The main feature of the Indian education system is that it is more suited for social

learning than some other systems. The Indian government had developed a
technically-inclined learning program only about 5 years ago, which makes the
learning programs entirely different from the ones offered a generation ago. The
phases are being developed on a computer learning base and instructional
methods are mainly undertaken in American English.
With a literacy rate of about 92%, indians generally finish secondary
education. About 85% of the entire Indian population finish High School
though on a local basis, the far-flung provinces have a relatively lower
percentage of secondary school educational attainment compare to the
highly-urbanized areas like Delhi , Bhopal and Kochi .
With a good formal education, individuals can be able to land on good, high
paying jobs, especially if the graduate comes from an exclusive private
school. Education also develops a person's well-being and as such he can
easily cope up with his country's development. As far as society is
concerned, the fruits of education may be seen in the way people view
culture; one that is based on reality and not one that is based on folklore, as
some provinces have been in the past.
Certainly, with a competitive level of educational standard and high literacy
rate, India could definitely meet the growing demand for industrialization,
technological development and the increasing concern for globalization. With
these requisites met, the educational system in India becomes an effective
tool not only for civilianizing its populace, but for meeting its desired
economic development as well.
However, with the continuing economic crisis, and the ever-present American
business influence among indians, the educational system merely becomes a
'tool' for the on-going threat of 'brain drain' in India- lots of technocrats
and intellectuals prefer to leave India and work abroad than to contribute to
the development of the following generations due to the relatively lowpaying jobs in the country.
To conclude, despite the problems of 'brain drain' alluded to above, the
Indian education system has many benefits for both individuals and society
and is a 'key' to greater economic prosperity.

Strengths
Weaknesses
Very good sentence construction eg. As far as society is Occasional errors in word choice eg. lower percentage of
concerned, the fruits of education may be seen in the way educational attainment compare to urbanized areas ,
people view culture; one that is based on reality and not land on good high paying jobs , he can easily cope
one that is based on folklore, as some provinces have up with his countrys development.
been in the past.
An extensive vocabulary is used eg. suited, phases,
technically-inclined, urbanised, exclusive, under-taken,
attainment, well-being, requisites, populace
Expresses complex ideas, including opinion and
hypothesis eg. Certainly, with a competitive level of
educational standard and high literacy rate, India could
definitely meet the growing demand for industrialization,
technological development and the increasing concern for
globalization. With these requisites met, the educational
system in India becomes an effective tool not only for
civilianizing its populace, but for meeting its desired
economic development as well.
There is evidence of extensive discussion of the topic. Eg.
With a good formal education, individuals can be able to
land on good, high paying jobs, especially if the graduate
comes from an exclusive private school. Education also
develops a person's well-being and as such he can easily
cope up with his country's development. As far as society
is concerned, the fruits of education may be seen in the
way people view culture; one that is based on reality and
not one that is based on folklore, as some provinces have
been in the past.
The use of paragraphs is very good with topic sentences
and supporting information presented skilfully, with ideas
well linked presenting logical arguments eg. With a good
formal education, individuals can be able to land on good,
high paying jobs, especially if the graduate comes from an
exclusive private school. Education also develops a
person's well-being and as such he can easily cope up with
his country's development. As far as society is concerned,
the fruits of education may be seen in the way people view
culture; one that is based on reality and not one that is
based on folklore, as some provinces have been in the
past.
Long complex sentences are accurate and used effectively
to present an argument eg. Certainly, with a competitive
level of educational standard and high literacy rate, India
could definitely meet the growing demand for
industrialization, technological development and the
increasing concern for globalization. With these requisites
met, the educational system in India becomes an effective
tool not only for civilianizing its populace, but for meeting
its desired economic development as well.
A variety of linking words are used. Eg. With a literacy rate
As far as society is concerned Certainly
However

The essay is interesting to read, with convincing arguments

and clear conclusions eg. To conclude, despite the
problems of brain drain alluded to above, the Indian
education system has many benefits for both individuals
and society and is a key to greater economic prosperity.
Overall assessment:
Very Good (Advanced ADFELPS level 8)