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Ryan Gallagher
English 12, CP
exemplifies exceptional growth as a writer. My writing skills and thinking abilities have
evolved immensely and only have continued to improve with every piece of writing I’ve
completed.
My essay observing theme and analysis of In Praise of the Humble Coma is one
of the first pieces I’ve completed this past year. The piece of writing itself displayed the
range of observational skills I had to work with entering this year. Much of my writing
appeared to be making a point in relation to theme and how the author relates the theme
to the larger picture. I was able to find the correlation between something as small as
In this paper I demonstrated that I read and understood the essay, and was able to
derive a meaning from the essay, but I didn’t articulate my own implications. If I could
revise this paper, I would’ve provided more explanations of how and why the author
articulates his main idea. I did state the author’s point that punctuation was more than just
a matter of aesthetics, but a lot of my explanations lacked depth. I was able to establish
that I understood the author’s main purpose, but I didn’t provide enough to back it, I just
seemed to restate what the author said in my own words to serve as my explanation.
ability to draw attention to detail through writing and analyze as well as explain symbols
and describe visual elements. By explaining the symbols portrayed in the film, I
Kayla Cafarella
Ryan Gallagher
English 12, CP
portrayed on film, I stated “…She personified Ophelia made her seem as though she was
aware of this underlying attachment between her brother and her. I noticed she responded
to her brother’s advice as if she knew what he was saying wouldn’t be requisite guidance
for her departure, but more or less his way of restricting her freedom with unnecessary
caution.” I showed that I understood the relationship between the characters and drew the
correlation from how they were portrayed in the film verses how Shakespeare portrayed
Later this year, as my writing abilities matured, I completed a full research paper
on the modern, contemporary artist, Chuck Close. My artist research paper displayed my
biography, as well as put my visual description skills to good use. I observed the art of
Chuck Close and analyze what it symbolized and represented and articulated somewhat
of a meaning as to why he chose to create some of the visual aspects of his pieces. In my
essay I stated “The simple smile on his face is one part of the portrait; it still completes
and defines the piece as a whole. They say there are 50 different ways to smile. A smile
can send a powerful message and for that reason much about a person’s character and
to be the best piece I wrote all year. The piece itself tells lets the reader get a glimpse into
Kayla Cafarella
Ryan Gallagher
English 12, CP
myself and my identity so the reader understands the piece is from my own point of view.
Then as I start my introduction, it continues it guides the reader into a little background
on the person that made me who I am today; and it leaves you with me stating who I
I’ve learned a lot about processing information into the composition of a formal
essay. Overall, my writing has come a long way since the beginning of this year, and my
writing has shown nothing but improvement with each piece I’ve completed.