Women Drivers

Sexism extends even into the area of automobile driving, it seems like
men are believing that they are far better drivers than women. Men consider
women drivers incompetent, inattentive, and even dangerous behind the wheel.
However, statistics prove that women are, in fact, safer drivers than men.
For example, the percentage of insurance rates for women are 20 percent lower
than they are for men. Another proof is that more accidents are caused by male
drivers between the ages of 18 and 25 than by any other group. Also, the greater
percentage of accidents involving deaths is caused by men. Although women are
critized for being too cautious, they are really just being safe drivers.
The reasons for women drivers safer diving habits can perhaps be found in
the differing attitudes of the sexes toward automobiles. On the one hand, women
drivers regard the automobile as a convenience, like a washing machine. On the
other hand, men regard the automobile as an extension of their egos, using it as
a weapon when they feel particularly aggresive, or using it as a status symbol.
All in all, women are safer drivers because of their attitude. Men can learn
to become safe drivers if they adopt the attitude that an automobile is merely a
convenience.

The fragments:
1. Paragraph 1
Fragment: Sexism extends even into the area of automobile driving, it
seems.
Correction: Sexism extends even into the area of automobile driving, it
seems like men are believing that they are far better drivers than
women.
2. Paragraph 2
Fragment: For example, insurance rates.
Correction: For example, the percentage of insurance rates for women
are 20 percent lower than they are for men.
Fragment: Although women are critized for being too cautious.
Correction: Although women are critized for being too cautious, they
are really just being safe drivers.
3. Paragprah 3
Fragment: Like a washing machine.
Correction: On the one hand, women drivers regard the automobile as
a convenience, like a washing machine.
Fragment: Using it as a weapon when they feel particularly aggresive.
Or using it as a status symbol.

Correction: On the other hand, men regard the automobile as an

extension of their egos, using it as a weapon when they feel
particularly aggresive, or using it as a status symbol.
4. Paragraph 4
Fragment: Because of their attitude.
Correction: All in all, women are safer drivers because of their attitude.
Fragment: If they adopt the attitude that an automobile is merely a
convenience.
Correction: Men can learn to become safe drivers if they adopt the
attitude that an automobile is merely a convenience.

Nonverbal Communication

Nonverbal communication, as known as body language, is used

everywhere in the world. It is a very powerful means of communications because
it communicates much more than spoken words.
An example of nonverbal communication is what occurs between parents
and child. When parents smile at their child, they are communicating the love,
acceptance and reassurance, so the child feels comfortable and safe. The smile
signifies approval; the child is happy and well adjusted.
Another example of nonverbal communication is the image a person
shows in public; for instance, a woman is walking alone on an unfamiliar and
possibly dangerous street. She wants to appear confident. She walks quickly,
although she may be tired. She walks with her shoulders straight and her head
held high; her eyes are focused straight ahead. Someone is looking at her and
she returns the glance without hesitation; in contrast, a nervous womean
appearsa afraid; she walks slowly with her shoulders and eyes down.
Indeed, body language can express more than spoken language; merely
by raising an eyebrow, clenching a jaw, or softening the eyes, a person can
express disapproval, anger or love. Body language is a very strong method of
communication.