Revision of Odyssey Timed Write

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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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Comment 1
Sirens:

Comment 2
good

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Comment 3
awkward as I'm not sure what you are contrasting here

Comment 4
but how is it similar to Homer's portrayal?

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Comment 5
f ocus more on similarities, less on dif f erences, in order to answer the prompt

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RUBRIC: CCSS 9 TH-10 TH GRADE INFORMATIVE 4.33 / 5

FOCUS (16%) 5/5

T he text f ocuses on a topic to inf orm a reader with ideas, concepts, inf ormation, etc.

EXCEPTIONAL T he text clearly f ocuses on a compelling topic that inf orms the reader with ideas,
(5) concepts, inf ormation, etc.

SKILLED T he text f ocuses on an interesting topic that inf orms the reader with ideas,
(4) concepts, inf ormation, etc.

PROFICIENT T he text f ocuses on a topic to inf orm a reader with ideas, concepts, inf ormation, etc.
(3)

DEVELOPING T he text has an unclear topic with some ideas, concepts, inf ormation, etc.
(2)

INADEQUATE T he text has an unidentif iable topic with minimal ideas, concepts, inf ormation, etc.
(1)

DEVELOPMENT (16%) 4/5

T he text presents relevant f acts, def initions, concrete details, quotations, and examples. T he conclusion
ties to and supports the inf ormation/explanation.

EXCEPTIONAL T he text provides signif icant f acts, def initions, concrete details, quotations that f ully
(5) develop and explain the topic. T he conclusion provides insight to the implications,
explains the signif icance of the topic, and projects to the f uture, etc.

SKILLED T he text provides ef f ective f acts, def initions, concrete details, quotations, and
(4) examples that suf f iciently develop and explain the topic. T he conclusion provides the
implications, signif icance of and f uture relevance of the topic, etc.

PROFICIENT T he text provides relevant f acts, def initions, concrete details, quotations, and
(3) examples that develop the topic. T he conclusion ties to and supports the
inf ormation/explanation.

DEVELOPING T he text provides f acts, def initions, details, quotations, and examples that attempt
(2) to develop and explain the topic. T he conclusion merely restates the development.

INADEQUATE T he text contains limited f acts and examples related to the topic. T he text may f ail to
(1) of f er a conclusion.

AUDIENCE (16%) 5/5

T he author anticipates the audience's background knowledge of the topic.

EXCEPTIONAL T he text consistently addresses the audience's knowledge level and concerns about
(5) the topic. T he text addresses the specif ic needs of the audience.

SKILLED T he text anticipates the audience's knowledge level and concerns about the topic.
(4) T he text addresses the specif ic needs of the audience.
PROFICIENT T he text considers the audience's knowledge level and concerns about the claim. T he
(3) text addresses the needs of the audience.

DEVELOPING T he text illustrates an inconsistent awareness of the audience's knowledge level and
(2) needs.

INADEQUATE T he text lacks an awareness of the audience's knowledge level and needs.
(1)

COHESION (16%) 4/5

T he text uses appropriate and varied transitions to link the major sections of the text, creates cohesion,
and clarif ies the relationships among complex ideas and concepts.

EXCEPTIONAL T he text strategically uses words, phrases, and clauses to link the major sections of
(5) text. T he text explains the relationships between the topic and the examples and/or
f acts.

SKILLED T he text skillf ully uses words, phrases, and clauses to link the major sections of the
(4) text. T he text identif ies the relationship between the topic and the examples and/or
f acts.

PROFICIENT T he text uses words, phrases, and clauses to link the major sections of the text. T he
(3) text connects the topic and the examples and/or f acts.

DEVELOPING T he text contains limited words, phrases, and clauses to link the major sections of
(2) the text. T he text attempts to connect the topic and the examples and/or f acts.

INADEQUATE T he text contains f ew, if any, words, phrases, and clauses to link the major sections
(1) of the text. T he text does not connect the topic and the examples and/or f acts.

LANG & ST YLE (16%) 4/5

T he text presents a f ormal, objective tone and uses precise language and topic-specif ic vocabulary to
manage the complexity of the topic.

EXCEPTIONAL T he text presents an engaging, f ormal, and objective tone and uses sophisticated
(5) language and topic-specif ic vocabulary to manage the complexity of the topic.

SKILLED T he text presents an appropriate f ormal, objective tone and uses relevant language
(4) and topic-specif ic vocabulary to manage the complexity of the topic.

PROFICIENT T he text presents a f ormal, objective tone and uses precise language and topic-
(3) specif ic vocabulary to manage the complexity of the topic.

DEVELOPING T he text illustrates a limited awareness of f ormal tone and awareness of topic-
(2) specif ic vocabulary.

INADEQUATE T he text illustrates a limited or inconsistent tone and awareness of topic-specif ic

(1) vocabulary.

CONVENT IONS (16%) 4/5

T he text demonstrates standard English conventions of usage and mechanics along with discipline-
specif ic requirements (i.e. MLA, APA, etc.).

EXCEPTIONAL T he text intentionally uses standard English conventions of usage and mechanics
(5) along with discipline-specif ic requirements (i.e. MLA, APA, etc.).

SKILLED T he text uses standard English conventions of usage and mechanics along with
(4) discipline-specif ic requirements (i.e. MLA, APA, etc.).

PROFICIENT T he text demonstrates standard English conventions of usage and mechanics along
(3) with discipline-specif ic requirements (i.e. MLA, APA, etc.).

DEVELOPING T he text demonstrates some accuracy in standard English conventions of usage and
(2) mechanics.

INADEQUATE T he text contains multiple inaccuracies in Standard English conventions of usage and
(1) mechanics.