Name: Ainesh

Date: 8/3/13

Rewriting Frankenstein
How can your environments impact who you are and the choices you make? Pick one of the following scenes from the play. Think about how the situation affected the Monster. Think about how if the scene unfolded differently, the Monster may have changed. Rewrite one of the following to show how they would have impacted the Monster and his choices in life if the situation had been different. 1. 2. 3. 4. When Frankenstein sees the monster for the first time and his reaction is to run away When the monster is in a town, where dogs and towns people are after him When Felix shoots the monster When the monster kills William

Your scene should have between 2-4 characters. 1 or 2 of these characters may be your own characters (not from the play). Your scene will have two parts: 1. What happens to the monster (the situation) 2. His choices as a result (the impact)

Which scene will you rewrite?Scene 3 What is the situation in the scene? What do others do to the Monster?Monster goes into house of Felix.This scene is about felix shooting the monster because the monster is with agathe in the house. Even though agathe tells felix to stop he goes ahead and shoots the monster twice in the shoulder.

How does this affect the Monster? What impact does it have on his life? What choices does he make as a result? He was shot so of course there was the physical affect but he thought there was no one who liked him but agathe but since he was chased away he thought no one liked him and he was in need of someone to love.His choice was to go kill frankenstiens brother and threaten frankenstien to make him a wife. How will this affect the Monster? What impact will it have on his life? What choices will he make as a result? I think the monster would just stay with felix and agathe and not go kill Frankensteins brother because he would feel that he has someone that understands him instead of trying to kill him.Themonster will learn manners from agathe and learn how to hunt from felix

How will you change the situation? How might things happen differently during the scene? I think I will change the part that felix shoots the monster and I would rather have agathe jump infront of the bullet and felix will ask for help from the monster and the monster will saveher life and they will all live together.Monster will learn manners from agathe and learn how to hunt from felix.

Rewrite the scene using your ideas from the purple boxes above. Your scene should:

Name: Ainesh

Date: 8/3/13

Include A Note On Staging refer to page 6 in the Frankenstein play o Explain the set design o Explain the costumes and props o Explain lighting, sound, and special effects Include a paragraph to explain your choices for your Note On Staging Include descriptions of the characters refer to page 8 in the Frankenstein play o List each character and give a short (2-3 sentences) description of his/her appearance and personality Include stage directions (in italics) to indicate how the characters move and how they speak In your scene, include dialogue that will move the plot along and show how the new situation unfolds and how it impacts the Monsters life

A note on staging: A simple cottage in the woods. Inside: a table, some food, 2 beds Costumes: MONSTER has a bloody shirt FELIX a simple cotton shirt and pants AGATHE a simple country dress LIGHTING Warm lighting like sunny. A spotlight on agathe when she jumps in to save the monster. Characters Monster: Happy he found someone then sad again. Then when he saves agathe hes happy and he gets to live with them. Felix: At first is mean but then becomes good friends with the monster. Accepts the monster. Agathe: Kind hearted even though she is blind. Accepted the monster after he explains.

I want to have lighting because it makes the whole play more exciting and it looks better. I want a normal sunny day because its in the woods. I really want to have a spotlight on agathe when she saves the monster because that just proves that she cares for him and it makes it more exciting if there is a spotlight. I want felix to hold a ninja star because its cooler! I want it to be in a cottage in the woods because that seems like a place that the monster would go. I want them to wear old clothes because this story and the way its written is kind of old. I want not too many things in the house because well its a cottage in the woods so its not like they would have loads of furniture.
Comment [JH1]: Good explanation here of what you want the stage to look like and why,

Name: Ainesh

Date: 8/3/13

My Version of Frankenstein Act 2 In a simple cottage in the woods. A table and some food like cheese and apples. Monday morning light shining through the windows. A chill breeze in the air. Outside a river shining in the bright sunlight. Two single beds for brother and sister, named Felix and Agathe. Agathe standing there eating some fruits and Felix ready to go hunting. Felix: Bye Agathe. Ill be back in about an hour. Dont worry if Im late. Agathe: What are you hoping catch today, Felix? Felix: Maybe some deer? Or rat? Agathe: Wow. That sound delightful, good luck. I really havent eaten deer since last month. Felix: Yeah, me too. Alright Ill try to get some deer. Dont let any intruders in and do not eat all the food while Im gone. Agathe: Thanks. Felix: Bye. Agathe: Bye. As Felix leaves the cottage Agathe starts packing up the food. She hears the door and looks up. Agathe: Felix, have you forgotten something again? Monster: (screams) Ugh!! Agathe: Whos there? Who is that? Monster: Friend, Friend! Agathe: Where did you come from? Monster: An evil doctor name FrankenstienFrankenstein dug up dead body parts and made me. Agathe: No way. Thats not possible! Monster: Cant you see me! Agathe: No. Let me feel your face. Monster: Ughh.
Comment [JH2]: Dialogue is good, but you need to also indicate how they are talking and what the stage looks like.

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Date: 8/3/13
Comment [JH3]: A narrator needs to say this, as it will be hard for the audience to know what the monster is hoping for!

The monster lets Agathe touch his face, hoping that Agathe will let him live with her and her brother. Agathe: Oh my god you feel like a monster. Monster: Yes! Monster! Yes! Agathe: Are you ok? Monster: Yes, but I need somewhere to live. Agathe: You can stay here. We have plenty of food and supplies. Monster: Yay! But I will help with wood supplies and hunting. Agathe: Ok, as long as youre happy. Monster: But I dont want to intrude. Agathe: No! Its ok but Im worried about my brother. He doesnt like people who come into the woods. Monster: Wow! Thats kind of scary. Where is he right now? Agathe: Hes gone hunting for deers. Monster: Wow that sounds fun. Agathe: He can teach you to shoot. Monster: He hunts with a gun? Agathe: Yeah. He can teach you if you want. Monster: Yeah. Thatd be great! But I really dont want to intrude if its not ok with your brother. I can find someone else. I will eventually, maybe even someone like me. Agathe: No itll be ok. I will explain to my brother. But how would you find someone else. Wight Right when the monster is about to say something the door opens and in walks Felix, puts his head up and sees the monster. Felix: (screams) Agathe get away from that vile thing. Felix loads his musket and is ready to shoot. Agathe: No! Wait! Felix!

