Sara Miller

ENGL385

Reflective Writing: Second Draft of Strategy Report

For the next phase of the strategy report most of our decisions revolved
around revision. The first was to decide what sections we wanted to revise and what
to focus on. This was important and it provided the baseline of our revisions. The
specific points of revisions came from the feedback received from the professor.
One of the major feedback we received was linked to what information from the
interviews we included and how it led to the development of our idea. Even though
we are still working on this, it was important to think of using the interviews to
support the process that led to our idea. The third decision we made was how to use
secondary research. One of the main feedback we received was on including
secondary research too support our point of views. Even though we are still working
on this, adding secondary research has strengthened our paper. For this paper
revision, I mostly worked on revision organization and idea flow of sections.
In this draft, I think that we have a good amount of support and the flow of
ideas is logical. This is evident in the paper, as it is clear how we developed and
created our idea from the interviews and secondary research. For the next round of
review, I would like feedback on whether our use of interviews helped support the
paper or if there is any superfluous information. This will help our paper to be more
concise and not jump around as much.