Peer Reviews Received You've received 127 review(s) from your peers.

Here's the reviews you've received so far: Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I felt that the subject it is good but makes the reader a little lost or disconnected( maybe it is just me). It is too much information going on that I am not sure about the purpose. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author includes researches but I miss the use of quotations in the correct form and also a list of works cited or links that will show where those information came from. Linking this researches could give more credibility to the paper. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author used the rhetorical concepts as Ethos ,when talking about the area of expertise and Logos when talking about the changing climate, trying to convince and be persuasive. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I feel that it is a good paper and the subject here is good, but I felt lost in this reading. Maybe more examples and also quotations and citing the works on this research could give a better idea about it. Overall score: 3

Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Loved reading about the human evolution possibilities. Keep up your writing:) Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good use of sources from NASA, DARDA, etc. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I could almost see the human evolution in front of my eyes. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Just a suggestion. May be, next time, you might like to make your piece a little shorter. The subject is interesting but a too long piece is a little difficult to read and keep track of. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Seems like you have a passion for this article. You have done a lot of research and put a lot of effort in writing this piece. You did a good job of integrating your own writing and the relevant researched materials in your article. You could have been a little more persuasive on how you might go about stopping this issue. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You did a good job using quotes from the research material you used in your chosen context, medium, and genre of your text. You have a lot of years and facts from what different people said but you don't have your works cited links, also different agencies. Need to include all your works cited links. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You did a good job of demonstrating rhetorical concepts in your article. I felt that your article had a lot of kairos, because it's an ongoing issue. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Very interesting...Good Job! Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have not mentioned the TOPIC for your research essay. It is therefore difficult to assume. If what you mean is about organisations trying to develop plans for humans to travel to other planets, then I feel that you have written substantially. I find it difficult to give you a score. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Difficult to comment in the absence of the TOPIC. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: As mentioned above. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: As mentioned above Overall score: 2 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The integration was moderate Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The researched material was relevant to the dicuss Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: All 5 rhetorical concepts are employed by the writer Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: An easily understandable topic bde beter dikscused. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The way you presented the article I was given enough information to answer your finally question and/or pursue additional information if I so desired.

Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: All your researched material was used effectively to cause me the reader, to not only learn something new, but be interested enough to contemplate this new information, as well as want to seek out additional readings on the topic. Well done. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This is the only area that is in ways, at least to me, is lacking. I see mainly an appeal to Logo's and Etho's. I would have liked to see more appeal to Patho's, to blend out the article and make it a little easier to digest, as well as follow. Use of more emotional language when referring to the thought of "modifying Homo sapiens" also knowing how people feel on both sides of the issue of "modifying Homo sapiens" would have easily made this article a 5. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Adding a bit more emotion to the article is all I have to suggest. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your essay is outstanding! Your sources are so wide-ranging and impressive that they mark an article pitched to a well educated audience, maybe The New Yorker or The Atlantic. Sorry I can't offer any advice. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: You do an excellent job of citing MIC sources, but your allusions to Frankl and Stephen J. Gould were superb! Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The structure of your argument is interesting and compelling. I think ethos is your strongest point. You are obviously well read and many areas, and your use of sources in masterful. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: You are probably going to give me a "1" for helpfulness, because I'm unable to give you constructive criticism. But that's because I think your piece is nearly flawless--by far the best I've read during the class. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good description. Assessment: good job. Suggestion: go on. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Description: fine. Assessment: good choices. Suggestion: no suggestions. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Description: again, fine. Assessment: rhetorical concepts are rather well managed. Suggestion: no suggestions.

Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Good job. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: They did good. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: They did good. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: They did good. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Overall, good job. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: For starters I had no earthly idea what it was all about as the title is missing. The opening para did not tell me where it was headed. There is no reference to any websites so it all sounds made up. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text.

Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I did not find any reference. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It was not convincing for anything unless the article was looking for volunteers for interstellar travel I missed it. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The opening para needs to grab interest and tell what is to come in the rest of the article. Overall score: 2 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: interstellar is the main topic to be disscussed starting from the past until the present time. Also advantage and disadvantage sides are considered. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Methaphore is used to support the idea and examples are employed to convince the audience. It makes me feel like I am in the events you talk about. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: Look out! Evolution seems poised to punctuate its equilibrium again! All things considered, whose side should we be on? Though my English is poor, I try to guess that this point is about the conclusion of you to conclude the story: balance of life is more important Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: In the way of learning second language, someone stop it because of the difficulty they face. Someone go on, even though they are going on the dark road. Like me now, I rarely understood what you said. What I know is you are excellent writer, and your writing present a wonderful idea. With a little knowledge, I cannot get insight into what you said and cannot grade you as the organizer expected. I am so sorry!!!. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I had to read through almost the whole piece before I realised what you were arguing about. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Never having hear dof DARPA or these people I can just presume you know what you are referring to Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Mostly ethos and logos, not sure about kairos, appeals to pathos low keyed Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: It was interesting to learn about the star ship project Overall score: 4

Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The sources you quote are very reliable indeed, I particularly like reading Viktor Franckl, too. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Its not very clear to me if its an opinion article or a blog, but anyway, the researched materials suited the context and the content of the article, which I enjoyed reading. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The rhetorical concepts are clearly present. Kairos is explained in the first paragraph, Ethos can be inferred from the researched materials and logos from the general structure of the text. I personally would have appreciated a clearer message from the beginning, so that Pathos , the appeal to emotions, would have been more effective. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I enjoyed the reading. Thanks! Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: organised knowledge able good Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: organised knowledge able good Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: organised knowledge able good Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: good. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: good Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: good Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: good Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: no comments.this is excellent work

Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: A lot of information, acronyms, and esoteric terminology was introduced.The main point for the essay, I think was "space exploration" and the technology needed to achieve this? the logos, ethos, and karios of the essay was evident in the opening statement: "The astonishing parade of exoplanets discovered by NASAs Kepler mission and announced since 2012 has lay observers wondering about access to all the new real estate. People had assumed it wasnt being made anymore! Some baby boomers have been revisiting the interstellar travel and distance equations for the first time since they were teenagers and rediscovering that 4.2 light-years to the Centauri system is still nearly 40 trillion kilometres away. But much has changed in the intervening half-century and what was dismissed as impossible in 1963 is now seen as a mere challenge. This new attitude is found in some surprisingly influential places. In particular, the brilliantly unethical Defense Advanced Research Projects Agency (DARPA) has joined with NASA to fund development work by something called One Hundred Year Starship..." I was all poised to be informed in lay terms about this advancement and bang! I was knocked on the head with a laboring paragraph about the pros and cons of Military-budgets, political-philosophical arguments concerning war/expansionism, neo-nouveau ideas concerning political eras..."recognized as the intellectual cutting edge of the same military-industrial complex (MIC) that we were all told to beware as early as 1961. Eisenhowers warning fell on deaf ears, though, so only four years later LBJ would be obediently ordering combat troops into Vietnam hard on the heels of the JFK assassination. In his mea culpa In Retrospect, Robert McNamara, the defense secretary whom LBJ inherited from JFK, is seen wondering, near the end of his life, why on earth the USA would want to fight with Vietnam." When the piece did return to the subject of "space exploration," I was exhausted. I suggest that content be managed more economically, terminology be defined, and subject kept in perspective to the endgame: information, or "toward new considerations or understanding." I was impressed with the style of writing, its flare for marrying those big words into the essay, and I would like to hear more from this classmate. I suggest that he continue in his pursuit of writing it's coming along just fine. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: hard to know and understand, but it was provided.

Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: kairos was the main rhetorical appeal or the most dominate one used. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Loved the effort and wanted so much to understand the benefits of space exploration offered mankind--our kind. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Beautifully integrated - no suggestions Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think all the researched materials were relevant and appropriate to your piece of writing although for a more mainstream audience some links or specific references would be appreciated! Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: ethos, logos and kairos are definitely all present, but a little more appeal to pathos would not go astray Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Great to read about something new, full of information and written so well

Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think you you did a lot of research to compose your text. I think you used your sources well. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I can see the work is crafted using ethos and pathos but I do not have clear what context, medium would be. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think your work is crafted very cleverly using ethos and pathos, as I stated above. It is indeed a piece that captures the reader's attention. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I liked the work overall, but I would've liked to understand better where you were interested in publishing the piece. Well done! Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: You reference everyone from Viktor Frankl to the military and still manage to keep the style interesting and highly readable. Assess: outstanding. Suggest: Send this to the NYT, Atlantic, Wired for the purposes of this class, let's see, your sources aren't listed or linked to, and you don't provide a contrasting opinion. The NYT et al won't care about that. Neither do I. It was great reading.

Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: The research fit perfectly into the argument. Assess: I don't know exactly what the medium/genre was supposed to be, but I think it's suitable for pretty much anything from a blog post to a print article. Suggest: For the purposes of this class (or submission to NYT et al), make the medium/genre clearer; if it's to be online, create links to articles, if it's print, provide a list of sources. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: Logos and ethos in spades. Enough pathos in the humor to make it highly readable for general readers. Kairos is self-evident. Assess: I love how there's a whole timeline from Eisenhower to now to show a progression. Suggest: Write more articles like this, send them out for publication. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I wish we got to give out one 6 during this course, this'd be it. I truly enjoyed this reading. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This is a radical research essay that captivates me throughout. Your vibrant and technical use of language sets the pace, and I find myself eager to read on in amazement. Really brilliant! And I am not an easy critic by the way! Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: I am thoroughly convinced or bamboozled; either way, the evidence incorporated is skillfully and strategically placed to support the claims, and there is also follow-up analysis. Granted, I am not going to Google your sources, but I trust your authoritative presence and that further convinces me that your sources are likely credible. This topic is beyond my general knowledge, so I am not as critical as a fellow scientist would likely be. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: There is an effective use of ethos, your knowledge and familiarity with the topic are apparent, and logos is evident in the use of source material. I can see how the topic is kairotic, and I particularly appreciate the haunting element intrinsic in the final line that lingers on in a open-ended way, placing the burden of proof and belief back on the reader. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Brilliant all the way! By far the most refreshing essay I have read lately. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think this topic is interesting and after reading it I think maybe the average reader would not get the message. To get the most out of this topic, I think perhaps writing more on the level of the average Joe might be a good idea. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think the writer did well in this aspect. Obviously, after reading this work, I knew the writer was very well versed and educated on the topic and had a good understanding of what he was saying. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument.

Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good job here. After reading this assignment if you are not concerned about the direction in which we are headed - then perhaps you should get your head examined. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Not being familiar with a good deal of the subject matter, I thought it was well-written and very well-researched and perhaps the topic was out of my line of expertise. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Rather effectively. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Quite appropriate. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: All the rhetorical appeals are applied, logos dominating. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Great work! The only limitations are: no title; no citations of V. Frankle and B. Dylan; no list of references. Overall score: 4

Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The writer needs to integrate sources in a more clear way ... Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: For the genre the materials researched are adequate. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The writer has used little of pathos. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Writer needs to check spelling of proper nouns. I think the spelling is Frankl not Frankle ... Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your research work was well crafted combining the relevant research materials to produce a wonderful piece. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: You did not go overboard with the information but stick within the context, medium and genre of the text. You nailed it just the way it should be done. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You were able to communicate effectively using the rhetorical concepts to your advantage crafting the argument to inform, persuade and motivate . Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: it is a nice work anyway. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Well written essay about some space program. You've used many acronyms without explaining. Please include the actual names/terms of the acronyms when they are first used in your essay. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Well researched information. Would be better if you have included the sources of your research. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your essay is too technical for a layman like me. However, I thank you for introducing to me such a topic.

Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Thank you for essay, Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: As far as I gather you are only referencing two citation in this, other than that you are putting forward your take on history, and the future. this however is not an integration of references, but an analysis/ opinion that is not triangulated with other sources supporting the conclusions. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: well the two references work fine, and support the argument you are putting forward. however, I am a bit confsed by the argument, and where your want to draw my attention, is to that we as humans must save ourselves form the worlds doom, or are you trying to convince me that politicians are puppets of military actors who have no concience? Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: well, this might sound surprising, but I find that you put a lot of emphasis on pathos, and less so on logos and ethos. granted you site two references, but I have no idea who they are, what is their validity... The way I read it, due to the writing, is at quite a high speed actually. it is very enthusiastic, and a a fairly raised voice, it seems like an argument where you are pushing your opinion. if you had referenced documents on your historical analysis, it could have changed the persepctive. but it seems more like an opinion in a discusson, than a researched argument. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I am missing a title - I was confused for quite a while about what the text was about. a but of hand holding and guidance would ahve been nice. maybe answering

what is this about, where are we going etc. I am left a little unsure of what the issue is... are you wiritng a script for a new science fiction movie, or are you actually putting forward an argument for the human race to shape up and find a future way for existance when the earth explodes? Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You gave me a lot to think about concerning past and recent turns of event my only concern is while there is plenty of detailed research it needs to be cited more where you found it, authorship dates and so on. It makes the piece seem more authentic and not just your opinion. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: While it took until the last paragraph to really understand what your point of view was I concluded that this was a warning of the future events such as extinction of the human race as we know it perhaps. Other wise materials context and genre well suited to the overall written article. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I felt you did well with the rhetorical concepts both ethos and kairos. Your thoughts made me say both "Oh that makes sense," and "Yikes the time is ripe," Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: You have thoroughly researched your argument well just remember to cite more facts and maybe reduce the use of difficult words or explain them briefly within the text, (never assume your reader knows what your talking about) Otherwise again I say "Yikes!" On a side not, In the second paragraph you comment on "propulsion from repeated nuclear explosions that was thought capable of attaining some small percentage of the speed of light," Did you know that this idea was preconcieved in 1940 by a highly

intelligent starlet named Hedy Lamarr? She was not taken seriously and therefore the idea dismissed off hand. Good luck to you and good job here. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The document was all over the place and hard to follow. I could foresee three separate articles coming from this piece - one about interstellar travel, one about the rise, use, costs, and benefits of the MIC, and one about speciation, global warming, and other consequences of the foregoing topics. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The research was obviously broad. One issue is that the author should have specifically identified the Ike quote he references as not all readers may know it. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author appeals to ethos and deals with a subject that is definitely timely--therein grabbing kairos. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The writer might should have specified the forum in which he intends to publish this article. If it were a highly specialized technical forum, then the parts that confuse me as an average reader might be appropriate. Overall score: 2 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: In your essay, you propose the idea that Homo sapiens will have to evolve in the interests of interstellar voyaging for the purpose of living abroad i.e. on exoplanets. You have spent a lot of time to seriously investigate into NASA's annals, DARPA's reports and programmes, Scientific American (proper reference to the article by Cameron M. Smith was omitted but I'll overlook it just this once) as well as American period history dating back to Ike and Dylan, to name a few global players (exact dates would have given you Brownie points). You have also very evidently researched the 100YSS thoroughly, I assume to check your own potential candidacy for that project. However you do not say so but leave it up to your audience to draw its own conclusions. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: On the whole, for your subject matter, you have chosen very suitable materials, especially from Scientific American. However, you could have also researched in Science, Nature, Genes and Development and the like for a broader look at the probable evolution of the Homo sapiens to become adapted to interstellar travel. Specific references to Monsanto or Bayer in what they have to offer in the way of plant evolution would also have given your essay a wider context. Inclusion of appropriate contemporary science fiction writers (I'm out of touch here) would have rounded off your subject matter perfectly! Of course I realise that time constraints probably limited your search so I will be generous. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have avoided using pathos in your text which was a good decision. The kairos and logos come across well. Whatever you're selling, I'll have three of them! Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I think you've done an excellent job here. Lots of researched-based ideas covering history, biology, physics, extraterrestrial physics, Centauri and a marvellous sense of humour - Thanks! Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: the researched materials relevant to your topic is well integrated. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: well done! Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: very appealing at all levels. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: your researched topic is professionally done. You can still look for additional researched materials to integarte into your article. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have researched the topic well and cited it in the article appropriately. I suggest you have the title of the piece on the top. As it took me some time to get to central theme of the article. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Text as a medium suits this article. I myself have used text only. however, I think we could use pictures or visuals to make it more interesting.

Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I like the way you have started, it gets my attention. It doesn't feel like a boring research paper but interesting read. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Brilliant work. I suggest also give your referenced sources at the end of the article Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Great ideas. It can improved by citations/footnotes. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Yes. I think the writer is very knowledgeable in this field/topic. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Perhaps my genes won't survive if economic criteria will rule out who will remain... Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: good job. Overall score: 4

Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: There is great variety in sources quoted for different purposes. The range of these quotes and the variety in character however are so broad that Ias a reader get lost and they distract me from the main theme. It show a great deal of general knowledge, that if used in a more concentrated way or more centred around one theme might make the argument stronger. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Within the sentence or paragraph the used sources work well, in the broader context they are sometime distracting, e.g. the warning by Eisenhower, what did it consist of. Not every reader is familiar with US history over the past 50 years so too many references about many different subjects make one lose track of the central argument. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Kairos: From the article I cannot make out how actual the discussions dinosaurs/nuclear energy etc.are. Logos: one paragraph does lead towards another, I cannot see how they all deal with a central subject however, nor do I understad what the central subject is in this article. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The article touches on many interesting subjects and shows great knowledge, but somewhere down the road I as a reader get lost, so my advice would be to somehow show where it is you want to go, give me / the reader some idea of the line of thought so I can find my barings in the article and can understand more easily how each paragraph relates to the central theme. What I do like is that there are quotes from unexpected(in this context) sources like a song by Dylan. Overall score: 3

Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Great, well written! Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: No needs to add more materials, it is perfect. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Well done, but I think it need to be simplified for people who didn't have good understanding NASA, DARPA and evolution. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Is is not too long..? how can you make your reader to keep read? Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: great work Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: is a little to long, but kept my attetion

Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good research tool were been used Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: . Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: What researched material? I see a suggestion to go google some stuff, and some other hints of stuff I could google, but very little direct reference or research. I would suggest that you have references and a bibliography. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I guess this is r stories in one, one about the MIC, one about the 100 year starship project, one about the vietnam war, and another about human speciation. Again, there is no researched material, just suggestions that some research was done. I would suggest a more researched coherent story, say pick one or two topics instead of 4. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good use of pathos and kairos. I didn't really see any logos or ethos. Could have made some statements stronger. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below:

Reviewer says: It was an interesting article, but not exactly what was assigned. It's obvious that they did some research, but did not include references. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good job! Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good job! Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good job! Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Good job! Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I felt your research was very complete. You provided a great deal of details to support your position and also viewed the opposing position. I found myself reading for a while until I realized what your personal position was on the topic. I suggest you add one or two sentences to the beginning of the essay to clearly note your position. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text.

Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your research materials aligned well with your topic. I believe they supported your argument and you used a good variety. I do not have any suggestions regarding the materials. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author mainly used logic to make his point. I suggested also using emotion because this could make your argument stronger and more persuasive. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: You are a very good writer. Well done! Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: In the first paragraph I don't understand the sentence " People had assumed it wasnt being made anymore!" I find the first paragraph has a lot of generalizations but nothing that feels really concrete enough to be convincing or persuasive. for example, "People had" "Some Baby Boomers have". I wasn't able to tell for example what position you were taking? Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I have great difficulty analyzing this assignment. I don't understand the material, can't tell what research was used for the material, I can't determine the purpose of the piece or your position relating to the material. It may be over my head or it may be just poorly done. At this point I just can't tell because there is no way to look at your research no links no information etc.

Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: They are all represented. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I might suggest that for peer reviewing purposes you might want to write about something that is more understandable? Although i am not enthralled with the material (maybe i just don't "get it so i'm trying to be fair here") The assignment felt thrown together at the last minute to me so I'm going to give it a 4 overall even though from my perspective it may deserve less? My feeling is that this 3 weeks has been so confusing that anyone who continued after week 5 deserves to get through the course! Best wishes! Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: I found no mention of researched material except " Victor Frankle said" and quotes like this. But who is Victor Frankle? However, I found that author did research. He or she simply did not cite properly. Assess: See "Describe" Suggest: explain the reader what you are citing Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: author includes researched text in the writing. There is not much direct quotes, but they fit the text well. Assess: researched materials don't look foreign to the text Suggest: as in previous criterion - explain the reader whom and what you are citing. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: writer uses Cairos, explaining what happened 50 years ago and now and Logos, but I found no Ethos and no Pathos Assess: Honestly, I did not get what you are trying to argue and how 100YSS, Vietnam, al-Qaeda and global warming are related. Suggest: think about main idea when writing. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: You use too much abbreviations and don't explain all of them. Who is LBJ, for example? I am not from USA and don't know what this abbreviation means. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Description You start talking about new discoveries and how they revive some dreams of the past. You draw a timeline of space travel and the possibilities that arise as technology evolves. Assessment - I assigned you this rating because through research and the reading you did you managed to persuade readers of the fact that evolution is a moving train. Suggestion If you were to revise it, you might consider mentioning some of your sources a bit more often to allow the reader to know who you are quoting. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Description You wrote an article that reviews part of the history of science evolution and tried to predict what lies ahead. Your article is a complete piece and it is good to read. Assessment I assigned you this rating because an article is really the best medium to convey such complete and thought provoking information. Suggestion As I said before, if you were to revise it, you should consider making the sources you quoted a bit more visible. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Description You mentioned the oldest and the latest trends in human dream and space science. You questioned the possible paths that evolution and space travel might take. You made very good use of logos and kairos. Assessment I gave you this rating because you informed your readers of the latest facts in the field and gave them perspective of what are some possibilities for the future. Suggestion I really liked what you wrote and this is not a field in which I have much knowledge about. So, I really would not know what to suggest. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I really liked reading your article and found some of the possibilities regarding evolution and space travel really interesting. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Nice transitions from paragraph to paragraph with full thoughts associated with each. It provided me (the reader) with a full understanding and I was easily able to look up acronyms and such. I like the background information that was provided as well as the current state of happenings. I felt like there was enough information provided to me, as it made me go and look at some of the research available. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Very communicative; and approachable. As a novice in this area I felt that this piece highlighted the facts, as well as provided others research, findings and opinions. I felt persuaded to learn more and investigate. I felt the language used, based on the predictive audience who may read this, is appropriate. Not way over my head, however I did go and research some of the acronyms and research within (and because I wanted to). Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I felt as if Logos and Kairos were widely used throughout. Logos - items were logically explained and I was persuaded to believe. Very descriptive words used, organized well and recorded findings were mentioned. Kairos - timely, as through reading & research, there is an abundant amount of activity and research taking place. I perceived you must have some credibility in this arena and therefore Ethos was apparent. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: WOW, this is an amazing piece! I personally would not change a thing. I took action and looked up all of the acronyms provided with the article. The article was very thought provoking and engaging, so much that I read it several times. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The topic is very interesting to me, as I am very curious about it. However, the essay is too long. There is a lot of information that leads to confusion. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The writer used many sources for research which is obvious from the facts, but there is no reference Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think there is only information, not persuasion. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The write could write the essay shorter, mention the problem, its importance and solution

Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: cool Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: cool Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: cool Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: cool Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have thoroughly researched about the various space missions orgainsed by DARPA. You have discussed your thoughts on the topic at hand -Should such missions be conducted or not? To do this you have well cited some examples. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: The DARPA's programme example helps well to discuss should we leave things as it is or as being the creatures with sixth sense do we have the right to go against the tide Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have stated the facts and raised some questions. Over all you aim to make the reader think if what we are doing is right or wrong. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Neat work Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author used a clear language integrating his or her own opinion with technical information. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The researched material suit well with the issue exposed. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author use Ethos and Pathos effectively involving and convincing the reader from the begin to the end of the paper. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below:

Reviewer says: Excellent work. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This is a good science write up on proposed NASA missions and DARPA funding, MIC and what we could be looking for. It is well written. After all the war has to continue - here or there! Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The background materials researched is most appropriate and are also well knitted into the text. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The article is well argued. Your tongue-in-cheek style is appropriate given the subject. But a little more trust in the research 'for tomorrow' would have served fine. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: It is good this assignment came my way! Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good work.

Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Very well. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good support with ethos and pathos Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Keep up the good work. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good integration of sources into your argument. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good use of research materials. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Surely your piece is strong on Pathos, a little less in my opinion on Logos.

Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: This was a good work. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: it is very clear that you have put time and effort into this article. I can see it being published in a a major journal. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your writing style is indistinguishable from the writings of well-known authors who publish in magazines and newspapers. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I was very interested in your article because I can feel your passion in your writing. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Nice work. I can't wait to read more work of yours. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: You integrated research and source-based argument into your piece. Assess: You included sources from various governmental and non-governmental entities to support your thesis. Suggest: I had to re-read your article to ensure that the first

half integrated sources. In a way, it came across as a history lesson without guiding the reader to the argument or providing overt evidence of source-based research. If you revise, make sure you provide more of a road-map to your reader about your argument. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: I believe your article is an opinion piece intended for a magazine article. Assess: If that is your intended work, then I think you effectively provided context and support. Suggest: Again, this was supposed to be an exercise in rhetorical writing. In that, you were supposed to persuade the audience about something. If you revise, consider being a little less subtle in your argument as the article progresses. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: The article explains the advancements in interstellar travel. Assess: While I gave you really high marks in the first two sections, I think this part was your biggest challenge. It could have been because you didn't have a clearly defined persuasive argument, which would complicate effectively using rhetorical tools. Suggest: I suggest reviewing your article to ensure you're making your argument as compellingly as possible. Was your audience baby boomers? Referencing them in the opening paragraph makes it seem so. This could turn off a huge number of readers. Especially youth would be really interested in your article since it most explicitly effects their future, but they may be less inclined to read if you start your article talking about their greatgrandparents. Also, watch the passive voice. The first few paragraphs were difficult to get through because of how laborious your passive voice sentence structure is. Also, check your word choice. For example, is Robert McNamara really "is seen wondering"? Again, this leads to awkward sentence construction that makes it difficult for the reader to dive into the meat of you article. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: What a great article! I do hope you review and make a few content and copy edits. That way you'll produce a publishable article that generations will enjoy! Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Quite a lot of technical information to digest. Perhaps presented in an easier way for the reader would have been more effective. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: A very coherent essay. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Very enthusiastic tone. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I learnt a lot from what you wrote. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I liked your essay . However, I felt a little lost in the middle of it . I was hooked at the beginning but my expectations were defeated later on . Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The conclusion also is not as effective as your I troduction Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument.

Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It is good but needs some editing and proofreading. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I also recommend you include references. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: You gave clear implications of having done research. You clearly cited "NASAs Human Research Programs 2012 Fiscal Year Annual Report" and "in the January 2013 issue of Scientific American (Starship Humanity), Cameron M. Smith points out". ***** Assess: You gave clear implications of having done a great deal of research. You referred to resources throughout your article while explaining your perspective. ***** Suggest: I would have liked in-text links, or a list of resources at the end with in-text citations. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I wish we had been more clearly warned about needing to specify our context, medium and genre. Certainly you know by now that you are not the only one who submitted without this information. You are clearly addressing baby boomers by alluding to us in your first paragraph, and those of us who are familiar with US history by referring to LBJ, JFK and Ike. You seem to be addressing people of high intelligence and who have a strong grasp with the English language and its phraseology. However, you share your information with thorough explanation as if for people who are not up on the current space research Therefore, I would guess that you would like to publish this article in a magazine like Popular Science, or the Science section of a weekly newspaper in a cosmopolitan area. In this case, your research materials are very well suited. I just have to take a point off because I'm not sure of your intended audience. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: Ethos: your apparent familiarity with the subject. Logos: progression from informing the audience of the current state of interstellar travel to implications for our species. Pathos: "We might not like to see our time end" and "the brilliantly unethical Defense Advanced Research Projects Agency (DARPA) has joined with NASA to fund development work by something called One Hundred Year Starship, or 100YSS. Anyone who doubts the seriousness in which interstellar travel is now being considered will want to investigate 100YSS." Kairos: you describe breaking news; reference to the recent sequestration. Commonplaces: We want to survive as a species. We want to know what threats are looming on the horizon. Metaphor: real estate. ***** Assess: You are clearly intimately acquainted with your subject. Exceptionally logical progression of ideas. Your pathos is stirring. ***** Suggest: I don't see any deliberate use of tenses. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: How poetic! I greatly enjoyed your writing style and creative use of words, like "parade of exoplanets", "brilliantly unethical" and "time-dilated space probe". I thought of another argument for the inevitability of speciation: limited resources during interstellar travel, thus something like Aryan deliberate selection of the fittest en route is imaginable. Thanks for giving my brain cells some exercise. I'm sorry our paths haven't crossed on the Discussion Forums. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This is an outstanding piece. A great pleasure to read. Congrats! If you're not a science writer, you should seriously consider becoming one - an "encore career?" (I deduce from some of your remarks that you may be reaching your 60s if not there already? Or perhaps you've just assumed that persona to write this piece. If so, you pullled it off beautifully.) Your piece is highly informative, extremely well-informed, thoughtful and intellectually challenging, even when I suspected you were pulling my (readerly) leg a bit. Your writing style is very lively and you have an enviable ability to make complex - and controversial - topics clear. Your piece seamlessly integrates the research materials you selected without straying from the road along which you are leading your readers. You also show great facility with the art of the change-up (I'm sure there's a formal rhetorical term or phrase for the technique I detected), such as the extremely clever use of the baby-boomer trope in your opening paragraph. So cool, so hip then. Not so au courant now, and perhaps more clueless than they'd care to admit about topics like dastardly DARPA and the MIC that many of them fulminated against so long

ago. You throw them a lifeline, though, at the close of the paragraph, as elsewhere throughout should they (or other readers) want to check this stuff out. Another example is the lead-in to "Or ought it," which introduces a devilishly clever argument. (I do hope it's tongue-in-cheek, but I can certainly envision DARPA-types making such arguments in dead earnest - unfortunate because the hubris is staggering. One hoped we had left that unapologetic anthropocentrism behind in the 19th century, but I know better.) A minor quibble: your condensed mention of the "spectacular pan-science tour de force" went by too fast for me. I'm intrigued, but had to stop and think for a minute about what that seemed to mean. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your references to your chosen materials are very effectively placed, and skillfully contextualized to help make your points. I assume your intended audience is pretty well-educated, in which case the tone seems pitch-perfect. (I plan to google "Flynn Effect" after I finish this review. It's new to me, which adds to the many pleasures of reading your piece.) A slightly less minor quibble than my previous one: Your paragraph about climate change seems to take for granted that your readers all understand and accept the anthropocene concept. Personally, I consider it a no-brainer, but I know some well-educated people who are skeptical. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your piece shows great skill with a range of rhetorical concepts, as I mentioned above some that I can't even properly name. The stuff of your piece is of course hard to stomach, and genuinely frightening, but you've done a fabulous job in laying out your points without ponderous or preachy language, with authority and a deeply humane voice. It would have been easy to produce a piece writing off DARPA as crackpot, but you've done intellectually honest work by giving these scary people their due and warning your readers without resorting to the strident tones that so easily turn people off. The irony of your relatively light (but clearly very serious) hand in this very, very effectively adds contrast to the subject matter. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I'm delighted that I got to read your piece. Thanks so much for taking the time to craft it so carefully, so cleverly, and so humorously. I happen to think that only nature itself can take care of this situation via another equilibrium-punctuating event,

probably regardless of human efforts to devise a sustainable planet as we approach a global population of 9 billion. I do, however, greatly appreciate the way you have so deftly posed an all-to-real potential alternative. Finally, your piece brought to mind an interview I heard on the PBS Newshour last night with the author of a new book titled "Frankenstein's Cat: Cuddling Up to Biotech's Brave New Beasts." Contemplating that discussion of bio-engineering of other species alongside your discussion of speciation hasn't exactly made my day, but it's certainly extremely provocative. THANKS! Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: I see a very large text of which to my opinion it is not clear what the medium is. It matches to a certain extent to a blog text. However its layout is rather simple and looks more like that of an essay. In this text certain numbers and researches are mentioned however these are directly referred to as sources. Neither are the hyperlinks to these mentioned in the text. Assess: It is very difficult for me to judge the sources because they are not directly mentioned. There are a lot of numbers in the text, but they fail to appeal to logos or ethos because the sources are not provided in the text. This can give the writer the power to fake sources; misinterpret sources or any other kind of wrong reference. Suggest: I would suggest the writer to mention the sources as footnotes. This would fit both a weblog and an essay. If not mentioned the sources only value would be providing the writer with information and not providing the readers with information or increasing the trustworthiness of the numbers, researches and facts mentioned. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: See answer to the previous question. Assess: The medium of this text is not clear. The sources are not provided therefore I cannot review and judge them. Suggest: As mentioned before insert footnotes or provide the references at the end of the text. Furthermore I would suggest choosing a clear layout which matches the medium. This will make the text easier and more enjoyable to read. If a text is written very well does not provide the reader with a clear overview it can still in reaching its purpose. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: See answer to the first question. Assess: The text does not succeed in directly appealing my emotions, scenes of logic or any other appeal. This can have different reasons. First off all I think the lack of a clear layout prevents the text from giving a clear overview or message. Not mentioning the references can be another reason. A third reason could be the lack of persistent use of any of the appeals. I think there has not been put enough effort in the strategy behind the text and that there has been put too much effort into simply summing up sentences and making a long and very serious text of it, but sometime less is more. Especially when that provides the time to make rhetorical choices (research plan) prior to writing the text. Suggest: Form a clear research plan and give every word, sentence and paragraph a clear purpose otherwise it will be most likely that too many words, sentences and paragraphs will be summed up without any clear purpose or strength to them. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The text itself is well written but I think its too much of anything and too little of something. Cutting and setting priorities would improve it a lot. Overall score: 2 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author integrated in-depth information about a technical subject with a playful, humorous writing style. The contrast of humor and hard science created a thoughtful, engaging, and informative article. I suggest you continue to write and argue using your brilliant and playful voice. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author incorporated a lot of technical information into a short essay. The essay was all over the place and went in unexpected directions. It was fun and challenging. Keep up the great writing. You are smart and fun. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The essay began with an allusion to a commonplace about not making more real estate. The combination of logos and humor was refreshing and interesting. I suggest you continue to express your authentic voice. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Thank you for the great essay. Bravo! Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think you have integrated good criteria of investigation of the theme. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The material researched by you, is interesting, and I think gathers enough concepts of argumentations. Your readers will feel, they have encountered some good findings. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I can say, you have demonstrated a huge awareness with rhetorical concepts. Your topic transmits clear arguments to your readers. It convinces them. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Your draft brings deeply arguments, that make your readers investigate more about it. Overall score: 3

Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This is not a matter that can be weaved without an extensive research -nay, knowledge, interest even, beforehand. Regardless of the truth of the entire arguments and the supporting facts (of which I had no idea to know), at least that aspect was clear. One small aspect I'd like to point out is the lack of resources link. It would be very helpful to the writer's argument if they gave the link somewhere for readers to follow through. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It was done very well, and with enough passion, vivid imagery and personal opinion to make it a great article. The medium chosen is appropriate and great-good in engaging the reader yet at the same time grabbing their attention. The writer doesn't seem to go deep, and I suspect that is indeed their intention. Not giving readers hard facts, but evoking thought and idea and interest. And yet the voice of the writer is very visible-- sometimes wondering, sometimes questioning, sometimes engaging the readers. The issue is something complex that has been going for a long time, and the way the writer weaved their context, it became clear that sooner or later another improvement in space travel will come soon. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: ..Everything is presented with appropriate amount, strength and intensity; enough to engage but not making a particular cause, enough to provoke but not lead to any particular direction, enough to inspire but not direct. Kairos is described well, by weaving history to the entire argument we begin to see how developments of the old affect the present and how the present development will affect the future researches and developments. Pathos, while the article doesn't have much of it, is deployed tactically in strategic spots. Ethos are described implicitly; by using sources and quotations. Logos seems to be present the most in this entire argument. From describing, to explaining; connecting factors and arguments, presenting results. Even sometimes questioning a particular decision and its potentials and implications.

Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I like it very much. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: DARPA, 100YSS, Scientific America, NASA information were all used to present your case. I have to admit I was caught off guard and will have to reread the piece several times to "get" the full meaning of it; but all this information is completely new to me and you seem to be be immersed in it. This brings me to your audience, who is it? If it is someone like me this is a hard packed information gem that is hard to bite into. If it is someone who is already familiar with these programs I think you have a better chance of doing your convincing. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Perfect match. You know your material up and down. I would suggest some links or citations to guide the less initiated reader. One click always presents less resistance. I did investigate DARPA and the 100 Year Starship to educate myself . Honestly, my mind was blown away at the obviously excessive amount of $ the DOD is spending on these programs. These financial impact statistics could have been added to finesse the reader to a viewpoint. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Yes we are all going to die, pathos and the MIC, commonplace has risen even with 2013 budget cuts. Science and your familiarity provide the ethos and logos. The concepts were interwoven well to build a logical and substantial view of the world from the MIC vantage point. I found your ending particularly effective as you presented the question the reader was to answer for themselves. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below:

Reviewer says: Nice piece which initiated me into an otherwise unknown world. Budgets like these make me hopeful that I might find employment in a DOD funded extravaganza. After all someone has to answer the phones. The main suggestion is about the density of the piece, which you can revise or alter to fit your audience. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your opinion and use of research material was so seamlessly woven that the reader is pulled into a story-like trance. A brilliant piece indeed. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Pure brilliance. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Everything was in place. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Thank you for writing this captivating, informative and scary piece. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: First of all thanks for the subject you chose for your article.I completely ignored it. This is a powerful text about a problem that few people seems to be aware. All the researched materials are very well integrated into you text and into the reasoning line of your argument.

Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The materials used to develop your line of thought are completely appropriate to the development of your reasoning line. Without them the text could not exist at all. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: In this text you show a masterly in the use of the rhetoric appeals to shape the argument Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: My compliments for the interesting subject, for the way you present it and the powerful kind of researched reasoning that it contains. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I have to complete this field, but I can't write anything. It's extremely good. Perfect research. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Everything is on the right place. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good. Own word, opinion, it's interesting, actual. Good. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: It's a little bit full of little details and infos I can't note, but it's a very interesting article. Great job! Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: I'm a bit vague about the purpose, as I can't see a title, but I think I get the drift of the argument. The references to American presidents and their policies help to orient the reader. Assess: I think the argument is well made because it does convey the fact that life shouldn't be taken for granted. It weaves research into the rhetoric well. Suggest: I think titles are useful (it might have been deleted by the system.) Great work! Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Description: The researched materials fit well into the slightly alarmist text. They speak to people (maybe males?) who are fascinated by war and space. Assess: I don't know if the reference to Dylan is fair- he is old. And he had a motorbike accident decades ago as you'll know. Being famous for so long isn't easy to handle- I'm just grateful he's still alive. I liked the bit about Viktor Emil Frankl (and you got me to look up the spelling of his name so maybe I've learned something.) Suggest: Be nicer to Dylan! (Great work though.) Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Description: The writer clearly knows their rhetoric. "Runaway train of events"= very good stuff- sorry for a bit of premature assessment! Assess: I thought it

was stronger on pathos, than logos (the cultural reference to Dylan and the lack of appreciation of Chinese power in the partly globalised economy.) Kairos is a problem because in the absence of a title (which may not be your fault) it's not so easy to feel it. Overall very good. Suggest: Really interesting work- my only significant suggestions are to use a title and appreciate Chinese economic power in your future analyses. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: A very interesting piece of work. Well done! Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The essay is elaborate with technological up gradation which is quite beneficial for modern times. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The contrast view of the changing technology has been beautifully described by the author. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I feel the Rhetorical appeals are not used intensely in this essay. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I would love to write a descriptive essay that in informative and interesting like this one. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This is a tight knit article brilliantly written with researched data. you have a great style of writing, which demands all the attention of the reader. Personally, i have to say, i had a hard time finding the persuasive element of your article. An article title would have solved the issue! it is your last lines that saved my reading: ::We might not like to see our time end, even in favour of an undoubtedly superior life form, but then the dinosaurs didnt enthusiastically give way to mammals either, one imagines. The dinosaurs were removed, though, and evolution made a great leap. Look out! Evolution seems poised to punctuate its equilibrium again! :: Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: To my capacities, yours' is not an easy-read article. it needs all the attention possible, to keep the track of it!!! However, I see the integration efforts you have done in this article. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your article is strong on LOGOS. Your article is sprinkled with many researched data. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I am really surprised by your style of writing. It is dense, fast and has all the virtues of a visionary -talk. I would have been more pleased, if you would have made it a bit more reader-friendly and simple, for people like me, who likes easy-reading.!!! Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I thought you did a very good job of integrating your own writing with your research materials- one of the most seamless integrations I've read, and I've read

quite a few on the forums. I don't have anything to suggest that would improve on this criterion. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You reference NASA, DARPA, Scientific American, and American political history in your piece. It seems these are well suited to the article, though I'm a little lost as to how some of the sections relate to each other. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Okay- I am not entirely clear what your argument is, so I'll take part responsibility for that (it's not an area I know much about) and leave part of the responsibility with you (because regardless of my lack of specific knowledge, I could have grasped a simple opening statement that described the gist of your argument before diving headlong into it). Having said that, you'll understand why this section is difficult for me to rate because it implies I know what the argument you're crafting is. Is this a warning against interstellar travel? I can't really judge how effectively you made use of rhetorical concepts to support an argument when I don't know what the argument is. I will grant you ethos, as you reference credible and/or well known sources. Pathos and kairos? Maybe, with a different reader? I'm not really panicked about our possible forays into mass space travel... I think I'm being generous by rating this "moderately well" because I'm only going that high on the assumption that this argument will be clear to someone else. It wasn't to me, so the rhetorical appeal to this reader would have been "not at all". Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I am quite sure you researched your article carefully and that it is a subject important to you. I think should you choose to move forward with publishing your article, the target demographic will need to be carefully considered. Although I understood sections of your article, I understood them as stand-alone statements and was not sure how they fit together. Ultimately, I could not make heads or tails of what you wanted me to take away from your piece. The strongest part of the article, for me, was your ability to narrate and integrate sources without any disjointed or choppy feel to the text. I have carefully considered how to rate this "overall" because you did do well integrating sources and referencing relevant organizations. Ultimately though, because I still (having reread it several times) cannot determine what it is you are trying to say I

have to rate it a "3". If a reader doesn't know what you're arguing for or against, the references used don't add a lot of value. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: fantasy work about the future of the Universe. Assess: nice interpretation and construction of a possible future scenario Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: official sources were introduced as well as influential opinion were reported. Assess: although the containt may be discussed, your introduction of the different interpretation point was nice and interesting. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: the author made a fair use of the five rhetorical appeals we have been studying in this course. Assess: it is nice to see how much involved you are by this scenario. Your pathos is very well expressed. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I personally have lots of doubts about the subject you chose to describe, so I really don't have any suggestion about what you could have done better or worse, as I don't have enough information. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: Nice and unique thought but need more materials to support your rhetorical arguments.. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The context, medium, and genre are relevant and engaging, but you still need to simplify some points to make it clearer Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You need to improve the clarity of ethos, logos, pathos, kairos for crafting the arguments. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Just simplify your arguments in clearer arguments Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You blend into the fabric of your travel in space and time anything and everything from NASA fiscal reports through Victor Frankl to Bob Dylan and back. Obviously, you had fun while you were at it, and that makes reading your text enjoyable. Astute, funny piece of writing and the sources and quotes are woven into your argument like a fine silk thread - not overtly seen but very strong. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Since the story begins with baby boomers needing to refresh their memory and knowledge it makes sense that you refer to the mad space rat race of the 60s.

Only thing I found a bit problematic is that you rely heavily, though poignantly, on characters and anecdotes from those roaring sixties. It's not that you don't relate to nowadays data and details, but in terms of storytelling, seems like LBJ, Kennedy and McNamara fascinate you more than, say, Barack Obama (or even Osama BL.) Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It's all in there. I really do not have much to add. I particularly liked how you turned the futuristic 100YSS into an issue that requires urgent discussion. Brilliant. (and Thank you Scientific American) Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Go on - write some more Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your piece, apart from being technical, is very persuasive and descriptive. It captures the reader's attention and engages his / her attention to read on further. the appeal to ethos, kairos and commonplaces are all crafted in the very first paragraph. This is a good research by all standards. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your material is again well suited for the text which you have put together. And additionally, I must say that you are well conversant with the subject matter. You seem to be in perfect control of your researched article amid very vivid descriptions in the subsequent paragraphs. You also cite very authoritative sources to buttress your facts. By the way, your mention of Bob Dylan sends me back to the good old days of good Music. And we can't forget Jimi Hendrix. Good work. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument.

Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Right from the first paragraph, I intimated your use of Pathos, ethos and kairos. These were deftly crafted into your introductory paragraph. In the ensuing paragraphs, you displayed your expertise on the use of logos as well. This has really made your submission very lively and persuasive. Well done. You are master in your field. In fact, you have a backlog of information on the topic before you even started your research work. Good work, my dear. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The only comments or suggestions I note is that you should always have in mind your targeted audience or readers. The language you use is very technical and professional. You should try as much as possible to come down to the level of your audience. You have done very well. Come and visit me one day in Ghana so that we can brainstorm things together. Your efforts have paid off very well... kudos and keep the flame aglow. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This piece operates at the level of an either/or conflict between the Military Industrial Complex (MIC) versus the more moral and/or existential desire/need for space exploration and colonisation. Would have benefited for a few facts and figures. Americans spent as much on toothpaste in a year, than it cost to send astronauts to the moon. The MIC contributes remarkably little to the economy. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: There is a position supported by assertions and speculation. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The language was rhetorical. But seemed to operate at the level of pathos. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: A more neutral position and come facts and figures to support the pros and cons of the argument would have led to a more satisfactory conclusion. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author incorporated quotes and concepts seamlessly into the text. A good example of this was the reference to Robert McNamara. Information was given about McNamara, his book, as well as the point the author was making. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author chose materials that supported his/her viewpoint. The selections did not appear too strident or biased. Familiar, respected sources such as Scientific American reassure the audience of the credibility of the other, less familiar sources. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author's use of sly humor rather than over the top criticism helps pull the audience opinion in favor of the argument. Interesting possibilities are raised and powerful metaphors are employed in capturing the imagination of the audience. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The piece is very well written in terms of individual sections. I would encourage you to consider tightening up the rhetoric. For example, I believe there are sections such as the one on global climate change that don't belong. We start off with

interstellar travel, then move on to the MIC, Viet Nam, al-Qaeda, speciation, and the global economy. You have interesting ideas and an engaging way of presenting them. If you focus on fewer points, but in greater depth, it will give the audience the opportunity to consider these points more completely. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: There is no Works Cited section and only one reference to an authority that the reader could actually verify with the information provided: Writing in the January 2013 issue of Scientific American (Starship Humanity), Cameron M. Smith points out that human interstellar travel will lead to speciation in any event, whether we like it or not; Miscarriages and infant mortality will riseat least for a time. Inevitably, selection will preserve the genes suitable for extraterrestrial conditions and remove those that are less suitable. While it is good that you include this one quote from the article, your claims are otherwise unsupported by authority or insufficiently referenced. Perhaps more significantly, you often include unsupported statements that undermine your authority as a writer. For example, you write about "young engineers who eventually moved on to more mundane but marketable things." But because you don't support this statement with any facts to show what they are doing now, I was reticent to believe you. You also write about "the brilliantly unethical Defense Advanced Research Projects Agency (DARPA)." By using the phrase "brilliantly unethical" you disparage DARPA in very strong terms, but you don't show any facts or even explain why DARPA can be characterized as such. As a final example, you write," To appreciate the significance of this, it is important that DARPA be recognized as the intellectual cutting edge of the same military-industrial complex (MIC) that we were all told to beware as early as 1961." But you don't reference any authority, so I don't know what you mean. Who warned us? What did that person say? Did the speaker have enough ethos that I should believe him? Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It is difficult to rate this category because of the lack of cited materials. I am also not completely clear about the genre of the text, but I am assuming it is an opinion piece (blog?). However, your piece does mention many scientific sources and entities, so that 's helpful. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument.

Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Overall, your piece doesn't work for me. It is overly broad. It posits an extreme view in a conspiratorial tone without sufficient authority--ethos--or logos. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The problem may be your assumption that I, as a reader, know more about the subject than I actually do. For a class assignment such as this, it may be important to offer clearer explanations or to start from the beginning of the argument. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Talking about space NASA will be the best sources. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Sources match with the content. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You compare with other data. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: You are really care of lives on earth. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I have a problem with this text because I believe it is plagiarised - I found it in http://www.scribd.com/greattrek which contains work from various authors. If this is not the case then I apologize. I have flagged for moderation. The work uses a diverse pool of resources to weave a complex text. Topics raised are relevant to the questions raised although they do need a good awareness of american history. The text raises unanswered questions, design to provoke thought. Oddly for a piece of good quality, there is no title. There is subtle blend of referenced material with discrete presentation of own opinion often as adjectives to facts stated such as "brilliantly unethical" which given my suspicion is revealing. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I have a problem with this text because I believe it is plagiarised - I found it in http://www.scribd.com/greattrek which contains work from various authors. If this is not the case then I apologize. I have flagged for moderation. The article could be a New Yorker article - designed to stimulate thought, it is not an OpEd with a single theme expressed. It works informative aggregated topic writing with a style appropriate to educated readers. It is American in content. Educated non-Americans to whom I showed the text, did not know some of the referenced initials or material. If there is a fault, the text is too rich in references for some readers. Personally I enjoyed the text immensely so reading it was an enriching experience. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I have a problem with this text because I believe it is plagiarised - I found it in http://www.scribd.com/greattrek which contains work from various authors. If this is not the case then I apologize. I have flagged for moderation. There are smart aspects of rhetorical writing, Kairos in particular is evident by linking real estate to genetic changes in humanity. Pathos, is in the text because of the use of a wide range of retold events, however this also made me suspicious because it is unusually rich for a course as this. From an instructional perspective the text is useful because it can be linguistically analysed as an example of good, if complex topic, writing. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below:

Reviewer says: I have a problem with this text because I believe it is plagiarised - I found it in http://www.scribd.com/greattrek which contains work from various authors. If this is not the case then I apologize. I have flagged for moderation. If my suspicions are incorrect - why no title? Audience is an issue with such texts because so much information is provided that only well educated readers would know all the referred to material. This does not degrade the text, but does reminds that complex texts need a sophisticated readership. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your personal concern in the topic is not very evident. This would be more obvious if you had introduced the subject by a short anecdote, or something less "informative". The researched materials merely supports your assumption but don't clearly serve your persuasive purpose (which is not very clear by the way.) Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: We have seen in the course that we should include references (in the end of the paper) to support the statistics or information that we include in our text, you have product any. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think you may have a little problem with the Kairos appeal here ! The audience who is likely to be interested in this topic is not very large. You mentioned a lot of details that may be unknown to the reader, this can very challenging to him. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I think your paper contains too many scientific details. The introduction and the first paragraphs have too much information. And the reader doesn't see what the author wants to question.

Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Its very good, but where are the citations? Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Need I say more? Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You know which you used, and to what effect. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I know that the research assignment was supposed to have some standard MLA/APA citations, but if this is original work, it is the most entertaining I've read on wexmooc. Very entertaining and thought provoking. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You include many details and I can not find what is your main aim . To improve you could rearrange your organization to reveal your aim . Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good job. To improve you can mention the references you use. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Good, to improve you can express pathos clearer. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Good lock Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: My initial realction was WOW, I must admit. It starts with pretty heavy duty stuff. I very early came to realize that your intended audience is very far from the general public. The technical and reearch material is very much integrated fluently without any links or sources mentioned explicitly. To get the full enjoyment of your text the reader needs to have quite a varied knowledge of everything from history to physics, from litterature to music as well as some economic and political knowledge. Also much of that knowledge is quite geographically located to the USA and probably best understood by people who have lived for some years. I therefore initially had to imagine this blog post or column or essay being published somewhere where such an audience exists or else my reviewing would end up very differently. For such an audience it is a thourougly delightful text. I will for sure explore this topic further. For readers to explore this further you have not offered any shortcuts by using links or lists of sources BUT continuing my thought about considering this text in the context of a very specific intended audience that is not nessessary because such an audience is very much capable of finding more information just using key words in your text. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: I think I have said enough on the more knowledge based researched material in the first part so I will concentrate here on the more cultural/litteral sources you refer to. As I said getting the full fun and deep understanding of your text it is helpful to know Bod Dylan and his famous songs from a time past, as well as having Victor Frankle's book in one's book shelf. Other parts too will be lost on many ESLreaders here because they have metaphorical meanings that require cultural knowledge of ideoms. The term "to heel" is not similar in other languages for example. I liked your tone and imagery and found it especially nice in the end because the first part were quite heavy duty science based. Those personal comments and humourous imagery increased the text's pesuasive purpose for me because it spiced up the text very nicely. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: My feeling was that yes, you as a writer are aware of the rhetorical concepts and has used them very well but not in a very formal planned way because then a text often gets a bit stiff or unnatural. Your text shows your personality very well which makes me more think that you have used that knowledge more intuitivly than in a following a pattern, requirement kind of way. Your text has these htings more naturally integrated as I read it. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I so hope you do not get any peer reviewers who due to lack of knowledge and language does not understand your text at all and because of that gives you bad or very strange reviews. LOL if they do not understand it , let's hope they conclude that it must be brilliant since they do not get it. I very much would have liked to see other things you have written. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: He seems to have done a good job on the Fiscal report 2012 and x-rays grey arears people would be interested in-living in space and owning property. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Would fit into may genres as blog post, newspaper article,etc. He quoted materials in the document and showed great talent to make an analysis of current affairs like space exploration, climate change etc. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The perfect combination of ethos (purpose of life, our humanity), logos (space life and exploration), pathos (the passion of researches over years) and kairos (2012, indeed recent). Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The use of satire and comedy gave his rhetorics a greater appeal. His opening statements were excellent, so also the conclusion. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe:You tackled an interesting argumentative topic in a way that could attract the readers' attention. Assess: You exerted good efforts to bring this vital information into your assignment. Suggest: Try to find a link to relate the paragraphs with each other. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe:The content of your assignment is related to the topic that you have chosen Assess: You need to add some kind of link between the ideas of all the paragraph of your writing. Assess : Keep attempting to write,sine your writing talent can be felt in your writing. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument.

Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe:You tried to use the various rhetorical concepts in your assignment. Assess :Following the rhetorical concepts has given credibility to your writing and accordingly,that would attract the readers' attention. Suggest : Try to use more effective vocabulary to convey your message to the readers more effectively. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: You did a good effort .The more you write,the more you will be professional writer. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Discuss: several sources Assess: related to topic suggestions: none Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: good match of resources to topic Assess: expect to see journals Suggestions: add a few more Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Discuss: kairos, commonplaces and logs Assess: there was lacking ethos for people who aren't familiar with the subject matter suggest: make most readers not just a few interested Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Good Job.

Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Throughout the piece you inject your own style of writing as part of the persuasive argument. I like your use of questioning in the work when you say, "Or ought it?" to reframe your context and argument in a new light. My suggestion would be to open with a clearer and more focused topic. As the reader I wasn't sure what exactly you were trying to persuade and how your research supported a wider claim. In a way, your writing style narrative seemed to draw away from making a clear and concise persuasive piece. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It's important to know your audience when composing rhetorically and your researched materials and quotes are fairly seamlessly woven into the work. However it was difficult to grasp what the persuasive argument even was or how you were backing up that claim. At times it seemed pieced loosely where you mention the universe, space travel, global climate, and high-tech arms. None of the research seemed to pull your work together into one cohesive thought. A suggestion would be to make everything clearer. Simplify everything you're trying to explain. As a persuasive piece it's important to not bog down your reader with difficult narrative and abstract notions when you're trying to make a point. The point would be lost and you'd only confuse the reader. Keep it simple and you're golden. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The way you cited your research was very effective the way it was introduced throughout. I think you're weak on logos, as there did not seem to be an easy to follow and logical progression of thought from one paragraph to the next. I think in a topic as complex as science and technology and especially those topics with high end complexity, it's extremely important to build your logos right from the start so that the reader can understand and follow along as you introduce new concepts to him/her. My suggestion would be to focus on clarifying everything, build your ethos as you go along,

but make sure your reader is aware from the opening paragraph what the piece is going to be about. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I am still not sure what this was trying to persuade of me. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have no difficulty integrating in a smooth way the references you draw from. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You are an "ideas person". You have so many ideas, and so much you want to say, that I could not understand what your exact thesis is. In the beginning, it seemed like your article was about science and space exploration, then it seemed like it was about politics. In the end, you talked about evolution, which is science but also politics and very controversial. Thus, I could not evaluate you higher on this aspect, since, although you know HOW to use them, it seems you are less strong on when to use them. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You seem a logos person, although there was some pathos thrown in just for spice. Again- you are obviously a very thoughtful, intelligent writer, but you could benefit from review of the essay structure and you could meditate on the mantra "less is more". Your ideas are so many, they cannot be understood in such a short article. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: One basic essay structure consists of this: I. Introduction. (by end of Introduction, state thesis: part a, part b, part c) A. (Paragraph) B. (Paragraph) C.