Comment [JH4]: How are they speaking to each other?

Comment [JH5]: Good you need more dialogue like this!

Name: Ainesh

Date: 8/3/13

Felix shoots but right when he does (spotlight on Agathe) Agathe runs and jumps in front of the monster to save his life, the bullet flies and hits agathe right in the shoulder. Felix runs to agathe and picks her up. Felix: She is still breathing we need to cover the wound with a towel. Get one from the kitchen sink. (screams) Now! Monster: Okay. The monster walks to the kitchen sink gets a towel and hands it to felix. As felix puts pressure on the wound the monster is sitting there with a guilty face. Felix: We need to take her to the hospital but I am not strong enough to carry her one whole mile. The monster: Ill do it, it was my fault anyways. Felix hands over Agathe to the monster. The monster starts to run towards the door and leaves. (Two hours later). Felix is waiting for them to get back, he hopes Agathe is ok. They enter the room. Felix: Is she ok? The monster: Yes, I got her there just in time. Felix: Oh my god. Thank you. I can give you anything what do you want in return. The monster: Why dont we wait until Agathe is up then we will discuss what to do. Felix takes Agathe and lays her on the bed as the monster sat in silence doing nothing. Felix: Alright, thats a good idea. She needs to be a part of the decision as well. 2 hours later. Agathe wakes up and screams as if she is having a bad dream. Felix: Agathe, are you okay? The monster: What happened? Agathe: Im fine I just had a bad dream, sorry for alarming you. Agathe slowly gets up and has a shooting pain. Felix gives her a hand. The monster: So shall we discuss.
Comment [JH6]: This needs to be done through a narrator.

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Date: 8/3/13

Agathe: Discuss what? Felix: Just discuss about the monster saving your life. Agathe: He did? Thank you so much, what can I do to repay you? The monster: Can I live here. I can sleep on the floor and I will help with the hunting and anything else. Agathe: Are you okay with this Felix? Felix: This is a small thing. Of course Im okay with it. The monster: Oh my god. Thank you so much. I am friend. You dont have to worry. Felix: No problem, its the least we can do. You saved my sisters life. Agathe woul d you like some herbal tea? Agathe: Yeah, sure. Thanks Felix The monster: She saved my life as well. Agathe: Anyways, come live with us. We would be happy to do it. Felix: Yeah. Agathes right. Monster: Thank you. Felix walks to the kitchen and makes some tea for Agathe. They all live together. Felix and the monster go hunting together every single day and with the monsters help they catch a lot more animals then before. They have become good friends. Agathes wound is starting to heal.
Comment [JH7]: This also needs to be done with a narrator!

Name: Ainesh

Date: 8/3/13

Criterion A: You compose a script that shows how a situation impacts the Monsters life using a lot of details (dialogue and stage directions).

Criterion B: You write in the form of a script, using the appropriate structures expected in a play script. Your scene builds appropriately.

Criterion C: Your write your characters to reflect their personalities and tone. Your script is free of grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors.

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You do not reach the standard described below. Your script reflects very limited imagination Your script does not use the Your script doesnot reflect the voice of and creativity. It does not show the organizational structures of a script. the characters. situation and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is generally disorganized. Your script has veryfrequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Your script has no details (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects limited imagination and Your script sometimes uses the Your script sometimes reflects the creativity. It attempts to show the situation organizational structures of a script. voice of the characters. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is beginning to be organized Your script has frequent errors in Your script has insufficient details but lacks coherence. grammar, punctuation, and spelling. (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects some imagination and Your script usually uses the Your script often reflects the voice of creativity. It somewhat shows the situation organizational structures of a script. the characters. and how it impacted the Monsters life. Your script is generally well-organized. Your script uses generally accurate Your script has adequate details (dialogue, grammar, punctuation, and spelling. stage directions) to show how the Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects imagination and Your script consistently uses the Your script often reflects the voice of creativity. It shows the situation and how it organizational structures of a script. the characters. impacted the Monsters life. Your script is usually well-organized. Your script consistently uses a formal Your script has substantial details The ideas build on each other. tone to explain. Your grammar, (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the punctuation, and spelling are accurate. Monster develops through the scene. Your script reflects a lot of imagination and Your script uses the organizational Your script masterfully reflects the creativity. It clearly shows the situation and structures of a script in a sophisticated voice of the characters. how it impacted the Monsters life. manner. Your script shows a mastery of formal Your script has illustrative details Your script is consistently welltone to explain. Your grammar, (dialogue, stage directions) to show how the organized. The ideas build on each other punctuation, and spelling are Monster develops through the scene. in a sophisticated manner. completely accurate.

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Name: Ainesh
Include a title Describe each character Include a note on staging to explain how your staging choices (set design, costumes/props, effects) show the situation and its impact on the Monster Employ dialogue to show how the scene develops Include stage directions to show the action Use details to show the actions and emotions of the characters involved

Date: 8/3/13
Use the format of a script o Skip a line each time a new character speaks o Italicize the stage directions o Write dialogue by bolding character names Build the dialogue and action to first show what the situation is, then how the Monster is affected Font size: 12 Edit for spelling, punctuation, and grammar Use first person when writing the dialogue Use the type of language that the character would use when writing the dialogue

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