Medal of Freedom

by Noelia RODRIGUEZ

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Medal of Freedom
GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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Comment 1
look at how to cite pictures

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Capitalization

Comment 2
giving the audience emotion?

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Capitalization

QM Tense Shif t
T ense Shif t:
Verb tenses should be consistent throughout your writing in order to make it clear when an
action takes place. You will conf use your readers by switching f rom one tense to another within
the same sentence or paragraph. When discussing literature or a published source document of
some kind, readers expect you to use the present tense, even though the source you're writing
about may have been written many years ago. When writing an essay about historical events,
however, readers generally expect that you use the past tense.T ense Shif t

QM WC
Word choice error:
Sometimes choosing the correct word to express exactly what you have to say is very dif f icult
 to do. Word choice errors can be the result of not paying attention to the word or trying too
hard to come up with a f ancier word when a simple one is appropriate. A thesaurus can be a
handy tool when you're trying to f ind a word that's similar to, but more accurate than, the one
you're looking up. However, it can of ten introduce more problems if you use a word thinking it
has exactly the same meaning.

QM Trash Word
So, Really, Very, etc. are unnecessary. T hey are trash words.

Comment 3
connect to insight

Comment 4
back to back quotes....need analysis

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

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Run-on sentence:
T he sentence contains two or more independent clauses. Separate the clauses with a period or
semicolon.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 5
this is general....need to apply element to insight
 this is general....need to apply element to insight

Comment 6
indent paragraphs 1/2"

QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.

QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.

Comment 7
back to back quotes....need analysis

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

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QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

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Spacing

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Capitalization
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look at proper citation f or speech