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Hsu, Lili

ESL 33B
LDP 5
13 Dec 2016
Error Log Entry ___5____
Error Type: Sentence fragment
Activity 1 - Analysis
Error and Source
1.

Homophobias thinking will influence


the social perception which called
Homophobic attitudes and it will
affect most people see and treat the

Explanation of the

Solution/Correction/S

Problem
Sentence is too long

trategy
Homophobias thinking will influence
the social perception which called
Homophobic attitudes.
It will affect most people see and treat

homosexuals usually unkind and


unfriendly which is the main reason of
causing the huge discrimination

the homosexuals usually unkind and


unfriendly which is the main reason of

problems and gaps of understanding

causing the huge discrimination

between LGBT, homophobias, and

problems and gaps of understanding

normal people, but right now the

between LGBT, homophobias, and

tension of the LGBT, normal people,

normal people, but right now the tension

and homophobias are getting better as


time goes by because in this sociality

of the LGBT, normal people, and


homophobias are getting better as time

of the country, more and more normal


people are willing to accept the LGBT
group and being respect to them. But

goes by.
In this sociality of the country, more and

even though in the sociality the

more normal people are willing to

acceptability of LGBT group is getting

accept the LGBT group and being

higher, there are always some

respect to them. But even though in the

homophobias cannot accept the

sociality the acceptability of LGBT

change of the society. (Project#3,


par2)

group is getting higher, there are always

some homophobias cannot accept the


change of the society.

2. Most of people have their

Run on sentence

own religions, all of the

Most of people have their


own religions; all of the

religions are against


homosexuality, so the

religions are against


homosexuality. The people

people believe the


homosexuality should be

believe the homosexuality

destroyed and disappear


in the society. (Project3.

should be destroyed and


disappear in the society.

Par4)

Activity 5: Punctuating your own clauses


The US government suspected among the Japanese-American, there
had the spies, so the Japan could know the information of the US
government and armies.
The US government suspected among the Japanese-American
who ware spies, so the Japan could know the information of the US
government and armies.
Vocabulary Log Entry __5___

Word #1
Source
Sentence
General

_______ Homophobia______________________
Project3 outline
Homophobias were not only made by the social perception.
Dislike of or prejudice against homosexual people.

meaning
Specific

The people against homosexuality

meaning
Grammatical

Noun

info

Sample

In 1950s, it was a time of discrimination, racism,

sentence
Word #2
Source
Sentence

and homophobia.
__________________ Homosexual ___________________
Project3 par.3
They believe the homosexuals are not nature and normal, and the

General

homosexuals are against to human being.


A person who is sexually attracted to people of their own

meaning
Specific

sex.
People who are LGBT.

meaning
Grammatical

noun

info
Sample

I hope that one day homosexual will not be seemed as

sentence
Word #3
Source
Sentence

some kind of sickness.


_________________Homophobic attitude______________________
Project3 outline
Homophobic attitudes influences by social perception and

General

1.

they see and treat the homosexuals usually badly.


A range of negative attitudes and feelings toward
homosexuality

meaning
Specific

The unkind attitude of viewing the homosexual.

meaning
Grammatical

Noun

info
Sample

Homophobic attitude will affect other people to view LGBT,

sentence

and causing the discrimination.