1.

Please explain why you would like to teach and how your skills for your subject area could
benefit the students you teach?(200 words)

(234 words)

The reasons why I would like to teach are as follows.

Firstly, teaching is a major with love. I loved dancing and painting since childhood and had many
blood donation experiences. I want the world to be full of love. In addition, I love the children
and also want to learn from them.

Secondly, it's my motivation to keep learning. I am a curious man, prefer reading, traveling and
art. It not only enrich my life experience, but also made me feel joyful.

Thirdly, teacher is one of the respectable professions, and also a builder of children's soul. The
development of nation and society requires our efforts, which made us try our best and proud of
our job.

Last bust not the least, preschool education in China needs us to improve, such as enhance
children to study national art,.so as to inherit national culture and love country.

That's why I want to be a teacher. And I also believe my skill could benefit the students, because
I'm an imaginative and creative person, after this course, I can use my professional knowledge
and expertise to broaden children's horizon ,made them learn the passion for a thing and the
desire to learn. Whats more, through study and practice, learning how to love someone and
themselves is also quite important, and to be a healthy independent body-mind-spirit person.

Corrections
Colors

Red stand for = Critical Mistakes

Yellow stands for = Minor issues

Pink stands for = spelling and spacing errors

1.In Addition------- Also Besides

The phrase In addition may be wordy. Consider changing the wording.

Using multiple words when one will suffice can contribute to wordiness or vagueness. Though
a sentence may be grammatically correct, writing more concisely may be a better choice. Consider
your reader and context to make a determination.

Vague: We have discovered a number of errors.

Concise: We have discovered many errors.

Concise: We have discovered six errors. (precise)

2.traveling------ traveling,

Your sentence contains a series of three or more words, phrases, or clauses. Consider inserting
a comma to separate the elements.

The serial comma (also called the Oxford comma) is the last comma before coordinating conjunction
and the final item in a series. Its use is considered a matter of style and is cause for much debate.
Many style guides require the serial comma, and a few advise against it. There are times when it must
be used to avoid confusion or ambiguity. For the sake of consistency, we recommend always using the
serial comma. However, consult your style guide if you are uncertain.

Depending on the context, a missing serial comma may cause ambiguity. Are the brothers named
Adam and Jane?

Incorrect: We have received RSVPs from my brothers, Adam and Jane.

Correct: We have received RSVPs from my brothers, Adam, and Jane.

3.experience,------- experience

The comma before the conjunction but also appears to be unnecessary. Consider removing it.

Correlative conjunctions come in pairs. Common ones include either...or, neither...nor, not only...but
also, and both...and. In most cases, there is no need to use a comma before the second conjunction
in the set.

Incorrect: Either the blue shirt, or the red sweater will look good with your jeans.

Correct: Either the blue shirt or the red sweater will look good with your jeans.
4.Teacher--------- a teacher or the teacher

The noun phrase teacher seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

An article (a, an, or the) is a type of determiner. Possessive adjectives (my, his, our), possessive nouns
(Joes, mothers), and quantifiers (each, every) are also determiners. Single countable nouns usually
require a determiner.

Incorrect: I left book on table.

Correct: I left a book on the table

5.respectable-------- respective

The word respectable doesnt seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

Incorrect: Jordan doesnt remember where he parked his car.

Correct: Jordan doesnt remember where he parked his car.

6. bust-------- but

The word bust doesnt seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

Incorrect: Jordan doesnt remember were he parked his car.

Correct: Jordan doesnt remember where he parked his car.

Incorrect: Which sign is usually paced on street corners to warn you of cross traffic?

Correct: Which sign is usually placed on street corners to warn you of cross traffic?

7.,made-------, made

It appears that you have improperly spaced some punctuation. Consider adding a space.

Commas, periods, colons, semicolons, exclamation points, and question marks directly follow the
word before them without a space. They are all followed by a single space before the next word.
Parentheses and quotation marks come in pairs. The beginning mark has a space before it and
no space between the mark and the following word. The end mark directly follows the word before
it and has a space afterward.

Correct: No, said Joe, I did not take out the trash.

Correct: I cant believe she said that, can you?

Correct: Wow! That was unexpected!

8.Important----- overused word

The word important is often overused. Consider using a more specific synonym to improve the
sharpness of your writing.
remarkable

significant

necessary

Vague:Doras new apartment is nice.

