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Freedom of speech is still a controversial issue to this day, although many would disagree
this could be considered a current-day affair, protests are held to defend the first amendment and
are commonly found among masses of students. By discussing this topic I am both defending
and raising awareness of the harm that Free Speech may cause in the long run due to many
differing opinions on the matter. This basic human right should be used as a window of
opportunity for people to advocate new ideas and points of views, not in a negative manner.
Dating all the way back to 1600 and 1700s Europe, freedom of speech was discussed as
being both a basic human right and an important aspect in a free and open society. John Locke
and Voltaire were among those who advocated the idea of free speech as necessary to individual
morality and to a well-governed country. Over time, the value of free speech and its role in
society became widely accepted. Freedom of speech is vital to a peaceful society because it
allows ideas to be tested before action is taken, eliminating the use of force. I admit free speech
does not eliminate conflict in society, but I can attest to its means of directing conflict into a
nonviolent approach within the social system. Issues with speech stem from the difficulty of
tolerating the views and values of individuals that are opposite of their own. There have been
many occasions where speech has brought upon conflict in current day America, showing signs
that the need for freedom of speech and expression is still essential.
I often found that students were the main supporters of the Free Speech movement in
many different situations and settings. Support for the first amendment among High schoolers is
stronger today than it has been in the past 12 years; (Chokshi 1) these students feel that speech
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is restricted within school grounds and that they should be allowed to voice unpopular opinions.
Case in point, students of various ages have made themselves heard by protesting to the
government in Washington DC, and many other cities as well. Those who witness the protesting
students and take their pleas into consideration, are conducting research and polls on the amount
It is baffling that something as long-established as the First Amendment can still cause
issues to this day. Freedom of speech and expression is still a topic of controversy and can be
beneficial as well as detrimental. There have been other instances where a speech at University
of California, Berkeley, campus was cancelled due to the possible safety risks by protesters for
the speaker and the public. We deeply regret that the violence unleashed by this group
undermined the First Amendment rights of the speaker as well as those who came to lawfully
assemble and protest his presence (Dirks) The university is well known for its commitment to
free speech and in this case, that dedication to the amendment could have been dangerous.
There have been cases of limited free speech online and in times of tragedy or political
concern. These problems really seem to hinder the concept of free speech. What are exceptions
to freedom of speech in modern society? What are the main justifications of free speech? A
society with free speech is more dynamic than a restrictive one, which ultimately makes it a
breeding ground for new ideas, inventions, ways of doing business and governance. Ethically
speaking, freedom of speech can be considered messy at times; for example: the shooting at
Charlie Hebdo in Paris, some individuals actually believe that there were no significant signs of
freedom of speech abuse by the magazine. The magazine avoided all sensitive subjects and
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ridicule directed at religion, religious groups, or hatred directed at certain groups of people.
Except for their cartoons, which could be considered morally wrong because of the reference to
the Prophet Muhammad and the offense that the cartoons could cause to all Muslims. Freedom of
speech is often complicated and can cause much debate because of the thin line between what is
morally or ethically correct and what could be considered discrimination but is legally condoned.
I hope to discover how far the limits of freedom of speech can be tested.
As for the urgency of this topic, the right to free speech is a necessity because in areas
where this right is not protected, citizens are scared to speak out against their government.
Fortunately, for all Americans, no matter the circumstance, the Bill of Rights guarantees a person
the freedom to speak and express his or herself, just so long that his actions do not infringe on
the rights.
There will be times when individuals may not see Free Speech from the same point of
view as me, due to the fact that some may overlook the value or importance of what it means to
possess this right, when others have never had the luxury. Americans are fortunate to have the
ability to freely express themselves, but, in other countries they do not have the same
opportunities. In foreign countries, the enforcement of speech differs within cultures and races
and these groups are forced to embrace their diversity of ideas and ideologies. This diversity is
hindered by the restrictions within each culture because there is still discrimination for many
social groups. Although Americans do have unlimited access to free speech, many students do
not see it the same way, causing protests and backlash directed towards the government. There is
also a slight issue with the difference between false and free speech within and outside of schools
Evidence of the pros and cons of free speech can be found throughout many points in
history and in various settings, be it online, in schools, or in newspapers, people cannot seem to
be completely satisfied. I believe that we as Americans are fortunate to have this right and ability
as citizens to express ourselves freely with no restraints by the government or press and should
not take it for granted. I am content with the extent of my rights regarding speech and believe
Citations
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Obrien, Jim. Free Speech Movement Archives; and Free Speech Movement Digital Archive.
