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Jonah Wooten
Professor De Piero
English 101/108
October 25, 2016
A Literary Autopsy of Sports Articles
Why do we read pregame articles? What do the authors of these articles use to

Commented [1]: Fantastic title, Jonah! (Although, it


looks like you may have only analyzed 1 genre instead
of 2...)

keep the reader hooked and get them more invested in the team they analyze? In Navigating
Genres, Kerry Dirk states that .....knowledge of genres goes far beyond a simple discussion of
types(250). Written genre is much more complex, it is more than just a topic. You have to take
those really broad topics like horror movies, rap music and football, and break them all the way

Commented [2]: "Much more complex" than what?


I'm not sure what you're comparing written genres to
here.
Commented [3]: Don't forget your Oxford Comma! ;)

down to written text. Any topic can be broken down to not just a written genre, but multiple.
Sports is no exception, sports can be broken down to hockey, and hockey can be broken down
to the Philadelphia Flyers, and the Flyers can be broken all the way down to pregame articles.
Pregame articles is the written genre. Through this writing project, it will be proven that Flyers
pregame articles have rhetorical features that can persuade a reader to want to watch an
upcoming Flyers game.
There are three different genres autopsized: a 5 Things article
from the official team website, a standard game preview article from Philly.com and a short
tweet from the teams official twitter page. But lets look at the 5 Things article first. The article
takes five key points to look forward too in that game.. The actual five points are: Game Heavy,
explaining the amount of games the team played in a short time. Hot Start, which explained how
the Flyers opponent, The Canadiens, were off to a great start. Goals, Goals & More Goals,
which describes how well the Flyers have been able to score. This, That & The Rookies, which
throws in an analysis of rookie players. And finally, Players to Watch, which highlights the two
players that may shine for both teams. It has a lot in common with a standard preview article in

Commented [4]: Can you find a way to get all of this


across in 1 sentence -- maybe 2 lines? It's a bit
redundant/repetitive.
Commented [5]: OK, Jonah, this is getting close to a
thesis statement / argument, but I need a lot more
specifics here.
1, What rhetorical features?
2, Which ones are persuasive?
Commented [6]: (can you read these pieces differently
from a coach's/player's perspective?) that could be a
way to take your thesis statement to the next level.

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terms of explaining all of the important aspects of the upcoming game. The difference is that this
particular genre emphasizes the five most important keys to the game. The audience it is

Commented [7]: You already stated this, didn't you?

directed to is flyers fans, obviously, but to fans who want to specifically know what exactly to
look for. The purpose of the article, as stated multiple times, is to take the upcoming game, and
pluck away the five most important focal points to give fans something to look forward to before
the game. Its style is very expositive. It bullet points all of the key points in an order of
importance.

Moving on now to what could be

called a standard preview article. The article serves its purpose, it previews what lays ahead in
the Flyers-Canadiens game, but goes about it slightly different. Instead of listing five points, the

Commented [8]: OK, so here's what I'm thinking: you


did a lot of *describing* in this paragraph, but I'm
wondering -- how does this relate back to your
argument? What you are "proving" here? What about
this "5 points article" are you evaluating?

genre instead gives a paragraphical preview of what to expect. The author makes a statement
such as, The Canadiens (4-0-1) have Carey Price, widely regarded as the NHLs best goalie.
But not only do the Canadiens prevent a lot of goals from scoring, they scored a few themselves
as shown here, Entering Sunday, they(Canadiens) had allowed the fewest goals per
game(1.60) and were tied for scoring the NHLs most goals(4.00 per game). The author used

Commented [9]: OK -- I like how you're incorporating


textual support here -- but why are you including this?
How does this support your thesis statement?? How
does that "back up" your argument?

logos- facts/stats- to prove his point that the Flyers had a tough game ahead of them. The
audience are fans who want a more in-depth preview of the Flyers game, rather than just five
key points. The purpose of the genre is to explain how the Canadiens contest will be the
toughest of the season so far for the Flyers. The tone is more formal and to the point than 5
Things and the tweet as its straight to the point. This article is persuasive as the author is
trying to explain why this particular game will be a tough one to win.
Now to something sweet and simple, a tweet. A tweet is a short social media post on the
website Twitter of 140 characters or less, that can consist of words and/or pictures. Rhetoricthe way we use language and images to persuade- is what makes media work(Carroll 46). The
Philadelphia Flyers have their own Twitter account like most other teams, in order to reach out
to their fans on a wider scale. The Flyers use Rhetoric within this tweet. The tweet itself was a

Commented [10]: Can you provide textual evidence


for this?
Commented [11]: Im wondering if your paper would
benefit from re-structuring the organization. Instead of
-Genre #1
-Genre #2
-Genre #3
Could your paper/argument unfold a more
integrated/interwoven way if you did something like:
-Idea/Convention #1 (and then genres #1 and #2 and
#3)
-Idea/Convention #2 (and then genres #1 and #2 and
#3)
-Idea/Convention #3 (and then genres #1 and #2 and
#3)
Commented [12]: Id advise you to refrain from using
free-floating quotes (ie, sentences that start and end
with a quote). The reader is probably going to be left
wondering, Who is saying/citing this, and how/why is it
relevant? Wheres it coming from? Try to introduce
the quote and give it context.

