ENGL 1025-1: College English II

The Rhetorical Analysis: Self-Evaluation Form

Answer the questions briefly but specifically. When you have finished filling out the
form, attach it to your revision of the Rhetorical Analysis.

1. Without looking at the assignment sheet, paraphrase the assignment for this essay.

An essay was to be written with a strong thesis based on three features of any commercial
or advertisement of choice. The essay should have included an introduction containing
the thesis, two paragraphs for each feature, and a conclusion summarizing all the key
points. Thus, the assignment boils down to rhetorical analysis which is picking the
advertisement apart to understand the why, how, and where.

An essay is to be written on a commercial advertisement. The essay must contain a thesis

and body paragraphs to support the thesis. A rhetorical analysis is to be done on the
advertisement.

2. Quote or (if your thesis is implied) paraphrase the thesis of your paper.

Everlast uses provocative music to play along with the storyline, setting of an
impoverished country, and minimum to no dialogue to agitate emotions from the
audience to communicate the message that boxing makes you bigger.

Digicell's advertisement uses a mixture of dynamic strategies such as slogan,

intense background music, and prominent individuals of local society to create interest

for its claim.

3. Identify one strategy of development (illustration/example; division/classification;

comparison/contrast; analogy) that you used in this paper and explain why you
choose it and how successful it is.

An example of the amateur boxers words which is he is hungry is used to show the
rationalizing and understanding he gained from boxing. This specific example was
chosen because it is a significant moment where dialogue emphasizes the strength of the
boy which proves that boxing makes you bigger. The success of this example was a
result of the connection of the value of boxing which is power means nothing without
control and Everlasts title for the commercial which is boxing makes you bigger. Hence,
it successfully demonstrates that the balance between power and control is important to
allow growth to happen because the amateur boxer could have easily fought the mugger
and won, but he instead empathized and understood the hunger that drove the muggers
actions which in term made the amateur boxer a bigger person.
One strategy of development used was comparisons and examples. I explained the
significance of Joel Borland in the essay. He is known for his outstanding cycling
performance; hence, Digicell uses Joel to depict performance for its commercial. This
specific example readers see the comparison of performance.

4. Place a checkmark in the margin beside one of your best paragraphs. Explain its
strengths here.

The sixth paragraph of my essay is the best because it is where I focus on dialogue. The
dialogue is listed out in order of how it occurred and briefly discussed, so the sentences
were organized coherently because of moving from point a to b to connect and make
ideas clearer in the readers mind which is important in writing instead of moving from
point a to z, and the transitions were also smoother, and there was plenty to say about
dialogue.

This paragraph possessed strength because it had sufficient specific details to support it.
The transitions in this paragraph made it easy for readers to make the necessary
comparisons. The readers did not need to question where were the other relevant
information.

5. Place an X in the margin beside a paragraph you find weak or troublesome. Try to
explain what the problem is.

The fifth paragraph of my essay was the most troublesome because at that point I ran out
of ideas and I felt like I was repeating myself, so that is the reason why it is the shortest
of the paragraphs. Also, I had so much to say when I wrote the first sentence down that I
started to throw ideas quickly down in the sentence before I forget them, so it might be
confusing.

The problem with this paragraph is that it lack specific details to support it. Readers were
left to question the details given.

6. Perform a very brief rhetorical analysis of your own paper. What are the
dominant rhetorical strategies and appeals that you used to make your argument
persuasive to your audience?

I used relevant information about Everlast, examples from the commercial, and quotes
from the commercial to show the audience that what is being said in my essay is from the
actual commercial and Everlast and not from me. I was just there to report the
connections of the features to the message Everlast was trying to communicate to
audiences.
 The dominant rhetorical strategies that I used were examples and comparisons. These
strategies made it easier for readers to understand what was going on.

7. Free-write for a few minutes about the process of writing this paper and how you
feel that it turned out. Was it easy to write or difficult to draft? How did you find
the revision process? What changes did you make during revision? Are you
overall pleased with the results? Use the back of this sheet if necessary.

It was easier to write than expected. I like writing although I am not very good at it. I
falter when it comes to transition and flow, and I become redundant because I tend to
connect sentences awkwardly. However, when it came to the revision process, it was the
most difficult part because dissecting your essay is frustrating when attempting to
rephrase to make the idea pop. For example, my paragraphs and ideas were all scattered,
so I had to isolate similar ideas from a number of paragraphs to one. In some cases, I had
to toss out redundancy within the paragraphs. Hopefully, I was successful because that
was time consuming because my brain thinks of everything and nothing. Sometimes, I
wonder how that is even possible. Overall, I am happy because I managed to get
majority of my ideas down whether repeated or not which is hopefully not the case.

It was difficult to draft at first. I found the revision process helpful. During the revision
process, I was able to identify areas where I could expand on. Overall I am pleased with
results.

Kindly elaborate as one sentence answers rarely exhibit depth of thought.