Draft essay: Nelson Mandela
Where globalization means, as it so often does, that the rich and powerful now
have new means to further enrich and empower themselves at the cost of the
poorer and weaker, we have a responsibility to protest in the name of universal
freedom.
Nelson Mandela
Many people believe that Mandela is one of the great moral and political
leaders, also considerate by them as an international hero whose lifelong
dedication to fight against racial oppression. Along this essay I will
demonstrate that Mandela did the right thing by fighting for what he believed
while presenting important things that Nelson Mandela did in South Africa and
showing the influence he has in our actual society. I will argue that Mandela
did the right thing by fighting for what he believed in.
To begin with; Mandela far from succumbing to the absolutism racist
government; he organized a rebellion of nonviolent civil disobedience. After
years of struggle against apartheid leaders wanted to end the resistance,
carrying Mandela and other activists organizing an armed struggle from
secrecy. After that, he became a member of the African National Congress and
actively worked to abolish apartheid policies of National Party in power.
Another thing is that he built a new international image for South Africa,
managing to persuade multinational corporations to remain and invest in the
country.
On the other hand, many people claim that Mandela didnt do enough to fight
against serious issues such as crime, corruption scandals in the ANC and
AIDS, despite all Mandelas life demands that we take critical lessons from it-
lessons in the essence of extremely effective leadership, this are often framed
as manifestos in grace, humility, strength and forgiveness and some people
state that Nelson Mandela represented the purest form of all of these
characterizations.
In conclusion, many people feel that Mandela is a symbol of human rights also
that it was unconditional love that allowed him to save and transform South
Africa. It seems to me that everyone should be treated equally under the law
because we are all equal before God and forgiveness is something extremely
special which we are given, and something precious we are to replicate to
others.
There is no easy walk to freedom anywhere, and many of us will have to pass
through the valley of the shadow of death again and again before we reach the
mountaintop of our desires.
Nelson Mandela
Commented [u1]: Si pones una frase de Mandela siempre
pon entre comillas para que se entienda que es una frase
y creo que es mejor que saques otra frase ms relacionada a
la igualdad (discriminacin) y esta no tiene mucho que ver.
Commented [u2]: Estos son los aspectos de tu ensayo, se
ms especfica no solo digas lo que hizo por frica si o que
pon las cosas que hizo por acabar por el racismo en frica .
Y usa los aspectos como una forma de probaar tu hiptesis.
Commented [u3]: Esta es la hiptesis (lo que tratas de
demostrar) de tu ensayo, en vez de argue pon algo como
probe, demostrate
Commented [u4]: Esto se supone que es de lo que t
quieres convencer a travs de tu ensayo, ponlo antes de los
aspectos.
Commented [u5]: 1.- En cada prrafo de los aspecto
debes escribir una conclusin acerca de lo que escribiste, en
este caso sera como sus acciones ayudaron a frica y
porque consideras que fueron importantes.
Commented [u6]: Tu segundo aspecto es la influencia de
Mandela ahora, escribe sobre eso si no por qu lo
mencionas en la introduccin?... en este prrafo habla sobre
su legado, sirvi lo que hizo? La gente en Sudfrica como lo
considera? Y alrededor del mundo? Habla acerca de su
importancia en estos tiempos y no te olvides de una
conclusin.
Commented [u7]: En la conclusin final debes unir las
conclusiones de los prrafos de los aspectos y hacer una
nueva final conclusin, aqu adems debes probar tu
hiptesis entonces explica que lo que l hizo ayudo a frica
por muchas razones y que eso mejoro muchas cosas en el
pas y fue motivado por lo que el crea que era la igualdad..
eso escribe en la conclusin
Commented [u8]: De nuevo usa y es mejor o iniciar
con una frase o terminar con una, sino puede ser
demasiadas frases y no te olvides NUNCA de escribir la
bibliografa as no copies textualmente.