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In my business, I must have things on record, says Cathy Trimble, Wellness Center
coordinator at Shore Memorial Hospital. This is a large bureaucracy, and I work
with many people in many departments. People sometimes forget telephone
conversations or remember selectively. When my boss says, Hey, the head of that
department claims she knows nothing about the health fair you are coordinating, I
want to have a record of what really happened. Its a great feeling to be able to
respond, But heres a copy of the memo I sent to her three weeks ago describing
the fair.
Shore Memorial Hospital, with over 1,500 employees, serves residents and
tourists visiting the Ocean City and Atlantic City, New Jersey, area. As Wellness
coordinator, Trimble organizes preventive health programs such as community
health fairs and workshops on stress management, blood pressure control, and
weight management. The hospital also offers services in corporate settings, where it
conducts health risk assessments for employees of large companies.
Whether shes organizing a kids health fair at a local mall or developing an
executive health assessment program at Harrahs Hotel Casino in Atlantic City,
Trimble is immersed in hundreds of scheduling and organizing details. In the
Harrahs program, for example, she is responsible for setting up vision, hearing,
blood, urine, blood pressure, body fat, and flexibility screenings. She also schedules
all the hospital professionals needed to conduct these screenings and the follow-up
consultations.
An important form of communication that aids Trimble in scheduling and
organizing the many details of her job is the memo, whether it is printed or an
electronic message. I must have a record of decisions and procedures. Its not
enough to call someone on the phone and make arrangements; sending a
confirmation memo verifies the details and keeps the record straight. Because she
cares about the effectiveness of her memos, Trimble pays attention to her writing.
Shes learned to avoid the mystery story approach, which forces readers to plow
through six or seven paragraphs before they understand why the memo was
written.
At Shore Memorial Hospital, Wellness Center director Cathy Trimble writes
many memos and e-mail messages to direct employees and to monitor projects.
Her pet peeve involves mystery memos that she sometimes receives. They
conceal their purpose until well into the message. To avoid falling into this trap
herself, she concentrates major points in the first paragraph. She also aims for a
high scan factor. This means using bullets, numbered lists, and columns to make
main points stand out. People shouldnt have to read through four or five
paragraphs to figure out, for example, what they need to bring to where theyre
going. Bulleted and numbered items are great for fast reading and also for quick
reference, when you want to look back over a document and refresh your memory.
Even though most of her messages are internal, Trimble takes the time to
compose carefully. She has good advice for beginning writers. Before you do any
writing on the job, try to get sample documents from the files. You can then see how
formal an organizations writing style is, and you can learn about formats. Look for a
good communicator whose messages you admire, and study that persons style. You
should also try to persuade a fellow worker to read your messages critically before
you send them.
Critical Thinking