Name:

Adrian Bassett

Draft submitted on time: YES NO

Participated in Peer Review: YES NO Final submitted on time: YES NO
The chart below reflects instructor evaluation of your Profile assignment as Excellent, Good, Acceptable, or
Unsatisfactory on each criterion. Posts that satisfy the criteria earn a C. To earn a B, the final essay must score overall an
Acceptable-Plusyou must go beyond fulfilling the criteria. To earn an A, it must be rated Excellent in most of the criteria.
Use this information to decide if you would like to revise this assignment for your portfolio, and if so, what areas to focus on.
Audience, Purpose, and Subject
Essay has a snappy title that catches the readers attention
and indicates the topic and argument.
Essay satisfies an academic motive that is specific,
purposeful, and significant by answering one of two central
inquiry questions Does this one persons story tell us anything about the
perspective of others who belong to a group and about
people in general?
What does this persons story say about social situations,
trends, or problems?
Essay focuses on detailed and relevant subject matter and
features a detailed look at one person who is both unique AND
typical.

Excellent

Acceptable +

Acceptable

Unsatisfactory

Structure & Development of Ideas

Essay includes a strong beginning that answers, Why this
person? Includes sufficient background information to provide
context for the profile.
Essay uses effective anecdotes that show rather than tell and
narrative as a method of development.
Effectively utilizes dialogue, scene, and setting to craft a
portrait of the subject for the reader.
Essay uses point of view effectively: (a) First person, where
the writers thoughts are integral to the profile; or (b) Third
person, where the writers thoughts and reactions are withheld.
Essay recognizes the limitations of how much the writer/reader
can generalize from one example.

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Use of Evidence
Essay relies on evidence to support claims drawing from
interview(s), observation(s), relevant outside research (cited
properly), or personal experience.
Evidence is cited properly in a consistent format as needed.

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Language and Style

Essay includes sensory details and vivid word choice in order
to show rather than tell. Uses exact and specific details.
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Sentences are lively, engaging, and relatively error free.
Author comes across as a credible writer and appeals to the
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values and emotions of the audience.
Essay is 3-4 pages, double-spaced, in 12pt. Times New
Roman font with 1-inch margins, page numbers in the header,
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plus a title, and a heading on the first page only including
name, date, and version of assignment.
Additional Comments: Adrian Narratively speaking, this is a very strong essay great showing details, clear story
line, entertaining dialogue. However, the essay does not yet make a specific point. To get to that you will want to develop
your academic motive and consider how Katie is both unique AND typical. In this specific case it may actually be her
typicalness that is more relevant. Therefore, you will want to build up the contrast by telling us more about your
background and why Texas is so mysterious and intriguing to you.