The Journal of American History, Vol. 89, No. 2, History and September 11: A Special Issue
Barnett Lidsky, Larissa. Where's the Harm?: Free Speech and the Regulation of Lies.
Washington and Lee Law Review, Vol. 65, No. 3, 2008, pp. 1091-1102. URL:
https://librarylink.uncc.edu/login?url=http://search.proquest.com.librarylink.uncc.edu/docview/6
13751300?accountid=14605
http://search.proquest.com.librarylink.uncc.edu/docview/214139813?OpenUrlRefId=info:xri/sid:
wcdiscovery&accountid=14605
Wallach Scott, Joan. Restoring Free Speech and Liberty on Campus/FIRE's Guide to Free
Speech on Campus. Vol. 91, No. 6, Nov. - Dec., 2005, pp. 62-66. DOI: 10.2307/40252871
http://uncc.worldcat.org/oclc/4594687579
Bissonnette, Susan. Smothering Free Speech: Filtering the World Wide Web. Journal of
Library Administration, Vol. 39, No. 2-3, 2003, pp. 87-105 URL:
http://www.tandfonline.com.librarylink.uncc.edu/loi/wjla20
Lester, Anthony. Multiculturalism and Free Speech. The Political Quarterly, Vol. 81, No. 1,
http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com.librarylink.uncc.edu/doi/10.1111/j.1467-923X.2010.02076.x/abstr
act;jsessionid=336862A3960696D09A6CC5AA29C8EFF3.f01t02
Gaido, D. "The People's Daring Privilege": Struggles for Freedom of Expression in American
History. SCIENCE AND SOCIETY -NEW YORK, Vol. 81, No. 66, Part 4, 2003, pp. 564-566
URL: http://guilfordjournals.com.librarylink.uncc.edu/loi/siso
LoMonte, Frank D. Student Journalists and Free Speech. Insights on Law & Society, Vol. 12,
http://eds.a.ebscohost.com.librarylink.uncc.edu/eds/detail/detail?sid=ac840139-de7a-415f-8509-
8a3d73875855%40sessionmgr4008&vid=0&hid=4205&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWRzLWxpdmUmc
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A) INTRODUCTION
It makes me wonder what are the positive and negative ways that people use
free speech. This was touched on a little throughout the paper but there is a lot that could be added
2. INTRO CONTEXT (Tasks# 1 - 3, above). Evaluate the context and shaping of the
surrounding situation. To what extent does the essay demonstrate a current, specific,
exigent, particular (non-generic) context or discourse from which the issue arises and is
best understood by? Offer probing questions, advice or feedback on the
contextualization of the essays stance.
The essay sort of describes a sense of exigency but overall there isnt much. It more
so is saying that Americans need to re-check how we use freedom of speech but not
so much why we need to do it now.
I would dig a little deeper or maybe just explain differently why addressing how we us
freedom of speech needs to be fixed. You had some claims throughout the paper but
it didnt see to show the importance.
3. INTRO HOLISTIC FEEDBACK. Offer your overall thoughts / questions / suggestions /
concerns /feedback on the strengths or setbacks of the essays intro. Evaluate and give
one or two take-away ideas about the organizational, logical, rhetorical or stylistic
concepts.
I think you just need to expand more on the exigency and better explain the quotes
you included. It seemed like they were just inserted into the paragraphs without much
explanation afterwards
4. CONSISTENT MESSAGE. Return to the introduction after reading body paragraphs: To
what extent does the essay development correspond and uphold the thesis reasoning
and overall introductory setup? Put another way: is there any disconnect between the
introductions stated direction and the actual work of the essay?
There is no disconnect. The thesis/claim and paragraphs are well related.
5. PARAGRAPH Development.
You also need to work more on concluding paragraphs. In the one specifically about
UC Berkeley, you mentioned how the university normally backs free speech but then
dont follow up or truly end the paragraph.
They Say I Say / Naysayers /Opposing Views. Anticipating objections and raising them in
paragraph analysis can strengthen ones position. What objections might be raised and
where? Write out your objections for the writer and offer any feedback on TSIS work.
You need to address more how people are actually abusing free speech. It is
touched on here and there but there needs to be something direct that the reader
can go back to. Otherwise, it makes it easy to say there is no problem overall just a
few people abusing their rights
An objection I have would be that schools arent places for free speech rather
somewhere you come to learn. So how do you combat that? And how do you put that
on school officials to now have to monitor that?
Which paragraph or section was the strongest? Weakest? Feedback.
