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Improving Descriptive

Writing

Writing

Painting an Original Picture

 

Purpose of Descriptive Writing

Purpose of Descriptive Writing

Describe something in an original

and

unique so that it appeals to the

five

senses

Touch

 

it

 

Taste it

Hear

it

 
 

See it

Smell it

 
 

Keys of Being Descriptive

Keys of Being Descriptive

Be original

 

Be

creative

 

Stretch

your imagination

For

example, instead of this:

 

Try

this:

The The sun hot, cut yellow itself sun on a

 
 

sharp went behind peak and the bled

into mountain the valley.—John and covered

 

Steinbeck the valley in red.

How’s This?  She was super hero beautiful. Her hair was as black as coal, her
How’s This?
 She was super hero beautiful. Her hair was
as black as coal, her lips red as blood.
Is it original and creative?
 

Clichés: The Descriptive Killer

Clichés: The Descriptive Killer

1

: a trite phrase or expression; Also

:

the

idea

expressed by it

2

:

something (as a menu item)

that

has

become

overly familiar or

commonplace

Finding Clichés Through Experience  If you have seen it  Or heard it  It’s
Finding Clichés Through
Experience
 If you have seen it
 Or heard it
 It’s probably a cliché
Finding Clichés Through Others  Ask someone really old  (You know, anyone over 21)
Finding Clichés Through Others
 Ask someone really old
 (You know, anyone over 21)
 

Finding Clichés On-line

 

Choose a keyword to look up

     

Go

to

a cliché website and look up

the

keyword

   

Cliché

finder is one of the best

 

places

to

look:

 
 

/

   

You

may have to try more than one

keyword

Fixing Clichés  Identify the clichés  Replace them with more descriptive writing – Think of
Fixing Clichés
 Identify the clichés
 Replace them with more descriptive writing
– Think of a new comparison
– Look up words in a thesaurus
– www.m-w.com
 

A Little Practice

A Little Practice

Each of you will be given a poem

 

Identify ALL the clichés

Replace

half of them (you can choose

the

easiest

ones

if

you’d like)

Don’t

worry about making it rhyme

We’ll

do

the first stanza together

Which of the following do think are clichés?

She’s as pure as the driven

She’s as pure as the driven

snow, ,

snow

Her

Her

face is as white as a

face is as white as a

sheet, ,

sheet

Her

Her

hands are as smooth

hands are as smooth

as

as

silk, ,

silk

Her

Her

nails

nails

as red as a beet

as red as a

.

Same Old New Girl

She’s as pure as the driven snow, Her face is as white as a sheet, Her hands are as smooth as silk, Her nails as red as a beet.

Her hair is like the golden sun, Her eyes blue like the sky, She’s as beautiful as an angel,

and as hot as a firecracker on the 4 th of July.

Her beauty may be skin deep, But her mind is as sharp as a knife. I’m just small potatoes, And she seems larger than life

They say she’s one in a million, But I don’t believe what they say. If she’s all that and a bag of chips, Why say it with a cliché?

Her temper is as quick as lightning, Her hatred cold as ice, Her laughter is loud and clear, But her crying is as quiet as mice.

Assignments turned in tomorrow at the beginning of class will be eligible for full credit