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Stephany Vargas
Professor Deadrick
English 102
03/04/2616
The Cognitive Effect Of Violence
Over the decade gun violence has become a major issue; consequently, it has
implemented fear in the lives of innocent people. The effects of atrocious attacks in various
places have hampered our society. Furthermore, shootings at schools, churches and movie
theaters show the significance of our debased world. In addition, the media and the entertainment
industry have gotten accused of playing a major role in the overwhelming amount of gun
violence. Likewise, the media and the entertainment industry have been blamed of corrupting
individuals morality with their violent movies and brutal video games. Hence, society is losing
its valor, safeness, and amiability.
In the article The Raid: Redemption by Roger Ebert, the article was accredited and
published through RogerEbert.com. In the article The Raid: Redemption, the author targets
moviegoers, young people, and ordinary people in an attempt to lure them to sympathize with his
analysis. Likewise, Ebert states that The Raid: Redemption is not a good movie because it
promotes gun violence, brutality, and animalistic behavior. Henceforth, Ebert took a traditional
approach by labeling The: Raid: Redemption as a confusing and horrific movie. The author
uses compare and contrast and illustrations to draw similarities between the film and video
games. Moreover, Ebert likens the movie to a video game in which fighting, shootings and
killings are the playing regulations. He emphasizes how the movie lacks a plot and meaning.

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Thus, the argument is effective because the author employs the use of logic, real life examples,
compare and contrast and his experience to defend and illuminate his readers.
In the article The Raid: Redemption, Ebert utilized the logos appeal to convince his
readers to distance themselves from the action thriller The Raid: Redemption. Moreover,
Ebert seeks to penetrate the mind of his readers by suggesting that The Raid: Redemption is a
violent movie that does not contain any meaningful elements. He makes known of his
disapproval of the movie when he suggests, There's obviously an audience for the film,
probably a large one. They are content, even eager, to sit in a theater and watch one action figure
after another pound and blast one another to death. They require no dialogue, no plot, no
characters, no humanity (Ebert). The foregoing statement clearly illustrates how the author
dislikes the movie because it lacks a plot, and dialogue among the characters. The author cannot
understand how people can watch such an appalling movie, in which humanity is insulted and
defiled. Furthermore, the author appeals to the logic of his readers when he suggests that the
movie title does not make sense; he ask who or what is being redeemed? And how (Ebert)?
Ebert makes a bold statement by asking such a question, he is simply trying to carve into the
mind of his readers in an attempt to make them understand that The Raid: Redemption is a
sinister film that makes absolutely no sense. In addition, Ebert supports his claim extremely well
by providing sustainable and strong evidence. His reasoning and analysis are clear and
persuasive. Lastly, Ebert acknowledges that other peoples analysis of the movie might differ
from his when he states, Theres obviously an audience for the film, probably a large one. They
are content, even eager, to sit in a theater and watch one action figure after another pound and
blast one another to death (Ebert).The above statement demonstrates how Ebert understands

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that people's analysis and judgment of the film may differ from his. Some love it for its cruelty
and action packed violence, while others hates it for its detrimental attributes.

Ebert incorporates the use of pathos in his article to evoke the emotions of his readers in
an attempt to convince them to dislike the movie The Raid: Redemption. Ebert has been a
movie critic all his life, and he is good at it; thus we can assume he has the right to criticize a
film, which he dislikes for lacking many primary theatrical elements. Furthermore, Ebert uses
vivid description to underline the cruelty, brutality, and bloodiness that occurs in the film, in
order to raise the awareness of his readers about the negative effects The Raid: Redemption
can have on a viewer. Moreover, Ebert appeals to the readers emotions with a solid description
of the film when he says, It is "hard-driving, butt-kicking, pulse-pounding, bone-crunching,
skull-smashing, bloodcurdling (Ebert). The above passage clearly shows how the author uses
meaningful description to awake his readers sentiments. Ebert wants his readers to picture the
movie in their heads in order for them to see the gravity of savageness that is portrayed in the
film. He yearns for his readers to understand that The Raid: Redemption is nothing more than
a soundless video game filled with violence; which in turn lacks a storyline and meaning.
The author uses the rhetorical strategies of compare and contrast and illustration in order
to support his claim. Likewise, the author employed the use of compare and contrast to show
how the movie lacks quality, dialogue and plot. In addition, Ebert compared the film to video
games by stating that "The Raid: Redemption is essentially a visualized video game that spares
the audience the inconvenience of playing it. There are two teams, the police SWAT team and the
gangsters (Ebert). The foregoing statement emphasizes how Ebert dislikes The Raid:
Redemption and how he believes the movie lacks adequate meaning, dialogue, and character

