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Gender equality is an ideal where both men and women are (entitled to) / (granted) equal rights and

opportunities, and that no discriminatory attitudes are harbored against opposite parties. This goal seemed to be unattainable in the past, as women were seen to be inferior to men. Due to womens physical characteristics of being the wea er se! and bearing children, their sole role was confined to the domestic sphere of staying at home and ta ing care of the family, while men, being physically stronger, were capable of protect the family and hence were considered the pillar of the household. "owe#er, in todays world, a lot of actions ha#e been ta en to ad#ocate the womens rights and opportunities. Therefore, $ strongly belie#e that it is possible to achie#e gender equality.

%irst of all, women these days, especially those in the de#eloped world, are gi#en equal education opportunities as men. This suggests that they are liable to ha#e an equal chance as men to get a &ob, to wor and thus to be independent from their husbands. 'nli e in the past when most women had low or no education because their duty was to stay at home and do house chores, which did not require them to go to school. %or this reason, they were unable to earn their own li#ing and had to downright depend on their husbands. %ortunately, pre&udice against womens ability besides doing households has been gradually eliminated, and we ha#e seen the number of women gaining access to education increasing o#er time. %or e!ample, in (ingapore today (em nen find data about the trend of women around the world gaining edu opportunity, countries that ma e edu for women compulsory) !ai (pore o representati#e. Try to a#oid using * country to discuss a global issue but use trends, unless the country is special in some way), women ha#e equal access to schooling and education opportunities. +ducation is made compulsory for all students aged , to *, for a minimum , basic school years, regardless of their gender. -lso, the percentage of literate women has increased dramatically, from ./ (only ./, emiu sure o do )to 01/ during the *023 4 56** period. Therefore, as women are gi#en an equal chance to study li e men, the gap between men and women will be narrowed so as to achie#e gender equality.

$n addition, women ha#e more rights and pri#ileges as compared to the past, particularly the right to #ote. Dating bac years ago (decades ago may be more appropriate), women did not ha#e a say (ha#e a stand is ha#e a #iewpoint) in politics7 neither did they ha#e the right for suffrage (same as the right to #ote8), by dint of the preconception that state affairs were mens responsibilities. -s a result, women were e!cluded, conforming the law and were unable to #oice out their #iews regarding politics (redundant). -s men had more rights and higher status in the society, the gender gap was getting widened. (uch discrimination continued to last until *090, when womens suffrage was stated as a right under the 'nited :ations ;on#ention on the +limination of -ll %orms of Discrimination against <omen (adopted means to apply a law published by other organisation, in this case, the ': was the one passing the law right8 $f not then emiu change bac ). Therefore, now women ha#e the right to #ote as well as the stand in politics li e men, which helps to diminish the gender inequality (how8 +!pand, this is a big, important point, emiu co the noi la women are able to #ote for politicians who can pass laws protecting their rights blah blah) another point is that women can now run campaigns and become politicians. +#en though ha#ing female politicians does not guarantee this, and ppl can argue that males can do so too, but ha#ing first4hand e!perience of being abused/unfairly treated, female politicians are more li ely to act in womens defence)

<omen do not =recei#e their rights in a passi#e manner, but they also stand up, rise to power, and pro#e their importance in the society. This is due to better education, as they #iew themsel#es equally as men, and they are aware they are capable to do what men can do. "ence, they dare to

challenge the social norms, and pursue high ran ing careers, in both political and economic arenas. %or e!ample, -ngela >er el, the first woman to ha#e become ;hancellor of Germany, is currently ran ed the world?s most powerful woman and the world?s second most powerful person by the %orbes maga@ine, the highest ran ing e#er achie#ed by a woman. (he plays a #ital part in 594 member +uropean 'nion and the fate of the euro depends on her. The abo#e e!ample illustrates that women also ha#e the power as men do (nghe i i, nen #iet la Athat womens political calibre is nowhere below mensB)7 hence men and women are on the same le#el, which is the aim of gender equality.

