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in Korea.
I. Introduction (paragraph 1)
A. Hook: College is everything to Korean students.
B. Connecting information: Korean students study hard for 12 years, only to get into
higher level college.
C. Thesis statement: Its because of our countrys strange structure. The treatment of
a person who have only graduated high school and who graduated college is so
different. Ill suppose that A has graduated only high school, and B has graduated
college.
II. Body
A. Paragraph 2 (first point of comparison) topic sentence: The first difference
appears in salary.
1. If they have same ability, B would get much higher salary than A.
a. In Average, people like B have higher position than people like A. Its
because of schools ties exist at workplace.
b. Elderly people give more chance to employees from their school. This is
the reason why salary differs.
2. Salary also affects to the quality of life.
a. B would have more spare money, so he/she can enjoy more leisure
activities.
b. Also, B can prepare for immediate payment like cost for family events,
which A cannot.
3. It is very important factor in life actually.
a. It is related with self-confidence.
b. We can easily imagine it when we think of the situation A and B goes to
the graduates association. B could enjoy that and could be easily hung
out with their friends, because he/she would be treated well. But A may
could not enjoy the place because of inferiority complex.
B. Paragraph 3 (second point of comparison) topic sentence: Treatment at workplace
also differs.
1. The person like A ignored by elderly people while working.
Ignorance at workplace, salary comes from that workplace, ignorance from the
boss and a lot of people passing by. The reason why I wrote this essay is my will
to change this atmosphere. This is not the right society and right flow.
B.