Review Quiz #1

Fragments
Run-ons
Sentence Variety
Peer Review Samples
English 100BC
Quiz Mulligans
Pay attention to quiz review
Mulligan sentences come from version 1 quiz
Will be given incorrect sentence, must correct
Go to Writing Lab and ask technician for the quiz
in Stankos folder (it is behind the desk, near the
window)
Complete the quiz in a Word document; do not
write on the quiz
Give both to Writing Lab technician
Review Quiz #1
1. Which sentence in the following paragraph
contains a shift in point of view (person and
number)?
(A) When online dating first became available,
many people that that it would simplify
romance. (B) We believed that you could type in
a list of criteria sense of humor, college
education, green eyes, good job and a
database would select the perfect mate. (C)
Thousands of people signed up for services and
filled out their profiles, confident that true love
was only a few mouse clicks away. (D) None of
the above.
(B) People believed that they could type in a list of criteria sense
of humor, college education, green eyes, good job and a
database would select the perfect mate.
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2. Which sentence in the following paragraph
contains a shift in tense?
(A) The English colonists who settled in
Massachusetts received assistance at first from
the local Indian tribes, but by 1675 there had
been friction between the English and the
Indians for many years. (B) On June 20 of that
year, Metacomet, whom the colonists called
Philip, leads the Wampanoag tribe in the first of
a series of attacks on the colonial settlements.
(C) The war, known today as King Philips War,
raged on for over a year and left three thousand
Indians and six hundred colonists dead. (D)
None of the above.
(B) On June 20 of that year, Metacomet, whom the colonists called
Philip, led the Wampanoag tribe in the first of a series of
attacks on the colonial settlements.
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3. Which sentence in the following paragraph
contains a shift in mood and voice?
(A) Our neighbors told us that the island was
being evacuated because of the coming storm.
(B) Also take the northern route to the
mainland. (C) We hoped that we would be able
to beat all of the traffic. (D) None of the above.
(B) They also suggested that we take the northern route to the
mainland.
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4. Which sentence contains a shift from a
statement to a questions (indirect to direct)?
A. Mother said that she would be late for dinner
and asked me not to leave for choir practice
until Dad came home.
B. The interviewer asked if we had brought our
proof of birth, citizenship, and passports.
C. In my first tai chi class, the sensei asked if I
had ever done yoga stretches and did I have
good balance.
D. None of the above.
C. In my first tai chi class, the sensei asked if I had ever done yoga
stretches and whether or not I had good balance.
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5. Facts speak for themselves.
A. Preposition C. Pronoun
B. Noun D. Verb
C. Pronoun
6. The loftiest towers always rise from the
ground.
A. Preposition C. Pronoun
B. Noun D. Verb
D. Verb
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7. He leaped from the frying pan into the fire.
A. Preposition C. Conjunction
B. Adverb D. Adjective
A. Preposition
8. Victory has a hundred fathers, but defeat is an orphan.
A. Preposition C. Conjunction
B. Adverb D. Adjective
C. Conjunction
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9. Choose the sentence that avoids passive verbs and uses only
active verbs.
A. The Prussians were victorious over the Saxons in 1745.
B. The tour guides expertly paddled the sea kayaks.
C. There were shouting protesters on the courthouse steps.
D. None of the above.
B. The tour guides expertly paddled the sea kayaks.
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10. Choose the sentence that avoids passive verbs and uses only
active verbs.
A. Many native Hawaiians are forced to leave their beautiful
beaches to make room for hotels and condominiums.
B. As the time for harvest approaches, the tobacco plants are
sprayed with a chemical to retard the growth of suckers.
C. All of the above
D. None of the above
D. None of the above
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11. Choose the sentence that avoids passive verbs and uses only
active verbs.
A. Buying nuclear waste in Antarctica would violate an
international treaty.
B. When Rosa Parks resisted giving up her seat on the bus, she
became a civil rights hero.
C. All of the above
D. None of the above
A. Buying nuclear waste in Antarctica would violate an
international treaty.
Be verbs = is, are, am, was, were, been, being
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12. Choose the sentence that avoids passive verbs and uses only
active verbs.
