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Task B : Imitation of 3 essays

Find 3 good essays from the 2 types of essays bellow and imitate their
writing style.
Students, however need to make some changes to the essays by changing
the relevant part of speech for example the noun, adjective, verb, adverb,
pronoun, conjunction, interjection, and preposition.
(i)
(ii)

Argumentative essay (agree or disagree)


Discursive essay (for, against or both)

Essay 1: Argumentative Essay


No

3.

Element

Sentences

Original

It is true that no man is an island meaning that no


one in this world can live alone without friendship.
That person would be very socially challenged as he
or she would miss the camaraderie and life
experiences that come with friendship. However, I
completely disagree with the statement that the
most valuable thing in life is friendship as there are
certainly more important and priceless things in life
besides this.

Imitate

It is truly undeniable that money makes the world go


round. And indeed it does as without money, life
would be very difficult as in todays society, nothing
is free. The side effect however is that people are
becoming more materialistic. I agree that people are
becoming more materialistic in nature.

Original

In this essay, I will outline how life itself is more


valuable than friendship, and elaborate on
why family and the individuals principles in
life are ranked higher.

Imitate

In this thesis, I will discuss how money has affected


modern societys way of life on an individual level,
the countrys economy as well as our spiritual
and moral beliefs.

Introduction

Thesis
Statement

Topic Sentence
1

Original
First and foremost, before one can enjoy the beauty
of friendship, one must surely value life itself or in
other words, we should value our health. This
is because, the quality of our life is the single most

important criteria in life if we are to live a


meaningful and wholesome life.

Imitate

Original

Supporting
Details

Firstly, each individual is affected by materialism to


some extent in this day and age because highliving is becoming an uprising trend. The reason
is because today's generation are geared towards
making more and more money so that they can
enjoy the carefree lifestyle that is so popular these
days.
Moreover, without good health, we will be hard
pressed to do even the simplest of tasks like feed
ourselves or relieve ourselves without the help of
doctors, nurses and caregivers. For example, if we
are paralyzed, lost our sight, hearing or ability to
speak or even a simple case of a fever or allergic
reactions, then the quality of our life is greatly
reduced and no amount of friendship can make us
healthy again. Therefore, while friends can stand by
us in our time of need, pristine health is still the
most valuable asset in our lives.

Imitate

In addition, people now are striving to earn more


income in order to afford things that are more
expensive and branded. For instance, people spent
their money more on genuine handbags, expensive
gadgets as it wasting of money when regular goods
may prove to be good enough. Hence, while
individuals become more focused on their pursuit of
material wealth and improving their standard of
living, they may forget that what matters most in life
is quality time spent with family and friends and not
the quantity of their material goods.

Original

Secondly, we are no one without our family as


indeed blood is thicker than water. This means
that however you analyze it, friendships will
almost always play second fiddle because
family always comes first.

Topic Sentence
2

Imitate
Next, when society starts spending in a
materialistic manner it will surely have a big
effect on the countrys economy. Meaning that

the spending power of society will help boost the


economy and create more business opportunities for
the successful trade.

Original

Supporting
Details

Imitate

Furthermore, if we do not value our family above


others, then there must be a problem among the
family members that has caused their relationship to
be strained. For instance, people tend to turn away
from family if the family member(s) themselves are
the ones to cause them to react negatively such as
divorced parents, abusive parents or siblings and so
on. Thus, when people consider friendship to be the
most valuable thing in life, more often than not they
may come from a troubled household.

However, when a society overspends, using plastic


money or credit cards, or when they take loans they
cannot afford to repay, then the countrys debt
margin will be higher. Such as, USA today is facing
an economic crisis because banks have approved
home loans to people who aspire to own bigger
houses than they can actually afford and this is
causing the collapse of the countrys economy there.
Thus, while a societys spending habits helps our
economy to grow, overspending due to materialism
will have an adverse effect to the countrys financial
stability.

Original

Last but not least, a persons principles in life is


by far more valuable than friendship alone.

Imitate

Finally, materialism affects our spiritual and


moral beliefs.

Topic Sentence
3

Supporting
Details

Original
This is due to the fact that each person needs to
have a code of ethics, quite often prescribed by their
individual religions. In addition, this code will guide
each person to live their lives according to the good
and right principles. Take for example, if an
individual has set his principles to do good, then no
amount of friendship especially negative influence
from friends, can shake his hold on his principles and

cause him to commit undesirable deeds like


smoking, stealing, raping, murdering and others.
Hence, if a person values friendship so much to the
point where he is willing to break his principles, then
he has done a serious misdeed against himself and
will most likely regret his actions later in life.

Imitate

Factual about society who are materialistic may


become amoral whereby they disregard their
spiritual and moral upbringing and instead turn to
crime to satisfy their materialistic needs. In fact, the
crime rate is increasing because criminals these
days have developed many ways to gain more
money from society. Lets go through about reports
of snatch thefts, burglaries, kidnapping for ransom,
credit card fraud, internet banking hacking and
others that are driven by materialistic criminals.
Hence, when people lose sight of their spiritual and
moral beliefs and believe instead in the greed of
materialism, therefore the crime rate is bound to
increase.

Original

In short, friendship is the rainbow of life as it colors


our horizons with invaluable experiences but
without good health, a supportive family and
strong principles, life becomes empty and
meaningless. Our government can encourage people
to priorities health, family and principles in life by
organizing awareness campaigns especially in
primary schools where the younger generation
should learn about priorities in life because they are
the leaders of tomorrow.

Imitate

In a nutshell, materialism is a common agenda in


the 21st century as more people are working hard to
afford things beyond their reach. While this may
force individuals to work harder to improve their
standard of living, overspending due to
materialism may cause the downfall of a
countrys economy and their morality. Our
government can encourage society to be less playful
and wasteful in spending by running campaigns
such as Consumer Awareness and Buy Malaysian
Made Products in order to educate our younger
generation for the prosperity of our nation.

Conclusion