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These continuity notes are from director Eris Weston, Because of the story, location, and ticking clock the continuity and time frame was challenging to work out.
These continuity notes are from director Eris Weston, Because of the story, location, and ticking clock the continuity and time frame was challenging to work out.
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These continuity notes are from director Eris Weston, Because of the story, location, and ticking clock the continuity and time frame was challenging to work out.
Droits d'auteur :
Attribution Non-Commercial (BY-NC)
Formats disponibles
Téléchargez comme PDF, TXT ou lisez en ligne sur Scribd
1. Morning. Griffith home. Begins in the morning at the
Griffith home as the prepare for their trip. 2. Same time. Notting Hill. The bank robbery at Notting Hill bank. 3. Later that morning. Motor home. The Griffith family on the road. The motor home dies. 4. Same time. Bank. The aftermath of the bank robbery. Paramedics take Hunt’s wife away. 5. Minutes later. The motor home. Jed works on engine. 6. Minutes later. Hospital. Hunt at hospital. Informed his wife is going to surgery. 7. Minutes later. Bank. Hunt back at bank? 8. Minutes later. Motor home. Kidnapper, disguised as patrolman, arrives at motor home. 9. Minutes later. Highway. Patrolman Levy is found by police officers. Hunt and Flowers are already there? 10. Minutes later. Motor home. Kidnapper reveals his true motive. 11. Minutes later. Highway. Police search immediate area of Levy crime scene. Hunt and Flowers still there. Hunt is going back to hospital. 12. Same time. Motor home traveling (towards crime scene?)(which one?) Bank robbery? Kidnapper in control. 13. Minute later. Highway. Hunt passes motor home on road. 14. Minutes later. Highway. Hunt discovers abandoned patrol car. Inspects car and discovers blood. 15. Minutes later. Motor home. Motor home traveling. Stopped by Flowers at roadblock? Her search of motor home is cut off by Hunt’s call announcing he found abandoned patrol car. Hunt takes a long time to call it in? 16. Minute later. Highway. Shortly after leaving roadblock, Jed loses control of motor home as deer leaps on road. Jed is shot. Is this within earshot of police at roadblock? 17. Later. Hospital. Hunt back at hospital. Finds out his wife is dead. Flowers is there? 18. Later. Motor home. Kidnapper traveling with family. Motor home runs out of gas. 19. Later. Hospital. Hunt at roadblock. Receives a call from Flowers. 20. Minutes later. Motor home. Wayne drives up and offers to help with motor home. 21. Minutes later. Highway. Mavis and Skip find Jed. They mistake him for bank robber. Jed escapes. 22. Minutes later. Highway. Wayne taking kidnapper and Tiffany to gas station. How did they get there? 23. Minutes later. Highway. Hunt interviews Mavis and Skip where they found Jed. 24. Minutes later. Woods. Jed escaping through woods. 25. Minutes later. Motor home. Hayle and Shane debate what to do. They hide from good Samaritan. 26. Later. Gas station. Wayne and kidnapper and Tiffany at gas station. Tiffany goes to bathroom. Discovers phone. Kidnapper pays for gas. 27. Same time. Motor home. Hayle and Shane waits for Kidnapper and Tiffany. Shane punctures brake line. 28. Same time. Gas station. Kidnapper goes to find Tiffany. Discovers pay phone. 29. Later. Montage of Hunt and search party tracking Jed through woods. 30. Minutes later. Kidnapper returns to motor home. Motor home drives off leaving oil stain. How much time could have passed from going to get gas, get gas and return to motor home? Could not be more than 15-20 minutes? 31. Later. Police station. Mavis and Skip help with sketch of Jed. 32. Later. Motor home traveling. Kidnapper searches for landmark. 33. Later. Woods. Jed running from search party. 34. Same time. Montage of Jed’s sketch as it prints. 35. Later. Motor home traveling. Oil leak continues. 36. Minutes later. Gas station. Patrolman delivers sketch to attendant and pulls away. Phone rings and as attendant answers the phone Jed arrives. Jed steals salesman’s car. Attendant calls police on cellular phone. 37. Minutes later. Jed driving down the highway. 38. Same time. Woods. Hunt gets call about Jed at gas station. 39. Minutes later. Jed driving. 40. Same time. Hunt driving. 41. Minutes later. Jed takes turnoff following motor home. 42. Same time. Hunt drives past turnoff and sees Jed’s car. The chase is on followed by shootout. Jed escapes into the woods as more police arrive. 43. Minutes later. Woods. Jed running away. 44. Same time. Hunt peers into woods. 45. Later. Search party has been organized. Blood hounds arrive. 