Target Grammar Application Sheet (TGAS)

Filling out this sheet will help make visible your application of the target grammar for this assignment. For each item,
write three examples from your paper that show how you applied the target grammar. Include this sheet with your final
draft.

Assignment name: Short Report

Target Grammar: Using academic language, old-new information flow, verbs that indicate change

Examples Explanation/ details

Using Academic Language

Its always better to use a more formal word

such as large instead of big, even if the
As the largest Asian country, China...
word used is indeed carrying little meaning.

Use Formal Verbs Instead of Phrasal Verbs.

Raise is used instead of bring up. This is a
Higher education will not only raise womens social
problem that I should always remind myself
status but also benefit their childrens education.
of. Our Chinese English teacher encourage
us to recite hundreds of phrases because
theyre often used in conversation and make
our expression more authentic. However,
phrases should be avoided when it comes to
academic writing because theyre informal.
The original sentence is You may owe this
to resource limitation which is refuted by
This is, according to their research, due to male
the authors.... You and I should be
preference instead of resource limitaion.
avoided in academic writing. Besides the
method shown left, changing the sentence
from active to passive can also be a way to
do so.
old-new information flow

... it remains a thorny problem for most Asian The first sentence mentions Asian counties
countries such as India and Bangladesh (the World and the second one mentions this again
Economic Forum [WEF], 2016). As the largest while it refers more specific to the largest
Asian country, Chinas male preference has a long Asian country - China.
history of male preference.

...men offered the main financial support to their The first sentence mentions the old time
family in the old times. . At that time, however, and the second sentence refers to it as that
women were usually... time before presenting new infomation.

language to indicate change (from EOAW chapter 2 or 3)

Markedly is a word in the degree section

of EOAW. Its used more often in
The following statistics indicates that although the
academic writing since its more formal than
gender inequality has markedly reduced.
phrases like a lot or a little.

Peak is used instead of reach a high point

in academic writing, making the expression
The female/male ratio in the tertiary education
more formal.
peaked at 1.16 in 2016...

Deteriorate is used instead of become

worse. In addition, its an intransitive verb.
Kubo, M., & Chaudhuri, A. state that girls health
We can also use deteriorate into
deteriorates when they get a male sibling.
something. E.g. The discussion
deteriorated into an argument.

Student Error Log

Name: Qingyuan Chai

Assignment 2:
Sentences with Errors Description of Error/ Explanation and Correction
Correction Symbol Remarks

example: after the thief transitive vs. intransitive 'to rob' takes an object After the thief robbed
robbed, he ran himself verbs the woman,
away quickly
'to run' in intransitive-
no object he ran away quickly.

...men offered main Article problem Although support is ...men offered the main
financial support to the uncountable and it financial support to the
family... hasnt been mentioned family...
yet, its still necessary to
write a the before the
main. This is similar to
the best. When
refering to something
special in a range of
things, people usually
use the. Main is
often used as the main
just as the best.

...the female/male ratio Inaccurate word choice
has kept at that level....
Somebody can keep the ...the female/male ratio
level at some rate but has remained at that
the level itself cant level....
keep at a rate. It can
only remain at that
rate.

You may owe this to... inappropriate use of 'I' You are used in This may result from...
and 'you' in academic conversation and are not
writing appropriate for
academic writing.

This resonates Fang et Word missing A resonate with B. This resonates with
al.s (2012) finding... Resonate is Fang et al.s (2012)
intransitive. finding...
Also, we can use
resonate through
E.g. Her voice resonated
 through the theatre.

...although womens Confusing grammar This expression sounds ...although womens

education situation is awkward in English. education is much better
much better than The situation of is also than before...
before... seldomly used.
Womens education is
enough to refer to its
situation.

Its a great common word carrying Great is seldomly used Its a significant
achievement.. less meaning; informal in academic writing for achievement..
word used more in two reasons.
conversation
Firstly, its a common
word carrying less
meaning. Therere many
options to express more
specific ideas.
Secondly, great is
informal and often used
in a conversation instead
of academic writing.
If the word used carries
indeed little meaning,
for example simply used
to show something is
big, its still better to
use a more formal word
such as large. To
acquire the sense of
formal and informal, the
best method is to read as
much as possible.

...women has reached... problem forming the I rarely made this kind ...women have reached...
verb of mistake about single
and plural before, but I
made many this time. It
seems that I need to
remind myself of this
next time.