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Contents:
Page 1 Brief Outline of the FIVE steps of the Term Paper
Page 2 Expanded Descriptions of the FIVE steps and Paragraphs Guide
Pages 3 &4 Writing Guide, Pitfalls and Errors
Format, Style, Punctuation
Thesis and Topic Sentences
Concrete Evidence
Page 4 Final Draft Requirements
Page 5 Paragraphs in the Essay
Pages 5 - 7 Comment Sheets Explanations and Examples
Page 7 - 8 Footnotes Explanations and Examples
This is to be the biggest single assignment in the Fall Semester for AP and GATE classes. Each topic may
only have one student writing on it; in other words, each students Term Paper must be on a different topic.
GATE students are writing a comparison/contrast essay on any subject in history until the end of the
Modern Age; one of the two should be Non-Western, neither may be an American. Students may pick
individuals, cultures or an aspect of a culture such as: architecture, art, astronomy, clothing, family,
military, music, philosophy, physics, psychology, religion, science, women, etc.
AP students are writing a critique of one or two philosophers ideas or an analysis of a current or recent
political issue all topics must be approved before starting.
First come, first serve. Send an email to Mr. Torrance to pick your topic:
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Step 2 Thesis Statement: This is the single most important sentence in the
essay. This sentence indicates exactly what you are going to prove and lists the Main
arguments or evidence you will use to prove it. This sentence must be approved by the
Teacher before you can write your first draft, otherwise your rough draft will NOT be
accepted. Email Mr. Torrance to get approval, it may take several emails:
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Step 3 Rough Draft: This is your first draft of the essay. This must be at least
2,500 words. It must include at least 10 Footnotes or endnotes, with all five sources cited.
[See Step 1 above to see what each source must include]
Step 5 FINAL DRAFT: See the next page for the requirements
GATE students MUST DOUBLE SPACE all essays and the Term Paper,
Whereas, AP students should follow the format on the next page.
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C. Concrete Evidence:
1. Concrete Evidence is the strength of the paper, without it there is NO strength.
2. The Thesis must be supported by AT LEAST THREE pieces of concrete evidence.
3. The strongest evidence is historical fact, usually no other evidence is necessary.
4. Scientific Research can be used as evidence, though it can also be controversial or disputed.
5. Personal Experience can be very powerful, but it is also very limited. A thesis should never be
supported only by personal experience each person has different experiences and one may not
be better than another.
6. All key evidence to be discussed in the body should be mentioned in the Thesis, but not with too
much detail or explanation save all that for the body.
7. All evidence needs to be qualified properly, in other words, evidence needs to be clearly
connected to proving a point that supports the thesis.
8. The setting for historical evidence should be briefly mentioned, i.e. Who, What, When or
Where, or what larger event it was part of.
9. Evidence that does not support a point that strengthens the thesis should be DELETED.
The Body: This is the bulk of the essay. It should be well-organized into clearly-developed paragraphs.
The average short paragraph should have at least five sentences. No paragraphs should be longer than a
page. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence directly related to the thesis. Each paragraph
should be linked to the next paragraph logically. The thesis should clearly be proven in the body of the
essay.
The Body should contain concrete evidence in detail, and it should be specific for the most
part. For example, if you are writing on an artist you should describe several of his/her art
pieces in great detail to demonstrate the style or technique of that artist - which helps to prove
the thesis. Another example would be to use specific historical events, such as a key battle or
some other critical event. Arguments may be presented, but they should be demonstrated
with concrete examples. This is the strength of your essay. Your essay will be judged on the
evidence in the body: Did you prove the thesis? How strong was the support for your thesis?
Conclusion: Obviously this is the last paragraph. Do not use the word "conclusion" in the essay, it is
an insult to the reader and a cop-out for the writer. Do NOT repeat any sentences, including the thesis.
The Conclusion should do the following:
1. Affirm that the thesis has been proved (without copying it).
2. Summarize the body without repeating sentences.
3. Leave a lasting thought: a prediction, a quote or an idea. Do NOT end with an
unanswered question, instead you tell the reader what you want him/her to think.
Miscellaneous:
1. Be sure to include a Title.
2. No Cover is required, just staple the six or more pages together with your name on top.
3. Pictures, Diagrams and Maps can be included But they are not necessary and they
will not serve as a substitution for a lack of evidence in the Body.
3. You did a good job on describing Mozarts three new techniques in music, but you fail to do the same for
Beethoven. You need to identify three techniques in his music and discuss them in detail in the three works
of his that you cited. Instead, you gave a brief description of what the pieces were about. You did not
discuss any music techniques.
Self-Critique:
This is very different from other critiques
You are NOT going to list positive comments
Instead, make a LIST of 10 CHANGES that you made in the process of this
These changes should NOT have grammar, spelling, punctuation or footnotes listed
The only changes you should mention are important content changes, such as:
- changing your thesis
- deleting items that have nothing to do with your thesis
- adding new paragraphs
- adding detailed descriptions or in-depth analyses
- altering or correcting an argument
Each of the listed items should be described in detail, don't just say you changed a paragraph
Explain why you altered something
Footnotes (Endnotes):
Step ONE: Footnote Notations in the Text
Every paragraph should have a footnote notation if it contains any quotes, ideas, facts or information from a
source.
Usually only the Introduction and Conclusion paragraphs have no footnotes.
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If everything in a paragraph is from one source, then there should only be one footnote notation at the end
of the paragraph.
If there is more than one source in a paragraph, then each source should have a footnote notation here and
there spread throughout the paragraph.
Footnote notations should be at the end of the quote, sentence or paragraph. They should be a half space up
- superscript.
Each Footnote notation should be a number - in order. Never repeat a number.
Sample A: If one is of the impression that there are many intermediate ancestors to man, one should take
notice of the following statement by an expert in the field: The fossils that decorate our family tree are so
scarce that there are still more scientists than specimens. The remarkable fact is that all the physical
evidence we have for human evolution can still be placed with room to spare inside a single coffin.1
Sample B: In a 1979 preliminary microwear study of Australopithecus fossil teeth, anthropologist Alan
Walker theorized that robust australopiths were largely frugivorous.6 However, newer methods of
studying fossils have suggested the possibility that Australopithecus was omnivorous. In 1992, trace
element studies of the strontium/calcium ratios in robust australopith fossils suggested the possibility of
animal consumption, as they did in 1994 using stable carbon isotopic analysis.7 Australopithecus mainly
ate fruit, vegetables, and tubers.
I hope the above helps, if you have any other questions please email me:
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