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development; which often goes missing in videogames. Moreover, the author also used a copious
amount of illustration to depict the extreme violence in the film. Ebert wants his readers to
visualize how intense the action scenes are when he states, A fighter stands in a corridor and
demolishes an enemy. As the enemy falls, another springs into position from around corner,
ready to be demolished in turn. Then another. It's like they're being ejected by an automatic
victim dispenser (Ebert). The above passage depicts the excessive violence that is present in the
film and the savagery that encompasses each action. Thus, the author wanted his readers to
understand how the violence in the film was over the top and endless.
I have always had an issue with the American film industry. The United State has the
largest Film industry in the world, yet from my point of view it appears to be the least diverse in
terms of movie genres. Furthermore, violent action films tend to dominate streaming, movie
theatres and household TV sets. This scarce diversity in movie genre is extremely frustrating;
being a strong pacifist I find that my options are limited. My pacifist mentality is being
challenged by the production of excessive violent movies; the entertainment industry has failed
to promote peace, instead it has infused a corruptive snare with their misleading movies.
Likewise, I agree with Eberts point of view that the film is unworthy of the attention and praise
it has received because the movie lacks a strengthening moral message. Hence, I am not a target
reader of the argument because my analysis of the film intertwines with the authors.
In the article, the Raid Redemption Ebert claims that the film is mediocre, unworthy of
praise and overly violent. Ebert draws his conclusion from the fact that the movie is saturated
with violence, and filled with demoralizing factors; which he claims will corrupt citizens,
mislead children, and cement a violent seed in our world. Furthermore, Ebert has successfully
convinced me to side with his interpretation and analysis of the film; in which he employed the

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use of compare and contrast and illustrations as mechanism in defending his claim. Thus, his
analysis reinforced my preexisting position that The Raid: Redemption is a senseless and
destructive movie to our society. Likewise, Eberts great analysis and writing style has enabled
him to capture people of all sorts of backgrounds; his effective use of illustrations allowed him to
land violent movie addicts, and pacifist into his team. Moreover, one of Ebert key arguments was
the one in which he drew similarities between the film and video games. His assertion of the
negative aspects of the films strengthened his argument. Lastly, Ebert defended his argument and
claim efficiently; hence, his argument was stainless and perfect.

Works Cited
Ebert, Roger. "The Raid: Redemption Movie Review (2012) | Roger Ebert." All Content. Ebert
Digital LLC, 21 Mar. 2012. Web. 04 Mar. 2016.

Rubric

Concise Article Summary and

established Rhetorical Context of the
issue

Assertive/Evaluative/Arguable Claim
double points (0-8)

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Effective & Well-developed

Paragraphs (Details & Rhetorical
Analysis)
Appropriate Analytical Tools

(See At a glance, page 40)

Follows MLA Standards: Document
guidelines, citations, Works Cited Page
Uses 3rd Person Voice (S/He/It, They)
where appropriate (1st person is ok for
Personal Context paragraph)

Mechanics/Usage/Grammar

(Includes Syntax)
Adherence to Requirements of the
paper

Self- Evaluation

Submitted w/Final
Total

A = 40 36

36

B = 35 32

C = 31 28

D = 27 24

F = 23 Below

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Final Grade: _______36________