A. The ranger doused the campfire before giving us a ticket for
unauthorized use of a campsite.
B. The Prussians were victorious over the Saxons in 1745.
C. All of the above
D. None of the above
A. The ranger doused the campfire before giving us a ticket for
unauthorized use of a campsite.
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13. Choose the sentence that avoids passive verbs and uses only
active verbs.
A. The entire operation is managed by Ahmed, the producer.
B. The sea kayaks were awkwardly paddled by the video game
programmers.
C. All of the above
D. None of the above
D. None of the above
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14. Choose the sentence that incorrectly uses prepositions.
A. That is a situation I have not thought of.
B. That is a situation of which I have not thought.
C. That is a situation I have not considered.
D. B and C are correct.
A. That is a situation I have not thought of.
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15. A. The group was expected to travel as a unit and make
their plans by consensus.
B. The group was expected to travel as a unit and make its
plans by consensus.
B. The group was expected to travel as a unit and make its
plans by consensus.
16. A. When clients come to the writing center, they should feel
comfortable enough to seek advice.
B. When the client comes to the writing center, they should
feel comfortable enough to seek advice.
A. When clients come to the writing center, they should feel
comfortable enough to seek advice.
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17. A. The National Organization for Women was founded in
1966. That same year, the organization fought sex
discrimination in the airline industry.
B. The National Organization for Women was founded in 1966.
That same year, they fought sex discrimination in the airline
industry.
A. The National Organization for Women was founded in 1966.
That same year, the organization fought sex discrimination in
the airline industry.
18. A. He recognized her as the woman who had won an
Olympic gold medal for swimming.
B. He recognized her as the woman that had won an Olympic
gold medal for swimming.
A. He recognized her as the woman who had won an Olympic gold
medal for swimming.
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19. A. In Saudi Arabia it is considered ill-mannered for you to
reject a gift.
B. In Saudi Arabia it is considered ill-mannered for a person to
reject a gift.
B. In Saudi Arabia it is considered ill-mannered for a person to
reject a gift.
20. A. When Tia Elena put the cake on the table, it collapsed.
B. When Tia Elena put the cake on the table, the cake
collapsed.
B. When Tia Elena put the cake on the table, the cake collapsed.
Eng 100BC
Fragments
Fragments
A sentence is a group of words that has three
elements:
Subject
Verb
And a Complete thought
A fragment seems to be a complete sentence but
it lacks either a
Subject
Verb
Or a complete thought.
Fragments
What are the two basic ways to correct sentence
fragments?
Add what is missing (subject, verb, or both)
Attach fragment to sentence before or after it
Fragments
What are the five trouble spots that signal
possible fragments?
A word group that begins with a(n)
Preposition
Spotting Fragments
A word group that begins with a preposition
I pounded as hard as I could. Against the
door.
*correct by joining*
I pounded as hard as I could against the door.
Spotting Fragments
What are the five trouble spots that signal
possible fragments?
A word group that begins with a(n)
Preposition
Dependent word
Spotting Fragments
A word group that begins with a dependent word
Since I moved. I have eaten out every day.
Common Dependent words: after, although, as/as
if/ as though, because, before, how, once,
since, that, unless, while, until, etc.
*Correct by joining*
Since moving, I have eaten out every day.
Spotting Fragments
What are the five trouble spots that signal
possible fragments?
A word group that begins with a(n)
Preposition
Dependent word
-ing verb form
Spotting Fragments
A word group that begins with an -ing form verb
I ran as fast as I could. Hoping to get there on time.
*Correct by joining*
I was running as fast as I could, hoping to get there on
time.
*correct by adding missing elements*
I was running as fast as I could. I was still hoping to get
there on time.
Spotting Fragments
What are the five trouble spots that signal
possible fragments?
A word group that begins with a(n)
Preposition
Dependent word
-ing verb form
to and a verb
Spotting Fragments
A word group that begins with to and a verb
Cheri got underneath the car. To change the oil.
*correct by joining*
Cheri got underneath the car to change the oil.
To change the oil, Cheri got underneath the car.
*correct by adding elements*
Cheri got underneath the car. She needed to change
the oil.
Spotting Fragments
What are the five trouble spots that signal
possible fragments?