(Paragraph) *Each paragraph addresses part of the thesis statement. Conclusion. *The thesis statement is supposed to be re-stated in the Conclusion. This is very crude, but it gives you an idea of that elegant structure that frees you to do a better job of writing by focusing on fewer ideas at a time. Keep writing and keep thinking! (Don't let the world make you too cynical! :) You are well-read and very thoughtful, you just need to simplify and organize! Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You used well results of your research just I wish to know what are your resources. because other students who I evaluated usually put bibliography at the end of their works. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your materials suited chosen context. But you could write small introduction about purpose of your text Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You crafted good argument, and proved knowledge of rhetorical concepts. Texts like: "Look out! Evolution seems poised to punctuate its equilibrium again! All things considered, whose side should we be on? " is talking much to the readers and catching attention. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Nice job. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: In this piece you address 'interstellar travel" and how it has brought about many questions about where humanity is headed. You discuss the roles of NASA and DARPA's in this changing world. You mention that this is not a new thing/discovery rather it is one that is perhaps being revisited with more seriousness. You address the limited information dissipated to the public about what is being explored by the big companies. You talk about humanity's survival or extinction and pose thoughtful questions about what the reader should consider in the realm of this 'interstellar travel'. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This piece is obviously for a very specific audience as I had quite a bit of trouble grasping it at first. I read it a few times and I hope I did you justice in what I got out of it. It is evident that you are passionate and well versed in this topic. Your use of technical terminology and use of credible sources demonstrates that you have done extensive research on this topic. I like that you pose questions for the reader to consider throughout the piece. It was very informative and very well substantiated by your sources. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I felt compelled to reread this piece a few times because their was an urgency to the message. Your knowledge of the topic was convincing. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I know that this piece was for a specific audience but it would be great if you could re-write it for the lay-man. It is such an interesting topic that I believe you would reach a greater audience if it was modified. For example, I would like to see something like this presented to high school students who are thinking about careers in the field. Awesome work! Really enjoyed the read. Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 1

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Is this plagarized? I found a version on the internet Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Is this plagarized? I found a version on the internet Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Is this plagarized? I found a version on the internet Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Is this plagarized? I found a version on the internet Overall score: 1 This review has been flagged for moderation. Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: An interesting piece filled with scientific research and data on outer space travel and how this will impact the future generations even those who may go 'out of this world' for a jaunt. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion.

Reviewer says: Read like an article written for a space journal. Can't really assess or suggest since this kind of writing must be understood or even be interesting to all. I learned a lot from this article. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Somehow since it seemed more 'reporting' in nature, pathos was missing and logos was not really put to test since this piece contained findings and math related facts for travel and about outer space. Captain Kirk could have featured a bit and this would have delighted at least some of the readers. Otherwise very scientific and futuristic. Great! Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: As above. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I have no idea what is being argued. Is it that we, the human race, going to undergo a significant, radical evolutionary change? Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: All I get out of this essay or article or...is conspiracy theories with no actual factual evidence. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: As I am not sure of the argument, I cannot put forth any suggestions.

Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Rethink your whole strategy. What do you actually want to say? Overall score: 2 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I am guessing that your article is about interstellar travel. But it also talked about evolution, al qaeda, global warming, MIC ( what is it!) quotes archaeologists and nuclear holocaust survivors. So I am really lost as to what your fantastic article was about at the end of my reading. Unfortunately your article landed in my review panel after being flagged for moderation and I didnt want to ignore it. At the outset, I think you are passionate about space travel and you defintely belong to the baby boomer generation. You probably took pride in your interest in physics back in school or college. You seem to have kept abreast of what is happening in space travel and the developments in NASA and beyond. You have refereed to projects from earlier years that today's generation probably has never heard of so it is interesting to learn what amazing science discoveries and proposals were made in the earlier years that may have sounded so out of the World but has become closer to reality now. I can see you rejoicing in the advancement in science. Since you have not identified the genre of your researched article, I am forced to assume that you have written it for a target community of readers whom you suppose will belong to the scientific community and not laymen ( woman , in my case) like me. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I find no links to any of the fabulous concepts and information you have shared in your article. None weaved into your article that were clickable links to help the reader understand what you are talking about. When you refer to -the same militaryindustrial complex (MIC) that we were all told to beware as early as 1961 - it makes no sense to your reader You seem to forget that not all the readers who evaluate your research project is a baby boomer. So you lost me at the 'we'. Then again, this is an ideal example where a link would have authenticated and supported your claim if it were a link. Again, dear sir, LBJ is not Lyndon B Johnson for all of us- If I hadn't googled it I would never have known whom you were referring to. Thank fully I am aware of JFK. Afain you completely lost me, the reader when you went - He must have somehow managed to avoid hearing Ikes warning. How convenient for the MIC! - Great examples

how opportunities like these should have been used to back up your claims, using links to clue in the clueless reader. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Overall I think your article went flying over my head with a lot of references to terms and phrases that were not credited with links- so I am not sure you you referred to when you said - the most profitable bogeymen - (an imagery / metaphor usage?) A wonderful use of a figure of speech- metaphor - horns of a dilemma. / up ones dark sleeve. You mention Cameron M. Smith like he is a name the World will recognize without any back ground information. It would have beena rhetorical appeal for ethos had you added that he is an Author, Explorer and Archaeologist or better still linked us to his page online. Again until I goole searched I did not know who Viktor Frankl was. It is unfair to expect everyone in the World ( your readers) to expect to reckon a 19th century Austrian neurologist and psychiatrist and Holocaust survivor. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Americans, and indeed all the world - Who all over the world? I guess you meant the people.- I mention this because you seem to have missed a word to help make complete sense of that sentence. The article is only understandable when it is explained in plain simple English instead of using jargon. That is where you will lose the crowd. Overall score: 3 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: Paragraph 3-5. Assess and Suggest Several details have loose connection relative to interstellar travel. This piece has wide scope but somewhat shallow. Unless it provides more details on Vietnam War, al-Qaeda, and even generalist. You may look the core reading, i.e. Library Tutorials from The Ohio State University Libraries, to choose terms relevant to your main idea. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3

Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Frankly I'm not sure what genre to which your piece belongs. Assuming as a blog post, you incorporate the researched materials pretty good. In the context of digital text, don't you think it's necessary to provide your readers the links? Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: 1. Cameron M. Smith points out that human interstellar travel will lead to speciation in any event, whether we like it or not; Miscarriages and infant mortality will riseat least for a time. Inevitably, selection will preserve the genes suitable for extraterrestrial conditions and remove those that are less suitable. 2. Paragraph 8 Assess and Suggest 1. It shows an effective ethos. 2. It has an interesting anaylsis on climate change. However, it doesn't facilitate your readers to understand your objection againts interstellar travel. Unfortunately, it doesn't show pathos. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I hardly understand your text. I had to read at least three times and even jotted down the main idea of each paragraph. This blog post covers too many subjects distracting me to grasp the key message. Overall score: 2 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: The writer denote knowledge of the subject and is consistent in his writing. paragraphs comes together very well. Assess: As an Op-ed it is well written, but the argument and the action that people should take should be stated clearly. Suggest: You should consider stating the action you expect from the people in a clearer manner. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: Though not a theme that is common to the vast majority. It is relevant in a time like this when space exploration is booming. Assess: As an Op-ed, the

terminology should be clear for the entire public to understand. Suggest: When writing an Op-ed, you need to write for everyone. Op-ed can be read by the entire public. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: The author uses ethos when when he cites experts in the area and institution dedicated to research in the area. The writer also uses Kairos as this is a relevant moment for the topic. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: No comment.. Overall score: 4 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have done enormous researching work. Your argument is compelling Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Its amazing discovery! Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Courageously presented! Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: aim to see your work in print media

Overall score: 5 Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Honestly I have no idea what this is. It reads like sience fiction. There is the format of an article to be gleamed, but really it's a mess. I don't get your purpose with this piece. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I feel offended that after all my hard work on my article I have to deal with this instead of actually providing feedback for someone who deserves it. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I don't even think you make a point here, it's too convoluted and there are too many things thrown together, so no rethoric either. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Shame on you for abusing people's time Overall score: 1 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You present an unexpected and interesting topic. Your work is engaging as the reader tries to figure if you are really serious. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text.

Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Why are there no links to your sources embedded in the text? Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I would think that your piece can be implicated in either of the four rhetorical appeals. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I would consider developing a stronger closing than the current lone sentence at the end. Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe The article goes on a tour the force to tell its reader that evolution will take place whether we like it or not. The writer uses a lot of farfetched references to tell the reader that evolution is inevitable. Politics is woven into the article at steady pace and it is clear that the author has a hidden agenda. Assess The references were not mentioned at the end of the article and in-text references were not made either. The text keeps the reader on his/her toes till the end when finally revealing the topic of the whle article. The author definitely got my attention but in a maybe different way than the author intended. Suggest Mentioning references at any point of time may clarify matters. In-text references could have made the article easier understood. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe The research material is not mentioned at the end of the passage neither are any references made in the passage to article on which the writer bases him/herself. The medium chosen does suit the purpose.so does the genre of the passage.

The strength of the argument will depend on the target audience. Assess The context may have been farfetched or very politically loaded in order to convince the audience of the fact that we are in evolution. The suggested space travel may evenually take place ,the politics underneath were out of place to convince the target audience. Suggest Mentioning the references might have given a better picture to the audience. Putting the aim of the article at the beginning might be less confusing to the reader. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe Ethos got its turn by referring to the nasa and darpa as authorities in the field. Logos would have its turn if the aim of the article would have been made at the beginning. Kairos was insinuated by the current time of the issue. The dates mentioned in the article make the article up to date and involved in a very current issue. Pathos was used through the political twists in the passage. Suggest A clearer mentioning of the aim might help in convincing the audience. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: The peculiarity of the article made me read it three times. I am still not sure whether I understood the purpose. Overall score: 2 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Well done I very intrigued, you kept my attention. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I would have liked to seem reference materials to research on my own. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Throw good mixtures of Pathos "humans are bleeding hearts - appeal to their emotions". Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Exceptional job!!!! Overall score: 5 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about

