TASK 2 :Computers are increasingly used in education.

In which areas do you think computers are more important and in which areas are teachers more important? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge of experience.

From the beginning of the twenty-first century, computers starts to spread widely around the world. They are used in every single field such as: economics, politics, engineering. Among all, computers are now playing a more significant role in education, whereas, the role of teachers at school is still indeniable. y khng phi l introduction tt v hai l do: 1 l di qu mc cn thit, hai l cha tr li c topic task: area no th computer proves to be important, area no thy c gio quan trng hn? Vic lit k cc field nh economics, politics v engineering l khng cn thit v nn gi lm example cho body. First and foremost, computers can provide students with visual aids, making the lessons considerably easier to be comprehend as images and sounds are far more effective to be perceived than any other kinds of information. Another benefit of using technology in education is its modern softwares, enabling far distance learners to participate in the course, reducing the cost of transporting from their hometown to school. In addition, computers help teachers in setting homework as well as exchanging notes and responses in a moderately shorter time than usual. This leads to extensive length in the course duration since students could gain more knowledge besides in class hours. For examples, in speaking lessons, students can record themselves, then email those recordings and wait for their teachers to leave comments instead of checking each one in class. Regarding the undeniable essentials of teachers, they help students to gain a significant amount of real interaction, making learners not only receive information bu also have an opportunity to ask for further details. One important point is that speech or face to face explanation is far more effective than written ones. Last but not least, teachers bring about live performances to their students. It is evident that joining a concert is considerably attractive rather than just watching them on the Internet. Likewise, learning with a real techer may force students to put more concentration, gaining greater motivation, resulting in better perception. In conclusion, both computers and teachers play inevitable roles in education system. Although computers are augmenting sharply, teachers will not be replaced at least in the near future.

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