A word group that begins with a(n)
Preposition
Dependent word
-ing verb form
to and a verb
an example or explanation
Spotting Fragments
Word groups that are examples or explanations
Freecycle.com recycles usable items. Such as
clothing.
*correct by joining*
Freecycle.com recycles usable items such as
clothing.
Ex. 3.1 Sentence Fragments
1. There are older and more valuable
manuscripts. Than the Voynich.
There are older and more valuable manuscripts
than the Voynich.
2. However, there is none more mysterious. The
Voynich still puzzling scholars many years
after its discovery.
However, there is none more mysterious. The
Voynich is still puzzling scholars many years
after its discovery.
Ex. 3.1 Sentence Fragments
3. This manuscript was written in a code. So far
unable to solve it.
This manuscript was written in a code. So far no
one has been able to solve it.
4. Because the origins of the manuscript are
unclear; the puzzle is doubly difficult.
Because the origins of the manuscript are
unclear, the puzzle is doubly difficult.
Ex. 3.1 Sentence Fragments
5. No one knows. What country it came from.
No one knows what country it came from.
6. Therefore, it very hard to determine the
language the code represents. This makes
decoding it even more troublesome.
Therefore, it is very hard to determine the
language the code represents. This makes
decoding it even more troublesome.
Ex. 3.1 Sentence Fragments
7. Handwriting specialists can only guess at its
age. It may date back to the Middle Ages.
correct
8. The writing does not resemble. Any letters
that can be traced to a known alphabet.
The writing does not resemble any letters that
can be traced to a known alphabet.
Ex. 3.1 Sentence Fragments
9. The manuscript which contains many
beautiful illustrations. Of plants, people, and
other seemingly unrelated images.
The manuscript contains many beautiful
illustrations. It depicts plants, people, and
other seemingly unrelated images.
Ex. 3.1 Sentence Fragments
10. Because the Voynich manuscript is such an
intriguing mystery. That some scholars might
actually be disappointed to learn all of its
secrets.
The Voynich manuscript is such an intriguing
mystery that some scholars might actually be
disappointed to learn all of its secrets.
Eng 100
Run-ons
Students will be able to
Indentify and correct run-on
sentences.
Run-Ons
1. Whats another name for a sentence?
Independent clause
2. What term describes two complete
sentences joined without any punctuation?
Fused sentence
All of us went to the movies Jack and Joan did
not stay long.
Run-Ons
2. What term describes two complete
sentences joined without any punctuation?
Fused sentence
All of us went to the movies Jack and Joan did
not stay long.
3. What term describes two complete
sentences joined by only a comma?
Comma splice
All of us went to the movies, Jack and Joan did
not stay long.
Run-Ons
4. What are the five ways to correct run-ons?
Add a period
All of us went to the movies. Jack and Joan did
not stay long.
Add a semicolon
All of us went to the movies; Jack and Joan did
not stay long.
Add a semicolon, a conjunctive adverb, and a
comma
All of us went to the movies; however, Jack
and Joan did not stay long.
Run-Ons
4. What are the five ways to correct run-ons?
Add a comma and a coordinating conjunction
All of us went to the movies, but Jack and Joan
did not stay long.
Add a dependent word
Although all of us went to the movies, Jack and
Joan did not stay long.
Ex. 4.1 Run-On Sentences
1. Mae West began as a child star the career of
Baby Mae took off when she performed at a
local Brooklyn theaters amateur night.
Mae West began as a child star. The career of
Baby Mae took off when she performed at a
local Brooklyn theaters amateur night.
2. At the age of nineteen, West began
performing on Broadway she shocked
audiences in 1911.
At the age of nineteen, West began performing
on Broadway; she shocked audiences in 1911.
Ex. 4.1 Run-On Sentences
3. The voluptuous West became known for her
suggestive clothing, even more famous were
her suggestive wisecracks.
The voluptuous West became known for her
suggestive clothing and even more famous for
her suggestive wisecracks.
4. Attending black jazz clubs had introduced her
to a new dance movement she performed this
shimmy on Broadway, and it became a
trademark for her.
Attending black jazz clubs had introduced her to
a new dance movement. She performed this
shimmy on Broadway, and it became a
trademark for her.