Clear:Doras new apartment is lovely.

Vague:Thats an awesome idea.

Clear:Thats an excellent idea

2.How does your previous experience fit with the opportunity to teach?(200 Words)

(264 words)

I have been working in E-commerce in China for three years. The position is product specialist
and operating specialist. In addition, I have learnt street dance at SINOTAGE(Chengdu) and
JIAHEWUSHE(Beijing). These experiences have the following similarities with teaching.

Firstly, love and patience. Communicating with team members at work requires patience, such as
review and correction of data in EXCEL. Furthermore, we take care of each other, such as
reminding to put on the clothes and if someone feels unwell, we will take place of his or her work.
Similarly in teaching, we need to get along well with our colleagues and have the love and
patience for our children.

Secondly, imagination and creativity. I have engaged in the development of make-up tools, also
involved in packaging design, copywriting writing. For example, design an activity, because each
girl has a princess dream, so that Doraemons treasure bag can help you, there are lipstick, gills,
liquid foundation in it. After determining subject, complete the selection of products , and
designs. Similarly, so as to increase their imagination and creativity, you need to teach children
painting, dancing etc.
Lastly, ability to learn and communicate.Operations specialist is a comprehensive work that
requires knowledge of products, copywriting writing, and design, also need communicate with
suppliers, internal staff and consumers, in order to complete the activity successfully. At the same,
a teacher should have ability to learn and communicate, which made your teaching rich and
colorful.

And now, I have been a kindergarten teacher for one year, hope to make greater progress in the
future.

Corrections
Colors

Red stand for = Critical Mistakes

Yellow stands for = Minor issues

Pink stands for = spelling and spacing errors

1.In addition-------- also Besides

The phrase In addition may be wordy. Consider changing the wording.

Using multiple words when one will suffice can contribute to wordiness or vagueness. Though
a sentence may be grammatically correct, writing more concisely may be a better choice. Consider
your reader and context to make a determination.

Vague: We have discovered a number of errors.

Concise: We have discovered many errors.

2.learnt-------learned

The spelling of learnt is a non-American variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the
American English spelling.

The spelling of some words varies among different dialects of English. For example, British English
speakers write colour, while American English speakers write color.
Typically, the spelling of these words only varies by one or two letters. In the interest of consistency
and clarity, you should use the spelling that will be more familiar to your intended audience.

Non-American:I wish you success in all your endeavours.

American:I wish you success in all your endeavors.

3.patience-------- repetitive word

The word patience appears repeatedly in this text. Consider using a synonym in its place.

tolerance

endurance

A written work that uses the same words over and over is less interesting for the reader than a work
that uses a richer vocabulary.

Incorrect: I love watching movies, but going to the movie theater is very expensive. When I want
to see a movie, I usually just rent one.

Correct: I love watching movies, but going to the theater is very expensive. When I want to see a film,
I usually just rent one.

4.take place of------- take the place of

It appears that the phrase take place of is not paired with the correct article. Consider changing it.

There are many set expressions that require the definite article (the point is), the indefinite article
(keep an eye on), or no article (head over heels). These expressions are idiomatic, so they dont follow
a particular pattern.

Incorrect: A trouble is that I forgot what I was supposed to buy.

Correct: The trouble is that I forgot what I was supposed to buy.

5.similarly-------- similarly,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase Similarly. Consider adding
a comma.

6.dream,--------- dream

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma before the dependent clause marker so that.
Consider removing the comma.

A complex sentence includes one independent clause and at least one dependent clause. When the
dependent clause comes first, it is an introductory clause followed by a comma. When it follows the
independent clause, no comma is needed. A dependent clause often begins with a dependent marker
word, such as after, as if, because, even though, since, unless, or when.

The dependent clause is in bold in the following complex sentences. No comma is required for the
construction independent clause + dependent clause.

Correct: He was late for work because he had a flat tire.

Correct: Tims heart raced whenever she was near.

Correct: The manager offered a discount after I complained about the service.

7.liquid-------- a liquid or the liquid

The noun phrase liquid foundation seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding
an article.

An article (a, an, or the) is a type of determiner. Possessive adjectives (my, his, our), possessive nouns
(Joes, mothers), and quantifiers (each, every) are also determiners. Single countable nouns usually
require a determiner.