The strongest paragraph is the one where you mentioned the Charlie Hebdo
shooting in Paris. I think that was a good example of freedom of speech
The weakest paragraph is the second to last one. It just repeats exactly what you
have been saying the whole paper.
Any recommendations on the order of the paragraph development. Is it moving vertically
and toward greater insight or randomly / tangentially / backwards / ???
6. RESEARCH AND CITATION. Source credibility can be established in many ways (a writers job,
institutional affiliation, funding sources, reputation) and as readers we take as a given that the writer
is honest and not intentionally misconstruing information. Nonetheless, a position is strengthened by
brief, clear indications of source ethos. That in mind...
Comment on the apparent quality of the source. Refer to Works Cited page as needed.
Comment on the efficient & clear set-up of source. Note any places in need of revision.
Comment on the appropriateness on the types of research employed. Reminder: Do not
automatically discount qualitative (non-numerical) methods of support. A logical analysis
of a situation or persuasive input from prominent voices can be as or more valuable than
isolated numbers or data. What matters is whether intended audience will find it
compelling and whether that kind of support can contribute insight, add meaning,
back-up claims, etc.
MLA. Note whether in-text citations and Works Cited references are accurate/need work.
Owl Purdue Citations Available here. (Links to an external site.) Any other formatting
issues to note?
C) Concluding Considerations
7. CONCLUSION. Evaluate the effectiveness of the closing paragraph(s). In your own words,
describe and assess what you understand as the purpose of the essay (the hoped for outcome and
response from its intended audience). To what extent does the conclusion avoid merely repeating
the introduction claim and instead launch itself forward/outward and toward genuine engagement,
broader implications or actions, etc?
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Who is the target audience and does this essay speak to their needs, interests, concerns
on this topic? How so? How not so?
Offer a holistic response to application and demonstrated skill of the essays
rhetorical effectiveness. Consider the terms above and their complex
interrelations as you discuss.
10. Offer a final comment on the total effectiveness of the message and its development in the
essay.
Overall, the paper isnt completely effective. It presents an issue but there isnt enough
supporting details to really make me think that we need to consider how we use our right to freedom
of speech.
11. Offer a final suggestion (or two) on what you see as high order concerns / areas in need of
further attention.
Flush the paper out a lot more. You have some paragraphs where you mention ideas that
could be really beneficial and then sort of just move on.
I would also not as directly mention the exigency and urgency of the topic. It should be
something that the reader understands just from reading it, not by directly being told so.
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5. PARAGRAPH Development.
6. RESEARCH AND CITATION. Source credibility can be established in many ways (a writers job,
institutional affiliation, funding sources, reputation) and as readers we take as a given that the writer
is honest and not intentionally misconstruing information. Nonetheless, a position is strengthened by
brief, clear indications of source ethos. That in mind...
Comment on the apparent quality of the source. Refer to Works Cited page as needed.
Comment on the efficient & clear set-up of source. Note any places in need of revision.
Comment on the appropriateness on the types of research employed. Reminder: Do not
automatically discount qualitative (non-numerical) methods of support. A logical analysis
of a situation or persuasive input from prominent voices can be as or more valuable than
isolated numbers or data. What matters is whether intended audience will find it
compelling and whether that kind of support can contribute insight, add meaning,
back-up claims, etc.
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MLA. Note whether in-text citations and Works Cited references are accurate/need work.
Owl Purdue Citations Available here. (Links to an external site.) Any other formatting
issues to note?
C) Concluding Considerations
7. CONCLUSION. Evaluate the effectiveness of the closing paragraph(s). In your own words,
describe and assess what you understand as the purpose of the essay (the hoped for outcome and
response from its intended audience). To what extent does the conclusion avoid merely repeating
the introduction claim and instead launch itself forward/outward and toward genuine engagement,
broader implications or actions, etc?
Who is the target audience and does this essay speak to their needs, interests, concerns
on this topic? How so? How not so? I think that the target audience is the citizens and
people who live here in the U.S.
Offer a holistic response to application and demonstrated skill of the essays
rhetorical effectiveness. Consider the terms above and their complex
interrelations as you discuss.
10. Offer a final comment on the total effectiveness of the message and its development in the
essay. The total effectiveness of the essay could be higher. When writing an essay such as this one
it is important to get the readers to feel the same way about the topic as you do.
11. Offer a final suggestion (or two) on what you see as high order concerns / areas in need of
further attention. In order to fully reach the topics potential and provide the exigency that you need
more information and real life situations that prove and show that we really do not have free speech
need to be included.