46. Later. Woods. Jed on the run. Hears blood hounds in the distance. How long has it been and how far has he traveled. Not long and not far if he hears the blood hounds. The next scene the dogs are just moving into the woods from roadway. 47. Same time. The dogs start into the woods leading the search party. 48. Minutes later. Woods. Jed running. Hears the dogs closing in. 49. Same time. Woods. Dogs searching for Jed. Pick up scent. 50. Minutes later. Woods. Jed falls into bear trap. 51. Same time. Woods. Hunt and search party tracking Jed. 52. Same time. Woods. Jed struggles inside bear trap. 53. Same time. Woods. ATV traveling through woods. 54. Same time. Woods. Jed struggles in bear trap. ATV arrives and Guard pulls him out. 55. Same time. Woods. Hunt receives a message from headquarters. Trouble at the station. 56. Same time. Police station. Kingman and his people demonstrating as press looks on. 57. Minutes later. Police station. Hunt is inside watching demonstration. Militia exposition. Why would Hunt abandon search if they are so close? 58. Minutes later. Woods. Hunt is back in the woods asking everyone why they’re standing around. Flowers is suddenly there. Has she been there all along? 59. Later. Secondary road. Motor home. Hayle pleads to be released. Kidnapper finds dirt road, instructs Hayle to take it. 60. Same time. Woods. Guard and Jed on ATV. They see compound in distance. 61. Same time. Woods. Hunt and search party find bear pit. Police ATVs arrive. They follow ATV tracks. 62. Same time. Compound. Jed is led into house. Meets Kingman. 63. Same time. Woods. Police ATVs following Jed’s trail. 64. Same time. Compound house. Kingman interrogates Jed. Jed is left alone. He searches for a way out. Changes clothes. 65. Same time. Woods. Search party closing in on Jed. 66. Same time. Dirt road. Motor home arrives at compound gate. 67. Same time. Compound. Monitors show motor home at gate. 68. Minutes later. Compound. Motor home drives towards house. Jed wants to take care of it alone. 69. Minute later. Compound. Kingman searches Jed’s clothes. Finds Jed’s business card with to-do list on back. 70. Same time. Woods. Hunt and search part watch compound and motor home as it pulls up. Jed approaches. 71. Same time. Compound. Kidnapper locks kids in bathroom before stepping out of motor home with Hayle. Jed gets the drop on Kidnapper. 72. Same time. Woods. Hunt and search party watching compound. Hunt is going in alone. 73. Same time. Compound. Jed is exposed by Kingman and taken prisoner. 74. Same time. Woods. Flowers watching. Confused by what she sees. 75. Same time. Motor home. Shane struggles to escape from bathroom. 76. Minute later. Compound house. Jed and Hayle led into house. 77. Same time. Compound perimeter. Flowers and others close in. Thinks something’s wrong. Calls Hunt. 78. Same time. Compound house. Kingman discovers the compound is surrounded by police. Shootout begins as police storm compound. Wicker is confronted by Hunt. Kingman and Hunt fight. Wicker escapes in motor home. Jed chases, jumps on motor home. Hunt almost shoots Jed. Flowers saves him. 79. Same time. Motor home. Wickers driving furiously away. Shane struggles to get free. 80. Same time. Motor home. Jed fights to hang on. Cop shoots tire. 81. Same time. Motor home. Wicker fights to control wheel. Shane is almost free. Another cop fires, hits Wicker. Motor home is out of control. Jed hangs on. Shane escapes bathroom. Shane drives. 82. Same time. Dirt road. Hunt and cops in pursuit. 83. Same time. Motor home. Jed regains control and climbs on the roof. 84. Same time. Motor home. Shane struggles to get to the driver’s seat. Reaches driver’s seat, pulls Wicker off. Motor home heading towards closed gate. No brakes. 85. Same time. Motor home. Jed crawls across roof. 86. Same time. Motor home. Motor home crashes through gate. Jed swings inside through windshield. Jed gets behind wheel. Again, no brakes. 87. Minute later. Motor home. Sharp curve ahead and no way to slow down. 88. Seconds later. Motor home. Motor home flies off road and bounces through trees as Jed struggles with brakes and transmission. Motor home is heading for a very steep cliff. Finally, motor home rolls over and dangles off edge of cliff. It is now teetering on the edge of disaster. 89. Seconds later. Motor home. Jed and Shane carefully look for Tiffany. Motor home rocking back and forth ready to go over. 90. Seconds later. Jed and Wicker fight to the death. Etc…etc…etc…
NOTES:
1. Shane should be hipper (by today’s youth standards)and
with greater maturity that he is showing now. It’s difficult for Jed to accept that his son is maturing into a young man. Shane wants to prove to Jed that he is capable and responsible.