Ex. 4.1 Run-On Sentences
5. West was not satisfied for long with the
theatrical roles she was offered writing her
own plays was one way to find good parts.
West was not satisfied for long with the
theatrical roles she was offered; writing her
own plays was one way to find good parts.
6. In 1925, she wrote a play called Sex, no
producer she contacted would bring it to the
stage.
In 1925, she wrote a play called Sex, but no
producer she contacted would bring it to the
stage.
Ex. 4.1 Run-On Sentences
7. The following year, West produced the play
herself, advertisements for Sex were banned.
The following year, when West produced the
play herself, advertisements for Sex were
banned.
8. Nevertheless, the show played for nine
months until it was closed down by the Society
for the Suppression of Vice, West was arrested
and spent eight days in jail.
Nevertheless, the show played for nine months
until it was closed down by the Society for the
Suppression of Vice. West was arrested and
spent eight days in jail.
Ex. 4.1 Run-On Sentences
9. In the 1930s and 1940s, Mae West took her naughty
humor to Hollywood, while there she made a series of
hit films and often wrote her own screenplays.
In the 1930s and 1940s, Mae West took her naughty
humor to Hollywood. While there she made a series of
hit films and often wrote her own screenplays.
10. West made her final films in the 1970s by that time,
Americans found her less scandalous, but her name was
still a household word.
West made her final films in the 1970s. By that time
Americans found her less scandalous, but her name was
still a household word.
Sentence Variety
Providing Sentence Variety
Use a variety of sentence structures
Move adverbial modifiers
A few drops of sap eventually began
to trickle into the bucket.
Eventually a few drops of sap began
to trickle into the bucket.
Move adjectives and participial phrases
Edward, dejected and withdrawn,
nearly gave up his search for a job.
Dejected and withdrawn, Edward
nearly gave up his search for a job.
Providing Sentence Variety
Use a variety of sentence structures
Simple - A sentence with one independent clause and no
dependent clauses
My aunt enjoys eating cake.
Compound - A sentence with multiple independent clauses but no
dependent clauses.
The clown frightened the little girl, and she ran off screaming.
Complex - A sentence with one independent clause and at least
one dependent clause.
After Mary added up all the sales, she discovered that the
lemonade stand was 32 cents short.
Compound-complex - A sentence with multiple independent
clauses and at least one dependent clause.
Although I like to go camping, I haven't had the time to go
lately, and I haven't found anyone to go with.
Providing Sentence Variety
Try inverting sentence occasionally
A refrigerated case of mouthwatering cheeses is
opposite the produce section; a friendly attendant will
cut off just the amount you want.
Opposite the produce section is a refrigerated case of
mouthwatering cheeses; a friendly attendant will cut off
just the amount you want.
Huge lavender hearts outlined in bright white lights
were set at the top two corners of the stage.
Set at the top two corners of the stage were huge
lavender hearts outlined in bright white lights.
Peer Review - Samples
1. Does the essay follow MLA formatting? Check the margins, header,
headings, spacing, and title. Does the essay meet the target length of
a paragraph containing 7-10 sentences?
2. What is the paragraphs topic sentence?
3 5. What is the paragraphs first primary detail? What secondary
details give more support for the primary detail? What is the
paragraphs second primary detail? What secondary details give more
support for the primary detail? What is the paragraphs third primary
detail? What secondary details give more support for the primary
detail?
6. How does the concluding sentence remind you of the main point?
What final observation is made?
7. Does this essay tell a narrative or does it give a description? How do
you know?
8. Is the same paragraph written three times in 1
st
person, 2
nd
person, and 3
rd
person point of view? Are there any errors in point of
view?
9. Identify errors in grammar and mechanics. Apply rules of pronoun
and antecedent agreement, pronoun reference, and pronoun case.
Look for fragments, run-ons, and shifts. Circle all passive verbs. Circle
the sentences that end in prepositions or be verbs.
For Wednesday...
Rough draft of either narrative OR
description 9/24
Suggested sentence outlines of narrative &
description (type) due oct 1
Read chapter about compare/contrast
Read in glossary definitions of conclusion
and introductions