Incorrect: I left book on table.

Correct: I left a book on the table

8.subject------- the subject

The noun phrase subject seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

9.products------products,

It appears that you have improperly spaced some punctuation. Consider removing a space.

Commas, periods, colons, semicolons, exclamation points, and question marks directly follow the
word before them without a space.

10.so as to---------- to

The phrase so as to may be wordy. Consider changing the wording.

Using multiple words when one will suffice can contribute to wordiness or vagueness. Though
a sentence may be grammatically correct, writing more concisely may be a better choice. Consider
your reader and context to make a determination.

Vague: We have discovered a number of errors.

Concise: We have discovered many errors.

11.dancing-------dancing,

The abbreviation etc seems to be incorrectly punctuated. Consider changing the punctuation.

12.need communicate---------- incorrect verb

It appears that the phrase need communicate contains an unnecessary verb. Review the sentence and
suggestions below to determine the appropriate correction.
Occasionally, a writer may decide to replace a word with a synonym but forget to delete the original
word. Rearranging part of a clause or changing a subject may result in an extra verb accidently left
in the sentence.

Incorrect: I have attached is my resume.

Correct: Attached is my resume.

13.staff------- staff,

Your sentence contains a series of three or more words, phrases, or clauses. Consider inserting
a comma to separate the elements.

14.in order to --------- to

The phrase in order to may be wordy. Consider changing the wording.

Using multiple words when one will suffice can contribute to wordiness or vagueness. Though
a sentence may be grammatically correct, writing more concisely may be a better choice. Consider
your reader and context to make a determination.

Vague: We have discovered a number of errors.

Concise: We have discovered many errors.

15. ability-------- the ability

It appears that the noun ability is not preceded by the correct article. Consider changing the article.

16. communicate-----repetitive word

The word communicate appears repeatedly in this text. Consider using a synonym in its place.

teach

interact

17.rich-------- overused word

The word rich is often overused. Consider using a more specific synonym to improve the sharpness
of your writing.

Vibrant

18.greater-------- overused word

The word greater is often overused. Consider using a more specific synonym to improve the sharpness
of your writing.

more significant

more considerable
more excellent

more enormous

Vague: Doras new apartment is nice.

Clear: Doras new apartment is lovely.

3.As briefly as possible please describe how your work history is related to teaching.(100
Words)

(28 words)

The work history has enabled my imagination and creativity to display, enhanced the ability of
communication and study, similarly they are also the basic quality for kindergarten teacher.

4.Please list what you consider are characteristics of effective teachers.(100 words)

(70 words)

Firstly,selfless dedication. Because teachers work is not only for their own survival, but also
related to the future of children, motherland, social development and human progress.
Secondly, enhance professional ethics. Set an good example to students.

Thirdly, keep studying., so as to impart knowledge to students constantly.

Lastly, have love. Love is the foundation of education. With love, students can discover their
specialty and help them to grow.

5.Please write about a time that you have taught,instructed or trained someone in a formal or
informal setting.What was the successful component of your teaching in this case?(300 words)

(254 words)

Anna was a kindergarten child, she was a lively child at home, and had closely relationship with
parents, but as long as there were other children around, he would escape, loved playing alone in
the kindergarten.

After communicating with parents, I understood that Anna was the first time to go to
kindergarten, so it was normal to be nervous and anxious, and disliked to play with others. But
after a long time, all the children were familiar with, Anna was still preferred alone. By talking to
Anna's mother, fond that Anna often played with toys at home and barely contacted with the
outside world.

So I take the following interventions.

In the work of parents.

1) encourage Anna get closed to other children. Talk to child every day, and guide child to talk
about daily life in kindergarten.

2) encourage Anna to invite children to her home. And parents should provide good environment,
toys etc.
In the work of kindergarten

1) Let Anna and children understand each other.Encourage Anna to participate in classroom
games or outdoor activities, but also let other children to invite Anna to play together.

2) Discover the flash point, set up Annas self-confidence in the collective.

3) Teachers need to guide and encourage Anna.

4) More physical contact.

After several months, Anna has become outgoing with other children obviously.I think the
successful reasons are as follows.

First, accurately understand the reasons for Annas autism.

Second, teachers, students and parents effective coordination.

Third, the effective combination of theoretical knowledge and practice.