Note: Shane’s dialogue> there is a definite today slang
among teens to color Shane’s dialogue. It could help define the generation gap with his father: they both use slang but one is outdated (dad) the other is not (Shane). Dad doesn’t quite understand what Shane is talking about.
i.e. “da bomb” (Shane) “groovy” or “rad” (dad)
“cool beans” (Shane) “right on” (dad) I’m not suggesting Shane should become Pauly Shore. He would just come off like an idiot.
Slang from band’s lyrics is a good place to use.
Easy to understand: 24-7
Sprinkle Shane’s speech with just the right amount. It
might be a good joke between Jed and Shane as they toss their generational slang at each other while Jed is getting the motor home ready. Jed thinks he’s being very cool and Shane knows he’s not. Jed might even try to use Shane’s slang. Of course, it doesn’t work and Shane lets him know. As always the slang of the moment only sounds cool coming from certain people. i.e. They don’t work with mom or dad as they drive the Volvo on the way to the Galleria.
Since a great portion of our story does not involve
interplay between Jed and Shane, except for the opening and ending, we should explore the relationship between Wicker and Shane. That is, a hardened criminal with no moral values or conscience, (the opposite of Jed) and a young boy moving towards young manhood. Shane carries the strength and values taught to him by his father. He is now the man of the house since they assume Jed is dead. Shane tries to defend his family as best he can but is outmatched by a stronger and more cunning adversary. Wickers can see how much Shane wants to be brave and taunts the boy. This can pay off at the end when Shane shows his bravery and resourcefulness. 2. The time line of the story is less than a day. We might consider spreading it by either slowing things down a bit or allowing for one night. Ending could take place the following morning.
This could help the problem of how fast Jed’s sketch is
done and distributed so fast.
3. Hunt and Flowers seem to beam around a la Star Trek. So
does Kingman. 4. More tension could be explored between Wickers and Hayle. Hayle loses some of the personality she had from the opening once they are taken hostage. 5. The leaking brakes might be reconsidered since it takes such a long time for the oil to leak out. Is it necessary? The problem could occur when the cops shoot at the motor home. I know the object is to create tension as we watch the brakes lose their oil but it’s a kind of build that doesn’t pay off. 6. The end sequence works well as a whole. We just need to board it moment by moment to make it exciting and dramatic. 7. Does Hunt’s wife need to die? Maybe she in intensive care and it doesn’t look good. Is that enough motivation for Hunt? If we allow the story to evolve over a single night her death might occur during the night.
Some slang terms:
1. sweet (adj.) Good; very good; nice
2. wack/wacked/whack/whacked (adj.) uncool; boring 3. da bomb/the bomb (adj.) Good; very good; the best 4. What’s up? (int.) Greeting; hi. 5. like (int.) No real meaning; just a filler 6. mack/mack on (verb) To kiss; to make out 7. chick (noun) A female 8. floss (verb) To show off; to flaunt; to be flashy 9. phat (adj.) Good; very good; cool; great; awesome 10. stoked (adj.) very happy and/or excited 11. cool (adj.) good; very goo; excellent 12. grub/grub on (verb) to eat 13. dope (adj.) good; very good; cool; great 14. my bad (phrase) my fault; my mistake (implies apology) 15. kick it (verb) to relax 16. tight (adj.) good; very good; sharp; cool;attarctive 17. trip/trip out (verb) to act crazy; to overreact; to worry. 18. chill/chill out (verb) to relax 19. dude (noun) A person. 20. All over it (phrase) to be interested or involved in something. 21. boss (adj.) very cool 22. bugly (adj.) butt ugly 23. bunk (adj.) something that is not working 24. cheesy times 10 (adj.) something cheesy beyond the usual realm of cheesyness; especially something gaudy or from the 80’s. 25. chickenhead (noun) an ugly person 26. clueless (adj.) naïve 27. creechy (adj.) weird 28. dis (verb) disrespect 29. foo (vocative) fool 30. gimped out (adj.) messed up; retarded-looking 31. issues (noun) problems 32. jam (verb) to leave 33. kick it (verb) to relax 34. negatory (int.) No 35. rentals (noun) parents 36. the grail (adj.) the ultimate anything 37. total z (adj.) total zero 38. whatever (interjection) I don’t care