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Directions:
Look at the content of your peers outline/draft. Make marginal comments and a summative
comment for the author of the paper which you are reviewing. Carefully consider the authors
implementation of the P.I.E elements in each of their slices. Also consider how and why they
need to be changed. BE CLEAR about what you are saying and why you are saying it.
Keep in mind the following (but also include things you think should be added):
Does each P.I.E element do what it is supposed to in each of the slices?
Does each slice have only one flavor? (is the slice talking about more than one thing?)
Is each slice placed logically within the paper?
Did you understand the content of the slice as it was presented? Tell the author what you
did understand and didnt.
Are the slices understandable for an outsider? Explain what the author can do to make it
more understandable.
Did you understand the content of the paper as a whole? (Is this an effective research
paper? Explain)
Write detailed and helpful comments that will help your peer consider how to better shape
their slices to make a well formed research paper.
Prompt
Summative Comments:
You might want to consider rewording your thesis, the wording is difficult to understand
Although I can understand what you are trying to say, other readers might be
confused by your thesis
Although, you might want to consider reducing the length of your quotes and try
to paraphrase instead
Also in your body paragraphs, besides informing the reader about the readings that are
helpful to them, state HOW each is beneficial
Include the different tactics students have used in the reading responses and how those
tactics have helped them improve their ability to become a better reader and writer
Overall your outline is good and straightforward, you address your thesis very well