Peer Reviewer: Tunjns Ys? Author of Essay: Professor von Uhl Prooftead/revise while commenting on: Sentence structure (Aze all sentences written in active tense? Are all sentences short, simple, and coherent for the piece’s readers?) ey re Coinerer Structure of paragraphs (topic sentence, support, conclusion sentence, etc.) é stlocwel. Spe Mfic ganttece 15 Eeliontg ‘Thesis (Does the thesis adhere to the paper topic? Is the thesis interesting? Is it ‘vague snd confusing? Is tthe constant focus throughout the writer's piece?) Logic behind ideas (Do all ideas adhere to paper topic? Is a flow woven throughout the order of their presentation? Are quotations from essay included? ‘Are ideas concrete examples from the essay or inferences from the writer?) Ay tes eee: ¥ é fvorertors a7 ¢ Grammer and diction (Punctuation coherent? Are verb tenses appropriate? Is the language ofthe essay tight and succinct? Is your pieces tone deliberate Ti Pere eeesefaagnee ei tech ores Hes poeenase pen ‘Transitions (Are transitions evident in paragraph and essay development?) Goes eet presi tiers feats ‘Vagueness (Can any substandard language and needless self-references be climinated {ie. “that”, “more”, “according to my opinion”, “I believe”, etc.]? Are all pronouns clear references to @ near-by antecedent?) (eS en Hance ev Please, outline the paper you are commenting upon.