TheNiceSideOfHumanNature

JordanPierceoncestatedPeopleareinherentlygood.
Some
peoplethinkhumansareinherentlybadwhileothersthinkhumansare
inherentlygood.Oneexamplewhypeoplearegoodisthatmostpeople
givemoneytohomelesspeoplethatarehungryandneedshelter.

Onereasonwhypeopleareinherentlygoodisbecausetheyare
forgiving.
AsauthorHughesmentionedonpagethree
,Nowheretakethis
tendollarsandbuyyourselfsomebluesuedeshoes.Bylookingatthis,
readerscanassumethatsheisforgivingbecauseevenrightafterRoger
triedtorobhersheturnsaroundandgiveshimtendollars.Thisshows
readersthatMrs.LuellaBatesWashingtonJonesisforgiving.Tobuildon
thispeopleareinherentlygood.
Onemorereasonpeopleareinherently
goodiswheniaccidentallybrokeawindowwithabaseballandmyparents
said
It'sokitwasanaccident.Thismeansmyparentsforgavemefor
breakingthewindow.Basedontheevidencereadersmaybelievethat
peopleareinherentlygood.

Anotherreasonwhypeopleareinherentlygoodisbecausepeople
aregenerous.
TheworkofO.HenryintheGiftofMagisays
willyoubuy
myhair?ThismeansthatDellainthegiftofmagiisgenerous.Thisproves
thatpeoplearegenerous.Thisisimportantbecauseifpeoplewerenot
generouspeoplewouldn'tgetthehelptheyneed.
Anotherexamplewhy
peoplearegenerousisinthelordOfTheFlies
Simonsittingbetweenthe
twinswipedhismouthandshovedhispieceofmeatovertherockstopiggy
whograbbedit.Bylookingatthisitmeansthatsomeonegaveuptheir
ownfoodforsomeoneinneed.Thismattersbecauseitprovesthatpeople
aregenerous.Readerscancometotheconclusionthatpeopleare
generous.

Additionally,peoplearegoodbynaturebecausetheyarerespectful.
Tobuildonthisandexamplewhypeoplearerespectfuliswhenpeopletalk
tosomeonetheylookuptotheysay
sirinsteadoftheregularname.Inthis
youlearnwhypeoplearerespectful.Thisisimportantbecauseitisgood
etiquettetotalkinarespectfulmanner.
Thisshowshowyoushouldtalkto
someonethatisimportantinyourlife.Inthankyoumamitstates
Theboy
wantedtosaysomethingelseotherthanthankyoumam.Itisclearthat

thewomenisimportanttoRogersohesaidthankyouinarespectfulway.
Thisisveryimportantbecauseitprovesthatpeoplearerespectful.Based
ontheevidencereaderscanconcludethatpeoplearerespectful.

Althoughsomepeoplethinkpeoplearebadibelievepeopleare
inherentlygood.Despitethatmosthumansthinkpeoplearebadibelieve
humansaregoodbecausethererespectful,generous,andforgiving.
Nonethelesspeoplearegoodbecausetheyhelppeople.Itisessentialfor
peopletorecognizethatpeoplearegoodandshouldteachotherstobe
good.

Rubricratingsubmittedon:2/5/2016,3:50:29PMbybholt@ggusd.net

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