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In this article, I am going to show the process of IELTS essay writing step-by-step. I took the
animal topic and below you can see my sample essay and the description of certain techniques
how you could improve your IELTS writing score.
In addition, Id like to advise you one efficient way how to develop essay writing skills, that is
taking IELTS online full course.
So, here is the task:

Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new

medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue
that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to
cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of
their benefits to humanity.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from
your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

After I get the task, my first step is to underline key words so that I could focus my answer on
the task.

Next, I identify how many parts the task has. This task has three parts: the opinion in favour of
animal experiments, the opinion against and my opinion.

Afterwards, I take three minutes to draft my essays plan. I decide to use three paragraphs in the
body in order to have a balance of all the three parts. As I am writing the plan, I am answering the
question Why? Why are some individuals for animal experiments? Why are others against?
Why do I think that there is no alternative? Also, I try to remember a few strong examples to
support my arguments and put the down them in my plan.

After drafting my plan I look again at the topic and understand that I will need
some synonymsfor animal experiments . Some other vocabulary items come to my mind:
testing, animal testing, laboratory tests, medical experiments, so I mark them on the margin
and start writing my essay.

Usually I dont plan my introductions since I keep in mind a couple of good beginnings, and the
rest will be task paraphrase. So I use one of my favourite beginnings.
I remember that I should begin each paragraph with a topic sentence. Next come arguments
and examples. I use a very simple marker for my conclusion: In conclusion.
As I am writing, I am trying to use as many collocations as possible: discover
pharmaceuticals, fight diseases, vigorous debate, to abolish the practice, prove efficient,
lethal diseases, endanger existence, viable alternative. I also use a few less common
opinion verbs: contend, argue, struggle.
Besides, I am trying to show a variety of grammar structures: participial constructions,
complex sentences, negative inversion, conditionals, inversion in conditional mood.
Having written my essay, I reread it twice, first, trying to spot repetitions. When I see one, I use
my eraser and change that word with some synonym. For instance, I changed the second instance
of pharmaceutical with medicament and the second instance of proponents with
supporters). Finally, I try to check articles and punctuation marks. Thats it, my essay is ready!

Over the last century, numerous scientists have been experimenting in their
laboratories, trying to discover pharmaceuticals to fight various diseases. Their
method of testing medicinal drugs and other products on animals generates
vigorous social debate focused on the issue of morality.

The critics of animal experiments, who struggle to abolish the practice altogether,
offer a variety of arguments. First, they contend that animals differ from humans
by DNA, genes and organs. Even if a medicament or another product proves
efficient on animals, this does not necessarily mean that it will be just as efficacious
for humans. Second, it is immoral and inhumane when researchers make other
creatures suffer or even die during the laboratory tests.

On the other hand, animal testing proponents argue that its benefits outweigh
moral considerations. Never have there been so many lethal diseases endangering
the very existence of humankind. AIDS, cancer, bird flu are but a few of them,
taking millions of lives every year. Efficient and safe medicines are, therefore,

crucial for human race, and it would hardly be possible to develop them without
experiments on animals.

Although personally I disapprove of making living creatures suffer, I feel obliged to

accept medical experiments on animals as the best viable solution nowadays. The
reason is that human life is more valuable, and efficient drugs could save millions.
Nonetheless, were it possible to discover a better option for medical research, I
would gladly support it.

In conclusion, tests on animals have both supporters and opponents. Alas, today
there is no viable alternative to develop new pharmaceuticals, hence the importance
to continue conducting experiments.