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picture taken before game of players participating in a morning skate with the caption: Bonjour
from Montreal. The audience this genre is directed to is the social media community that of
course, follow the Flyers on Twitter. The Flyers use Twitter to reach out to those specific branch
of fans that use that specific social media device. The purpose of the tweet is to not necessarily
give a preview of the game, but to pump up the fans for the game itself. And since it is a tweet,

Commented [13]: Yes, exactly!

hundreds of thousands of people can share it and make it public to the world. Its is very laid
back and simple. It does not have to be expository, persuasive, or narrative. It isnt quite
descriptive either but it is the closest thing to descriptive. The author uses a bit of pathosappealing to emotion- by showing the players already on the ice, getting the reader somewhat
excited for the game later that night.

Now that that

the rhetorical features of the three genres have been analyzed, lets look at its conventions.
Going back to the 5 Things article, it has 5 key points listed, theres a short explanation of

Commented [14]: Organizational question: why did


you choose to include THIS PARAGRAPH here, in this
exact spot? I'm wondering about what your rationale is
for how your paper/argument unfolds.

each point. There is also some extra game stats before it gets to the five points. It gives the

What's the best way you can lead your reader through
your ideas?

channel the game will be on, and the time it will take place. With the standard article, The name

Commented [15]: Such as? And are these included in


the other pieces? How does all of this impact your
reading experience as a Flyers fan?

of the author is posted, there is also a link to a separate twitter site(not the official team twitter).
And the important keys are listed in paragraph, not numbered. There is also a photo of two
Flyers players. For the tweet, there is of course, a picture. Also there is a short caption above

Commented [16]: Of? Can you use any course terms


here to dig into an analysis a bit more.

the picture, an emoji of a waving hand, signaling hello. And coincidentally underneath the
picture, there is a link to the 5 Things article.

How

Commented [17]: So there two texts are linked? Does


that have any greater significance?

can a reader read these three genres, and how could persuade them to watch the game. The

Commented [18]: Is this a question?

reader can read the 5 Things article by scanning it. The reader can scan the 5 points and get

Commented [19]: I think you could find a way of


combining these 2 sentences.

a good understanding of the contest by just reading those 5 headings and no other part of the
article. An interested Flyers fan could read the standard article and could doubt and disagree, or
ask questions. The article states how the Flyers could potentially lose because they are facing a
tough challenge. A player of the Flyers could disagree and believe the Flyers are the better

Commented [20]: Oooooh! Tell me more here! Give


me some examples!
(And how could you tailor this more towards your
overall argument?)

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team. That would make them want to play harder, to see if the he and team can prove the
author wrong. A Twitter follower of the Flyers can look at the picture and read through visual
literacy. And see the teams warming up on the ice and get that early in-game feel prior to the
start of it, and be pumped up.
So as this paper is concluded, ask yourself this question stated by Mike Bunn in How to
Read Like a Writer, how-how did the writer get me to feel, how did the writer say something so
that it remains in my memory? (73). If you are a fan of the Flyers, and you want an in-depth
analysis of an upcoming game to get you excited, it is best to not only read a preview articles,
but read different kinds of pregame articles/ tweets in order to see the game from different
viewpoints. Reading from three different points of view will allow you to appreciate the topic of

Commented [21]: Which 3 different points of view? I


think you could elaborate on this a bit more, Jonah.

the written genre more. Instead of just watching the Flyers game for what it is, you can take

Commented [22]: (from our conversation -- as a


player, a coach, or a fan!)

what you have seen/read and apply it to the game. Same goes to the genres. If you looked
through each piece of writing without dissecting its rhetorical features, then as the reader, you
will not be able to get a better understanding of where the author is coming from, thus,
disallowing you to be persuaded to watch the game.

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Works Cited

Carchidi, Sam. Flyers Facing Big Test in Montreal. Philly.com/Sports. Oct.


2016 Web.

Oct. 2016.

<http://www.philly.com/philly/sports/flyers/20161024_Flyers_facing_big_test_in_Montreal
.html>
Philadelphiaflyers.com. 5 Things: Flyers vs Canadiens Oct. 2016. Web Oct.
2016

<https://www.nhl.com/flyers/news/5-things-flyers-vs-canadiens--philadelphia-

flyers/c-28299137>
Flyers Official Twitter. Bonjour from Montreal. Philadelphia Flyers(@NHLFlyers)
| Twitter. Oct. 2016. Web. Oct. 2016.
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%5Eauthor>
Bunn, Mike. How to Read Like a Writer. Writing Spaces: Readings on Writing,
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Parlor, 2011. Print.

Carroll, Laura Bolin. Backpacks vs. Briefcases: Steps toward Rhetorical


Analysis. Writing Spaces: Reading on Writing. Vol. 1. Parlor, 2010. Print

Dirk, Kerry. Navigating Genres. Writing Spaces: Readings on Writing. Vol. 1.


Parlor, 2010. Print.

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ENG 101-108 Feedback Matrix for WP1

Table of Textual Features and Qualities

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Main Focus was

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Comments and

Jonah,

Grade

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Nice work here youve put yourself in a great spot for the
final portfolio. Please use my comments as a guide on some
ways you can enhance this WP1. Here are some extra thoughts:

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-Really fine-tune that thesis statement and get it as crisp as you

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can. What, exactly, are you arguing in this paper? Try to


capture that idea in 1 sentence. The more direction you give me
from the get-go, the more Ill be able to follow your thought
process as I read your paper.
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-There were some areas where I thought you could get more

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specific and bring in specific textual support from the genres
themselves. Help me SEE what you want me to see.
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-Id like you to ask yourself: what overall organization would

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work best for the argument youre making?


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-Lastly, Id like you to focus a bite more on the different ways

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of readingI think that could add a super-interesting


component to your paper here.
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All told, though, nice work, brother. :)

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