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Dear Matt,

Thank you for taking the time to actually teach us and helping me significantly improve
not only my work but my attitude about writing. What I took from the process of writing and
revising in the WPs is that writing and revising is a process. It is a process that needs to take
seriously to produce good and worthwhile writing. Writing and revising for me used to consist of
looking only at the bigger picture. I would reread my work once or twice changing a few things
to make the whole paper sound better. In this class I learned to analyze my own writing by
breaking it down at the sentence level. This new way of looking at my writing has allowed me to
recognize how important word choice is for the overall piece of writing.
Breaking things down and looking at word choice is what lead to my focus on simplicity,
one of the most significant things I took from this course. The tips from the video on revision,
redundancy and excessiveness helped me simplify my usually complex writing style. Zinssers
piece on simplicity helped assure me that writing in this simple manner is the best way to help
your audience comprehend your desired message. I became more aware of the message that I
was trying to give and the way that that message was being interpreted by the reader. The peer
review exercises gave me the opportunity to get feedback that was helpful in providing me with a
clearer direction with my editing. Taking notes on how I sounded as a writer gave me an insight
into what I needed to change in order have power over my own message.
I chose to revise WP2 and PW3. I found that these two assignments were more complex
making them interesting to work with. They utilized more of the class content which allowed for
a broader review of the classroom objectives. WP2 called for a more in depth analysis of two
scholarly fields I am most interested in. Being able to take a critical view at each discourse
community and analyze their unique genre conventions was beneficial for my understanding of
both disciplines. WP3 was engaging because it encompassed a number of the ideas and readings.
As I was going through the reader looking for ideas to incorporate into my revision, I found most
of the readings provided information that tied into the assignment. This assignment was good
because it contained the creative aspect of part one and the loaded aspect of part three, both of
which required a good amount of brainstorming a number of ideas from class.
In WP2 I got rid of unnecessary fluff and concentrated on significant content and
analysis. I thought about the meaning and components of each sentence as they related to the
message I was trying to convey. The message was the importance of psychology and
communication to society, and the individuals inner world. I stated how the two fields enrich
and add value to peoples personal lives leading to the betterment of society as a whole. I

claimed that even though they both have these same goals they take different viewpoints leading
to distinct discourse communities and genre conventions.
In the revision of WP3 I made part one a more authentic piece of textbook writing. I
created a stronger connection between gravitational waves and light/sound waves in order to
follow the conventions of reinforcing information and building on prior knowledge. Using a
previously understood example gives a reference point to understanding new knowledge that
otherwise would be very difficult to take in without context. I added more detail in my
introduction of gravitational waves and in the explanation of how the measurement tools worked.
Adding this information made the text more authentic providing information to help the reader
understand the content and internalize it for the future.
For part two of WP3 I gave more depth to my introduction. I added greater meaning in
order to emphasize the importance I felt for the need of the translation. In the body paragraphs I
included more course readings. Using the works of other writers to justify my actions and
explain my thought processes giving reason to my choices. I was concise and simplistic with the
information that I included in each of the paragraphs opting to paraphrase in order to make my
message clear and direct.
In WP2 I gave importance to the comparing and contrasting of the two disciplines using
their goals, evidence and use of rhetoric. I give meaningful analysis on why the two fields
approach these things similarly or differently giving strength to my argument on how they
individually work for society. In WP3 I concentrated in index and stress. I looked at the
components of each sentence making sure they followed a flow. This flow was achieved with the
simplifying of my sentence structures. I paid attention to word choice in order to give more
substantial analysis of the research study and greater weight to part one. I incorporated the course
readings with purpose and incorporated them seamlessly to give prominence to my argument.
When revising the essays I took into account feedback on repetitiveness and unnecessary
information. I condensed some of the paragraphs in WP3 and took a whole paragraphs out of
WP2 due to this feedback. I used the comments and the rubric of the two graded assignments to
guide my revisions. For big picture concerns I used the three questions in the peer editing
exercises to get a perspective of my work from a different analytical point of view.
Apart from part one of WP3 I really liked my work in WP2. I thought that the actual
content and analysis that I brought was the most insightful and thought out analysis I wrote. I
liked the way that I purposely incorporated the writings from the reading and the quotes from my
sources. I used the sources as a way to strengthen my arguments giving weight and a unique

perspective in both of the assignments. To improve these pieces I would go back to the beginning
and brainstorm more ideas to add to the uniqueness and strength of my analysis continuing on
with the goal of clear and direct writing.
My work in this portfolio reflects what I read and learned about genre and genre
conventions. Using these conventions to analyze texts and taking the writers point of view when
reading through different genres. I learned that different genres shape their goals, arguments and
evidence differently and this is reflected in their unique conventions. This is reflected most in my
work for WP2. WP3 shows everything I learned about simplicity and editing. The editing and
revising I did for part one greatly improved the authenticity of the text genre showing what I
learned about conventions. Part two showed my work on flow and making arguments simple and
to the point. Genre conventions, reading like a writer, and the process of editing and revising is
that I will take as I approach writing in the future. For future assignments I will try to give
myself extra time to really reflect on what I wrote and rewrite in order to create pieces that are
strong in analysis and unique in their argument.
Thank you for making this Writing Two experience worthwhile. Reflecting back on
everything that we have done and learned, I am thankful for your work and the way that you
chose to structure your class. I hope that I keep my resolutions to become a better more
methodical writer as long as I can.
Sincerely,
Dayanna Yanez

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