>oreo#er, many organi@ations were founded in order to protect and promote the womens rights. Cet me cite a specific e!ample (&ust Afor e!ampleB lah, too informal). $n *065, the :ational <omens Trade 'nion Ceague (<T'C) was established (where8 '(8) to ad#ocate for impro#ed wages and wor ing conditions for women. -t that time, e#en though women wor more than or equally to men, they are paid less. %or instance, in 5662, -merican women still earned only 99 cents on the male dollar (nghe nhu la the dollar is male a, sua lai), according to the latest census statistics. This is unfair to women as they are paid less on the basis of their se!. ;onsequently, the wage disparity between men and women would become greater o#er time, which leads to discrimination against women (discrimination leads to this, not the other way round). Therefore, with the establishment of those organi@ations, women could be assisted in the struggle for equality (the birth of these organisations will assisted, em #iet hoi bi sure la women will gain equality)

"owe#er, women are generally underpaid because they often perform low4status &obs, compared to men, leading to such disparity. ':$;+% also notes that the data is not indeed correct and reflects the reality, and that such generali@ations can hide wider fluctuations. $n Dra@il, for e!ample, women under the age of 53 earn a higher a#erage hourly wage than their male counterparts. Therefore, the women are not discriminated in the wor place, achie#ing the aim of gender inequality. (this para is thesis or anti8 Topic sentence and the rest dont match, again dont conclude that women are not discriminated in the wor place by quoting * small e!ample in Dra@il. +miu thieu * sentence to show that emiu dang #iet anti thesis #iE the para below is clearly anti4thesis) %urthermore, in some regions, discrimination against women is still pre#alent. %or e!ample, in some remote parts of $ndia, =widow burning is still practised. This act depri#es the rights of the women to li#e after her husband, the bac bone of the family, passed away. -nother e!ample would be in the rural parts of china, where the farmers still harbour the preference for boys. -s a result, though the =sing child policy is carried out in order to discourage citi@ens to ha#e babies, it allows farmers to ha#e another child if the first child is a girl. This is unfair to the girls as they are seen inferior to the boys. Cast e!ample would be about politics in $ndonesia. >ost of the ministers there are men. "ence, when >egawati (oe amoputri, the former president of $ndonesia, desired to become the president, there was a hot debate in the parliament to decide whether she is eligible to be the president or not, as they doubt her ability to lead a country. The e!amples abo#e shows that the notion of boys superior to girls in some areas would be a hindrance to achie#e the gender equality, ma ing it a distant dream. (nguyen para co the em se bi GF noi la &ust listing of e!amples, important la em phai show la a large population of the worlds women are under inequality, #d nhu tinh trang unbalanced demography in -sia, more boys are born in an unnatural ratio to girls)

Desides, one may argue that too much emphasis on womens rights for gender equality has e#en placed men at a disad#antage. <omen are being gi#en too much attention and care while sometimes

men fall a #ictim. This is often e#ident in the family issues. %or instance, in (ingapore, the womens charter was instituted in *0,* to ensure that women recei#e di#orce settlements e#en if they are in the wrong. -nother e!ample would be in the domestic #iolence area that e#en put men at harm. <omen are commonly thought to be the wea er se!, hence they are the ones sub&ected to the #iolence and harm. "owe#er, ironically, in the -merica, a sur#ey done by 39 families (only88) shows that most of the time, it was women who used #iolence as a mean to sol#e their marriage problems. Get, no laws ha#e been gone into effects to protect these men. Thus, not only women but men also need the rights to be treated fairly so that gender equality can be achie#ed.

$n short, though obstacles to achie#e gender equality are still present, women are steadily ha#ing a stand in the society, and ha#ing more rights than they did in the past, which gi#es them an equal chance to be treated li e men. Therefore, $ belie#e that this is no longer a distant dream but will be achie#ed &ust around the corner.