this criterion. Reviewer says: You are doing a good job referencing different sources, your text flows well. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I find the sited sources relevant to the topic. Although, I have to add that I find it somewhat difficult to understand the main point of the article. Are you suggesting that eventually humans will inhabit different planets, but it won't come easy? Not sure what the global warming has to do with anything. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your writing style is quite compelling, somewhat ironic, which is totally in tune with modern style of writing. You demonstrate a good knowledge of things that you mention in the article. It suggests to me that you have spent a significant amount of time thinking, analyzing, and synthesizing these things. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I didn't give a higher grade only because I couldn't quite get the main point of the article, transitions between paragraphs were not clear. Keep up the good work! God bless ;) Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe : LBJ's Retrospect, NASAs Human Research Programs 2012 Fiscal Year Annual Report and Scientific American were all mentioned, as well as some high level concepts, like in the first paragraph with the 100 year starship and NASAs Kepler mission. Assess : This looks like a very well thought out and thought provoking piece with depth and a fair bit of weight to it, but other than the three sources you mention, i have absolutely no idea where you got your information from. I'm in no way saying that you created them yourself, but i have no way of knowing that other than by doing my own research. Suggest: I did look up the 100YSS myself to see some background information, but what would have been the difficulty in linking directly to where you got the information from or just listing the website somewhere. This would have been a 4 or 5 star work if you'd cited or listed some sources somewhere, or linked to them. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe : You've described in detail the plans and problems of interstellar shuttling and colony ships, going so far as to point out a couple of impacts in the global culture now and in the future so i assume the sources that you're using are well chosen and to the point. Assess : That's the problem, i have to assume, because i don't know where you got your information from. I can infer, and in a couple of places i can seek out, like the article in the Scientific American, but i can't know them all, because you're not telling me. Suggest : Again, i need to know your sources to judge you on source materials. Sorry. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined

in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe : You've pulled the timeframes together pulling in information from the past, present and predictions into the future, you've used logical arguments to directly place your point of view, and you've even put an emotional stamp on it, especially with the line about politicians growing spines (unlikely). Assess : Though the extrinsic ethics are weak with the lack of sourcing, the intrinsic ethos is very powerful, at all times in command of all the facts and laying them out in a way to make them compelling, thereby showing great logos in leading us down your path of understanding. i even like the pathos. Suggest : It's a great piece, but you probably know what i'm going to say here. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: If i was to suddenly see a list of references or such i would have no problem marking this researched piece as a 4 or 5, so it's a shame it's not there. If i were to make a personal observation or change beyond that it would be to break the paragraphs up a little more. The walls of text you put up are a little intimidating and could do with a slightly easier to get through opening. Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It appears to me that the information contained in your writing is mostly of your opinion. I did not see you source any publications throughout the writing with hyperlinks or at the end with footnotes. By not doing so, I was not able to tell where you were getting your information from and would therefore classify the whole piece as your opinion. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I have to admit that I had a hard time following and understanding your writing. I constantly questioned, who is this written for? why is this being written? what is the point? The writing seems to cover many topics and jump around ideas but does not land for me on something concrete that is engaging to me as a reader. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The key question for me is what did you intend for me to do as a reader? In looking back at your work, I conclude that you want me to learn more about interstellar travel. If that is the case, then I would suggest that you provide relevant links to more information you think I should be reading that explains more about the current issues for interstellar travel. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I see that you devoted a lot of time to creating your written opinion article. As a reader, I had a tough time following the way you organized your thoughts. Consider drawing an argument map or putting together an outline of your ideas and then consider where the appeals should be placed to create a stronger persuasive piece. Overall score: 2 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide,

Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have integrated some researched materials but you failed to add a link towards them or to credit them at the bottom of the page. But I can see that you have quoted them and mentioned them in your write-up as well. It would be better if you credit them properly. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your context is good and informative although I kinda found it hard to understand it at first because I couldn't relate to the MIC and DARPA thingy. But then I can say that you wrote it well. It was also compelling. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: For me it has strong rhetorical concepts but it would be better if you wrote this in a manner that it would be understood by everyone. You used ethos, commonplaces, kairos and logos in this output. Good way of integrating those rhetorical appeals in one write-up. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Your work is great. It is like a work of an expert. I actually suspected that it was plagiarized. But I tried to check if it was original and I was brought to your Scribd page.lol.. Overall score: 4 This review has been flagged for moderation. Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I can see how you seem to have researched this topic, but there is are to references or the like to really show the sources you have gathered your material from, and therefore it makes it seem like more of just a jumble of your own opinions with no pointing out where you have received all this information to make you come to such conclusions in your paper. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Well, your research does seem to suit the chosen context you have tried to present, but as I stated above I do not know the sources and therefore am not compelled to really believe this argument being really well done for this assignment. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I can see you have put some of the rhetorical appeals into use in trying to craft your argument, and here you seem to have done rather well to draw the reader in and try to clarify, but the lack of where you gain your knowledge makes your argument not so believeable and thus I feel drawn to mark this off as a jumble of your opinion without any other source input. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Maybe link the reader to your sources next time? Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her

persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think that you did a wonderful job. For me, as a novice at this sphere, your essay sounds very sophisticated, It is absolutely clear that you have conducted a thorough research, you bring up interesting ideas. Your references to DAPRA, different programs and experts certainly add to the validity of your work. I also enjoyed your language - the language of a scientific article, challenging and provoking further research. As a suggestion part, you could explain LBJ abbreviation as you did with DAPRA and MIC. Of course that can be just my lack of knowledge :-)))) Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: As I have already written, your essay completety corresponds to a scientific genre. The topic that you have chosen is rather complicated, nevertheless you managed to explain your point of view. I especially like that you finish your essay with a rhetoric question which makes it rather thought provoking. It is a powerful device as it made me reread your essay again Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think the main concept of your essay is kairos, as you make allusions to different times both in the past and future. Your usage of ethos is also very remarkable, you refer to expert opinions. I can see your pathos concept in refering to war concept, to evolution of mankind. All these concepts seem to be skillfully designed. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Being an average reader, I found it challeging as well as extremely interesting to read the information you provided, which I believe was your primary goal. I like how freely you operate the information, Great job! Overall score: 5 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You talk about NASA's Kepler Mission and DARPA. I assume you have been reading their reports or websites. It is not clear exactly where pieces of information come from in your report - e.g. where did you read about the work on interstellar travel. Talk of genetically engineering homo sapiens is obviously controversial and as such I feel that you should quote the material that provided this information. You do go on to nicely counter balance this point though with some quotes from Cameron M. Smith. Also calling DARPA unethical in the first paragraph seems a little out of place and doesn't really have anything to do with the work. This should be cited. Personally, I would leave out this opinion and save it for another piece of researched writing. You also quote Victor Frankle but do not tell us about what his authority is to be talking on this subject. I think you have demonstrated your ability to include quotes and information from third party sources. However, you also have some fairly big "facts" in this piece that are not cited. For a higher mark I would have liked to see more people, papers and resources quoted. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the

three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: There is a lot of information in this piece and you have clearly read a lot on the subject either for research of this piece or for personal interest. However, it is not clear from the text what those sources are. I think this piece is very well written considering the technical subject, but it does fall down on not referencing enough work. I'm not sure if quoting Bob Dylan or David Ike is ideal in a scientific piece either. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I like the lead into new real estate but then going back to look at how hard it is to reach. The piece in general rambles around a bit but in the centre is a very interesting question. Should we consider genetically modifying humans if it allows us to reach another planet? With this discussion I think you effectively use both logos and pathos to look at this very controversial subject. I would love to see you use Assignment X to have another go at writing about this single subject. It could even be used to have a unique look at our own origins. What would life be like for a genetically modified human arriving on a new planet? How would they adapt, survive and expand? Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I think you tackle a complicated and scientific subject extremely well. You have a very nice chatty style that effortlessly moves between ideas. However! The way you phrase ideas is sometimes a little clumsy. I wonder how many times you re-read this work before submitting it. Some sentences could have been cleaned up. Here are some examples that I don't like: * Anyone who doubts the seriousness in which interstellar travel is now being considered will want to investigate 100YSS. [the "will want" reads badly, can this be improved?] * Now, it should be noted that much of the development work needed for 100YSS [feels like a very long introduction into an idea] * or even simple interplanetary journeys for that matter [is "for that matter" needed?] There are more. I guess you should re-read your text with your finger on the delete button. It is something I am only just learning to do - going through my writings and deleting all superfluous words. Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: My first thought is that you have researched your topic very well. It appears that you are writing some kind of scientific blog/post or something. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Again you have a lot of content but maybe take 2 or 3 of these topics and break them down to several and I think then you will be headed in the right direction Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Not quite sure of what you trying to accomplish? You seemed to have tackled several topic and I believe you have

some great material but with a little direction could maybe come up with several different topics and expand this into some blog with several posts that are related to NASA, DARP, Human Research Program etc. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: A lot of information with little direction of what you are trying to accomplish. Where are you headed in this commentary? Would have been nice to have had a tittle. Also links to your content would have been nice. It would have been nice if you could specified your particular genre. Being a part of the conversation is important also. Overall score: 2 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The rhetor's point seem to be that humans should adapt our bodies to the requirements of long-term space travel. We apparently need to do this either because there are lots of new planets out there or we are befouling the earth. The quotes he/she uses support the points pretty well Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The researched material was used appropriately and supported's the rhetor's argument. I thought she/he used just the right amont of it to be credible but not so much as to annoy. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I understood the rhetors appeal to be ethos. As an informed rhetor who has done his homework. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Good work! Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I think you mention your resources clearly. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your writing does not have a title, nor an introduction so it is not clear which is your context, medium or the genre of the text. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your writing is prolific and kind of descriptive. I think it has good ethos, logos, and kairos but needs to be more persuasive (kairos). Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: "Texts seek to teach, delight, or persuade" (Cicero) Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three

steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You have a lot of interesting information in here but I am confused as to the point of your essay. I had to go back and read thing over since I was unfamiliar with the terms you were using DARPA for example and the way you wrote about them seemed a bit conspiracy theory-ish. Are you suggesting there is a plot to alter humans for space travel? It would be helpful to know what you were trying to persuade me of up front. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It's clear that you did research but you didn't reference much of the research until half way through the essay. Instead of asking me to go do research on 100YSS, it would have been helpful to have references that you used and more information. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I see your use of logos albeit in a bit of a scattered way and also pathos, in an appeal to the modification of the human race but I don't know what your ethos is. What are you persuading me to do and why? Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: You have interesting ideas but your essay is challenging to read because the information is written like we are having a conversation where I already know what you are talking about. It is helpful to lead the reader to a conclusion and I still don't know what I am supposed to conclude. Although I am now prompted to go look at 100YSS. Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I'm unclear what your persuasive goal in this piece was. What did you want the reader to take away? While your language is interesting and you offer interesting concepts, the answer to the "so what" question is unclear. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Where did you get your information from? I would have liked to see your sources cited. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I detected all kinds of rhetorical ideas in your piece. Very interesting read. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Interesting! Though again, a clearer point would have been nice in the introduction. What was the persuasive goal? Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer

says: With a sense of style you have included research as a well-known fact into the flow of the text. I only had a problem because you seem to think that the Vietnam war started after Kennedy's assasination, in fact I think it's still a matter of debate whether he was planning to withdraw some troops from Vietnam. I'd verify that if you are planing to write a short story or a novel or a series of novels. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The material suited the context flawlesly. You insert main historical events into a fictional context of outer space observing the US history of the Cold War. Since you speak of globality perhaps you should mention some other world events. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You used the pathos indirectly as you speak of the distruction of the Earth by human kind. your kairos was very good and suited to this official liek language you've created.And your logos was the construction of your piece.I think it was well done specifically with the pathos. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Perhaps I'm just slow but I feel it gets too dense sometimes. If you could somehow slow down the pace a bit more with a little bit more explanation. Overall score: 5 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You write about various scientific things, but you don;t provide any researching material. Maybe its true but you have to prove it. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You write about space programs, the life out the earth, climate change, but you have an aggressive tone in your writing. why? Maybe you have very interesting things to say but with different way. Be more sober and support your claim. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Your logos ,matter. I think that your spirit is empathetic. Your pathos strong. I'm little confused about your ethos. Find a balance. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Your thoughts and ideas are interesting but you have to revise the all material. Overall score: 2 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The writer does talk about a serious topic. But it was little difficult to understand. Researched materials were used but should have been used more distinctly and with more

information. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: It was difficult to understand. The researched materials were confusing. The writer should have taken time to actually explain the background idea in a better way. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The writer did demonstrated the use of the rhetorical concepts. It did make me think but I was also a little confused. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Well, dear writer you had quite a few grammatical mistakes that hindered what you were trying to convey. You need to work on the grammar aspect as it effects the understanding of the work. Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: D: The piece makes reference to several things: DARPA, the Military-IndustrialComplex, articles in Scientific American, etc, all towards a point about the future evolution of mankind. A: This piece completely lacks focus - it goes from point to point, trying to bring together a number of disjointed things towards what is, at best, a vague conclusion. S: Simplify! You need to start with a strong, clear point. Is this a piece about evolution, the MIC, government secrecy or something else? Once you can say that in one clear sentence it will be easier to pick specific material that will support your argument. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: D: The research is chosen from a variety of sources. A: I can't figure out how all this research fits together - there's no clear point. S: It might help to have a more specific audience in mind for this piece - I'm not sure what genre to call it, or who it is intended for. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: D: The writer makes use of the rhetorical concepts, but runs the risk of using logical fallacies in making the argument. A: I can't find the connection between the research and the arguments. Because of this, it makes it hard to trust that the logic is sound. S: Re-read the readings on Fallacious Logos, Ethos and Pathos. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I really feel like a reading a conspiracy theory here, where a little bit of information is taken out of context and presented as an astounding truth. That being said, I think you have an interesting point to make - you just need to think more about what exactly that point is, and express it in the clearest possible terms. Once you do that you can see if there's any reputable research to back it up. If you can find that research, you will have a very powerful argument to make. If not you will at least know what the research can tell

you, which may be equally important (but less sensational) than your original premise. Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: We're are your sources? Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Compelling writing and highly provocative. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: To help your cause, a more compelling pathos could have been employed Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: A very interesting read but I don't see sources listed for your work Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You talked about a 2013 Jan issue of Scientific American but you still need to specify who the author is. Where did you get your other information about 100YSS and NASA's Human Research Program. How can the reader verify your data not to mention your assumptions? Is anyone else of authority making these assumptions? Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Without sources everything is based on your opinion and then you wouldn't have any basis for any assumptions. Who is Victor Frankle? What makes him knowledgeable? Did he write a book? Are you talking about Viktor Frankl who wrote Man's Search for Meaning? Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Ethos would be bases on sources which you didn't cite, Logos would also be dependent on credible ethos. A title to your piece would also give the reader a hint of what your persuasive argument. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: You wrote with style but who's to believe you with vague sources? Overall score: 2 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: an exploration of issues manifest interstellar travel. Well thought. This is dense. I suggest a strong lead. What is your lead? Make shorter sentences. You have a lot of thought in this piece. My suggestion is to make it easier to read. Shorter sentences and "mile posting" would help. Good work, but what is the lead?

That would help the rest follow more easily. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Either a lot of experience or reading or thought went into discussing issues of interstellar speciation. It's a good topic. It is a bit overwhelming; not bad, just a lot to consume. My suggestion is to cut, cut, cut. Give it a good lead and cut anything that doesn't relate to it. It is not a bad piece, but would be better in my opinion with a sharp, clear lead. (Perhaps: There are more new planets than most people realize. That is a lot of real estate to consider for the future. It's time to look more seriously at interstellar travel.") Cut to the chase. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: This piece merges a strong degree of logos with pathos (questions of interstellar travel), and lots of ethos (references to developments with NASA and others), to raise issues for non-scientists to consider. It is well done, but as mentioned above, would benefit from a clearer lead, shorter sentences, mile posting, and perhaps a bit more white space. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: My suggestions are already made above. Use a stronger lead, shorter sentences and mileposts and this would be a stronger piece. Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You describe a random set of events from 100YSS, Vietnam war, cold war, and then evolution at the end. It is very confusing to understand what type of message you are trying to convey. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Similar comment as above. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Similar comment. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I would like to know how other peers comment on your essay. Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I like that you picked a risky topic like this and approached it very confidently. The piece naturally reads as very speculative but small references like, for instance, the relativity with regards to time-dilation and your accurate reporting of the distance to the Centauri system lend credence to your piece. The piece shows the workings of a very active and imaginative mind. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the

three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: There is a lot of background information that you use to support your claims that could easily be dismissed as outlandish by any. The arguments are based on historical facts as well as established scientific facts. Although in the end much of the piece is speculative, it is speculative in a way that might as well be right because it emerges from a firm basis on our current state of knowledge. I like how you incorporated Frankl's (note the spelling!) views into a seemingly unrelated topic but you did so seamlessly. On an somewhat unrelated note. Does the meaning of human life hinge on it's eternal existence in the universe (which is almost guaranteed not to be the case)? Or can meaning be found within finitude? Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The author uses logos and pathos very well. Pathos is used when describing how something valuable would get lost if all of mankind perishes. Logos is used to construct arguments based on history and science. If I may point out a weakness it's the lack of ethos in the piece, I have no context of where you are coming from personally and why this matters to you so much. Yes you do point out the good arguments to establish the importance of the endevour but where do you fit in.I should qualify this by suggesting that your personality does come through in your political views such as considering DARPA unethical and so on, but what I am asking for is your emotional rather than political connection to the subject. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I enjoyed reading this piece I thought it was a bit unconventional and perhaps somewhat whimsical but for me this added to the appeal. I thought it was a very original topic that I had not expected to see here. Well done! Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Very well written and engaging write up on a very unusual subject. Research materials have been incorporated appropriately but more than that the argumentation is quite strong. Persuasion is perhaps not the purpose as it seems it is to educate on a futuristic topic. It does however persuade that we may be at the turn of evolution. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The materials from DARPA and MIC have been used well to bring out the contentious issues - the Vietnam war and Al qaeda seemed a little bit of a detour at first reading but made sense in the context of priorities of research. The genre of the text has not been mentioned by the author - can guess that it is an informational and argumentative text meant for perhaps a newspaper or magazine article. It is a little complex for lay audiences and assumes a fair amount of background knowledge. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide,

Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Logos ethos and kairos have been used reasonably well.There is not much pathos though. It is well argued that there are other exigencies like politics and power that are engineering research and may even push to the edge of evolution. Stronger use of logos and pathos could have been made. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: An interesting and well written article. Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The subject is very interesting but I cant find any researched materials I mean references Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I cant tell this without seeing references Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: These should be described more clearly Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Over all the topic is interesting and I like his/her detail description. Overall score: 5 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Writer show a wide range of vocabulary and refers to a variety of popular and not-so-well-known aspects media and government Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Material appears to be sourced from the writer's own knowledge experience and point of view. This is appropriate in the context of being an opinion piece. It be frowned upon in an academic context Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The writer uses commonplaces to his advantage, twisting them in an ironic tone to entertain and keep the interest of the reader. Cynicism on the part of the writer won't be enough for some readers, for them you will need to have evidence or citations to be convinced.. I allow that the MIC is an opaque and slippery concept to identify. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I enjoyed the prose, and the broad sweep of the references I learned of some agencies of US government I had not heard about. Overall score: 4 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide,

Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I thinks the text is well written and organized However, i would like to see some "references2 to back up. A bit of clarification as what is the main subject of the piece may have been welcome too Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: As said above, we would benefit from some quotes Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: he uses logos well Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I don't doubt the writer knows and has engough information on the subject of the text. yet i would like to see what the "conversation" is like and what others have to say on this topic Overall score: 2 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: You start with information pertaining to the discovery of far distant planets thought to be inhabitable by life, wend through a political, economic and scientific discourse that leads to the possibility of interstellar travel and the next phase of human evolution. Assess: This is an interesting essay, but since it ends in a conundrum, it is difficult to assess your persuasive purpose. Your research does make the case you seem to wish to, which I read as one of possibilities that we can then wonder about. Suggest: I would take a side here. If you have, irony notwithstanding, I would make it clearer. I'm on board for the stuff where you make a persuasive point (though I also just happen to agree). Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: You use a variety of references, historical, political, institutional, scientific, to help weave your narrative. Assess: The references help make your essay richer, more interesting, and more authoritative. Some of the references might be difficult for certain readers to grasp, so this essay would need a generally more erudite audience. Suggest: It's a nice array of references and sources. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Describe: You employ all four rhetorical appeals plus a number of commonplaces. Assess: The commonplaces help balance the esoteric and often abstruse nature of this essay. The rather challenging appeal to kairos is met quite well. Ethos is attained through references and the style and knowledge you bring to the piece as author. Logos, perhaps the most challenging rhetorical appeal to sell here, is used with appropriate restraint. Suggest: Taking a more definite side would imbue your essay throughout with the passion and conviction you bring to the material about Kennedy, McNamara, and the Vietnam War. Finally, include

any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Very interesting. Despite some of my comments above, I do like the idea of an open-ended question. Perhaps you even answer this question, but I do think a more definite opinion as to what will happen and what should happen would make for a stronger piece overall. Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You incorporated some citations directly into your text which helped your argument, however, for many of the really crucial aspects of your argument the sources seem to be weak or completely lacking. You tell the reader to go research for themselves (about 100YSS, for example). You call DARPA unethical, but it is not clear why you think this. tightening up some of these loose-ends would strengthen your overall argument. Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 3 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: The sources you included were related to the topic (for the most part), yet as mentioned above, you may want to consider included more sources to strengthen your argument (or, if you already have more sources, listing them at the end if you do not cite them directly in the text. Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 4 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: You incorporate logos by following a certain logical pattern with your argument. It does appear you switch it up though, at first I was unclear on your position. I had to re-read the piece to be certain. You use pathos to make appeals to your political persuasion. This can be tricky. If someone holds the same political perspective, they will tend to agree with you already and if they don't, you risk turning them off from receiving your message. To strengthen this aspect of the piece, you might consider going into greater details about the "why's" in terms of your political opinions (JFK was weak, McNamara was fumbling, etc.) I'm marking you 'very well' here because you did include rhetorical appeals, but my suggestion is to further elaborate on them the items you brought up. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: I think if you stuck to one major claim and followed that through more tightly, and incorporated more evidence and less opinion, your article would hold more wight when all is said and done. Overall score: 3 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 2 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: I did not see any evidence of research. showing researched evidence would have helped It was a burdensome piece. make it more reader-friendly Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: No evidence of research to help shine light on the piece Showing sources of information would have helped me understand this piece better. Rate

how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: There was no presence of any of the rhetorical concepts. Evidence of research would have showed logos. Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Research and show evidence of research would make people take your writing more seriously Overall score: 1 Report inappropriate content Rate how well the writer integrated into his or her own writing the researched materials relevant to his or her persuasive purpose. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: No Sources Cited Rate how well the researched materials suited the chosen context, medium, and genre of the text. Reviewer's score: 1 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: No research cited Rate how well the writer demonstrated an awareness of and facility with rhetorical concepts (e.g., ethos, logos, pathos, kairos, commonplaces) in crafting the argument. Reviewer's score: 5 Use the three steps outlined in the WEx Training Guide, Describe~Assess~Suggest, to provide written feedback about this criterion. Reviewer says: Very well done Finally, include any additional comments, suggestions, or notes of encouragement in the box below: Reviewer says: Source?? Overall score: 1 Report inappropriate content