IELTS Academic Writing Sample with Answers Graphs (Band 9)

July 1, 2011 by Nitin Bhradwaj 19 Comments

Continuing with the IELTS Academic Writing, in this section you will find the sample IELTS
Academic Samples Tasks with answers (Band 9).
Graph Sample 1

The graph exhibits people using new music places on the internet in fifteen days period of time
namely personal choice and trendy pop music.
The overall trend shows fluctuation with slight increased towards the end of the period.
Staring with Music Choices websites; 40,000people went on this new site on the first day. Half
of them backed out the next day. In contrast to this pop parade net sites were visited by 120,000
music lovers on the day one which decreased slightly on the next day there after regaining the
same fame on 3rd day.
After 3rd day the enthusiasm for both music lines on the internet dropped slowly- reaching
maximum fall of 40,000 on the 7th day. Whereas Music Choice gained popularity, slightly
improving to get the original strength of 30,000 viewers on the screen, but was getting still less
visitors then their opponent Pop group i.e. 40,000 on day 7.
In the beginning of the next week both gained remarkable recovery after few fluctuations for
8thand 9th day having 40,000 and 50,000 visitors respectively, reaching to their peaks of one and
half thousand new visitors for Pop Parade on the 11th day showing the contrast of very few
people visiting music capital choice for the same day. Thereafter, Music Choice gained
popularity on the 12 day for having more than 120,000 new visitors on web.
In the end of the period Pop sites were visited by maximum viewers of 180,000 where as sides
located to Music Choice were nor explored by more than 80,000 explorers on he last day of the
report.
Graph Sample 2

The bar chart indicates a survey on two different age groups on the factors contributing to make
their environment pleasant for working.

These factors are divided in to internal and external factors. The internal factors are the team
spirit, competent boss, respect from colleagues and job satisfaction. The external factors are
chance for personal development, job security, promotional prospects and money.
On the internal factors above 50 % in both age groups agreed that team spirit, competent boss
and job satisfaction are essential to make their environment pleasant. Whereas on the external
factors, there are contrasting results. On the chance of personal development and promotional
aspects, 80% to 90% of the younger groups were in favor while only less than 50% of the older
group thought so. A similar pattern is also noted on job security. With regards to money, 69% to
70% on both age groups said it is essential.
In conclusion, the internal factors have similar responses from the two age groups while they had
dissimilar responses on the external factors.
Graph Sample 3

The data exhibits the conclusion of study of the average number of cars passing on three
different roads between 1993 and 2002. In general the trend was upward over the period.

The most striking feature is that there was a dramatic increase in the number of cars passed on
the Long Lane from 1993 to 2001, during which the number increased from 400 cars in 1993 to
1400 cars in 2001.
However, the number was stable during the following year at 1400 cars.
The evidence reveals that the number of cars on Harper Lane rose between 1993 and 1998. One
year before the introduction of the methods to slow down traffic, the number declined with slight
fluctuation.
The facts show that the average number of cars passed on Great York Way increased
significantly from 1993 to 1999, the same year in which methods to slow down traffic was
introduced. There were 600 cars in 1993 and 911 cars in 1999. However there was a slight
reduction in the number of cars during the following years.
To sum up the introduction of traffic calming had a non significant impact on the cars passing on
roads Long Lane and Great York Way. In comparison there was a slight effect on the cars
passing on Harper Lane.

Hello,
I appreciate your intention of helping IELTS candidates. The graphs are useful and I believe that
you have tried to give your best to the learners. However, I totally agree with Marlene.
Graph sample 1 (Music Choice / Pop Parade):
The last para of the sample answer says In the end of the period Pop sites were visited by
maximum viewers of 180,000 . This is not true. When measured, it shows a little less than
170,000 a difference of more than 10,000!

Anyway, I thanks a lot for coming forward to help the needy. Hope youll continue the good
work. :))
Best Regard!
Sumedha

Task 1 Question
The bar chart shows the relative electricity consumption and cost per year of
various household devices.
Write a 150-word report for a university lecturer explaining the data and making
comparisons where relevant.

Model Answer
The bar chart compares the energy consumption and expense of operating 16 different
items of household equipment. Overall, we can see significant differences in both cost
and consumption.

To begin with, there are some common household items which consume relatively little
energy. These include an electric blanket (approx. $10 or 100kwh/year), a microwave
oven (approx. $15 or 150kwh/year) and a television (approx. $17 or 170kwh/year).
By contrast, devices that might be classified as luxury items such as a pool pump or
spa are comparatively expensive and energy-intensive, at nearly $125 or 1500kwh/year
and around $190 or 2225kwh/year respectively.
It is interesting to note that even among household items normally considered alike,
such as a microwave and refrigerator, there are enormous discrepancies in cost and
energy use. The former uses only around $15 or 150kwh/year, while the latter
consumes at least six times that amount at $90 or 1150kwh/year.
In conclusion, it appears that there is no clear pattern in the relative energy
consumption of domestic equipment, although households had better be aware of the
high running costs of luxury items such as a pool pump and spa.
(187 words, IELTS 8.5)
Why does this Task 1 answer get an IELTS Band 8 score?
Task achievement: The model answer presents an overall description first, followed by
key supporting details that illustrate the main trend.
Coherence and cohesion: The model answer is divided into clear paragraphs and
each paragraph contains one main idea. There are cohesive links between paragraphs.
A variety of reference links are used throughout, including the former, the latter,
and respectively.
Lexical resource: The language in the question is effectively paraphrased. Synonyms
are introduced for key concepts such as electricity consumption > energy use and cost
> expense. Some less-common words such as discrepancies and energy-intensive are
used.
Grammatical range and accuracy: The model answer is free from grammatical errors.
Sentences tend to consist of multiple clauses. Paragraphs contain a variety of sentence
structures.

Sample Answer IELTS Writing Task 1 - Line Graph 1

Sample Answer IELTS Writing about Line Graph 1

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over
between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Sample Answer :

The line graph compares the percentage of people aged 65 or more in three countries
over a period of 100 years.
It is clear that the proportion of elderly people increases in each country between 1940
and 2040. Japan is expected to see the most dramatic changes in its elderly population.

In 1940, around 9% of Americans were aged 65 or over, compared to about 7% of

Swedish people and 5% of Japanese people. The proportions of elderly people in the
USA and Sweden rose gradually over the next 50 years, reaching just under 15% in 1990.
By contrast, the figures for Japan remained below 5% until the early 2000s.
Looking into the future, a sudden increase in the percentage of elderly people is
predicted for Japan, with a jump of over 15% in just 10 years from 2030 to 2040. By
2040, it is thought that around 27% of the Japanese population will be 65 years old or
more, while the figures for Sweden and the USA will be slightly lower, at about 25% and
23% respectively.
(178 words, band 9)