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One of the biggest challenges writers face is reading their own work as a
reader rather than as the writer. Select a draft that does not already have a
partner. Read that draft slowly and carefully to see whether they have made
their focus question (thesis) clear, described their subject sufficiently, offered
enough evidence to support their analysis, and provided their audience with
some insight about their subject. Respond to your peers original draft post
with an overall impression of their paper and attach this Word file with
answers to the questions below.
1.
worth considering?
Not very clear in the beginning however, the second paragraph hints at the
focus question and the conclusion makes it more clear. (I could be wrong) A
comparison between the Ewe Adze and other religions that have morbid
entities.- It initially reigned as an intimidating figure of evil whose purpose
was to explain what could not be comprehended and to influence the Ewe
citizens to make morally sound decisions, and, to my enlightenment, was not
directly created as a metaphor of malaria, but the Adze proved to have
similar characteristics to how the Devil is used in other Christian societies.2.
indicate why this analysis matters? How else might they begin?
Good use of adjectives caught the interest of the audience and the details
behind kept it. Not really sure. Maybe go more in depth with focus question to
give the reader insight on what subject is being addressed in the piece.Deep within the culture and beliefs of South Africa lies a soul-possessing,
blood-sucking, mythical creature known as the Adze.3.
audience? Is there any other information you might need to follow their
analysis?
4.
What insights have you gained from the analysis? Have they
stated their insights explicitly? How likely is it that readers will accept their
conclusions?
I've gained insight on the religious views of another country. Yes. More likely if
more information is added about the Adze and its implied symbolism for
malaria. The comparison of the Adze to Christianity's devil is very clear.
5.
Is the point of their analysis clear? Have they stated the point
The point of their analysis became clear towards the conclusion of the piece.
Yes.
6.
sufficient?
Have they integrated them smoothly into their textis it clear what they
are saying and where (and why) they are citing others? And have they
documented any sources theyve cited?
Yes they are credible and convincing, and yes. Yes it is very clear and yes
they have documented the sources cited.
8.
any images or other visual dataand if so, how do they contribute to the
analysis? If not, is there any information that might be easier to
understand if presented in a table or chart or accompanied by an image?
Its pretty effective if the focus of the analysis is made more clear that would
help. No. Perhaps an image of the creature would help the audience
understand the correlation made between Adze of the Ewe people and the
devil of Christianity or another religion.
11.
transitions from one point to the next? Are there headingsand if not,
would they help?
The analysis is easy to follow. I think headings would be a bit much but they
could also help.
12.
Consider the title. Does it make clear what the analysis is about,