Many people believe that an effective public transport system is a key component of a

modern city. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of public transport.

Nowadays, the public transport system plays an important role in the modern society. The
effective public transport has many advantages. It could reduce the environment pollution,
relieve the government financial burden, and provide a convenient transport to people. (Good
introduction. But what about the disadvantages?)
Firstly, The effective public transport is helpful to improvereduce environment pollution. In
the modern city, the private vehicles are increasingly. , and itIt leads to fact that the air
pollutionquality is getting worse. If the public transport is more effective, it could induce
more people to choose the public transport, such as trams or buses. Thus it reduces the use of
private vehicles, and the air pollution would be improved.
Another benefit is that Then the effective public transport could help government to reduce
their financial burden. We know that, the increase in the demand of vehicles cause to ehthe
higher necessitysary toin fundamental facilitiesrelated infrastructures, such as expand thea
wider road widely, build or more parking areas. These infrastructures are expensive and
shwould increase the governments financial budget. So theBy using an effective public
system, could reduce the demand of private care is lower, and consequently people no longer
need these facilities, and use this fund to other aspects for improving the peoples
welfaretherefore the amount of related expenditures on government can be lowered. (The
logic flow needs to be improved.)
In addition, the effective public transport could also provide a more convenient trafficnsport
method to people. It could save the peoples transport time due to less waiting time on the
road (Conclusion 1). If more people choose the public transport, the traffic jam should be
relieved (Conditional 1). Besides, the public transport is more comfortable than driving by
oneself (Conclusion 2). Obviously, self-driving should be more tired than take the bus or tram
(Conclusion 3). Therefore the effective public transport is more convenient (Conclusion 4).
(Too many points in on paragraph + no examples = low mark in IELTS.
Think about this question: How can you tell something is convenient??
In another word, general we say: A sofa is convenient because .... What?
The criteria is the most important logic here.
My sample would be this:
In addition, an effective public transport could also provide a more convenient transport
method to people. Such transport would be convenient because it saves the valuable time of
the travelers, and help them to get to other places in a shorter period of time. For instance, by
taking the trains, a person can get from Melbourne Central to an outer suburb like Dandenong
within 45 minutes of time, whereas it might take more than 1 hour of driving even in good
road conditions.
This will be good enough even for band 7.
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In conclusion, the effective public transport is an important factor in the modern city. It could
improve the environment condition, reduce governments financial budget, and make a
convenience for the people.
TR
5
What are the disadvantages????
CC

5-6

Logical links need to be paid more attention.

LR
6
Overall the range of vocabularies is fine, though there are still plenty areas for improvement.
GRA
5
A few sentences failed to convey meaning due to the excessive amount of grammar errors.
You need to improve the accuracy.

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