harvested with toxic
pesticides. Why does tomato sauce need corn? So that it can keep on the shelf
for up to five years. We have year-round tomatos avaibale, and this is only
possible because of the gasses the farmers use to speed up the growing
process and to keep it fresh from farm to supermarket. Why do we have so
many reports of sickness and death from E. coli from diseased cows, chickens,
and hogs? The big meat producing companies have the farmers tied to them
because of all the debt they owe. The farmers have no choice but to produce

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as high and as fast as possible so that they can make their yearly salary of
approximately &19,000.00.
B. The meat packing companies know that if they feed a cow grass -that was
previously on a corn diet- for only five days, the cow can rid of the E.coli
virus. But since this prolongs the weight of the cow, they simply choose to
solider on allowing the E. coli to stay on the meat.
C. Implications of the argument, summation of points, or final evocative thought
to ensure the reader remembers the argument.
D. Re-state thesis Factory farming causes more harm than good, and should be
banned. But the only way this will ever happen is if we stop demanding fast
food, and cheap food. Cook more at home, and buy at locals farms that
portray healthy and responsible farming.
E. Reiterate
F. importance/significance of your claim and position

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Works Cited

Athanasiou, Katerina. "Most Factory Farms Use Healthy and Responsible Animal
Practices." Factory Farming. Ed. Debra A. Miller. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2013. Current
Controversies. Rpt. from "Ethics of Factory Farms." www.cornellsun.com 31 Mar. 2010.
Opposing Viewpoints in Context. Web. 22 Nov. 2015.
Bailey, Ronald. "Organic Agriculture Cannot Feed the World." Global Resources. Ed.
David M. Haugen. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2008. Opposing Viewpoints. Rpt. from "Organic
Alchemy: Organic Farming Could Kill Billions of People." Reason (5 June 2002). Opposing
Viewpoints in Context. Web. 22 Nov. 2015.
"Factory Farming Is Not Cheap, Efficient, or Healthy." Factory Farming. Ed. Debra A.
Miller. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2013. Current Controversies. Rpt. from "Three Big Factory
Farm Lies." CAFO: The Tragedy of Industrial Animal Factories. Ed. Daniel Imhoff. 2010.
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Food Inc.. Dir. Robert Kenner. Magnolia Pictures, 2008. Film.
Singer, Peter. "The Treatment of Animals in Factory Farms Is a Serious Moral Wrong."
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Rpt. from "Factory Farming: A Moral Issue." Minnesota Daily 22 Mar. 2006. Opposing
Viewpoints in Context. Web. 22 Nov. 2015.
Wuerthner, George. "Factory Farming Damages Land and Water." Factory Farming. Ed.
Debra A. Miller. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2010. Current Controversies. Rpt. from "Factory
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